You are very welcome! I'm always glad to offer advice when I can.
You can always improve on what you have, that's a fact I've learned. So, I know you'll do fine given enough practice and time. Please give me a shout when your story is posted. I'd like to read it.
And indeed, you'll grow into your own style in time. It takes a bit to find what works for you.
Thanks! The first two chapters have been redone more recently, so I do hope you find them enjoyable. And for description, just try to visualize the world that your characters are seeing and how they'd interact with it. For instance, if they're walking down a road, mention what kind of road. If it's made of gravel, maybe have a character absently kick a pebble as they walk. That sort of thing. Using it every so often (not every paragraph) adds rich details to your story that helps it come alive.
You can always improve on what you have, that's a fact I've learned. So, I know you'll do fine given enough practice and time. Please give me a shout when your story is posted. I'd like to read it.
And indeed, you'll grow into your own style in time. It takes a bit to find what works for you.
Thanks! The first two chapters have been redone more recently, so I do hope you find them enjoyable. And for description, just try to visualize the world that your characters are seeing and how they'd interact with it. For instance, if they're walking down a road, mention what kind of road. If it's made of gravel, maybe have a character absently kick a pebble as they walk. That sort of thing. Using it every so often (not every paragraph) adds rich details to your story that helps it come alive.