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    List of Major Edits For Pokemon Mystery Dungeon: Explorers of Destruction

    -Correct any spelling/grammar errors, if any. I'm generally good about this sort of stuff, but it never hurts to check.

    -re-edit writing style of previous chapters to smooth out the story flow. Since I feel that my writing style is somewhat changing each new chapter, I plan on doing some omitting of unnecessary details in previous ones.

    -Re-write 2nd act of chapter 3. I've never really liked the last half of chapter 3 in the first place.

    -Re-edit chapter 5. As Omegagoldfish pointed out to me, I may need to do a little bit of re-editing.

    -insert line breaks before each major scene transition. This has been heavily requested to me, so I'll do it.

    -Fix tense errors in chapter 6.

    -Add separate formatting for thinking dialogue.

    -re-edit ending to chapter 1. I just find it really clunky.

    -re-edit beginning of chapter 5.3. Instead of Dedenne talking Pikachu down when they meet again, I was thinking of having her just slap him- thought that would fit her character better.

    -Fix Chapter 10. Aside from what Omegagoldfish mentioned, I feel I need to fix Ku's attitude during his fight with Lopunny. With all the blood he was losing, I felt it would be understandable to have him go berserk. Instead, Ku seems to me to be a little too nonchalant about the fact he's losing a lot of blood.

    -Heck, I feel Ku has been an inconsistently written character since chapter 9. So he'll get some attitude changes from there.

    -In hindsight, I feel I've been a little too soft on the destruction of Florges Guild. I mean, come on, Team Sharktooth implied to have been planning this for about a year, and yet they only destroy the assembly hall? That makes me question their competence.
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