Really? I haven't had the time to read it yet, and thank you, I'm rather flattered. I'll take a look at it soon, I promise.
Edit: Well, I read it. And, it's amusing. I've always liked stories that break the forth wall. Though I know it's supposed to be a parody of bad grammar, I do think it needs to be tightened up a little bit. People still need a story to follow, and they can't do that if the story is filled with grammar mistakes, be they intentional or not.
So, I'd suggest fixing up the grammar somewhat for all future chapters to make it a better read, because your plot is pretty funny. And, I like my character, thank you.