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~¤World upon World¤~

lilbluecorsola

Binky-boo! <3
~¤World upon World¤~

All my life, I’ve held the belief that someday I shall fly. Leave behind the waters that nurtured me in my infancy, soar off into the infinite blue sea that exists just above my own. Ocean upon ocean, world upon world. That other world… called Sky.

How I yearned to swim, if only briefly, in that other sea! I wondered what sort of creatures might live there. Would they have fins and tails, as my fellow fish possess? Would their fins be like mine? Widespread, flat and thick, with the consistency of rubber? I had only caught glimpses of the tiny shadows against the Sky, circling slowly overhead in intricate patterns, like graceful dancers skimming across the surface of their sea. Only I assumed that they were, in actuality, swimming, for they were high above the plane where our two worlds meet. I always thought it odd that I could see clearly and far into the Sky, whereas I could barely distinguish what was below me. I knew though, that the ocean had a bottom. Did the Sky ever end? So many questions I longed to have answered!

And the Birds… I’d heard they were things with pointed mouths and long, soft scales, that they only came down to meet our world when they choose to gorge themselves on our kind. Was it true? I thought the others must be wrong. How could they know, when they themselves have never met a Bird? And those who were supposedly carried off, how would they ever be able to recount the tale of their own experience?

I chose not to believe their words. Instead I listened to the cries of the Birds, and tried to interpret the meanings for myself. I could not learn their language, but I grew to recognize the various tones and pitches, and could match the calls with the shapes high above me, though vague they often were. I heard many different passions and moods when I listened to the Birds. Some were sharp, others soft. They crooned to one another in such ways that I could never understand, especially as they often overlapped one another, creating an endless chorus that I never ceased loving.

I wondered what were to happen should I appear amongst them one day, and strike up a casual conversation. What might they say in answer to my greeting? Would they comprehend my words? Or would they be as lost to my speech as I am to theirs?

I ask myself these questions time and time again, and find I never have the answers. The only direction I know to look for them is Up.

So that is where I shall go.

-------------------------------------------

The Sea is calm today. I hear the lapping of the waves by my sides, whispering incomprehensibly in my ear. I drift serenely on the surf, bobbing closer to shore. It is summer, and my back is warm. Today is the day.

I open my eyes and blink in the harsh light that greets me. I find I am resting in the shallows, half submerged in water, my flat belly lying on the soft dunes of sand near the beach. The tide is going out. I lift myself off the mound to follow it. The water filling the space between my body and the floor begins to grow until I can no longer see the fine sand. I am in open waters now.

I look to the Sky. It is a dazzling cerulean. A few white puffs swim inside, advancing slowly across the skywaters. I wonder if they are some sort of foreign plant life. It is puzzling indeed that they do not seem to be attached to anything like the kelp is to the ocean floor, so that they will not drift away with the tides. I hear the Birds above me. Their cries are peaceful, welcoming. I close my eyes and listen to them.

I’ve floated out to the middle of the ocean. I know that the bottom is far below me, the Sky high above. There is nothing but an endless blue expanse in any direction, as far as the eye can see. Here, I feel I am alone at the center point of two worlds. Here, they meet, and Sky presses upon Sea. Sea surrenders to Sky’s will, and Earth yields to Sea’s waters, which bow to receive the pressure, carving out a bowl in the Earth’s bed. Yet Sea does not resist Sky’s advances. Instead, she sighs softly and allows his breath to kiss her surface, and she ripples gleefully in response. That is how I often imagine things. The others say my ideas are romantic and folly, but I pay them no mind.

My eyes open once again. I am ready to begin. I dive down below the surface, and continue swimming at a relaxed pace. I try to conserve my energy. I know that I will have need of it later. I pass schools of shining silver Remoraid. They accompany me on my journey for some time, vying for the privilege of hitching a ride under my huge fin, hoping to feed on the scraps of food I may have left over after meals. I ignore them, and eventually they leave, having no desire to be eaten by some other large fish that may lurk in the depths of the ocean.

At last, the bottom rises up to meet me, and I descend elegantly. All is dark, and I cannot see much further than a foot in front of me. I brush past a clump of seaweed, and for a moment I fear that I have run into an Octillery and its many slippery arms. I am relieved when I realize the truth, and decide to remain still and not move far from my position. I look up, though it is difficult to tell direction in deep darkness. I see only shadows hovering by, and when they do pass, it is still impossible to see the surface. I rest for a minute, preparing myself for flight. I was nervous. I had been training day by day, but never before have I gone this far deep.

At last, I feel I am ready. I push off the ocean bottom, and begin to rise; steadily at first, then gaining speed. My long fins slice through the waters, and I propel myself forward with all my might. The waters stream by me, and in a whirl of vibrant colors, fish panic and hasten to swim out of the way. I close my eyes so that they will not distract me from my purpose. Faster

I open my eyes. The surface is approaching. I can see light from the Sky dancing and sparkling above me. I put on an extra burst of speed, and exert all my strength in thrusting myself forward. Break through the waves, let me fly, oh mistress Sea and mighty Sky please let me fly.

I do. I burst through the surface with a spray of foam. I let out a triumphant shout as I soar up and into the Sky, the spumes falling far below me as Sea is restored to her normal, tranquil state. I glide over the waves, and watch them glisten below me, encrusted with myriad diamonds. I am certain I feel waves in the Sky as well, but they are nothing like those of the Sea. As they rush past my form, I find they are cold and exhilarating. But the Birds are still above me. I want to meet them. Higher

I climb through the Sky, ascending higher and higher. I can see a group of Birds just before me, and soon I am bringing up the rear as if I were one of them. I am in awe of their light, compact bodies, and their long fins, which they beat in steady rhythm. I imitate their movements, and am amazed when I feel myself rise in level slightly, and the skywaters are pushed away by my fins. The birds squawk in surprise to see me, flapping like the rest of them, but they do not flee. Curiosity overtakes them, and they move in closer to inspect their odd new traveling companion.

“What are you? Fish or fowl?” they exclaim. I can understand them! They speak in a tongue similar to mine, though I sense it is not their true language.

“Both, or neither!” I joyfully respond. “I come from the Sea, but I too am capable of flight! Where did you learn to speak the language of the deep?”

They tell me that they have traveled the world many times, and picked up strange and useful information from all over. I learn of wondrous places beyond my scope of imagination. They answer all the questions I have ever sought to know the answers to. Why are your fins and scales that way? They are wings and feathers, silly! Does the Sky have a limit? No, never! Do you eat fish? Only if we are hungry!

Time passes swiftly. Sky becomes amethyst, and then black, and tiny pinpricks of light appear. “Are we very deep now?” I ask, reminded of the gloom of the ocean’s depths. The darkness here does not seem so bad though, with so many lights to lead the way.

“Very,” they reply, laughing.

“What are those lights?”

“They are Stars. They help to guide those who are lost.”

“What is that very large one over there?”

“That is the Moon.”

I gaze at the round disc, marveling at it as it glows, lighting up the Sky with the Stars. I recall the one resembling it when the Sky was blue. “It looks like the thing that shined before.”

“Ah, but that was the Sun.”

“And what were those white things in the Sky earlier?”

“They were Clouds.”

I look down, and see the ocean still beneath me. I had not realized how large my home was. And the Birds, they insisted that there were other worlds like mine beyond the land. The planet is beginning to seem even larger. I yearn to continue journeying with my newfound friends, but my wings are beginning to tire. They notice my fatigue, and they encourage me to return to my place of origin.

“But come again,” they chirp. “Perhaps then you will bring us tales of your world. We should like to hear them.”

I smile, and agree. Bidding goodbye, I carefully sink closer to the waters. Gently, I land on the still surface, and the waters greet me with coolness. Above me, I can hear the Birds shouting to each other as they change direction and head towards the shore. As I pass from one world into another, I feel a peculiar sensation as my wings make the adjustments to being underwater again. Once again they are but fins on a fish, practical only for swimming around in the ocean. But I am aware now of their hidden function, and I smile, poking my head up from the water again to stare up into the Sky. There are no Birds now, but I know that they will be back again the next day.

With a splash, I plunge once again into the Sea. As I grow accustomed to being back at home again, I reflect on what I have discovered while being in another world. My mind has opened up to thousands of new possibilities, and I cannot wait to explore them all. My new friends are no longer a mystery to me, though I realize I am still unknown to them. Tomorrow, I resolve to tell them all about my world and those who inhabit it.

Perhaps… This is what my wings were meant for all along. I am the link between two worlds, and I have broken a barrier. Though invisible, it has been recognized by all to this date. I wonder if perhaps it is the beginning of a transformation. Our worlds might merge together, and we will no longer be strangers to each other. It seems an impossible idea, but so was the thought of ever being able to fly.

The first step to Unity has been taken. When the next will follow, I cannot say. But I hope with all my heart that it will one day. Until then, I shall do my best to bring our worlds closer to one another.

Perhaps, someday, our two worlds will truly be as one.

Someday
 

CHeSHiRe-CaT

A Curious Breed
That was a bootiful one-shot, lilblue ;.;

I loved the way your words flowed; their sounds matching with the feelings you wanted to portray. I can't tell you how well you wrote. That was so poifect ^_^ What was the fish, might I ask? I had a thought from the beginning that it was a Remoraid, or a Mantine, or either, but now I sound like a babbling idiot @_@ The way you described it soaring above the surface of its own world, plunging itself upward into the next reminded me of a Mantine, as I thought they could fly. Maybe that's just underwater...
 
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lilbluecorsola

Binky-boo! <3
[Tyranitar] said:
That was a bootiful one-shot, lilblue ;.;

I loved the way your words flowed; their sounds matching with the feelings you wanted to portray. I can't tell you how well you wrote. That was so poifect ^_^ What was the fish, might I ask? I had a thought from the beginning that it was a Remoraid, or a Mantine, or either, but now I sound like a babbling idiot @_@

Whee! Thankies, Chesire. ^^ Wow, it's been such a long time since I've written a One-Shot. o_O;

Ja, it was a Mantine. I hoped I gave enough clues to make it apparent. Should I make it more obvious?

*hands you a Supa Lolly*
 

Joshua - Shadow Brigadier

Well-Known Member
*melts* I can read this one! ;)

Wow. Just wow. Your description never ceases to amaze me lilblue. I can actually picture the Mantine leaping into the sky.

At last, I feel I am ready. I push off the ocean bottom, and begin to rise; steadily at first, then gaining speed. My long fins slice through the waters, and I propel myself forward with all my might. The waters stream by me, and in a whirl of vibrant colors, fish panic and hasten to swim out of the way. I close my eyes so that they will not distract me from my purpose. Faster…

I open my eyes. The surface is approaching. I can see light from the Sky dancing and sparkling above me. I put on an extra burst of speed, and exert all my strength in thrusting myself forward. Break through the waves, let me fly, oh mistress Sea and mighty Sky please let me fly.

Here is my absolute favourite part of this. lilblue, this is a truly magnificent piece.

Joshua
 

lilbluecorsola

Binky-boo! <3
~Skywing Knight Joshua~ said:
*melts* I can read this one! ;)

Wow. Just wow. Your description never ceases to amaze me lilblue. I can actually picture the Mantine leaping into the sky.



Here is my absolute favourite part of this. lilblue, this is a truly magnificent piece.

Joshua

XD Really? I thought it was rather skimpy, especially that part. Ah, well. Thank you! ^^

*Supa Lolly*
 

Kiyohime

Well-Known Member
Squeak. o.o That was simply divine.

At first, I thought it was a Gyarados, but now...durr. I forgot Mantine could fly. x)

This reminded me so strongly of one of my favorite scenes from Fantastia-- the scene where the humpback whales fly. I don't know if you've seen that one but this reminded me a lot of that and it brought a smile to my smile.

Bravo!
 

lilbluecorsola

Binky-boo! <3
Scrap said:
Squeak. o.o That was simply divine.

At first, I thought it was a Gyarados, but now...durr. I forgot Mantine could fly. x)

This reminded me so strongly of one of my favorite scenes from Fantastia-- the scene where the humpback whales fly. I don't know if you've seen that one but this reminded me a lot of that and it brought a smile to my smile.

Bravo!

XD I actually was considering writing it about Gyrados. But then I chose Mantine just 'cause it seems to fit better and hardly anyone writes about it. ^^;

Hm... You mean the second one? I never saw that one. =/

Dang, I didn't expect to get so many replies this fast. ^^; Especially after being gone for so long. Thank you, Scrappie! *Supa Lolly*
 
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mindripper

Guest
Hey there Lilblue. Not too long ago, you reviewed my one-shot, and because you were extremely polite about it and because I felt this would have made a good read, I decided to come take a look. You know, I heard from a few people that you were really good at one-shots, and so I came to look-see, to see if that was validated.

Here, I feel I am alone at the center point of two worlds. Here, they meet, and Sky presses upon Sea. Sea surrenders to Sky’s will, and Earth yields to Sea’s waters, which bow to receive the pressure, carving out a bowl in the Earth’s bed. Yet Sea does not resist Sky’s advances. Instead, she sighs softly and allows his breath to kiss her surface, and she ripples gleefully in response. That is how I often imagine things. The others say my ideas are romantic and folly, but I pay them no mind.

Aw, that really feels poetic. You know, I kinda have a soft spot for all things poetry, and I really liked that. Kinda like the best things in life are always forbidden, and that in search of wider horizons we end up discovering more about ourselves instead? The same applies here in a quirky way.

The whole piece flowed well, and extra points for having it in first person. I cannot say that there were any immediately outstanding patches, but the whole product was infinitely greater than the sum of the individual parts. Like a jigsaw, tiny individual pieces can be discounted on their own, but come together to form a much more important entity than they individually would be. I liked how you build up the Mantine's curiosity, and slowly have it give in to curiosity and all kinds of emotions that anything juxtaposed with it would feel.

All in all, hope to see you produce some more work soon. Take care, and good luck.
 

lilbluecorsola

Binky-boo! <3
mindripper said:
Hey there Lilblue. Not too long ago, you reviewed my one-shot, and because you were extremely polite about it and because I felt this would have made a good read, I decided to come take a look. You know, I heard from a few people that you were really good at one-shots, and so I came to look-see, to see if that was validated.



Aw, that really feels poetic. You know, I kinda have a soft spot for all things poetry, and I really liked that. Kinda like the best things in life are always forbidden, and that in search of wider horizons we end up discovering more about ourselves instead? The same applies here in a quirky way.

The whole piece flowed well, and extra points for having it in first person. I cannot say that there were any immediately outstanding patches, but the whole product was infinitely greater than the sum of the individual parts. Like a jigsaw, tiny individual pieces can be discounted on their own, but come together to form a much more important entity than they individually would be. I liked how you build up the Mantine's curiosity, and slowly have it give in to curiosity and all kinds of emotions that anything juxtaposed with it would feel.

All in all, hope to see you produce some more work soon. Take care, and good luck.

XD That's exactly what I thought when I went to read your One-Shot as well. Thank you for reviewing mine. ^^

Yeah, that was probably my favorite part to write. =) Maybe I'd be good at writing Romance fics. oO;

I suppose that sort of does apply here... I wasn't really sure what I was aiming for when I began writing. Near the end though, I guess I was sort of thinking about breaking boundaries and bringing different kinds of people or Pokémon closer together.

Heh. I used to loathe writing in First Person, but after I wrote a story from the perspective of Lugia for Chibi Pika, I grew to really like it. Though it restricted the level of description, it allowed me to go much more in depth with the character's thoughts and emotions, which is what I now pride myself on as a storyteller.

Thank you muchly for your wonderful review. -^^- (Jeez, even when you're reviewing your sentences are diverse and flow well. oO; ) Here's a Supa Dupa Lolly for you. ~<3
 

billy5772

SENIOR
Blue! You're back after...how many years? Back with a big splash, too, I see.

This one-shot was very entertaining. A lot of descriptions of peaceful, natural things helped achieve a very...um...serene tone. I liked it! Mantine as the bridge between worlds, huh? Cool way to look at it. This works for a lot of pokemon, too, doesn't it? The only counter-example I can think of is Mewtwo (part man [didn't he have some human DNA or somethin'?], part pokey man). And even then, he stands more for the disharmony between humans and pokemon than their union, doesn't he? Interesting how your theme runs contrary to that. Possibly trying to show the other side of the coin, are you? (as opposed to your mewtwo one-shots).

Ughlugh, I gotta go. Well, welcome back to the writing, BLUE! Keep makin' 'em!
 

lilbluecorsola

Binky-boo! <3
billy5772 said:
Blue! You're back after...how many years? Back with a big splash, too, I see.

This one-shot was very entertaining. A lot of descriptions of peaceful, natural things helped achieve a very...um...serene tone. I liked it! Mantine as the bridge between worlds, huh? Cool way to look at it. This works for a lot of pokemon, too, doesn't it? The only counter-example I can think of is Mewtwo (part man [didn't he have some human DNA or somethin'?], part pokey man). And even then, he stands more for the disharmony between humans and pokemon than their union, doesn't he? Interesting how your theme runs contrary to that. Possibly trying to show the other side of the coin, are you? (as opposed to your mewtwo one-shots).

Ughlugh, I gotta go. Well, welcome back to the writing, BLUE! Keep makin' 'em!

XD Last I remember, I wrote ~¤Champion¤~ some time in summer.

o_O; Actually, I didn't really think to look at it that way. But yeah, it does sort of explain the weird dual-types we have in Pokémon. XD (I don't think Mewtwo had any human DNA though... o_O)

This was really just an entry for a contest done quickly. ^^; The theme was "Under the Sea", and I took it from there.

Thanks for reviewing, Billy. ^^; Though I'm not exactly sure if I'm going to write another any time soon. Maybe if next month's topic is inspiring...

*Supa Lolly*
 
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Crystallugia

Guest
That is truly the most poetic, nicest detailed, and overall picturesque one-shot I've ever read... I'm serious, too. I love first-person, too. In this, you can actually be the Mantine... This is beautiful.
 

Radical Edward

Upstanding Citizen
Wow Lilblue...You amaze me once again.I love the poetic feel of this story. your story just flows. the rythm is beautiful and it paints an awsome picture in my head, as well as making me think. awesomely awsome*nodnod*
 

lilbluecorsola

Binky-boo! <3
Crystallugia said:
That is truly the most poetic, nicest detailed, and overall picturesque one-shot I've ever read... I'm serious, too. I love first-person, too. In this, you can actually be the Mantine... This is beautiful.

Whee, thank you for coming to review this, Crys. -^^- *huggle* *Supa Lolly*

Radical Edward said:
Wow Lilblue...You amaze me once again.I love the poetic feel of this story. your story just flows. the rythm is beautiful and it paints an awsome picture in my head, as well as making me think. awesomely awsome*nodnod*

XD I should write more new One-Shots for FOTM. This way I get reviewers from both the Fanfiction and the FB community! XD

Thanks for reviewing, Rad Ed. =) *Supa Lolly*
 

Chibi Pika

Stay positive
Scene from about five minutes ago:
Chibi's sister: Get off, you've been on the computer long enough!
Chibi: Okay just a sec and--ZOMG!!!!!! BLUE WROTE A NEW ONE-SHOT, MUST READ!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!(insert way too many exclamtion marks here)
Silverwing;249;: *Shakes head* Never have I seen a reviewer chainsaw thier dignity like you, Chibi.

*Cough* Aaaaanywho...yes, I really am that addicted to your works. ^^;;; Sadly, I've been off the boards so long that I hardly still know how to review them.
Anyway, I love the poetic feel, very nice flow, and the description, quite different from your past work, a lot less realily-bound-with-lots-of-vivod-words-that-make-Chibi-drool and more figurative-and-metaphoric-and-still-making-Chibi-drool. I think I almost died when I read this paragraph:
I’ve floated out to the middle of the ocean. I know that the bottom is far below me, the Sky high above. There is nothing but an endless blue expanse in any direction, as far as the eye can see. Here, I feel I am alone at the center point of two worlds. Here, they meet, and Sky presses upon Sea. Sea surrenders to Sky’s will, and Earth yields to Sea’s waters, which bow to receive the pressure, carving out a bowl in the Earth’s bed. Yet Sea does not resist Sky’s advances. Instead, she sighs softly and allows his breath to kiss her surface, and she ripples gleefully in response. That is how I often imagine things. The others say my ideas are romantic and folly, but I pay them no mind.
Yes, me likes...well, very short, simple, yet sweet theme here, I loved how you expressed the Mantine's longing curiosity and its first reaction to flight. BTW brownie points for first person, but then again, this wouldn't have worked any ther way. Oh, and do I sense inspiration? The paragraph: "Perhaps… This is what my wings were meant for all along. I am the link between two worlds, and I have broken a barrier. Though invisible, it has been recognized by all to this date. I wonder if perhaps it is the beginning of a transformation. Our worlds might merge together, and we will no longer be strangers to each other. It seems an impossible idea, but so was the thought of ever being able to fly." brought back memories from Different except handled much more eloquently and overall better-ish sounding. I dunno, maybe it's just great minds think alike ^^;;
Silverwing;249;: You? A "great mind"? HA!
>>
Anyway, my dad just got home, gotta run!! ^^;;

*Pulls out stamp* This thread hath been Chibified! *Flies off on Giant Mystic Lugia Plushy.*

~Chibi~;249;<?>;rukario;
 

Desert_Rose

Amour toujours gagne
That's an awesome (and extremely poetic) story. Very nice. If you are in or are going to be in highschool soon, you should definitely consider a writing class such as Creative Writing. Your story really is good.
 

lilbluecorsola

Binky-boo! <3
Chibi Pika said:
Scene from about five minutes ago:
Chibi's sister: Get off, you've been on the computer long enough!
Chibi: Okay just a sec and--ZOMG!!!!!! BLUE WROTE A NEW ONE-SHOT, MUST READ!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!(insert way too many exclamtion marks here)
Silverwing;249;: *Shakes head* Never have I seen a reviewer chainsaw thier dignity like you, Chibi.

*Cough* Aaaaanywho...yes, I really am that addicted to your works. ^^;;; Sadly, I've been off the boards so long that I hardly still know how to review them.
Anyway, I love the poetic feel, very nice flow, and the description, quite different from your past work, a lot less realily-bound-with-lots-of-vivod-words-that-make-Chibi-drool and more figurative-and-metaphoric-and-still-making-Chibi-drool. I think I almost died when I read this paragraph:

Yes, me likes...well, very short, simple, yet sweet theme here, I loved how you expressed the Mantine's longing curiosity and its first reaction to flight. BTW brownie points for first person, but then again, this wouldn't have worked any ther way. Oh, and do I sense inspiration? The paragraph: "Perhaps… This is what my wings were meant for all along. I am the link between two worlds, and I have broken a barrier. Though invisible, it has been recognized by all to this date. I wonder if perhaps it is the beginning of a transformation. Our worlds might merge together, and we will no longer be strangers to each other. It seems an impossible idea, but so was the thought of ever being able to fly." brought back memories from Different except handled much more eloquently and overall better-ish sounding. I dunno, maybe it's just great minds think alike ^^;;
Silverwing;249;: You? A "great mind"? HA!
>>
Anyway, my dad just got home, gotta run!! ^^;;

*Pulls out stamp* This thread hath been Chibified! *Flies off on Giant Mystic Lugia Plushy.*

~Chibi~;249;<?>;rukario;

Chibi-san! 8D *huggletacklesquooze* How long has it been? ^^;

Hee hee. 8) Thankies, Chibi. My writing style has a changed a lot over time(mostly influenced by IFs I've played.) I'm glad you liked it.

Actually, most of my inspiration for that part may have actually come from the book To Kill a Mockingbird that we've been reading in LA. oO; I suppose I was sort of thinking about racism and segregation with real people or somethin' like that. I dunno, I was just trying to add some more meaning to it, as I am always compelled to do, and wrote that to wrap it up. XP

Thanks muchly for reviewing, Chibi-san! It was great to see you again after all this time. ^^ *Supa Lolly*

Silver_Cat said:
That's an awesome (and extremely poetic) story. Very nice. If you are in or are going to be in highschool soon, you should definitely consider a writing class such as Creative Writing. Your story really is good.

I would like to, though my mom would probably encourage me to work on my science and math before writing. XP

Thank you for replying. *Supa Lolly*
 

grounder

*sneezes*
EDIT: Sorry, lilbluecorsola, I didn't see what type of story you were doing, so I'm starting over.

This one-shot story built up a remarkable foundation, which was set into stone with the last words:

The first step to Unity has been taken. When the next will follow, I cannot say. But I hope with all my heart that it will one day. Until then, I shall do my best to bring our worlds closer to one another.

Perhaps, someday, our two worlds will truly be as one.

Someday…

This shows much of your influence in studying the theme of the story, and shows basically the essence of what this Sea Soarer is trying to do. A highly beautiful description of basically all you needed to know about this pursuit for equality in a segregated world. It's best to read this story straight through. You're missing out a lot of the good stuff if you don't.
Break through the waves, let me fly, oh mistress Sea and mighty Sky please let me fly.

This is just one of the parts where I liked it greatly. I saw the rhyme, and thought it fit more in a poem than a story. That was good. Here's how it could be in traditional poem style:

Break through the waves,
let me fly!
Oh, mistress Sea and mighty Sky,
please let me fly!

The plea of the desperate curiosity, fighting against the barriers set aside to divide! Have you ever thought of converting it to this form?

And wait, this is a story with Pokemon? What the...? You'd never think something like Pokemon would be used as this, but Nintendo and the Pokemon Company seem to be changing their style towards this direction as well, with their introduction of Mystery Dungeon, a game which I thought was great and heavily philosophical in the ending.
This also reminds me of the picture book in Chobits, the manga series which explores the difference between natural man and artificially created man.
 
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