Hey, sorry to ask you this, but you don't mind if I also do a parody about writing styles like you did with Leviathan or whatever it's called? Asking because don't want you to think I'm plagiarizing or something. D:
Thank you for being honest about Chapter 1 of my fan fiction, Act. I am going to rewrite Chapter 1 (but not tear it apart) in such a way which hopefully fixes the flowery problem without forcing me to rip apart 200 pages of hard work.
For example, instead of:
"Each morning I essay to correct this entropy, but these valiant efforts are futile."
How does this sound?
"My frequent essays to fix the entropy of my room are unsuccessful."
I mainly used "essay" and "entropy" to create an immediate impression that the character has a learned vocabularly, which is true because later chapters reveal him to be a strong writer. I also did not use a thesaurus, though I can see why you would get that impression.
I know you don't like me but do try to keep all insults to my visitors message page, just so I have them all in one place, makes it all tidier see.
I also found that a pretty harmful way of expressing distaste at him on first sight. I wonder if Manaphyman had done the same to me somewhere else? Maybe, I'm not exactly sure, but I like a little low level eye for an eye justice.
By the way, where is that PM you were going to send to me? Did it get lost in the mail, I know we have a strike on in Britain, but I haven't recieved anything, I'd really hate for you to lose a chance to berate me.
Private messages can't be sent to people who have you ignored. I like this as there have been a stupidly ridiculous amount of people dumb enough to troll, stalk, flame, be a creep, rant, rave, spam and generally be little turds about trying to spin everything around to where I look like a villain.
Just because they think they can't be warned for breaking the rules in pm.
Getting your panties in a twist for not even reading everything, is pretty stupid too Act
If your 'review' was also aimed at me, and not Milotic as well you're not really kind enough to say who you're exactly upset over, *****ing at or whining about, the fact is I never really yelled at him- I just said for the most part. ENGLISH NOT BEING YOUR FIRST LANGUAGE IS NO EXCUSE. IF you're GOING to write a story and POST it in english you should be PREPARED.
I mean there's even SONGS OF BEING PREPARED.
And as it has been repeatedly said and confirmed by mods, you can post it in your language even if it's not english..
x3 I'm glad! There's nothing like a bit of drama to get you all in enthused. xD *gives cookie*
Sorry about the wait in response, hun - Exams decided to collapse on my head. xD; Had one yesterday and have two tomorrow. English literature and Statistics. o__________o I may be slightly dead for a while. xD
You may have to dish on the drama, I haven't been on Lj in all too long. :x