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A Day in the Life PG-13 ( just to be safe)

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Shaolin Monkey

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Alright this is my first fan-fic on this website so don't completely kill me.
Here it goes. Oh yeah, this is Star Wars fic. Its about a clone trooper as he progresses through the Clone Wars. I rated this Pg-13 because there is gore. Not heavy gore, just gore.


Chapter 1

As my visor took in the great reddish-brown wasteland that was Geonosis, I wondered how many of my team would come back with me. That is if I survived myself. I am a clone trooper. A guardian of the Republic. Bred by the Kaminoans, raised by my brethren. My designation was CX- 1337/94. I was aboard a bulky Republic Gunship awaiting orders from Yoda, the old, elf-like Jedi. My squad commander was Sergeant Daego. He stared out on the horizon. . I sat with my legs dangling over the edge of the gunship, as I loaded my DC-15 rifle, waiting for what could possibly be death. My gaze wondered onto a small holoprojecter, attached to the gunship wall. We were here for one reason, and one reason only. The Separitists. They managed to capture Obi-Wan Kenobi, a Jedi Knight, Anakin Skywalker, Obi-Wan's apprentice, and Padme Amidala, a senator from Naboo. PLaying pupeteer in this mess, was Count Dooku, leader of the Separatists. As I wondered deep into thought, a loud, buzzing noise came from the holoprojecter. Daego rushed over to the spot, activating a key-code, starting the transmission. A blue light emanated from the projecter, coming from the Acclamator class assault ship in the space above Geonosis. Soon, the figure of Master Yoda appeared. " Holding the prisoners in a Geonosian arena, the Speratists are," Yoda said mournfully " Rescue them, you must. In the arena, 200 Jedi are laying in wait. Beaming you a map of the area, we are. Ready, my gunship is. Coming, I am." The transmission ended with a quick beep[/I.
" Alright troops," Daego barked," you heard Yoda !" A map of the Geonosian landscape appeared on the captain's guantlet." We are going to attack from the south. You men better be paying attention, or you'll be in a world of hurt ! Am I making myself clear !?! " " Sir, yes sir !" we all replied at once. A few minutes after the transmission, a large arena appeared in our viewscreens. " Are you ready ? We're going to make those Seppers wish they'd never been born !" laughed a troop standing next to me. Soon we saw other gunships appear and swoop in to the arena, and we knew, it was time for war.
 
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Shiny_deoxys

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Dude, I hate to break it to you, but this is a Pokemon Fan Fiction place. You just broke the rules by posting it here. You should have put it in the Non-Pokemon fics, where it belongs.

As is you broke the rules, this thread will probably be closed soon. I suggest that unless pokemon is later incorperated into the plot then you had better just post it in the Non-pokemon fics forum. When you post it there you will likely get a reveiw of your work.

S.D.
 

Naraku_Diabolos

DNC20/NIN10
Shiny_deoxys said:
Dude, I hate to break it to you, but this is a Pokemon Fan Fiction place. You just broke the rules by posting it here. You should have put it in the Non-Pokemon fics, where it belongs.

As is you broke the rules, this thread will probably be closed soon. I suggest that unless pokemon is later incorperated into the plot then you had better just post it in the Non-pokemon fics forum. When you post it there you will likely get a reveiw of your work.

S.D.

That is true, but he/she broke another rule; Chapters have to be at least 1 full page long in Word as well. Your story so far is only 2 paragraphs. Lengthen it a bit, okay?
 

Dragonfree

Just me
Please paragraph your fic, make the chapter longer, and post it in Non-Pokémon Fanfiction.

*closes*
 
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