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lugia*master
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lugia*master

Cheese XD, from Leeds, UK

lugia*master was last seen:
Dec 15, 2012
    1. Ri-Chan
      Ri-Chan
      Yeah, I guess I am. :p

      Meh, He's just a n00b. xD. I am happy we see Eye to eye though.
    2. purple_drake
      purple_drake
      Haha, well, I'm actually halfway through a review for that story--that's why I noticed your VM when I was checking out the author's profile. I generally don't review unless I can say something helpful, though--or have the energy to do so. Reviewing properly all the time is haaaard.
    3. purple_drake
      purple_drake
      Ahh. It's just that the line 'There was nothing to say it was a story. Nothing at all.' implied that you thought there is absolutely nothing about the story to be saved, because it can't even be classed as a story; that's all. I do agree it needs work, but that's what reviewing is for. ^^
    4. purple_drake
      purple_drake
      I'm not sure that I do. You seem to be separating grammar and structure from story and judging them as presenting a story on their own merits, when in fact it's all these things together which make the story: grammar, structure, characters, plot and all. You can say there were things wrong with it, but I don't see how you can pick pieces out and say that there was no story in them, when it's their relation to everything else which holds the meaning.
    5. purple_drake
      purple_drake
      ----------
      Not to be offensive, but your story reeeeeeallly needs beta-ing. There was nothing to say it was a story. Nothing at all.
      ----------
      Not true!

      It does need work, but to say that it's not even a story? It's actually better than a lot of beginning fics I've seen, and it has more potential than many.
    6. Erik Destler
      Erik Destler
      Misc, most of the Other Forums..
    7. BlueMew7
      BlueMew7
      I sent you three of them? Haha! Sorry about that. I am just sending friend requests to very active reviewers. Can you send me your Reviewer Profile?
    8. Giratina!
      Giratina!
      Happy Birthday! =3
    9. shadow_wolf
      shadow_wolf
      Ta. will probs read and review tomorrow. for now im gonna sit and watch gene hunt in action!
    10. Sweet Pinpuku
      Sweet Pinpuku
      happy birthday
    11. Brumrha
      Brumrha
      That explains why I can't find any of the problematic words in it...

      In any case, I don't know what else to tell you other than to either try it again at a later time, or get a mod to help you...
    12. Brumrha
      Brumrha
      Are you also getting the 404 Not Found Error alongside your Internal Server Error?
    13. Brumrha
      Brumrha
      Oh, I forgot one thing: Which chapter in particular are you having trouble editing?
    14. Brumrha
      Brumrha
      Have a good look at your chapter in question, & use the announcement that I've shown you to find out what exactly is causing this.
    15. Brumrha
      Brumrha
      No no no, don't do that. Just because it's giving you the Internal Server Error, doesn't mean that your post is uneditable...
    16. Brumrha
      Brumrha
      I "think" that your problem has something to do with this.
    17. Brumrha
      Brumrha
      Anyway, do you have a piss-poor connection?
    18. Brumrha
      Brumrha
      See? I actually pay attention to those details.
    19. Brumrha
      Brumrha
      Well... I can't help but notice that you went from chapter one to chapter three like that.
    20. Brumrha
      Brumrha
      Where's Chapter two??
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