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A Gangsta's Ambition

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JoJo@210

We Strike At Dawn
Well this is my first time fic, it came to me while I was listening to music and thinking about our world and how f*ucked up it is, then I turned my gameboy on and thought, "If our world is so ****ed up, I wonder how life would be if pokemon were real? I always wanted pokemon to be real but with life always f*cked up as it is right now?" So I thought I'll write a fic on this idea cause I was daydreaming on what would it be like, what would I do? So the idea kept on bugging me until I wrote some stuff down and had it post in the idea Authors Cafe. People really liked the idea so I thought I"d go for it.

I based the character on me and some of the stuff I went through while in my...well I'm not gonna say it since people won't believe me. How could a gang member like pokemon? you'd ask, I can explain but if you want to know PM me since I want to stay on topic of my fic. I also wrote it about me so I could write it easier and not have to explain if it was coming from someone else's eyes or view. So without further adue' Here is my fic called "A Gangsta's Ambition" Hope you Enjoy:D

This is rated somewhere between PG-13 and R for strong language, life like violence. There may be some nudity later on as well as some other stuff, but not until later on in the story.

~Prologue~

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The world to others is a great place to live in. That’s only in their eyes, though. In mine I see more things that a fourteen year old should ever see. I see violence, murder, break-ins, as well as people robbing and stealing from each other for their own pleasure and enjoyment. How about the people making more money than you, money which you need more in your life than they will ever need or ever know? Did I fail to mention that those people partake in illegality and are never caught? They use these wonderful creatures, Pokemon for these sinful acts and having seen that I despise all of it, and yet hate myself for some of these acts as well.

I sometimes wish that life was like a family sitcom—that way, people will always be laughing, and life is only as bad as the scriptwriters would have it. Or how about living in a neighborhood where you don’t have to worry about who runs the block you live on, who you can and can’t trust or talk to, who will or will not stick a knife into your back, and twist it just for good measure. This way, I wouldn’t have to be scared every single day.

My name is Jo and I’m 16 years old. I live with my grandmother who claims that she supposedly loves me, and yet I come home only to be cursed and told I’m only a burden bringing the house down, a deadweight dragging and obstructing the rest of the world, like a sprained ankle would hinder a runner. I was abandoned by my mother, so my grandmother claims. I know that she is lying, though. She keeps me distant from my mother when she tries to contact me, I want to see her but am never given the opportunity. I never knew my father and don’t know his name, and speaking truthfully I never really want to see him at all. Why should I? He has never ever tried to contact me, and as far as I am concerned he is already dead, as I must be to him.

I belong to a gang that fights without the use of Pokemon-- using them is a sign of being weak, hiding behind another living thing, making them suffer and bleed for you, and taking all of their credit and glory. I would like to use them but if you are ever caught even having one as a pet you end up… well let’s just say it isn’t good. When we ever do end up in a fight with another gang using them, the only way to fight them is to shoot them before they are sent out or make a move. I hold guilt and responsibility for some of these creatures whose lives I’ve ended so abruptly. I wish I could quit this life, and end it all but the only exit I see is death; I wish that I could surv… wait, no I will survive and find another way. There is always another way.

My name is Jo, and this is my life. //

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Chapter One​

“Piece of sh*t mother F*cker,” I shouted angrily while aiming a kick at his stomach.

“Never come up to me and talk sh*t to me ever again b*tch!” I kicked him one last time. He coughed out blood, and the blood kept running out like a waterfall, even as he rolled around in obvious pain. I pitied him for having to do that to him, not too much but a little nonetheless, even though he was to blame for this misfortune upon him. I walked away with blood-covered fists, making my way through the crowd which had watched me in action just a fraction earlier. Yes, the same damn crowd which cried out for blood and which always wanted more. I left with their congratulations and applause ringing in my ears.


“Damn, Jo can fight!”

“He’s crazy man, don’t f*ck with him!”

“You didn’t show no mercy man, Damn!”

These were the comments I heard while working my way through and getting patted on the back by the crowd, apparently thrilled at the performance I had put up for them. I don’t see how they find hurting someone entertaining, I didn’t find it all amusing. I suddenly felt like a seal in a zoo enclosure, using my nose to perform tricks with a ball, with a vociferous crowd cajoling me on. As if their response would have been any different for the victor if I had been the one lying face down in a pool of glistening blood.


I made my way finally out of the crowd and walked through the hallways, finding my way to the nearest bathroom. I walked in and heard nothing-- the silence told me that I was the only one inside. I looked in the mirror and searched my face for any injuries I may have gotten.

“Nope, not a damn thing could hurt this good-looking guy.” I said to myself. I smiled and started washing the blood off my hands.


Suddenly, the bathroom door flew open with great force, slammed against the wall and a deep, angry voice then shouted: “Hey mother f*cker!” I turned and lifted my right fist up, getting ready for another pointless fight. My heart began to pump and I felt the adrenaline rush coming through my body. I waited for the person to just make it around the corner so I could knock his lights out. No one called me that without getting an introduction to my fists. Then the person jumped out around the corner with a smile and said laughing: “Damn man, you beat the sh*t out of that guy!” I lowered my fist and let out a sigh of relief and tried to relax. “F*ck, Spooks! Don’t do that, you scared the sh*t out of me man!”, I yelled back.

Spooks is another member of the gang I’m in called BTK; which stands for “Big-Tyme-Killa’s.” Spooks’ real name was Josh and he is fifteen, making him the youngest—the fact that he is also the biggest clown in our crew points at his slender age once again. He is almost my height, so I would say that he was about five feet three inches tall, but to other people that is still kind of short. His hair was black, slicked back with a healthy does of grease, but his eyes… … Those eyes were pitch black with no pupil, and when you stare into them you feel as if you were falling into them helplessly. Remember the times when you would remove a manhole cover and peer inside, trying to locate the bottom, and then you would slowly lower your head into the hole, going further and further in… … Or the times where you would look at a Bunsen burner flame during those dumb laboratory lessons, and you would find the whole world dissolving around you, with the flame the sole constant? That is exactly what I have always felt when I look into his eyes. Windows to the soul? Someone must have forgotten to turn the lights on for that particular soul.

Since he is always playing around, not to mention his height and age, Spooks is always taken less seriously by others at certain situations. Yet he laughs at them for not taking him serious-- he takes it as a joke. He just laughs and smiles at you. Man, that smile-- its not any ordinary smile. With those eyes and that perfect white smile of his, he’ll just smiles at you and it intimidates you, it sends a chill down your spine because whenever you look at him… … It is as if his smile was that of the Devil’s. That’s mainly the reason he was given the name Spooks from us.

Spooks laughed for the joke he pulled, while I went back washing my hands. “My bad, but what should you be scared for? You’ve never lost a fight and you sure show that you can really beat the living hell out of someone.” He said, “Here, you forgot your bag.” He tossed my bag by my feet. I dried my hands off and slipped on my bag, “Thanks man, if you didn’t pick it up somebody would have probably jacked it.” “No prob. Anyways, I also came to see if you wanted to leave school early. Most of the crew is heading off to go smoke and drink at the boss’s house. You in?” he asked. “Nah, I feel like staying here a little besides the superintendent is already on my a** for skipping so many times. I’m just gonna milk it here and go home afterwards.” I answered. “Alright, I’ll catch you later or tomorrow then.” He said putting his hand. “Yeah, tomorrow *****.” I said shaking his hand following it with a finger snap. We left out the door and he ran into the parking lot looking for the boss’s car. I watched as he disappeared behind the cars that packed the parking lot and I walked off through the hallways to my class.


I thought I would’ve slept through class but we had a group work session. We were researching on the biology of fire pokemon. Although I try not to show interest, inside I always enjoy doing projects like this. Each group was given a certain fire pokemon to research on. Our group was given the pokemon called Cyndaquil. It looked a lot like an ant-eater but much smaller with a belly covered in short yellow fur and its backside covered in dark blue, it had 4 spots that supposedly shot fire when it was ever angered or scared that protects it. I thought it looked pretty cute and cool. I ended up getting really into the project and doing all the work. We got the best grade out of the other class groups. I felt embarrassed a little when teachers told me that I am smart, I’m just too lazy to do the work.

“Wait a minute!” a girl shouted out causing her to catch the whole class’s attention, “How did he get a good score on this project when his gang hates…”

RING!!! The school bell rang in the middle of her sentence, making all the other students ignore her. Saved by the bell. I sighed from relief as I thought word would have gotten out that I showed a little interest in pokemon. Students ran out the door for school was over for the day. I quickly grabbed my bag and dashed out with the rest of the class through the door.

I started on my way home from school. I walked through the all the graffiti-marked fences and gas-station walls that went on for ever down the street like a quick spreading disease. I looked at the walls and saw our letters showing we lived and ran this neighborhood, looking around I saw more and some that I did as well. I made it around the corner on the street I had to turn on when I noticed on the south side of the street that I saw three guys standing around something and kicking it. They were all wearing black pants except two of them wore white polo’s-- one was just about my size and the other was shorter and the other with a baby blue striped polo was a little smaller than the rest except chubby with thick arms. I looked a little harder to see if it was a person but I could not see from the distance they were at. I began walking towards them on the opposite side of the street to make it look like I was just walking by. I moved closer trying to see if one of the guys would move a little for me to see.

The tallest one saw me and yelled “Let’s go!” to the other guys he was with. He ran off through the alley behind the houses thinking that his friends heard and were behind him. The short ones however, saw me and stepped away from whatever they were kicking revealing a pokemon. I looked at it and tried to identify it by what it looked like. “Huh?!” I whispered to myself, I looked at it again seeing that it was a badly beaten Cyndaquil! The two guys felt cocky after what they did and the one wearing a blue polo yelled “What the hell you looking at! You want the same sh*t to happen to you?”

The other one in the white polo just smiled at me. I looked really quick to see if it truly was a Cyndaquil, and that glance eradicated all doubt that it was a Cyndaquil. I could have just kept on walking, but I felt really bad for it seeing it helplessly laying there on the concrete street. If I leave they’ll just keep on doing what their doing, I thought to myself, but if I rescue it then word will. I clinched my fists and stared at them with a blank expression on my face while I was thinking if I should save it. The blue polo guy saw me tighten my fist and shouted “You wanna fight, b*tch? Come on pussy!”

The other one wearing white then started to walk briskly towards me. Okay rescuing Cyndaquil it is! I thought to myself as I pulled my arms back to let my backpack fall to ground as well giving me into position to pull my arm back for a punch. The guy came close enough and that’s when I swung my fist straight into his face. I felt his nose pop with the collision of my fist, he flew back to the ground with his head hitting the ground before his body or feet did. Blood spurted from his nose, it seemed he was the first person I ever knocked out unconscious because he didn’t make a move afterwards.

“Whoa!” I told myself in shock, I paid no attention to the other guy when all of a sudden I was knocked to the ground with my glasses flying off. Then a heavy body came laying over me trapping my arms underneath them, I knew it was the other guy wearing blue. I tried moving but couldn’t turn over on my back because I was being pummeled with punches. Splat! I felt my nose running with a hot liquid. The barrage of fists then stopped for a second then I made my way onto my back and quickly pushed my opponent off of me. I got to feet as fast as I could to check my nose. A thick, red substance covered my fingers. I’m bleeding? That’s it. “You little f*ck!” I said angrily, I then started running towards him. He then pulled out a knife from his back pocket with a blade no longer than 4 inches long. I stopped right where I stood. He played with the knife in his hand swaying it side to side taunting me “Come on.” he said, “Not so big now are you?”

He started walking towards me while I kept moving back with every step he took. He continued to play with the knife by tossing it to the other hand then all of a sudden, thunk, he accidentally dropped it. I moved in when I saw him drop it; he tried to snatch it off the ground, but was his plan quickly failed with a swift kick to the head. He fell back while I snatched up the knife off the ground and jumped on him. I began to give him the same treatment he gave me; I then stabbed his arm as punishment for the blow he delivered, which caused my nosebleed. I got off him while he started to cry and wiped my nose with the sleeve from my shirt. I dashed to grab my bag and locate my glasses. I then rushed toward the pokemon. It was in bad shape-- its head had giant bumps and it looked as if its hind leg would be unable for it to walk. I heard Cyndaquil give a soft whimper from fear.

I gently touched its head, “Hey, its ok little fella. I’m here to help. I’m gonna take good care of ya.” I whispered to it for comfort. Think fast Jo, how are you gonna get this thing home without your grandma noticing? I thought to myself. I then quickly unbuttoned my shirt, which was covered with splashes of blood from my nose bleed and carefully wrapped Cyndaquil in it. I took of my bag and took out stuff to make room for it. I placed Cyndaquil in my bag and zipped it enough to where it could get air to breath. I then made on my way home quickly but made sure not to have the bag jump to cause pain to the pokemon in my bag. “Jo,” I said to myself, “you just got yourself into some deep sh*t, my friend.”

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I'd also like to give credit to Mindripper for helping me edit and review over my fic fixing any mistakes I made. Hes great with fancy words. He was a great help in making my fic, I was never good at grammer, but spelling and other stuff, yeah. I got that down.
 
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Nice. Though, you might wanna lighten up an all the swearing, even if it's in asterisks. And set a rating on this. That way, people could know what they're getting into. Put some more length into your chapters.
 

not_awake

Who flung poo?
To start off, I really liked this idea when you proposed it in the author's cafe. I think it's a cool idea that you should pursue, and right now it has somethings that work really well and some that don't. It has lots of potential that you can tap.

First, I like the dialogue. It feels natural to me and I think that's a difficult thing to accomplish. Some people may feel put off by the language, but I vote to keep it. It helps to create the setting and the feel for the world your characters exist in.

So on the plus side, unique plot and natural dialogue.

Ther are some of the things that you could work. For example, all your paragraphs and sentences are about the same length. Add some variety to your sentences and paragraphs and it will create a more intestetsing rhythm.

Personally, I'd suggest cutting the prologue. I think it reveals a little too much about the world and the character. Save some mystery to cover in the story.

Well, that's my two cents. Good luck. I hope to see more.
 

JoJo@210

We Strike At Dawn
Thanks for your reviews. Yeah I plan to make the chapters alot longer than this, I wanted to get to where the story takes point on pokemon. If I talked to much about the gangsta stuff I thought people might of said "Well this has nothing to do with pokemon so how is this a pokemon fic?" I wanted to make this chapter long but I'm gonna do the following chapters longer. Thanks I just wish I could come up with things to write about in English. LOL:) Anyways thanks for reading it and I hope it gets a little publicity like all the other fics everyone made and are popular. I also hoped I had a very unique story.
 
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Carpetted!

Guest
The swearing if very annoying. =/ 'Gangstas' do more than swear and pick fights, ya know.
He coughed out blood, and the blood kept running out like a waterfall, while rolling around in obvious pain.
How can blood roll around in pain? -_-
Also, a lot of the fancy-schmancy words are used wrong, or in a choppy way. The sentences don't flow right, just stick with 2nd grade words.
He ran off through the alley behind the houses thinking that his friends heard and were behind him.
Seeing as this is in first person, you can't know what other people think. =/
-That is all.
 

KirbyXD

Good Night!
I liked it. It's unique and has a good plot. I also liked how you used unappropriate language, it made it somehow more realistic instead of having all this too nice language. You should make the chapters longer.Tell me when you finish with the next chapter.
 
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mindripper

Guest
He coughed out blood, and the blood kept running out like a waterfall, while rolling around in obvious pain

Well, this is not ingerently wrong, as words like "while" refer to prior sentence fragments, which it does in this case. I agree that it was not done to the best it could, but it is not gramatically wrong. You ever heard Yoda speak? His sentences do not flow either, but they are gramatically correct. Jojo, change the above sentence to "He coughed out blood, and the blood kept running out like a waterfall, even as he rolled around in obvious pain".

Also, a lot of the fancy-schmancy words are used wrong, or in a choppy way. The sentences don't flow right, just stick with 2nd grade words.

Sorry, could you give examples? Seeing I looked through and did a general edit, I do admit I could have missed something. I changed sentences which were wrong, but left it the way I received it. As for words, I need quotes so as to agree or disagree with you. Thanks.

As to your comment on first person, I think that it is void. As a person, you make assumptions about what other people think. For example, "I had this feeling that he did not think very well of me." Obviously I do not know what the other person thinks, but I assume. You assume that a chich does not dislike you before asking her out, you assume that you know what people think from what you construe. 90% of communication is non-verbal, so I guess it is proper enough to take liberties with that.
 
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Carpetted!

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Sorry, could you give examples? Seeing I looked through and did a general edit, I do admit I could have missed something. I changed sentences which were wrong, but left it the way I received it. As for words, I need quotes so as to agree or disagree with you. Thanks.
Sure. =/
These were the comments I heard while working my way through and getting patted on the back by the crowd, apparently thrilled at the performance I had put up for them. I don’t see how they find hurting someone entertaining, I didn’t find it all amusing. I suddenly felt like a seal in a zoo enclosure, using my nose to perform tricks with a ball, with a vociferous crowd cajoling me on.
In this case, all amusing should be at all amusing, and the fancy words get in the way. :p
As to your comment on first person, I think that it is void. As a person, you make assumptions about what other people think. For example, "I had this feeling that he did not think very well of me." Obviously I do not know what the other person thinks, but I assume. You assume that a chich does not dislike you before asking her out, you assume that you know what people think from what you construe. 90% of communication is non-verbal, so I guess it is proper enough to take liberties with that.
Yes. But you don't say it in they way JOJO does; you CAN assume, but 'He ran off through the alley behind the houses thinking that his friends heard and were behind him. ' doesn't sound like assuming. Mind reading, more lie. Whoooooo.
 

JoJo@210

We Strike At Dawn
Carpetted! said:
The swearing if very annoying. =/ 'Gangstas' do more than swear and pick fights, ya know.

How can blood roll around in pain? -_-
Also, a lot of the fancy-schmancy words are used wrong, or in a choppy way. The sentences don't flow right, just stick with 2nd grade words.

Seeing as this is in first person, you can't know what other people think. =/
-That is all.

OMG. Ok users flamed me alot for having a user title "I'm a real gangsta Trainer", users would tell me if you are a gang member what are you doing on a pokemon site, you should be killing or fighting people, selling drugs, and having sex with alot of girls. Thats not what gang members do every single day! I know what gang members do! About the cursing, well usaully not alot but sometimes your speech just does it on its own. I know that sounds like a sorry excuse but sometimes it happens. Unless you pay attention to everything you say then it won't happen but I myself call teachers at school "fool" "Nigga" etc., but in a friendly way. I don't understand users these days anymore. *sigh*

No, the person rolled around in pain in his blood.

Well you don't know exactly what they're thinking but like you said you can assume. If you act like your gonna hit someone and they flinched you know they were thinking you would of hit them. Why else would they of flinched. Hmm.... =/
 
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Raichu_Trainer_Chris

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This reminds me of my old neighborhood, and how I rescued this puppy, agh good times. Yeah I did a fic like this once, really helps if you have experience in living in the ghetto, which it appears you do, but people can really put up facades these days. Overall I say add more description, and swearing keep it real ya mean? Anyway this has the potential to be a great story, and P.S. how did you know that my character was gonna meet one of his new Pokemon like yours met Cyndaquil?

To the stereotype person, most gangsta's do more than the shyt you mentoioned, not all us brothers do that anyway. me i used to be a blood for the most part, and I didn't do a bunch of stuff, I quit cus all we did was jump people, n smoke weed, and I got jumped a lot, and didn't smoke weed at all. Jojo tell me when you write the next chapter, fics about life in the hood is tight.
 
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JoJo@210

We Strike At Dawn
What is your fic called Raichu Trainer Chris? My character just met his pokemon at random, I was trying to figuire out what pokemon for my character to rescue but I didn't know which one, I was thinking Eevee or chickorita would be the first pokemon my character would meet but I just picked using eenie, meenie, minie, moe. LOL Thanks for stcking with my story and Mindripper I'll try even harder next time to make it as best as possible. I'm currently working on the 2nd chapter now.

Raichu Trainer Chris Thank goodness there is a voice of similarity here. Yes, I have major experience in the ghetto, you know pretty much how it is. You know most people here probably don't know that there is a diffrence between red raggers and bloods and the same goes to Crips and blue raggers. Just because they both wear a red and blue bandanas doesn't mean it's the same thing. There is a major diffrence. I was 2nd command of a gang called BTM; which stands for Big Tyme Mexicans but I'm now the leader since our leader moved away to the other side of town, dropped out of school to start a life with his girlfriend. I was a red ragger before that though, I'm not part of it anymore but I still have them gaurding my back. Which also gets me to another point, not always does a gang beat the sh*t out of you to join nor do they kill you when you get out. Not even big time mafia gangs do that much.(they do but on certain situations) Most users here don't know unless you experience which I hate when people say this is what a gang member does and doesn't do! How the hell do you know! You've never experienced it! You may have seen it in movies, seen it happen in public, or knew somebody who did, but knowing isn't the same as experiencing!

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You're not a gangster... if you were a gangster:

1) You SURE AS HELL wouldn't be a member of a Pokemon forum. (now don't tell me this a stereotype like with the goth thing, because gangsters are killers and thieves and certainly don't have time for this sort of thing.)

2) Just because you may dress like a punk, doesn't mean you are a real "gangster" which would mean you were a member of a gang, and that you would have to do whatever the gang's leader commanded you to do, and if you were to quit this gang, they would kill you in an instant.

3) If you were actually a gangster, you would have people after you, and wanting to kill you for things you have done to them or their family, so you would surely not go advertising it all over the interent.

4) I don't think this is at all funny, because I once knew a few people who were in gangs, and you don't want to know the things that they've done...

This is one of those morons who don't know sqaut about gangs, oh and this goes to Skiks as well, I remember you.

1.) You don't know how my life was. If I didn't have a childhood then yeah I wouldn't be on a forum. Everyone has had a favorite cartoon or character they liked alot. Pokemon was one of those cartoons I liked when I was little.

2.) True, just because a person dresses a certain way doesn't mean they are that. But like Dave Chappelle said "Sometimes that is f*cking confusing." So next time you see a person wearing a police uniform go and beat the sh*t out of him. You never know he might not be a cop. ;/

3.) Gangsters are not supposed to mess with their enemies family. That is weak sh*t, only the Mafia's do that. If you have a problem with someone you go up to them and don't talk sh*t, you go up and fight without explaining the problem. If whoever you knew does that, which I highly think they do, then they are fags.

4.) hehe check 3 to see what I think of your friends. And No, you don't want to know the things I have done. I really regret doing them but sometimes you have no choice. Some things I was told to do and I didn't hesitate to do it.
 
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Dubble Flux

Well-Known Member
Damn, I got beat to the punch. I was planning on doing a fic with the main character being my 'ghetto' self. Oh well. Nice to see there is another member on here with the same ideas as I. No on to the review:

The swearing seemed a bit forced, and at some points, the 'ghetto talk' appeared forced. Don't get me wrong, I use slang and curse all the time when I talk (It just doesn't show when I type. At all), but the way ot was used didn't seem as real to me as you probably wanted it to be portrayed. I've had the exact things said about me too ("You're a Chicago thug, why you on a site like this?"), so I'm glad to see a story with characters and themes other than the ones thought up by the usual wimpy, lame suburbanites. In all, I like the concept (How can I not? I was gon' do the same thing!), and hope to see some more.

EDIT: Just ignore what clammyshazam said. Being known here as SPPF's original thug (even though I hate the gangs around me and such), I've put up with more critizism and doubt than you can imagine. Even if you aren't from the ghetto, that doesn't deny the fact you at least have an idea of how things are going down.

~One Bad N.W.A.
 
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Raichu_Trainer_Chris

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Yeah the dialouge was a bit forced. Here's what I do: Put yourself in the position of whatever your character is expieriencing. If he is scared, have him act accordingly to how you would normally act under that siuation. most of the ppl who reply tell me that I do a pretty good job with the conversation.

BTW its the journey of 1000 miles.
 

JoJo@210

We Strike At Dawn
Ok thanks for your fan fic name. The dailogue wasn't at all forced, most of the events I wrote in the story happened to me, I can't exactly act like its happening to me because it already has happened to me. The dailogue is pretty much how I talk, I could make it more really but I get told alot for using the word "Fool" and "Nigga". We can use these words in Fics right? If we can then I will change my first chapter. Make the dailogue alot more realistic. I have that program where you talk in the mic and it types it for you but I just feel like practicing my typing thats why I never use it. I just kind of softend the fic to keep more interesting with plot instead of swearing and fighting for readers. Again, can we write whatever in our fics as long as we give a rating right?
 
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Ace Kenshader

Dreaming sexy
Great chapter Jojo. I will read more of this.

Although be lighter on the swearing.

I feel really bad for the Cyndaquil, if it was me in the chapter, I would done anything to save that pokemon. Even if it means me being beat up, being bruised, and possibly getting killed.
 
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JoJo@210

We Strike At Dawn
There was alot of swearing I agree with everyone but the chapter was short so the main thing filling everything was the swearing. Don't worry the next chapter will be longer which will leave the swearing pretty much as if it wasn't there.
 

Beaniebabie

~Camp Jellybean!~
WOW very touching Joe! I no that you may have heard this before but swearing! A rating would be nice next time to Joe..... I hope your next chapter is as good and more lengthy as the last!
Luv Ya!
 
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brockman5

Guest
It's really good, when I talk it comes out like that too but when I type it don't. Um... Really good, in real life people do swear like that but in a public forum maybe cut a little but it is really good. Yea if you join or get out you don't always get jumped but the gang im in we had to get jumped in.... I got out though for a couple of reaseons...=/

It's good can't wait for the next chapter!!!:D
 

JoJo@210

We Strike At Dawn
Chapter Two

Well I made my second chapter and it took a while but I made it longer and less swearing for people here with virgin ears:D hehe. Well I hope you enjoy this chapter. I had to edit this myself since Mindripper is I don't know where so I edited this the best I could. So I hope you enjoy this chapter. I'm already typing up Chapter 3 already so it'll come out much sooner than it took for Chapter 2 to come out.


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Chapter ~ Two

I walked through my front yard noticing my grandmothers car missing from the drive way. “She’s out of the house,” I said, “perfect!” I reached in my pocket for my house key as I approached the front door and opened it. I walked in seeing the house giving off a green tint in the living room as the sun shined through the green curtains hanging from the window. The sofa making a path towards to the hallway making the living room separated from the doorway. I walked and noticed a note on the living room coffee table. I first took my bag off a quickly but gently and placed it on the sofa. I unzipped it fast to pull check up on the unlucky pokemon. It was sleeping but breathing very hard, I felt my heart get heavy then sink.

“Is it going to die?” I thought to myself. I grabbed it and pulled it out of the bag and laid it on the sofa. I then ran around the sofa to the coffee table and snatched up the note. I began reading it,

I left to work, won’t be home till probably one. There’s food in the pantry cook whatever you want to eat.
Bye​

I glanced at the clock that hung from the wall over the television, it was 6 o’clock. I crumbled up the letter and threw it in the trash. I then noticed my hands still had blood on them from when I stabbed the guy and the nosebleed he gave me. I quickly ran to my room and and undressed, grabbed a towel and change of clothes. I ran to the bathroom and took a quick shower. Showering would help me think; while I got clean to think on my next move to do for cyndaquil.

“I could take it to a pokemon center but what’s the closest one near here?” I asked myself, “I only know the one at downtown.” I tried remembering where there were closer centers but I couldn’t stop thinking of what might happen if people found out what I did. “Would those guys tell their friends what happen? Would their friends know who I am? If so, would word get out about me? Will my gang find out?” These questions ran through my mind again and again worrying me more every time it came to mind.

I got out of the shower and started drying myself and changing. That’s when I heard a noise while I was putting my shirt on and it was coming from the living room. "Cyndaquil must be up and moving now!" My heart filled with joy for I thought he was ok. I rushed out the bathroom and ran to the living room. My eyes then opened wide with fear and shock. I stopped right in front of the hallway seeing Spooks sitting on a chair facing the couch where Cyndaquil laid!

Spooks looked at me with a blank expression on his face. He could see the fear in my eyes. Silence stayed in the room for a while filling the room with a tense and awkward feeling making my body heavy. “Jo what is that?” he said softly with a confused look on his face.

“Spooks, how the hell did you get in my house?” I exclaimed.

“Your window, you’re the one who said if your ever home and don’t answer the door to try the window, but the real question is what is THAT doing in your house?” He replied.

“Spooks this is hard to…” I said before he interrupted.

“Jo you know what’s going to happen if everyone in the crew finds out!” he yelled as he got up from the chair.

“You don’t think I know that! I have been here longer than you have!” I shouted back looking at him meanly, “I know the consequences damn it! I really don’t know why I saved it!”

“You saved it?!” he said in shock, “That’s even worse!” He ran his hands on his face and hair with frustration. Silence then took its place again. Spooks sat again in the chair while I made my way to the couch next to Cyndaquil. I wanted to ask him a question but was scared of what the answer would be. “Hey, uh…Spooks?” I said softly.

“Don’t worry man I won’t say anything.” he said interrupting.

“Thanks man.” I replied softly. “But...” he said “you have to tell me what happened today.” He said. “Okay.” I answered. He listened carefully as I told him how everything went and questioned some of my actions that went on.

“So, what's its name?” he asked, “Their called Cyndaquil’s.” I answered. “How do you know that?" he asked confused. “We did a project in class today and this was the pokemon we had to research on coincidently.” I answered. “You plan on keeping it?” he asked. "I don’t know.” I answered.

Silence took its toll again until Spooks broke it, “Well, he’s all messed up,” he said smiling while getting up from his chair, “So what’s your next move?”

“I was planning on taking it to the pokemon center but I only know the one in downtown though and that’s to far from here.” I said picking up Cyndaquil and putting it on my lap.

“Do you have a phone book?” He asked, “Yeah?” I asked confused. “Where is it!” he asked snapping his fingers. “In front of your feet, underneath the coffee table why?” I asked. “Just hold up.” He said pulling out the phone book and flipping through the pages. “What’s he looking for?” I asked myself, “Wait a minute!”

“You’re looking for the addresses of all the centers in town right?” I said quickly. “Yep that’s it” Spooks said smiling. “Spooks, you smart son-of-a-b*tch!” I shouted happily. “Here it is!” he exclaimed “The closet one is on Martin Street, that’s about twenty blocks from here.” He said. “Martin Street!” I said “Isn’t that pokemon gang territory?” I asked. “I don’t think so?” he said. “It is. It’s the CYTD turf.” I exclaimed with a smirk, “You remember. The gang who own and use all of those fighting-type pokemon.”

“Oh…” he said embarassed as he then dugged his nose again going down the list of addresses. “Well, ...the other closest one is on Military Drive but that’s about two or three miles from here.” He said unsure we would take that route.

“Military…hmm?” I tried remembering if they were anybody running that side of the neighborhood. I didn’t want us to run into trouble on the way especially wanting anybody we knew identifying us. “There are some crews there but…what time is it now!” I asked. Spooks looked at the clock “7:25. Why?” he asked. “We’ll go to that pokemon center then. That side of the neighborhood is infested with gangs of anti and pokemon using, but they usually don’t seem to roam the streets at night.” I said confidently while smiling.

“But it’s like an hour away! Let’s just try to go to the one on Martin!" He shouted, “There’s only one gang there and maybe we won’t run into them.”

"Yeah, but I rather take the chance with a less roamed street and who said we were walking! We’re running the whole way dumba**! Don’t be so lazy!” I ordered. I got up and took Cyndaquil with me to the bathroom so I could clean him a little. I wetted a towel and gently rubbed it against his body wiping any blood or dirt off him. I ran to living room to find Spooks already at my front door.

“Its cold outside man,” he told me “you better find something to keep that thing warm.” I ran quickly to my room and grabbed my brown jacket and a small blanket to wrap Cyndaquil. I put Cyndaquil on my bed as I wrapped him and put on my jacket. I then ran out my front door while Spooks locked it with my house keys.

Spooks caught up to me and Cyndaquil and placed my keys in my pocket while we ran. I felt my heart pump with fear from the idea that I would get caught seen with pokemon in my arms. I could see Cyndaquil open his eyes just staring at me while he was in my arms. I smiled to give it comfort and not to worry because we were taking it somewhere it could be well-cared for. I then put a part of the blanket over its head so it could be hidden.

“Hey Spooks.” I said panting.

“What?” he answered back.

“If we run into trouble on the way to the center, I want you to run off and go home.” I told him.

“And leave you alone with whatever happens?” He asked, “I don’t think so. This is what will happen if we run into trouble you run and I’ll take care of it.” He argued while keeping his breath steady as he ran next to me. I laughed at the thought even though my throat was dry from the cold air. “If you insist.” I said.

We ran endlessly as every step I took sent more fear down my body. “Hey there’s the Pokemon Center!” Spooks whispered to me as he stopped running to catch his breath. I stopped as well as my arms were getting tired from running with the pokemon in my arms.

“Jesus! This guy is pretty heavy.” I said holding out the wrapped pokemon to Spooks.

“What?” Spooks said acting stupid as he tried to avoid holding it.

“Don’t be a little B*tch,” I hissed, “just hold it for a second man. My arms are tired.” Spooks carefully grabbed the pokemon and as the weight of it shifted to his arms. The pain then suddenly sprang straight up to my shoulders. “God damn.” I said giving out a sigh from relief.

“Wow!” Spooks said.

“What?” I asked.

“We made it all the way here and didn’t run into any trouble!” he said surprised.

“I told you.” I replied taking in deep breaths, “You need to know where to go when your out at night. It’s dangerous and stupid if you don’t know where your going.” I pulled out my hands asking for the pokemon back from Spooks. He layed it in my arms and we walked up to the yellow glow the street lights gave out on the sidewalks. I could see the bright white lights the were on at the pokemon center with the many rich kids and adults that could afford the items and gear to raise pokemon. I envied and hated them for they don’t know how it is for people with problems making money even if it's earned wrongfullybut have the same dreams as them. Not knowing that they often treat you as the main reason for hurting pokemon and the main cause of their deaths. But I only see that action of theirs as a way to show off and say they are better and luckier than us.

We ran across the street and started darting towards the sliding doors. Spooks then suddenly stopped as the doors slid open. I turned and watched him and already assuming what he was thinking I asked, “What? You’re not coming in?”

“Sorry man,” he answered with a soft voice, “look I’ll see you tomorrow at school. And don’t worry I won’t say anything, we’ll talk about this next time I go to your house alright.”

“Alright,” I replied, “I’ll check you tomorrow” reaching my arm out as we shook. I watched Spooks as he darted across the street and disappeared through the dark street we took. I turned and walked through the doors.
I looked around and silence suddenly took its toll again. I became the center of attention from all the trainers all around the center. I was nervous on what they were thinking of me, but I tried to ignore them and walked straight toward the white service desk with all the eyes staring at me and a blanket in my hands.

A lady with black curled hair wearing a nurse apron and hat with a red cross on it approached me. “I’m sorry sir but this is a place for trainers and injured pokemon. I’m afraid I’m going to have to ask you to leave now sir.” the nurse ordered with a look on her face that I was always given by snotty rich trainers that filled the center. I just stood there speechless and to afraid to move from being watched. The nurse then walked around the service counter accompanied by a pink round pokemon with an egg in her pouch. “Chansey could you escort this young man out please.” The nurse ordered the pokemon. The chansey replied with a high-pitched voice “Chansey!” and started to shove me towards the door.

I can’t believe their kicking me out. I thought to myself. Another shove came to me by the Chansey which made squeeze the pokemon that I rescued, saved, and risked my life for.

“Cyn!” Cyndaquil gave out a small cry from inside the blanket.

Everyone at the center heard the noise and stared even more. "No! F*ck that! I came too far to just get kicked out of here!" I yelled out. I quickly turned around avoiding the next shove by Chansey. The nurse saw me turn around and yelled “Sir, I need-”

“No!” I yelled, some trainers then got up from their seat looking like they wanted to fight. They must’ve assumed I came to start trouble. “I have an injured pokemon that I need you to help.” I shouted at the nurse. I quickly removed the blanket to reveal the horrible shaped pokemon I rescued was in.

“Oh my God!” the nurse shouted covering her mouth with her hands. “Chansey I need an stretcher and this pokemon in the ER room immediately!” the nurse ordered Chansey. The Chansey then quickly ran into the back while the nurse came and got Cyndaquil out of my arms. The Chansey then came out with a stretcher and the nurse placed Cyndaquil on it. The Chansey ran into the back with the stretcher behind swinging doors as a red light then flickered on.

“Sir, please wait here while the secretary comes from the back. You must give your information.” The nurse exclaimed as she ran into the back following the Chansey.

I stood at the front desk waiting for the so-called secretary. As I stood there I turned around and saw eyes staring at me. “What!” I yelled at them. Some then turned around and ignored my remark, while others kept glaring even harder. I just then started looking at the ground as I turned to lean at the service desk. Another lady then came from the black with black hair as well but short only going to her shoulders and brown eyes. She wore a similair outfit as the nurse except hers was white instead of pink.

“Yes, may I help you?” the lady asked with a smile.

“Um, yes the nurse in pink said for me to wait here cause I have to give out some information.” I said.

“Okay, hold on one second.” She said as she typed something in the computer in front of her. “May I please have you Trainer Id. Card?.” She asked with her hand out.

“My Trainer Id, Card?” I asked.

“Yes, sir. You do have one right.” She said smiling.

“Well, uh, no not really. Its kind of complicated to explain right now.” I exclaimed. She looked at me with a perplexed look in her face as she stared at me for a good period of time as if looking for something. She then went to grab a clipboard with some forms on it.

“Here, fill this out.” She said. “It’ll be easier for you.” She said handing me the clipboard and pen.

“Thank You.” I said as I took the clipboard. I began walking to an empty table while not making eye contact that watched me. I sat down and began getting busy with the forms. It asked me basic questions about my age, sex, name, and other questions as well that I couldn’t really understand why I was being asked but I answered it anyways.

“Hi.” a voice then said. I lifted my head to see a young girl with beautiful long brown hair, gorgeous hazel eyes, wearing a blue top with a very short red skirt revealing that showed off her nice legs. “Was that your Cyndaquil?” she asked.

“Yeah.” I replied wondering why on earth she would be talking to me.

“How did it get so badly injured?” she asked concerned.

“Well I rescued it from a bunch of guys that were beating it up.” I answered.

“What! That poor pokmon was being beaten? What kind of guys were they? They have some nerve!” she shouted looking angry. “I smilied a bit since she looked kind of cute with that angry look on her face, “It was some kids who I think belong to an anti-pokemon gang.” I answered.

“Oh pokemon haters. I hate those people! Especailly those gangs that kill pokemon. I couldn’t imagine the feeling of killing a pokemon. Could you imagine doing that.” She said in a soft sad voice.

I then felt a pain shot straight into my heart as my pupils grew small. I knew the feeling of taking lives of pokemon. I felt the guilt come at me, she was talking about people like me. I couldn’t even think of what to say back to her except lie. “No I can’t imagine, but I think I could imagine how it would feel. It’s horrible.” I told her. She gave me a look of confusion. “I’m gonna go turn this form in right now.” I said as I got up.

“Okay, but you will come back and sit with me right?” she asked.

“Um…okay.” I replied. I turned in the forms to the secretary.

“Thank You.” She said as she took the clipboard. “I will be in the back so I may put in your information in another computer since this on here doesn’t have the right programs.” She said as she got up, “Please just wait here and mingle with the other trainers around.”

“Wait! What about the bill for helping the pokemon I brought in. How much is it and how do ya’ll do that here?” I asked.

“Oh no don’t worry.” She said as she pointed to the girl I was talking to, “That young lady said to add the bill to her account.” The girl noticed she was being pointed at and waved at me with a smile on her face. The secretary then walked into the back as I walked away towards the table. Why would she take care of the medical bill? It’s not her pokemon. Oh well. Don’t worry about besides, it saves me money I guess. I told myself as I made my way to the table and sat.

“So what’s your name?” I asked. “Brittany.” She said smiling at me, “And yours?”

“My name is Jo.” I said.

“Jo, I like that name.” she said. “So Jo, how old are you?” she asked. “I’m 16.” I told her. “Cool! So am I!” she happily said. “So where do you plan to start off at?” she asked.

“What do you mean?” I replied. “What town are you going to go for your first badge?” she said.

“Oh you must be mistaken girl. I’m not a trainer.” I said laughing.

“Huh? But you were filling out a Trainer Registration Form weren’t you?” she asked with a confused expression.

“No... that was a medical form wasn’t it? Besides if you want to be a trainer you have to sign up at city hall in downtown.” I said.

“Yeah city hall’s in every city do that, but some Pokemon Centers have Trainer Registrations as well. Just like this one.” She said pointing downwards. My eyes then widened with shock.

"If this is true then that means that that lady is right now, at this moment she is…” I thought to myself. “Oh sh*t!” I shouted as I got up from my seat quickly and started running to the front desk. I saw the secretary coming out from the back as I approached the desk.

“Oh, I just finished registering you just now.” She said with a smile. My face grew with fear as I became speechless with the secretary’s actions. Oh my God! I said to myself in my head. Word is now going to get out. I am now officially f*cked.


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I hope it was ok. Again, this chapter I edited myself. I haven't been able to get in contact with Mindripper so I did the best editing I could. I hope you enjoyed it. Please tell me if my editing was alright.
 
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Ace Kenshader

Dreaming sexy
sweet, first to reply to this chapter.

Anyway, that is a great chapter. And I feel really sorry for Jo, now if words really get out, he might be on the run and end up in deep sh*i.

What's worse is what will happen if Brittany finds out Jo is part of an anti-pokemon gang.
 
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