Thanks For your advice on my FF it's really helpful. Part of the reason I did it was to try and clean up my writing, I haven't written in a while and I wantend to try and tone that up. I'll make sure to slow down and put more thought into it. I'm always in a rush to tell a story so my stories are never as good as they could be. I'll be sure to use your advice so I can be able to tell a better story.