... I'll try. I'll have a look at your first chapter, but be warned that I have an obsession with correcting every tiny misuse of grammar or misspelling. I can sit for hours correcting a two-page chapter. And I change sentences to add more description and everything. When I was correcting Normalize's work I made so many changes that it wasn't even entirely her work any more. If I make too many changes in the first chapter, I'll make myself stop so you can reclaim your story.
BTW, I'm sorry about making you think the next chapter of my fic was up. When it is, you'll be one of the first people to know.