2 Poems of Mine

[SpaceFlare]

This is the first one.

Light and the Moth


A moth lives in a world of shadows
Cast by the light around him

Light calls the moth near
Enticing it with its radiance
Promising a paradise to its helpless witness,
Like a siren that lures a sailor to his death

As the moth draws closer
The light shines brighter
Drawing forth foolish and weak
Hearts of the moths nearby.

All move closer
Fluttering slowly
Flapping their tiny wings
To the light which brings
No other reward
But Death itself.

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This next one has no title.


Sometmes we forget
How fortunate we are
That we have this gift
Of being where we are right now.

Time flies swiftly
So swiftly even
That we do not notice
How many ticks the clock has screamed
With each passing second
How many events we have sown
That dictates whether we live or not.

Even in olden archaic battles
Where some of our roots have clung to soil
On opposing sides of war
If one had by chance killed that of which you hold
Desperately to for existence
You may have never been born

Even in how a man could carry his life around.
If, let's say, one of your ancestors
Had tasted his own blood
From his waist blade from a plunge
That broke his heart
You may have never been born.

A life is spawned in each day particle
And a life may be taken in that same space
A single wrong turn may occur
Like driving headfirst into a storm
One solitary decision
And you might have never been born.

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Enjoy.

 

[Kutie Pie]

I LOVED THESE! *big hugs*

This is exactly how I feel every day, both of these poems. And yes, we're like moths (though it didn't say it). We draw closer to the light until we die. So true.

And the last...

Something about life...

Wow. Like that one. Should've been called...um, "To Live or Not to Live" or something else...And yeah, it 's like the Family Tree. Loved that the most. *hugs*

Thanks for the poems! Can't wait for more! (It's like you're reading my mind. I think about these often. Scary, huh?)

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♥Kutie Pie♥ Please be kind to midgets!

 

[The Great Butler]

Ooh, very deep and very good. I admit I found the moth one a little bit humorous, but that's because I enjoy listening to the bug zapper in my yard while I lay in bed on a warm summer night. Yeah, I have a sick sense of humor

The second, however, is thouroughly excellent, and even without a title it shines. It's so deep......I really can't find the words to convey how highly I regard it, but I'm sure you understand.

 

[SpaceFlare]

Yay, reviews!

Glad you enjoyed them.

I wrote the moth poem during my first night at our new house. I left the light on and I noticed those crazy old moths flying around it. And somehow inspiration stuck to me due to them.

The second poem was inspired by the book "Solitaire Mystery" by Jostein Gaarder. (or was that Gaardner?) The central theme of the poem was mentioned in the book and I just wrote it.

 

[Umbrazard]

I liked the Moth one. Very nice, very dark. It can be easily extended to show the frivilous and sometimes destructive nature in most of what we humans do.

The second one...meh. It seemed a lil too, I dunno. Destiny-ish. Kinda hard to explain. Meh, I didn't really like it though. Sorry.
~Umbra;197;

 

[Kani Tarma]

Wow, these are excelent. The first one said to me that i'm just like a Moth, and i want to live in the light, and not the darkness...the second one reminded me of something my parents and I had. Something to do with, live life to the fullest, and that you should always be gratefull for the things you have, for you don't know aht you have before you loose it...something like that. Great job, I hope to see some more of your poems around.
~KT

 

[SpaceFlare]

Ooh, more reviews!

*hands out cakes and cookies*

The second one...meh. It seemed a lil too, I dunno. Destiny-ish. Kinda hard to explain. Meh, I didn't really like it though. Sorry.

Yeah, some schoolmates of mine didn't like the second one too well. But it did manage to appear in our school literary magazine.

 

[billy5772]

Hey, hey! I liked these poems, especially the second one. That recurring line, "you may never have been born" was a very effective way to drive home the point that time and destiny are all-controlling but at the same time, paradoxically seeming so fickle and malleable.

The first one was cool, too. [Side note: you should capitalize Siren(e?) if you're referring to the Siren(e?)s I think i know you're referring to 'cause they are proper nouns] It raises the question of whether or not the moths are wrong with not being content with the dark and also raises the issue of the chances you take when you pursue your own happiness. All lights that moths are attracted to don't kill them, but they can't distinguish between the light that leads to harm and the light that doesn't. This one seems to end up relating to your second poem in that it, also, has a kinda theme of destiny/fate.

Good work on these poems!

 

[SpaceFlare]

Yes! Hahaha! More and more reviewers. Thanx for the positive reviews.

*bakes some more cakes*

 

[Kani Tarma]

Exactly billy5772, that was what I was trying to say, but the words just didn't come out! Ooooh and what kind of cakes do you have....?I want sugar!{Nah I just ate, i hope I see some more poems soon!}

 

[Kamex]

Interesting... somehow I never really thought of the attraction of moths to light as a metaphor, but you used that nicely. And the second poem was pretty deep, very thoughtful. Very professional sounding.

 

[The Great Butler]

Exactly billy5772, that was what I was trying to say, but the words just didn't come out! Ooooh and what kind of cakes do you have....?I want sugar!{Nah I just ate, i hope I see some more poems soon!}

Any kind you wish! I'll even concoct a sugar cake just for you!

 

[Kani Tarma]

*Glomps* Yeah, but I have to warn you, when I get a sugar rush I tend to...um...I forgot what I do but...anyway did you say your poems were put in the school newspaper?

 

[SpaceFlare]

School literary magazine. Not exactly newspaper. Because in that magazine only choice poems, short stories, stage plays (rarely any), and drawings. All forms of art basically.

 

[Kani Tarma]

Oh, okay thanx. Congrats! I'm not very good at writing stories, well Pokemon staories any way...oh well, not good at poems either. No magazine for me.*Shrugs* Don't care.