Rotomknight
THE GREATEST TRAINER
Will amy be susceptible to the mental effects, like sparky in through thunder/lightning? Maybe unable to understand pokemon over time. and is that what happened to N?
There is a good reason why Shane developed the ability to read PokePrint, but it isn't the same reason for Amy to lose the ability to understand Pokemon.Will amy be susceptible to the mental effects, like sparky in through thunder/lightning? Maybe unable to understand pokemon over time. and is that what happened to N?
I'll try!I wonder if Looker will still have his ridiculous way of speech and action.
Ah, I didnt know. Didnt read it. But KF was telling me how lots of the fics he reads with Looker in them have a lame Looker.Also, Cutlerine did a competent Looker as well, so I'm not surprised to see it happen again.
It would have been nice to write as well, but I needed to bring out our third character, so yeah.I was hoping to see more of Amy's groups point of view this chapter, but since this the first introduction of another main character, it is better to give them full spotlight for the chapter.
Hm. You know, you can read it over whenever, I dont mind. You dont have to be there with me.Not much else to mention about the story in general, I like it and look forward to being able to beta read further chapters for you again at some point. It doesn't feel right to do so without the author there as well. Stupid work hours and tech ban.
Put me on the PM list or DIE! I love the idea of a Pokemon turning into a human, which I always wondered about. I also love how this fiction is intertwined with Pokemon BW. Keep up the good work!
I think that I would say, instead of "too", replace it with "to have/keep/etc.". To me that sounds better."It's a Bag. You can keep your clothes in it. And anything else you need too, of course."
I find it odd that KF used my fic to start it off and even more weird that it was originally for TTL. He must of switched it when i wasn't looking. >_> <_<From the new WoJ Review Game!
Well that's always a good thing. Better than the opposite anyways.I just finished reading this, and enjoyed it much more than I thought that I would.
Well, I was trying to think of something new to write about. Something original. As it is, AVT only got 4th in originality in the fan fic awards, but i digress.I was thinking that it would be just another PMD story, which is not really my interest, but I really like the concept of this. It seems like a cool concept to think that whenever a person transforms into a Pokemon, the inverse also occurs.
Perhaps. It would difficult to do that though, seeing as Amy forgot all of that. Only brief references like the Luminous Orbs show up. Though I suppose it'd be enough to work with... I dunno.Plot: Like I said, you have a really neat idea with the... Human Mystery Dungeon. I hope that you will implement this fuller as you go. Maybe have Amy relate a forest/route/desert to a dungeon?
Well, it does follow that story.I also like how you have added the BW characters.
I always found it odd that B/W/2 never implemented 6 player Pokemon battles into triple battles, with 3 on each side. They did it for double battles. *shrug*I never would have thought of taking that battle with N in Accumula and escalating it with the rivals of BW and your own group.
Yeah, I'm still sorting all that out. Heh heh...N's journey was given a good explanation, but I want to see how the gym leaders deal with being asked for the drives.
Speaking of which, I'm really excited to see if Amy does gym battles, but at the moment I can't see her doing that.
He's fun to write anyways.Characters: Crest might be one of my favorites so far.
Looker's like the Doctor; He's everywhere. Even looks like 'em too.Ghetsis is really a well spoken evil mastermind, and I like how you have incorporated him and Looker already having met.
That's gonna be fun to write as well. Though I am fiddling with the story somewhat. It's amazing what the addition of a single character will do to a story.N has a good adaption, and I like how you have given him and Amy similar skills. I'd love to see it when he confesses to being part of Team Plasma, how Luke and Amy react.
That actually came from a webcomic i follow.The biggest thing that I don't really understand is the idea of dropping out.
16. Although his age was never established in-story.How old is he?
I think thats what the games portray as how that happens.I would envision a world in Pokemon that you once you complete trainer school (which ends around the time a child is 10), you are able to start your journey.
I'm perfectly okay with that.Dropping out just makes it sound like there is a bunch of delinquents running around with powerful monsters.
Force of habit. In real life, I do use the word "anyways". If you ever find yourself reviewing my work, catch any use of the word "anyways" outside of dialogue, as it should be "anyway".I don't have much to say here. Most of it is good. However, I don't really care for the use of the word "anyways". Anyway is the right word and I'm not sure if there is even a need for the s.
I actually disagree. But honestly, I don't think it's that important.In chapter 2, this line is used when Luke's mom is helping Amy pack...
I think that I would say, instead of "too", replace it with "to have/keep/etc.". To me that sounds better.
Whoever designed her outfit for when she turned human must think the way I do about clothes. Wait....I love how you described Amy at the beginning. It was a good adaption of a Vulpix to a person.
Sometimes you have to take a step back and appreciate all that we have.You did best elaborating on people, but I still enjoyed seeing technology through Amy's eyes and how crazy everything was.
I'm still working on it, but I do have my other story that I have to release a chapter for first. But I will working on chapter 4 of this as soon as that is done.Enjoyment: It was really a good story and I hope that you will get back to this soon, as I see that you haven't added to this in a while.Hey, add me to the PM list should you start this back any time soon!