I'm actually only up to chapter two at the moment because my mom keeps asking me to help her with chores. x_x I'll be able to get through the rest of the story later tonight, though, so expect my review tonight or tomorrow.
All right. I'll be looking over your story tomorrow and I should be able to give you a review sometime this week. You can also send me Chapter 6 either through PM or email. If you prefer email, I can give you my email address through PM.
Hello, smashlloyd! I'm Bay, and it seems you need a Plot Mentor. If you like, I can look over the first five chapters of the story you posted and then after that I'll be able to mentor you on plot. You're cool with that? I have some time on my hands, so I should be able to look through your story in a few days.
As for reading your story, I apologize for it taking so long. I have little computer access at the moment due to my laptop breaking down, and I'm already getting a few different requests to read/review other people's stories. I'll get to it as soon as I can, hopefully later today! I promise.