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Chapter 88 My favorite part of this chapter is easily the ending fight scene for one line alone: That one line reinforces Darzin's characterization so perfectly, reflecting everything that motivates him and his character flaw that keep holding him back. Darzin is so desperate to win back is...

I am actually planning a reboot of this fanfic, so the review is much appreciated. The main take-away I got was that my descriptions were... unevenly distributed. I mean that at some parts there was too much [e.g. Kind’s thought process about feeding the Starly] and other not enough [e.g...

Chapter 87 One theme that I really love in this story is how cultures diverge and converge. I was going to list all the examples of this in the story, but I realized me trying to do that and perfectly explain it all was making me put off writing the review. Instead, I’ll just say that the hint...

So a couple years ago I watched Akira for the first time. My brother asked me what I thought about it and I said something like, "It was a excellent movie with a extremely powerful and important message. I have no idea what that message is, but I know that it is there." I feel a very similar way...

I just finished chapters 43 to 46 and it was amazing! The fighting was intense and fastpaced, with each combatant's particular talents and fighting style on full display. The relationship between Jade and Lugia is everything I hoped it would be. Most of all, I am beyond impressed with how...

I agree with Ambyssin that the fight scenes were a little dull. A lot of times in Pokemon (both fan-fiction and not), fights break down to just the Good Guys and the Bad Guys hitting each other in turn-based combat until someone falls over. This is not an inherently bad way to structure a fight...

With less than 2 hours to spare, I got 2 more points for reviewing Hands of Creation ch. 74-87. That gives me a monthly total of 4, which is the highest score anyone has had within the last year. :D

This is just as great as I remembered it being. Two new things that I particularly like is that you split up the cast up and how you depict people/ society responding to a disaster. What I am really looking forward to is an interesting political idea Mew said near the start, but was never...

I got 2 point from reviewing Pathways of Aspiration.

I've read everything out so far and, unfortunately, I have found something I am unsatisfied with. You have not really convinced me that Chimera would be so accepting of the pallids' slavery. At first I thought he was going to work as a double agent and help the pallids using his position as a...

I'm up for it as long as I'm not doing it alone.

I have not been able to read almost anything on Serebii for month. I just read Chapter 30 and I wanted to let you know that you are a great writer. I had completely forgotten just how amazing you are with details as metaphors. The grandfather clock and the color of Eoin's flower are my two...

Chapter 6: The Plot Appears (Finally!) . . Nory quickly walked through the empty Pokécenter. He and Kind were the only trainers in at the moment, and Nurse Joy was probably off preparing dinner. Fortunately, he already had an idea for where Shootaf and the other Pokémon were. He walked out a...

This story is really great and I definitely see why it won the Best Pokecentric Fic last year. In my opinion, the reason it won is that you made sure it is equal parts heartbreaking and heartwarming. Too many stories about trauma (fanfiction and otherwise) just beat down their characters...

I just read this because it is a prequel to Worldslayers and am really glad that I did. It has a wonderful premise, realistic characters, and detailed descriptions. With the exception of Pokemon making a car that a Snorunt can use, my immersion was never broken for the entirety of the story. My...

I have read the entire story and it is absolutely fantastic! Easily one of the best character-driven stories I have read. Every major character is given unique personalities and goals, and none of them are carbon copies of archetypes. I think what I like the most is how you tie themes of free...

Hey! I'm still here. Sorry for not writing anything for so long. College just takes a lot out of you. PM me if you still want to talk over Discord. Anyway, for the review: In the entirety of the story, I found only 2 things that I would change. I want to stress that these are really small...

Chapter 5: A Short Shopping Trip .... Before going to the café, Nory stopped by the Pokémart housed inside the Pokémon Center. He had to pick some equipment for his new pal. He had about P16,900 on him, which he figured would be more than enough to get all the equipment he would need for his...

MUAHAHAHAHAAA! My evil plan is coming together! I have already reviewed your story and now request that someone review chapter 2 of my own story. Now shoz999, you are forced to review my story once again if you ever want to ask someone else to review your own. But as soon as you do that, I...

This is not as bad as I thought it was going to be. The only part that really made me cringe was the phrase "an entire family of orphans". Unless English is not your first language I do not think that I need to explain why that is not something you should ever say. You may be able to get away...