Hello~ Lately I haven't been on the site as much as I should, but I was lurking and happened to come across a comment you left on ESPNfanatic35's story.
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Your dialogue kinda needs work. It's not bad but it could be better.
Still I kinda like how you capture the personalities of Pikachu and pals. So it's okay.
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I just wanted to say that it's nice that you commented and left them at least something, but this really doesn't help the author at all. You said their dialogue could be improved, but you never said how or where it could be improved. Was there a specific portion you didn't like? How could they fix this? Expanding on your point could help them a lot more than simply saying the dialogue was just okay but 'could be better'. A lot of authors wouldn't know what you meant or where to begin fixing the problem because your comment was so vague.
All in all, two lines of 'this could be better but I did like this' isn't really a review. If you really have any intention of helping the writers here grow, try to add a little more substance to your review. We aren't mind readers here, so explaining your reasoning goes a long way.
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Your dialogue kinda needs work. It's not bad but it could be better.
Still I kinda like how you capture the personalities of Pikachu and pals. So it's okay.
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I just wanted to say that it's nice that you commented and left them at least something, but this really doesn't help the author at all. You said their dialogue could be improved, but you never said how or where it could be improved. Was there a specific portion you didn't like? How could they fix this? Expanding on your point could help them a lot more than simply saying the dialogue was just okay but 'could be better'. A lot of authors wouldn't know what you meant or where to begin fixing the problem because your comment was so vague.
All in all, two lines of 'this could be better but I did like this' isn't really a review. If you really have any intention of helping the writers here grow, try to add a little more substance to your review. We aren't mind readers here, so explaining your reasoning goes a long way.