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CHeSHiRe-CaT

A Curious Breed
This story is Rated R for Violence, Gore, Blood, Insanity, Language, and Drug Reference (huzzah for the Caterpillar's hookah). It is based largely off of American McGee's Alice, a video game created in autumn of 2001, depicting Lewis Carroll's Alice's Adventures in Wonderland and Through the Looking-Glass in a sequel that drives sanity to its limits. Many thanks to Scrap for inspiration.

~*Voted Best Chaptered Horror Fiction in the Winter Awards 2005*~
Thank you to those who nominated and voted!


Table of Contents
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Prologue: Taking Tea in Dreamland
Chapter I: Down the Rabbit-Hole
Chapter II: Village of the Doomed
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Gather all who nestle near
Willing eye and willing ear
Settle for the tale to hear

Wonderland is torn apart
Darkness spreads throughout its heart
Darkened dreams begin to start

Down the rabbit-hole we go
Falling down to lands below
Through the lake of black we row

Sanity is shattered so
Alice hears the Rabbit's woe
Down the rabbit-hole we go

Gather all who nestle near
Willing eye and willing ear
Settle for the tale to hear


. . ..::prologue: Taking Tea in Dreamland::.. . .

It was a frosty, cold evening in the month of December. Soft patches of snow littered the green grass that had been there for most of the seasons. White tufts of the stuff floated from the skies above, landing on the country roofs of the small village near Oxford. The river that ran along the university was frozen solid, and not many were out during the daytimes of winter. Few had anything to keep themselves preoccupied with, and all carriage services had been closed until the end of the onslaught of snow. Indeed, one would feel very tiresome and bored of the place. However, there was one single person that was actually enjoying themselves as the latter part of the night began to set in. In fact, she was a little girl living in a house on the campus of Christ Church. Her name was Alice Pleasance Liddell.

The tiny, but comfortable cabin the Liddells owned was very close to the school, for Alice’s father, Mr. Liddell, was a minister and a professor at the college, teaching young and bright faces enrolled there every year. Another minister of the university, named Charles Dodgson, or as Alice liked to call him, Mr. Carroll, was a family favorite of theirs for a very long time. During the summer holidays, the Liddells could be seen rowing boats down the river, and sitting next to the stream beds with Mr. Carroll, picnicking and telling grand tales of places underground, and fantastic worlds beyond your wildest imagination. In fact, Alice had visited a place such as this with the assistance of Mr. Carroll.

This marvelous world underground was full of talking animals. One that Alice had been particularly fond of was a creature known as the White Rabbit, who was always so punctual, yet kind and understanding at the same time (though his regards lie in his pocket watch). Another that she had discovered in the kitchen of an ugly Duchess and her pepper-cured home was the Cheshire-Cat, a cunning feline with mass amounts of ginger hair and a colossal grin that would put anyone to shame. The large, talking cat could be very whimsical, puzzling, curious, and terribly evasive (he had a rather unembellished tendency to vanish into thin air). Along her trips to this brilliant place underground, she had collected many companions (though mad as they all claimed to be), and ventured into places with mass amounts of mushrooms, mazes, and forests galore. Alice loved the land of her childish splendor, madness, and mystifying amazement.

Alice loved Wonderland.

However, her realm of looking-glasses, tea parties, and magical enchantment was not without a downfall. In the time she had ventured to Wonderland, Alice met someone who was among the most arbitrary and savage people she had ever encountered. The dreadful woman was always ordering her guards (a pack of cards) to run around wildly, doing her dastardly bidding while she sat upon her conceited throne, yelling and commanding to everyone who served under her rule. Those who oppressed her confusing and horribly unforgiving laws were strictly executed to lose their heads. All would whisper of her disgusting and foul rule over Wonderland like a quiet plague, but if word ever traced back to her, it was most certain she would have every single inhabitant’s head.

Alice loathed the Red Queen.

But now, as she lied down in her soft, downy quilts in her bedroom, nothing could disturb her most wonderful dreams; not even the Queen of Hearts. The little girl’s sleek, golden brown billowed over the pillows in a lazy sleep, with her arms tucked underneath the warm blanket as a balmy fire spat and crackled in the fireplace a few feet away. She wore her day clothes beneath the covers: a charming blue dress, undergarments, and a white apron given to her by her mother. Directly beside her, she held an old rabbit doll with button eyes, a nose, and a stitched mouth.

It had been her older sister’s doll as a child, and from the moment she inherited it, she would do nothing but keep it with her at all times. Dinah, Alice’s black cat, was resting against the girl’s ribcage, a pretty blue ribbon wrapped around her neck. The smell of delicious flowers heated by the temperature of the room filled Alice’s subconscious senses with bliss, roses resting in a vase adjacent to her bed on the top of a book shelf. Chess pieces from playing a round with her father were scattered about the floor, cold and dead as statues staring on for eternity as the thick, smoky air filled the room. Also upon the book shelf was a kerosene lamp that was dimmed so perfectly that one could have such magical dreams under the conditions. Portraits and photographs of the Liddells were strewn on the ledges, along with a ticking clock that faced the fireplace with envy.

And this is all that Alice was doing. Sleeping away with peaceful cheer, and with a book, a gift from Charles Dodgson to Alice; an illustrated tale with the entire story of Alice’s first visit to Wonderland, open very close to where she slept. It was a magical book. Alice knew it was, for through this mysterious manuscript, she was able to visit her old friends in her sleep. At the very moment she was dozing off peacefully, and was transported to another world… She was there with an odd little man who appeared to be smiling fondly to himself as he sat at a table, accompanied with guests, closing his eyes with content as he raised a cup of tea with his short hand, buck teeth extruding from his upper lip. Situated on his matted head was a top hat, accompanied by a ticket marked “In this Style: 10/6” tucked into the brim.

Adorned with a polka-dotted bowtie, a flailing waistcoat, and checkered trousers, the little man seemed to be enjoying himself, while a hare dressed in a similar outfit (excluding the hat) strung with wheat around his long ears happily slurped at his own cup. Between the two characters was a rather large and bashful mouse, which also seemed to be drifting off to sleep. Directly down the long table was a little girl of about seven years leaning back in a leather comfort chair. Dressed in her grand blue dress and apron with flowing hair was the smiling Alice.

Upon the table, there was set many dishes, some of which were broken, and an endless supply of tea cups. The Dormouse popped its head out of the sugar bowl every now and then to glance upon their activities, but would faint back into an overpowering hibernation. The Hatter, with his oversized top hat and abnormally large nose would pass about the kettle to Alice, and then to the March Hare, whose ears were as erect as a happy chap celebrating tea parties for no particular reason. They sang and passed the tea around wonderfully, sharing the goodness of company, while Dinah the cat was beginning to get uncomfortable in her bed with Alice.

The March Hare suddenly exclaimed, “My, my, my, we shan’t go on without the Dormouse!” The Hare would then bound over to the other side of the table, knock on the porcelain kettle, and shout, “WAKE UP, DORMY! It’s time for the tea party!” This would be replied to by the rodent inside yawning disdainfully as it popped its little head from underneath the lid of the pot. Meanwhile, Dinah tried to sleep on the pillow across from Alice. She clawed and scratched all she wanted, but still, she was rather edgy and did not feel comfy enough.

“You know,” Alice would suggest, “I would very much like to talk about something rather than all this posh and tea. After all, it is our Un-Birthday today!” At this, the Hatter and the Hare would gasp with excitement, and shriek, “And indeed it is!” They began chanting the Un-Birthday song frequently over and over again, whilst the rabbit kept saying, as though he did not realize he was repeating himself, “You only get three hundred and sixty-four of these in a year, after all!” Dancing and drinking, the Hatter would spray a flurry of riddles, including, “I have another! Why is a raven…like a writing desk?” And of course, he and everyone else there did not know the answer.

Dinah was growing very antsy, and her four legs were stinging with aches. The cat became bored of Alice’s country on the bed, and decided to venture to new lands. While the little girl slept and had glorious tea parties with her friends, Dinah climbed up onto the book shelf next to the frame, landing next to a line of study tomes and a few delightful stories that Mr. Carroll had given the young girl. One included was a poem book, which wove the story of the Jabberwocky. However, you had to hold it up to a mirror, for the letters were backwards. In Looking-Glass Land, you could see everything backwards frontward, and everything frontward backward.

The three friends had jumped onto the long table near the Hatter’s house, pounding their feet all over the boards, tossing their glasses and flinging liquid everywhere, including on the poor Dormouse, who had actually come out to take some tea with them. Dinah, outside of Alice’s dreamland, dug her long nails into the wood of the book shelf. The scent of the roses from the steamy vase rattled the cat’s senses, making her feel surreal with drowsy placate. The feline felt a great comfort in this spot above ground. Getting prepared to lie down and wait for the morning sun to rise, the cat’s spine tingled with a stretching sensation, pushing back Dinah’s rear in response to the nerves. She let out a long, toothy yawn, before she bent over.

The moment her tail and hindquarters touched the fragile stack of books compiled on the shelf, the one nearest to her thick, black fur shook on impact. Dinah whipped her head around, glaring at the book behind her with slit pupils. The tome began to stagger for a moment, rocking in either direction. It would then tilt toward Dinah, back to the other row of books, and back toward her once more, making the cat’s heart tense with fear. In one last moment, the feline watched as the book swayed near the center. It stopped, in the very climax of the pendulum, and then, with a fright that writhed of ugly circumstances blooming in an aura of darkness, the book tilted toward its siblings.

With the mighty force of gravity, the leather-bound book slammed against its counterpart, pages within every piece of literature flittering. Dinah’s eyes widened with overtaking shock, fused to her spot by atrophy whilst little Alice slept. The next book slammed into the next such as a cruel domino pattern would, words from the pages screeching with pain. It was then that the last book had reached not another piece of prose, but a different object…the vile, grueling object that, by horrifying chain reactions, would be just another link in the grotesque plot of a wandering evil.

It was the kerosene lamp.

“The Jabberwocky,” boasting a devilish scarlet from its cover, was knocked viciously against the glass container with the oil inside, rapping it with a tinkling sound, and causing the thick fluid inside to waver. Dinah watched in awestruck anxiety as the lamp twirled from the impact, the book sending itself soaring to the musky rug on the floor below. The cat stared at the glass container as it swung ‘round and ‘round, swirling the liquid inside like a taunting mixture of death tonic. The gas flame on the inside had burnt out from the mere wind of its vigorous spinning. Then, as if it were giving into the force that had pushed it, the bottle swerved and veered off to one side, favoring the direction with distasteful desire.

Dinah loomed as she watched the bottle toss itself through the air, falling and tumbling past the humid heat of the room. With a disturbing explosion, the transparent glass shattered, shooting sharp pieces of the stuff in every direction, a screech of dark surprise burling from Dinah’s throat. The glass was everywhere all around the floor, broken and jagged with deadly satisfaction, and Dinah instinctively leapt away from the book shelf, as though it were taboo. The cat then sat upon Alice’s bed, watching the blown-apart lamp, as if it was going to resurrect itself and fling back up onto the book shelf. But that never happened. Instead, the seeping kerosene was free to roam the wood of the floor, drifting to where it pleased. Dinah glared as the oozing chemical trailed…moving toward the fireplace with inclining speed.

As little Alice heard not a speck of what had been going on, she still interacted with her glamorous friends of mischief and delight. The Hatter, the Hare, and the Dormouse joined hands and began to sing “Twinkle, Twinkle Little Bat,” swaying drunkenly and gaily with their teacups sloshing from side-to-side. Alice sat at one of the tables, watching the insane short man, the overgrown rabbit, and the shy rodent kicking their feet and gnashing their teeth with the lyrics. She clapped lovingly, encouraging for an encore. The rich, green trees of Wonderland peered above them, letting in streams of sunlight from gaps between branches and leaves.

The trio was compelled to perform the un-birthday song for the umpteenth time, and the Hatter started roll the first words of the song on his tongue, when his throat suddenly croaked. His eyes went blank, and his mouth fell ajar with his two buck teeth hanging from his upper jaw. The March Hare laughed uncontrollably, slapping the Hatter on the back with a modest nudge, while the little man with the large hat did not move a muscle.

“AHA! That was a GLORIOUS sort of expression, old chap!” the Hare declared, smashing his teacup against the Hatter’s mug held stiffly in his white hands.

“Why, I do believe something is wrong with him!” Alice shouted from the chair, rising and jumping onto the table. “Did you swallow a nasty fly in your tea?”

The Hatter remained frozen and stiff with the same, overwhelmingly startled face. His lower lip trembled, his front teeth pointing downward in a horrible frown. His large, cow eyes turned to Alice, turning his neck with a creak. The Dormouse was already frightened, and leapt its head back into the tea kettle it had once been hiding in before. The Hare stepped forward as the girl placed a soft hand on the Hatter’s shoulder.

“Hatter…are…you all righ—?”

Before she could finish her sentence, the man unexpectedly seized her hand that was placed on his shoulder. Alice let out a sharp cry as the Hatter grabbed and painfully squeezed it, his face mumbling, jittering, and wobbling uncontrollably as he drew his head nearer to her. The Hare let out a dark gasp, and they realized it had not just been a fly. They stared down at the little man’s body, and saw a most despicable and wicked transformation taking place before their very eyes.

The Hatter squirmed with seizures of mutation, and Alice watched as the pale hand on her wrist suddenly became a large, white-gloved fist tightening on her veins every second. The little girl moaned with pain, and started to cry as she still watched her friend. His coat was flailing about as a piranha would at the smell of fresh blood, streaming everywhere before them. Before they knew it, his coat was becoming less of a coat. The fibers had gone thick, crusty, and white, strung in layers clipped tightly by chains and belts. It appeared to be a straightjacket that dug its thrusting grip into his skin. And oh, his skin…oh, his poor, miserable soul…

Alice witnessed in horror as the Hatter’s skin tone withered rapidly, starting to rot with decrepit decay, shriveling into a color of sour green. The March Hare ran up to the girl’s side, and with his paws, tugged away the Hatter’s grip from the dismal child. Still, his contractions continued as his skin sagged with wrinkles, with the only tight features of his body being the flesh that was strung to his face, clamped to his skull with a revolting snap. His eyes were livid and fluttering, his pupils beads of black, wobbling, but turning to face the frightened girl and the rabbit. His mouth continued to tremble as shivers of metal jut from nowhere into his insides, the sound of ticking clocks pouring into his soul.

Alice was distracted from this most sickening twist of fate by the scenery around them. The table they were standing upon began to stretch, becoming wider and farther away than it was. A sickening cracking noise echoed along the table as the boards extended. But the trees were no longer there. Instead, there was darkness. And fire. Fire billowed from the depths of the nothingness, flaring up in shooting balls of Hell, lacerating the edges of the table with flame. The characters’ faces were stung in the heat and golden-red light that surrounded them, the smell of smoke twitching their noses. They looked back to the Hatter, and watched him fall to his knees, though he still peered into Alice’s facial features.

“This…this isn’t right!” the Hare shouted. “By GOD, WHAT IS GOING ON?”

The Dormouse lifted its head from the tea kettle, staring with a non-stop shake that wriggled its intestines to mush. It glanced upon the March Hare with glazed, sobbing eyes.

“NO TIME! YOU MUST SAVE ALICE!” it shrieked, watching the onslaught of terror continue, then glancing at the terrified little girl.

“But…HOW?” the March Hare screamed, he himself falling to the ground at his knees, collapsing with undeniable fear. “Wha…WHAT IS THIS? INSANITY…DARKNESS…the screaming…THE FIRE!”

Alice’s face began to stream with tears as the blaze erupting beneath the darkness was beginning to fall upon the gargantuan table. It was swallowing them whole… But as though he were a martyr, the Hatter grabbed Alice by her arms pressed at her side brutally. It made the girl scream even louder as she wailed and cried. The grotesqueness of his corpse-like face was too much to bear as the man glared into her eyes. But…his lips were moving, just as quickly as the fire. He was trying to say something.

“WAKE UP, ALICE,” he finally choked in a voice that was not his own. “WAKE UP.”

The girl bolted upright in her sleep, and found that Dinah was curled at the foot of her bed, spitting and hissing without end as the feline’s ribbon once upon its neck was now being reduced to a pile of ash. Immediately, she noticed that the heat in her dream was still present, and the minute she opened her eyes to the inferno of chaos swarming her bedroom with embers and flame. Her fairy-tale had become nightmare. Alice screamed as she saw the fireplace had completely eroded away from the hot, flaming element, with the metal keeping it in place charred and blackened by its fiery grip. When Dinah realized her girl was awake, the cat slinked quickly to Alice’s side, stepping on the story book that had been left out and leaving footprints of charcoal on the pages. The poor, frightened girl scooped up the cat, and snatched the book, and most importantly, her rabbit doll.

Alice jumped off of her bed, her feet instantly meeting the shattered glass on the floor, along with the extreme warmth that resonated from the hearth. The razor-sharp pieces stabbed the soles of her feet, wrenching screams of pain and curses as blood seeped from wounds. It was much worse, as Alice found, than stepping on jagged rock which she had so done before, but she felt that though horrible it was, she could endure it for anything. Holding the three most cherished and loved possessions to her, the girl stepped away from the splintery, bloody mess on the floor, watching the trails of fire burning all along the walls. The scarlet liquid dripped, and she could feel her feet becoming numb. She had to move…

The second she felt the tingling sensation, a most startling discovery made her glance down to the ground where the glass had broken. She did not realize it, but it had been the kerosene lamp she had trusted to give light to scare away the sorts of nightmares she feared that had betrayed her. Now, she saw the oil had leaked underneath her own door, allowing the tongue of Satan to lap it up with a licking distortion of sinister fire, as though it were scotch to satisfy the belly of the wretched beast itself. Among the shattered shards, she leaned down, ignoring the trail of the bleeding oil, to a picture. It was a black and white photograph of herself, sitting between her mother and father, holding her rabbit doll and smiling brightly. The flames reflected against the kind faces of her parents, and she instantly realized she should not have been thinking only of herself.

Alice, carrying Dinah, the doll, and the book ran over to her door. She clasped her trembling hands to it, sobbing as she felt it warm with the acetic heat of a carnivorous blaze.

“MOM? DAD?” she screamed, laying her head against the wood, bleating much like an innocent lamb about to be slaughtered by a lone wolf. For a moment, no answer returned. Then, out of the blue and hope, she heard the female voice of her own mother, as if it were a faint whisper.

“Alice!” it cried, therein followed by a series of woops and coughs. Alice waited for another reply, but none came.

“MUM…FATHER?” she cried this time.

“BY GOD,” the voice of her father shouted, her mother still hacking in the crackle of the snaking fire, “GET OUT, ALICE!”

It was then that this warning was followed by a rumble from the book in her hands. Alice stared down into her arms, with Dinah clutching to her apron and the doll placed in one of her arms, she glanced to her hand, and to the book. The pages flapped, as though it were speaking. A voice reverberated from within, and she recognized it as that of a murderous cry from the March Hare and the Dormouse combined in one tainted harmony.

“SAVE YOURSELF, ALICE!”

“GET OUT OF THE HOUSE!” her father shouted. The little girl could hear the burly man heaving himself around in their bedroom upstairs, and it seemed he was trying to break down the door. But it was no use; the knob had melted away, welded in a thick putty against the lock. Alice banged her hands on the wood of the door, crying and screaming, sobbing with the rest of the moisture provided by her tear ducts. But up to this point, they had run dry from witnessing the blackened mutation of one of her greatest friends, and mourning for her parents. There was…a glimmer of hope they would survive. Yes, that was it. They would all be able to escape.

Alice obeyed her father’s wishes and glanced around the room, looking for an exit. She knew that her door was not safe to get outside from, for she would certainly fall victim to the holocaust of the smoke and the fire. Glancing around her room, she noticed many alphabet blocks littering the floor, blackened from the flames. Also were jacks, balls, and a few of her most juvenile toys that she had ever owned. Then she came upon her window across from her bed, allowing the cold, blue winter night to shine from outside. Alice knew she had to get there, but her curtains were swinging, draped in embers that swallowed the cloth whole. It was her only chance of survival…Alice glanced around the room again, and in desperation, found the rose vase sitting on her shelf, where a stack of books was lying, drenched with ashes and soot.

She had to step once more through the glass, sending chills into her bones from the points of her toes up, but managed to get her clutches on the pottery. Quickly, she bolted to the window, waiting for the right moment, placing the doll and book in her apron pockets while holding Dinah in one hand. She tossed the thin, ceramic pot, and it flung out a vast amount of warm water and red petals that dampened the flames a bit. It was not perfect, but it would certainly do. Trying to hold her breath so the smoke would not invade her lungs, Alice reached her slender hands onto the slide of the window. The moment she touched the wood, the window glass dropped out entirely, falling just about two feet below onto the snow, cracking a little. Alice then placed her red-soaked feet onto the sill, and with a great jump so she avoided the window, the girl heaved herself out of the house, and crunched into the cold, bitter snow outside.

The cutting breeze whipped through her greased, black hair, and she felt the moonlight on her backside. Dinah flew from her arms the moment of landing, spitting and weakened, crumpling to a heap of a tired cat. Alice gazed upon her house, illuminated by the starry sky, while showers of sparks and glass rained from the inside. Fire burst from the windows, biting and chomping on everything in its path. It was then that Alice saw the strong silhouette of her father, standing alongside his wife as they backed away from an oncoming army of lapping flames.

“AH! GODDAMN IT!” she heard her father yell through the open window.

Then, in a gust of blooming, sick horror, the blaze enveloped the two figures, burning and soaking their tissue with singing pain. A blood-curdling scream of a woman echoed from the window, booming from the entire house like a banshee screaming a doleful song of instant terror.

This was the last noise Alice heard that most unfortunate night, as her sopping, wet green eyes stared in adrenaline-pumped alarm at the maleficent deed that had ripped and torn her dreams apart into what was left: a nightmare. A nightmare she would never be able to escape. She pulled out her rabbit doll from her apron pocket, sobbing and choking into its warm, soft limbs, not being able to think straight. As she clutched the doll out of madness, she completely lost her sanity and hope, wailing away until the memory slipped by and slid behind her dark, twisted, and sickened eyes, disappearing for what seemed all eternity.
 
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Bay

YEAHHHHHHH
Very good Ches! I'm hooked on that story already! I'm not the biggest horror buff but this caught my attention! I never read ALICE the first time it came out (that time I wasn't a member here) but I guess you put this back to have both old readers to enjoy it once again and new readers to experience this story.

Anyways, here are some highlights.

The Hatter squirmed with seizures of mutation, and Alice watched as the pale hand on her wrist suddenly became a large, white-gloved fist tightening on her veins every second. The little girl moaned with pain, and started to cry as she still watched her friend. His coat was flailing about as a piranha would at the smell of fresh blood, streaming everywhere before them. Before they knew it, his coat was becoming less of a coat. The fibers had gone thick, crusty, and white, strung in layers clipped tightly by chains and belts. It appeared to be a straightjacket that dug its thrusting grip into his skin. And oh, his skin…oh, his poor, miserable soul…

Yeah, I felt sad for the rabbit's skin being mutated also.

Alice witnessed in horror as the Hatter’s skin tone withered rapidly, starting to rot with decrepit decay, shriveling into a color of sour green. The March Hare ran up to the girl’s side, and with his paws, tugged away the Hatter’s grip from the dismal child. Still, his contractions continued as his skin sagged with wrinkles, with the only tight features of his body being the flesh that was strung to his face, clamped to his skull with a revolting snap. His eyes were livid and fluttering, his pupils beads of black, wobbling, but turning to face the frightened girl and the rabbit. His mouth continued to tremble as shivers of metal jut from nowhere into his insides, the sound of ticking clocks pouring into his soul
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Really liked how you described the mutations of the rabit and the Hatter.


It was then that this warning was followed by a rumble from the book in her hands. Alice stared down into her arms, with Dinah clutching to her apron and the doll placed in one of her arms, she glanced to her hand, and to the book. The pages flapped, as though it were speaking. A voice reverberated from within, and she recognized it as that of a murderous cry from the March Hare and the Dormouse combined in one tainted harmony.

“SAVE YOURSELF, ALICE!”

That part scares me out of my wits!

Anyways, I really liked how you flow Alice's dream and the cat messing with the books really well. Also, like how you put after the light has been out Alice started to have nightmares. Lucky right now we still have nightlights!

Well, that is all I have to say. Good night and I can't wait for the first chapter!
 
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Literate

black cat, black cat
*clap, clap, clap* That was so good! ^_^ What should I say? It was great! ^_^

Though it was pretty long... But no matter. It's still good. ^_^

As she clutched the doll out of madness, she completely lost her sanity and hope, wailing away until the memory slipped by and slid behind her dark, twisted, and sickened eyes, disappearing for what seemed all eternity.
Ah, so she goes insane. Such a beautiful way to put it.

And the playing with the books and the tea party just seems to anticipates somethin bad. It was a very nice effect. ^_^

Well, this is very entertaining. ^_^ I'll come back for later chapters.

~PEACE~
 

Sike Saner

Peace to the Mountain
Fwee, it's back! Frell, I love this story. ^^

This is as richly and compellingly written as all else you've done (maybe even moreso), and I liked it the moment I first started reading it.

The scent of the roses from the steamy vase rattled the cat’s senses, making her feel surreal with drowsy placate.

There’s something I like very much about that sentence. Makes me think of Deadsy lyrics.

The Hatter squirmed with seizures of mutation, and Alice watched as the pale hand on her wrist suddenly became a large, white-gloved fist tightening on her veins every second. The little girl moaned with pain, and started to cry as she still watched her friend. His coat was flailing about as a piranha would at the smell of fresh blood, streaming everywhere before them. Before they knew it, his coat was becoming less of a coat. The fibers had gone thick, crusty, and white, strung in layers clipped tightly by chains and belts. It appeared to be a straightjacket that dug its thrusting grip into his skin. And oh, his skin…oh, his poor, miserable soul…

Alice witnessed in horror as the Hatter’s skin tone withered rapidly, starting to rot with decrepit decay, shriveling into a color of sour green. The March Hare ran up to the girl’s side, and with his paws, tugged away the Hatter’s grip from the dismal child. Still, his contractions continued as his skin sagged with wrinkles, with the only tight features of his body being the flesh that was strung to his face, clamped to his skull with a revolting snap. His eyes were livid and fluttering, his pupils beads of black, wobbling, but turning to face the frightened girl and the rabbit. His mouth continued to tremble as shivers of metal jut from nowhere into his insides, the sound of ticking clocks pouring into his soul.

THAT IS JUST AWESOME. And you know it. ^^ I especially like that bolded line.

Then she came upon her window across from her bed, allowing the cold, blue winter night to shine from outside.

“Cold, blue, winter night”. I like that. ^^


I'm very fond of this story; it's just lovely as hell. Glad to see it back. ^^
 

CHeSHiRe-CaT

A Curious Breed
Thanks all ^^ There was a bit of editing that had to be done to that specific chapter. However, the following chapter was left alone, simply because it's my favorite and it gets what I want across the reader.

. . ..::Chapter I: Down the Rabbit-Hole::.. . .

Rutledge Asylum. Doris Bogtrotter had been working in the facility for many a year, and she did not know why she continued to nurse the patients. The asylum was fenced with tall, iron gates that were only opened to visitors who had severe mental illnesses. In fact, it was nearly the only place where the society of London could cage up the nutcases and the insane, for no other hospital within a large radius would admit patients with the cases of raving lunacy. Doris knew this, for she had been working there since three years after the dark, brick building was laid down on its foundation, and it was the sad truth. Rutledge was merely a warehouse full of disturbing, frightening, and almost murderous characters that she dared to feed, water, and care for day after day, eventually making home in an apartment next to the manager’s suite in the upper half of the building.

Late at night, Doris would be kept up, for even the rattling chatter and the maddening laughter echoed from downstairs, funneling up the staircases to her door. Those who did not understand the mindless cackles would probably smash pillows against their tense, pounding ears, but not Ms. Bogtrotter. She knew all of the patients there as though they were family. Well, certainly not family in the aspects of state of mind (for the majority had no conscience), but she had learned the stories behind what had driven them to a catatonic state, and other sorts of things. In fact, some had come down to her level to speak with her, and it was a miracle, for Doris was the only nurse there they would talk to. The others did not know of their sorrows and heartaches, and knew and thought only as the London citizens believed.

For example, there was McHenry, a man who had bludgeoned his wife to death after an argument about scissors and their purposes. He was actually a very charming man, who, in spite of his horrible crime, helped other patients with daily activities. Then there was old Richardson…yes, he had been there almost as long as Doris, and was never cured. She remembered admitting him after he had assaulted a man at a factory he worked with, leaving bite tears and flesh rips in his co-worker. He lived in the chemical ward, where the most criminal people were locked and placed in straightjackets, isolated alone in the stained, padded rooms. They were all like a family to each other in a way, for everything they had in common was their undying insanity.

But it was none of these characters for whom Doris’ heart truly throbbed for. Over the past decade, Ms. Bogtrotter began to spend more time in the children’s ward of Rutledge, for soon the illness that plagued the asylum had no longer been found in adults. It was very depressing as she walked the barred halls of the children’s cells, for she would see them sobbing, running into walls, and wasting away in the filthy rooms, rotting in a bacterial waste of a prison. Many were orphans, for some had turned on their parents, and others had just plain lost it, for odd behavior was the center of the dark, creeping halls of the children’s ward. She did not know so much about them, and every day she would wonder how so many good kids could have lost their young, poor minds. And one day, to answer this question, came an angel in the form of a little girl named Alice.

Doris recalled strafing around the administrative office while she was off duty, for she had discovered that they had a new visitor to the hospital. She peered into the office windows with her white uniform on at a man in a business-like suit, straddling a little girl who clutched his arm and moaned, tearing at her own blue dress and apron with disgust. She had long, black hair that would have been rather pretty had it not been balled up in knots. The seven-year-old girl would gnash her teeth and widen her green eyes, but what the nurse took interest in was the rabbit doll she always held in her right hand. What was its history? Where had the doll come from? These nosy questions always bothered her, for she was an old woman with no life outside the asylum.

She remembered visiting the girl’s cell the very next evening, walking up beside the grimy bars as she peered past them to the young child wearing a white nightgown, staring blankly at a candle on the table in front of her that had blown out from the breeze outside rushing through the thin window. She was sitting on her bed, staring incessantly at the candle, her mouth gaping open, and in her hand, the rabbit doll prominently situated.

“Hello, my dear,” Doris had started. “Is there something you need?”

The girl had merely ignored the nurse for a second, and then, as though analyzing the question, the child turned in her sheets and looked toward the woman with those great, green eyes.

“What’s your name?” the girl had asked.

“Why, my name is Ms. Bogtrotter, but you can call me ‘Doris’ if you like, dear,” the nurse said, smiling at the girl. The child imitated the smile, and the grin on her face brought comfort and warmth to the old woman’s heart. It was an honest smirk, for she was old enough to verify a genuine smile.

“My name is Alice Liddell,” she said, “but you may call me ‘Alice’ if you like. I do remember a time when I forgot my own name… I think I was in a forest that broke memories like that, you know? And I was there with a fawn that talked. He ran away when he realized I was a human…”

“Oh, poor you!” Doris exclaimed, taking delight in the girl’s imagination…or rather, her madness. “Where was the wood you speak of?”

“In a place,” the girl replied moodily, swinging back and forth on the bed, holding the rabbit with its eerie button eyes carefully. The nurse stared at the toy for a moment, then proceeded to ask again.

“What was this place called?”

“It was called Won—”

Before she finished her sentence, the girl suddenly roared in a biting fury. Doris was startled when the girl rapidly went into convulsions, shaking her knotted, oily hair up and down with a horrified face, murmuring and screaming at the same time. She then wrapped her tiny claws around the rabbit doll’s sewn throat, and with invigorating distraught and anger, pounded it against the bed and the wall, slamming it with a terrible strength as she grunted and cried, wailing miserably. Two of the younger men working there immediately came to the cell, and opening it up, started to drag the girl off of her bed. Alice shook and violently thrashed in their strong grip, but it was no use resisting. The girl kept screaming, “MUM! DAD!” as they were taking her away from Doris’ plump figure, slamming the vault-like door shut as they took her down the hall.

“She’ll need more medicine…strong medicine,” one of the men added quietly as they drifted away.

From then on, the nurse visited Alice’s cell every day, though the girl had rights stripped from her, just like the rabbit doll she held so occasionally. They had taken it as a punishment, and it only made matters dealing with her worse. She was a very strong child, and unfortunately, not willing to cooperate with any of the workers there, except for Doris. This is why she permitted the woman to visit her without tantrums involved, for just like the others who knew the nurse, she comforted and delighted Alice. On the girl’s birthday, they would celebrate with a nice cup of tea (provided that guards watched Alice’s behavior), and talk about things civil people might. For a very strange reason, the girl’s birthday was the only day the child would ever speak personally about her past.

Still, it was a past that was mysterious to Doris. The girl mentioned worlds and lands with talking animals, mad tea parties, and decks of cards that were actually people. She even talked about a place behind the realm of a mirror, where everything was backwards of what it was supposed to be. These things puzzled Ms. Bogtrotter, and though she tried to shrink out why Alice had come to the asylum in the first place, her attempts were unsuccessful and wasted, for Alice did not talk of what had happened. Doris even went through files, but every time she would come to the alphabet of paperwork where Alice’s information was held, the guards came in and shooed her off. After all, she was only a nurse.

So for every birthday for the next nine years, Doris would pry Alice for her dark, dark secrets locked away in her mind, eager to learn of her newfound friend’s story. But through these nine years, Alice began to change from a girl into a young woman very quickly, and as her age evolved, so did her level of lunacy. She no longer took frustration upon objects inside her cell, but herself. During mealtime, they would have to watch her cut her meager slice of toast that was served with gruel, for while their heads were turned and they thought she was buttering her toast, she would turn the knife on herself and slit each of her wrists. In a flurry of spraying, stinging blood, they would rush her to the medical quadrant immediately. She would return several hours later, red-drenched bandages cuffed around her wrists, and long, thin scars stretching along her skin. The girl was much smarter now, and much more stubborn.

However, it was early morning in Rutledge, the day of Alice’s sixteenth birthday. It was dreary, for the rain seemed to pour all day, silver drops falling from the heavens, along with the superb thunder that rolled in the distance, boasting an oncoming storm. Doris came to Alice’s cell with a few teacups, a kettle, sugar, and milk, but when she arrived, she did not find Alice eagerly waiting, but sitting upon her bed. She had her arms slumped underneath her chin, rolling her eyes back and forth around the room, peering at something that would interest her. But her face was riddled with depression. Fresh tears rolled down her cheeks, and her eyeliner was smeared heavily. Doris came in with no hesitation, and to the point where they trusted each other, the nurse sat down next to Alice on the mattress.

“Are…you all right, Miss Liddell?” Doris asked her.

“No,” Alice whimpered, her lips moving slowly.

“What’s wrong, Alice?”

“My parents are…gone…” she said, in a half-whisper. This answer finally got through to Ms. Bogtrotter, who was staring in amazement at the teenaged girl. Was this perhaps the solution to why the little girl had been locked up? No… There was something more to it; Doris could see it in the way the young woman stared away blankly, moving her eyes to the mirror that sat across from her bed.

“What else is wrong, Alice?” the old woman ventured. For a moment, she did not reply, but continued to stare at the reflection of herself in the stingy mirror.

“Something’s…broken…” she whispered again, her voice airy and weak. This response puzzled the nurse greatly, and she was confounded as to what to say next. Then, another question came to her mind. It was simple, but with the girl, nothing was simple. Doris was afraid what she would say.

“…what’s broken, Alice?” Ms. Bogtrotter pursued. The thunder rolled outside, and a small flash of lightning illuminated the window for a moment, shearing a stripe of light against Alice’s wet, green eyes. The old nurse watched then as the girl slowly turned away from the mirror, their eyes meeting one another. Seeing her terrified face, it sent a chill of fright up the woman’s spine, and she felt uncomfortable. But…she opened her mouth.

“…I am,” she muttered, staring into Doris’ eyes.

Quite abruptly, a deafening roar of the storm catapulted itself in the air outside, shattering a bang of heavy rain into a noise that startled the two women. Then, they heard glass cracking unnervingly, and whipping their heads around, they immediately froze to the sight of the mirror on the wall. Not a second before they glanced at it in horror, a strike of enigmatic force punched the looking-glass, and the reflective surface splintered into a hundred different pieces, shards of it plummeting to the dusty ground with a demoralizing tinkle of impact. Alice stared for a moment, and then sobbed at this, her eyes still wide with dread and fear. Doris was extremely startled by it, and she nearly stood up, but did not do so…for she cared too much about Alice, and would never stand and run away from the girl.

In a moment of pure anxiety and foreboding trepidation, the two women turned to each other. Alice then leaned forward and buried her face into Doris’ shoulder, her black hair heaving up and down with each loud weep she took. The old nurse placed her arms around the girl, and pulled her closer to her body. Doris began to tear up as well, and a few droplets rolled from her cheeks onto Alice’s discolored nightgown. She now felt the dreadful terror that lingered inside the girl, and knew her dark secret she had kept for so long. Her parents were dead…she was broken…just like the shattered looking-glass…

For what seemed like hours, they were suspended there in the asylum chamber, embracing each other in a mournful hold, and it seemed as though no other sound was made outside the place other than Alice’s wailing. It was then that the oafish guards approached and saw Doris holding the poor girl. They heaved their burly shoulders into the mess and tore the nurse away from Alice, making the patient shriek with envious shock and distress, screaming to have the old woman stay. It broke Doris’ heart to see Alice’s face behind the bars as she was forced away from the cell, bone-chillingly unhappy and distraught beyond comprehension.

After they got to the administrative office, Doris blew up at the two nincompoops that had taken her away. They all quarreled about policy of the asylum, and the two men could not understand why she would hug such a terribly mad person. The danger was overwhelming that something could have happened to Doris, but they did not know of Alice and their trust for each other. Doris’ stomach jerked with adrenaline as her fury built, and she slammed heavy arguments against them. It was that moment that the head of the asylum, Walter Red, walked through the door and saw Doris livid and shouting at the two men. It was then that the men began to clarify what had happened, which made Walter’s blood run cold. He made Doris confirm the facts about her “episode” with Alice, and to his dismay, was disappointed to hear the truth and her babbling explanation.

He gave Doris her notice of leave.

It was strictly against the safety conduct of the facility to be involved with a patient, but Doris could not help it. Some sort of binding force had pulled her to Alice, and to her world of troubles, tea, and shadowy crypts. The skeletons were out of the closet now, but at a horrible price, she found, as the nurse began to pack her things that night. As she collected her belongings in the apartment, she cried quietly to herself, and cursed the damned men for taking her away from Alice. She had no one to love, and no one would love her back. A world without this sort of feeling can throw you into a vicious land of unwanted pain and suffering, plunging you beneath black water as someone drowns your head downward above the surface. What had been the force that had drawn Doris to Alice?

It was the rabbit doll.

It was the rabbit doll that had brought them together. She remembered the first time she was kicking and screaming, and from the time she arrived and the time she had her first tantrum, the doll had been with her always. Always there it had been, watching, silent with its large, button eyes sewn into their respective sockets. Ever since this time, the doll had been confiscated and torn away from Alice, just as Doris had been. She loved the doll. Doris knew that Alice loved her, and perhaps looked upon her as a mother figure, for it was she that visited the girl, and it was she who had always been there. Now that she would be gone, Alice would have nothing. But she did have something to begin with.

She had the doll.

So that very same night, as Doris Bogtrotter was heaving boxes into her awaiting carriage outside the asylum in the pouring drizzle, she had snuck into the storage room, where a hundred or so objects were held, many being belongings that were previously owned by the patients. Doris had gotten in with a key she stole from the registration office, and wandering the aisles and shelves of miscellaneous toys, amulets, jewelry, and all sorts of heirlooms, she made her way to the alphabetical section marked “L.” Soon, she came upon dozens of more items, and using her hands, dug through the piles of poorly organized belongings. Her fingers soon met a wooly, round object with limbs. Pulling the object out of the drapes of junk, she smiled weakly as the head of a rabbit doll emerged, its long ears hanging and its button eyes staring.

Ms. Bogtrotter then took a route out of the asylum that was not ordinary. She went straight through the children’s ward, the maniacal cackling of the insane kids resonating all around her. Swaying her legs back and forth as she attempted to hurry without notice, she drifted through the hall while glazed eyes stared at the great, heavy cases she was holding in her hands. She was no longer wearing the malignant uniform of a sterile white, but a fine dress she had not worn for years, since before she began work at the mental institution. The strangeness of its autumn hue caught the interest of the children, and they cooed as she passed them, strutting carefully toward Alice’s cell.

Finally, she reached the barred chamber, and there lying upon the dirty sheets of the mattress was the girl. She had a variety of covers pulled up to her chest, while her arms were outstretched from the blankets, showing the bloody bandages dangling from her wrists. Doris gazed past the bars at her face, for her eyes were wide open, staring at the ceiling without end as the dreary tempest outside thundered and boomed. The nurse bit her lip, and soon, realized that Alice was not paying attention to her at all. She did not blink or move a muscle as she stared up at the ceiling. She was alive, but seemed to be lost in a trance that atrophied her body.

Quietly, Doris unlocked the door to the cell, and walked in with the two heavy cases in hand. Still, the girl did not look up as the former nurse stepped upon the broken portions of the mirror, which had not been cleaned up yet. Doris then bent down over the cases in a clean spot on the floor, Alice continuing to stare at the ceiling with a hypnotic stare.

She opened one of the boxes to a compilation of clothing she had packed. There, clumped on the folded clothing was the doll, still empty-eyed as it had always been. Doris reached for it and lifted it from its hideaway, holding it and gazing at its soft, vacant face. Then with a large sigh, the old woman approached the girl’s bedside, strapping the doll to her side. Still, even as Doris loomed over Alice, the girl did not react a single bit. It was a shame, but Doris knew she should not bother her, for the girl was on her train of thought, and she did not want to get off.

Gently, the woman placed the doll into one of Alice’s outstretched arms, the limb twitching as it touched the toy companion. The girl resumed to staring at the dripping ceiling, and Doris smiled feebly, a few tears coming to her eyes. The old woman leaned over and kissed the girl on her forehead, still with no response, but lifted away as the woman began to well up. She did not want to leave the girl alone to rot in this living hell forever. But it was all up to Alice now. There was nothing more Doris could do for her, other than whisper a “happy birthday” as she tiptoed away from the cell, walking to the doorway to the hall, and to the exit.

For a moment, Doris stood there in the doorway, stationary with a chill that made her insides crawl. The lightning crackled outside, and the patter of rain made her turn around to the girl for the last time, holding her cases solidly.

“Poor dear,” she said to herself. “After all these years… Maybe that old rabbit will bring her around…”

And with that, she turned on her heels, and reluctantly left the asylum, slamming the bar doors closed with a thud, and making her way to the end of the hall to the outside world. McHenry, somewhere off in the distance, began wailing miserably at the clang of the door, and the annoyance of his voice flew throughout all the chambers, and into the girl’s. She was still lying there, participating in the activity she had been for the longest time on the bed, gazing dolefully to the barricaded sky. But she felt its presence. The warmth of the doll against her arm made her body ache with affection.

Trembling, slowly, the girl began to bring up the rabbit doll closer…ever so closer to her face. The rustle of the blankets made her cringe slightly as the rabbit was coming up to her head, lying on the pillow next to her. She felt a strange sensation of unlimited anxiety, feelings of guilt, infancy, and a quivering string of sanity drip from the doll, into her heart, making it pound difficultly. The throbbing of this new sense was growing on her, just like the thunder rattling in the distance… She did not look at the doll, but the ceiling. She was afraid…afraid to gaze into its button eyes. But no—it was not her—no, she was not afraid. It was her heart that told her not to. She had trusted her heart thus far in her life, and now, everything had crashed and burnt into a pile of ashes. She could trust it no longer, for it was arbitrary and savage. Just like the Queen she had met so long ago.

The suspense was killing her nerves as the thunder was tumbling with increasing intensity—her heart warning and shouting—her skin breaking out in perspiration. She would not be able to handle it. Betray the heart, for she had nothing to fear. She feared nothing. And with this quick decision, the girl tilted her head around, her green eyes meeting with the rabbit doll’s face. For a moment, it just lied there, its loose ears flapped over on the pillow, and its plain, black button eyes resting dreadfully straight across from hers. Then, after the girl caught a glimpse of it, she swore—NO. It bent its head over, shoving its stitched face into hers, the painfully plain weave work of its head melting into her mind as a demented voice of a demon rang out.

“SAVE US, ALICE!”

Alice gasped in utter dismay, when suddenly, her soul ripped from her body as the lightning flared, and was tossed into the rabbit’s void-like eyes. She began to tumble…falling—falling ever so slowly—down…down…down… The darkness swirled around her, and she did not know if neither she was alive or dead. Then, through the black, she saw a pale light falling along with her, streaming by her eyes. Things were falling…falling with her, into the emptiness. Familiar objects…wicked objects…

A bottle twirled in slow-motion past her head, a ragged label on the musky, green glass labeled “DRINK ME,” while a pill-like item tumbled alongside of it, with the words “EAT ME” engraved into its flaky constituency. Alice continued to watch in subconscious wonder as a few small toys began to spin their way below, including letter blocks…roses…chess pieces…among other things. Memories flashed in her mind, but soon…something more feral awoke within her, as she saw a playing card flipping among the toys. It twirled from its backside to the face, and there she saw imprinted upon it, a picture of a fat, impetuous queen leering away into nothingness, holding a wand that resembled a heart, similar to the symbols marked next to the “Q” situated on each corner.

Then, a flurry of metal gears tumbled after the card, and following it was the broken, ticking pocket watch of which the iron teeth had come from, smashed into fragments that sent out a spine-tingling screech of gnashing alloy. As the gold watch passed from view, her mind somersaulted with a lurching desire to rid herself of the insanity. When would it end? When…when…?

Just before she thought she was going to sink beneath her own madness, something else was coming… Something was falling down with her… It was the rabbit doll, flying with a never-ending breeze, floating down the well of darkness. Its ears swung slowly and awkwardly…the beating of a heart reverberated from nowhere…the thunder was vanishing. The insane laughter of the children was gone. And then, the doll slammed into the end of the spotlight, a solid table of pure shaded malice breaking its fall. The heart stopped. The thunder pounded, and Alice tumbled…down the rabbit-hole once more…
 

Bay

YEAHHHHHHH
Hey Ches! Well, good work as always! (Thumbs up).

Okay, here are some of my favorite parts:

Quite abruptly, a deafening roar of the storm catapulted itself in the air outside, shattering a bang of heavy rain into a noise that startled the two women. Then, they heard glass cracking unnervingly, and whipping their heads around, they immediately froze to the sight of the mirror on the wall. Not a second before they glanced at it in horror, a strike of enigmatic force punched the looking-glass, and the reflective surface splintered into a hundred different pieces, shards of it plummeting to the dusty ground with a demoralizing tinkle of impact. Alice stared for a moment, and then sobbed at this, her eyes still wide with dread and fear. Doris was extremely startled by it, and she nearly stood up, but did not do so…for she cared too much about Alice, and would never stand and run away from the girl.

I like how you put the relationship between the woman and Alice in this one.

After they got to the administrative office, Doris blew up at the two nincompoops that had taken her away

Ha, ha, funny! Good name for those two guards.

He gave Doris her notice of leave.

Aw man! I am starting to love Doris.

A world without this sort of feeling can throw you into a vicious land of unwanted pain and suffering, plunging you beneath black water as someone drowns your head downward above the surface.

Now that sentence just rock my socks. We all need some loving from our friends and family. Without it, expect a lot of “Uh ha!” “Na naw!” from many siblings.

It was the rabbit doll.

It has to always be the rabbit doll, huh? Just kidding. I think the rabbit doll is a symbol in this story.

Yeah, good description as always! Hope the next chapter comes. Anyways, good night, and good luck.
 

Literate

black cat, black cat
*clapclapclapclapclapclapclapclap* That was good. Very very good. It was very touching. ^_^

My favorite part:
“Are…you all right, Miss Liddell?” Doris asked her.

“No,” Alice whimpered, her lips moving slowly.

“What’s wrong, Alice?”

“My parents are…gone…” she said, in a half-whisper. This answer finally got through to Ms. Bogtrotter, who was staring in amazement at the teenaged girl. Was this perhaps the solution to why the little girl had been locked up? No… There was something more to it; Doris could see it in the way the young woman stared away blankly, moving her eyes to the mirror that sat across from her bed.

“What else is wrong, Alice?” the old woman ventured. For a moment, she did not reply, but continued to stare at the reflection of herself in the stingy mirror.

“Something’s…broken…” she whispered again, her voice airy and weak. This response puzzled the nurse greatly, and she was confounded as to what to say next. Then, another question came to her mind. It was simple, but with the girl, nothing was simple. Doris was afraid what she would say.

“…what’s broken, Alice?” Ms. Bogtrotter pursued. The thunder rolled outside, and a small flash of lightning illuminated the window for a moment, shearing a stripe of light against Alice’s wet, green eyes. The old nurse watched then as the girl slowly turned away from the mirror, their eyes meeting one another. Seeing her terrified face, it sent a chill of fright up the woman’s spine, and she felt uncomfortable. But…she opened her mouth.

“…I am,” she muttered, staring into Doris’ eyes.
O-o I don't know. I just like this part. ^.^ It shows that she really is coming to. And I thought for sure that Alice was going to say. "Me."


Most entertaining part:
“What was this place called?”

“It was called Won—”

Before she finished her sentence, the girl suddenly roared in a biting fury. Doris was startled when the girl rapidly went into convulsions, shaking her knotted, oily hair up and down with a horrified face, murmuring and screaming at the same time. She then wrapped her tiny claws around the rabbit doll’s sewn throat, and with invigorating distraught and anger, pounded it against the bed and the wall, slamming it with a terrible strength as she grunted and cried, wailing miserably. Two of the younger men working there immediately came to the cell, and opening it up, started to drag the girl off of her bed. Alice shook and violently thrashed in their strong grip, but it was no use resisting. The girl kept screaming, “MUM! DAD!” as they were taking her away from Doris’ plump figure, slamming the vault-like door shut as they took her down the hall.
I also don't know. o.o I'm weird that way. "She's abusing the doll! Save it!" might be what the two guards were thinking. :p


Most touching part:
And with that, she turned on her heels, and reluctantly left the asylum, slamming the bar doors closed with a thud, and making her way to the end of the hall to the outside world. McHenry, somewhere off in the distance, began wailing miserably at the clang of the door, and the annoyance of his voice flew throughout all the chambers, and into the girl’s. She was still lying there, participating in the activity she had been for the longest time on the bed, gazing dolefully to the barricaded sky. But she felt its presence. The warmth of the doll against her arm made her body ache with affection.

Trembling, slowly, the girl began to bring up the rabbit doll closer…ever so closer to her face. The rustle of the blankets made her cringe slightly as the rabbit was coming up to her head, lying on the pillow next to her. She felt a strange sensation of unlimited anxiety, feelings of guilt, infancy, and a quivering string of sanity drip from the doll, into her heart, making it pound difficultly. The throbbing of this new sense was growing on her, just like the thunder rattling in the distance… She did not look at the doll, but the ceiling. She was afraid…afraid to gaze into its button eyes. But no—it was not her—no, she was not afraid. It was her heart that told her not to. She had trusted her heart thus far in her life, and now, everything had crashed and burnt into a pile of ashes. She could trust it no longer, for it was arbitrary and savage. Just like the Queen she had met so long ago.
Touching. I would do that to my blanket when I would get "paranoid" at night. It's just so cute. ^_^ Is it me or did I get all the titles mixed up?


And finally the best part:
The suspense was killing her nerves as the thunder was tumbling with increasing intensity—her heart warning and shouting—her skin breaking out in perspiration. She would not be able to handle it. Betray the heart, for she had nothing to fear. She feared nothing. And with this quick decision, the girl tilted her head around, her green eyes meeting with the rabbit doll’s face. For a moment, it just lied there, its loose ears flapped over on the pillow, and its plain, black button eyes resting dreadfully straight across from hers. Then, after the girl caught a glimpse of it, she swore—NO. It bent its head over, shoving its stitched face into hers, the painfully plain weave work of its head melting into her mind as a demented voice of a demon rang out.

“SAVE US, ALICE!”

Alice gasped in utter dismay, when suddenly, her soul ripped from her body as the lightning flared, and was tossed into the rabbit’s void-like eyes. She began to tumble…falling—falling ever so slowly—down…down…down… The darkness swirled around her, and she did not know if neither she was alive or dead. Then, through the black, she saw a pale light falling along with her, streaming by her eyes. Things were falling…falling with her, into the emptiness. Familiar objects…wicked objects…

A bottle twirled in slow-motion past her head, a ragged label on the musky, green glass labeled “DRINK ME,” while a pill-like item tumbled alongside of it, with the words “EAT ME” engraved into its flaky constituency. Alice continued to watch in subconscious wonder as a few small toys began to spin their way below, including letter blocks…roses…chess pieces…among other things. Memories flashed in her mind, but soon…something more feral awoke within her, as she saw a playing card flipping among the toys. It twirled from its backside to the face, and there she saw imprinted upon it, a picture of a fat, impetuous queen leering away into nothingness, holding a wand that resembled a heart, similar to the symbols marked next to the “Q” situated on each corner.
Memories! The doll had her memories locked up for a long time. That what I think. That was also very creepy. Great job. ^_^


And the part that needs mentioning:
During mealtime, they would have to watch her cut her meager slice of toast that was served with gruel, for while their heads were turned and they thought she was buttering her toast, she would turn the knife on herself and slit each of her wrists. In a flurry of spraying, stinging blood, they would rush her to the medical quadrant immediately. She would return several hours later, red-drenched bandages cuffed around her wrists, and long, thin scars stretching along her skin.
I just loved that part. Blood = Humor for me. ^_^


Well, I could've read this earlier but my sister booted me off. Anyway, I'll be back.

~PEACE~
 

Sike Saner

Peace to the Mountain
Awesome.

This is the sort of thing that I just love to read...the description of the asylum was incredible; it was very easy to feel like I was frelling there as I was reading. Fabulous portrayals of madness, and also of sadness, the kind that hurts...I could get intoxicated on this stuff. It's just delicious. ^^

Favorite elements:

It was very depressing as she walked the barred halls of the children’s cells, for she would see them sobbing, running into walls, and wasting away in the filthy rooms, rotting in a bacterial waste of a prison.

Ooh..nice, dismal atmosphere you've created there.

She then wrapped her tiny claws around the rabbit doll’s sewn throat, and with invigorating distraught and anger, pounded it against the bed and the wall, slamming it with a terrible strength as she grunted and cried, wailing miserably.

It was dreary, for the rain seemed to pour all day, silver drops falling from the heavens, along with the superb thunder that rolled in the distance, boasting an oncoming storm.

“What else is wrong, Alice?” the old woman ventured. For a moment, she did not reply, but continued to stare at the reflection of herself in the stingy mirror.

“Something’s…broken…” she whispered again, her voice airy and weak. This response puzzled the nurse greatly, and she was confounded as to what to say next. Then, another question came to her mind. It was simple, but with the girl, nothing was simple. Doris was afraid what she would say.

“…what’s broken, Alice?” Ms. Bogtrotter pursued. The thunder rolled outside, and a small flash of lightning illuminated the window for a moment, shearing a stripe of light against Alice’s wet, green eyes. The old nurse watched then as the girl slowly turned away from the mirror, their eyes meeting one another. Seeing her terrified face, it sent a chill of fright up the woman’s spine, and she felt uncomfortable. But…she opened her mouth.

“…I am,” she muttered, staring into Doris’ eyes.

That right there is a definite "whoa" moment. Very cinematic and powerful. ^^

She had trusted her heart thus far in her life, and now, everything had crashed and burnt into a pile of ashes. She could trust it no longer, for it was arbitrary and savage.

...the beating of a heart reverberated from nowhere…the thunder was vanishing.

There's something about that in particular that I just really, really like.

The heart stopped. The thunder pounded, and Alice tumbled…down the rabbit-hole once more…

Awesome. ^^
 

CHeSHiRe-CaT

A Curious Breed
Thank you Sike, and I hope you have a safe trip ^^ And thanks, litestars and Bay. This was always my favorite chapter. Despite the Cheshire-Cat being my favorite Wonderland character, Doris is my favorite character throughout this whole story. I imagined her out of everything warm in my heart, and that's probably why I like her so much ^^ And now, Alice in Wonderland:

. . ..::Chapter II: Village of the Doomed::.. . .

Tumbling down into the dark, Alice did not know how long it had been since she had begun to fall. Her mind and soul was swimming briefly in an empty void, though it seemed like eternities were passing by as wind flew past the ruffles of her blue dress. It was then that a tunnel-like light was shining brilliantly below her. She gazed down while her hair flew about her head like malicious vipers whipping violently, and saw that it was not a light at the end of the tunnel, but the tunnel wall itself that was casting off this neon swirl of blazing, electric blue luminescence. She spotted a hole as she shot faster and faster through the tunnel, and at the end of her fall, hard, packed ground. Spirals and waves of light brushed past her as she screamed out loud, fearing she would most definitely crash to the ground and break her limbs. The sound of crunching gears and ticking clocks flew by on strings of horrid music.

The tunnel was coming to an end, and she felt the pressurized gravity slamming her closer to the ground. She closed her eyes brutally awaiting impact, when suddenly, she felt her weight bounce, rather than slam, against the ground. She let out an “umph” the moment she landed into something that broke her fall. Alice immediately opened her eyes, and found herself sitting on a pile of autumn leaves that had gathered in one spot. The dead foliage was littered minimally on her apron, and with a slender hand, she swept them off of her dress as she stared at her surroundings. The ground underneath the leaves was crag-like and rough, such as volcanic rock that had hardened and dried for the past thousand years. Alice felt strength in her knees, and she carefully stood up on her tall, leather boots, taking in more of the world around her.

A stale wall of the rock-like substance was blockaded directly behind the leaf pile, running to great heights that towered above her. A few radiant mushrooms of lavender and indigo poked from underneath the cracks fissured in the heavily compounded rock, swirl-like patterns imprinted in the fungi that glowed with a sort of toxic brilliance. However, Alice did not pay attention to the mushrooms, but to the surrounding walls of dehydrated magma that shot up around her to the surface of the sky…or rather, to the rabbit-hole. At the tips of the walls, it seemed they had broken and smashed to pieces the moment they touched the dimensional gateway that coiled up to the darkness above, jagged like teeth, ready to swallow any intruder that tumbled from the ghastly heavens.

This place seemed as though it had a diseased ambience. She could hear steam and dark wind whistling from the towering rabbit-hole, all around this place. She did not understand.

“Please don’t dawdle, Alice. We’re very late indeed.”

A voice had called from ahead so unexpectedly that the girl had hardly noticed she had been addressed, or rather, had been watched for quite some time. Lowering her head away from the view of the rabbit-hole, she swiveled her vision to her front. Ahead of her lied what seemed like a mine shaft born from splintered wood and nails, torches lining the walls that burrowed through the cave.

Illuminated there in the torchlight was a creature of sorts; it had a cone-shaped head with a black top hat resting upon it. Its fur was a hue of the lightest white, though dirty and musky in some spots. Two, long ears shot up from either side of the hat, and peering into the creature’s face, Alice could see two white eyes with beady pupils glancing back at her. It had a pink, wet nose, whiskers, and large front teeth. But it appeared to be malnourished, for she could see its bones as it stood on its hind feet like a kangaroo ready to leap, wearing a scarlet coat and black gloves. She recognized him as the two stared at each other a moment. He blinked with his wet eyes at her, and for a second, seemed as if he were the most sorrowful creature that ever walked the earth.

But before she could utter a word to the five-foot tall rabbit, the creature bounded off in the direction of the mine shaft, disappearing from her view. Alice gasped, for she was not at all sure what she would do. She was in a bit of shock. She hurriedly glanced at the swinging and twisting whirlwind above her, then to the tunnel. She then gazed about at the fungi around the piles of leaves. She knew who that character was. It was the White Rabbit. One of her dearest friends…but…what had happened to him? His voice was quite the same, but dear oh dear, what horrible massacre had caused him to become so thin and frail? He looked as though he were a corpse that had rotted halfway.

But if that was the White Rabbit…then…she was in…

Alice twisted her head around at her surroundings once more. She was met again with the now familiar sight of clammy rock, cracks, holes, and dry emptiness. She panted heavily. She must have been dreaming. Pacing about in circles backward in panic and dark astonishment, the girl stared on at what she had once known as Wonderland. The place of her childhood had changed so rapidly that it was just too…no, this could not be Wonderland. Or at least, this must have been a most disgusting part of Wonderland. Surely beyond that mine tunnel was a world that Alice could recognize? Her nostrils flared and her green eyes lit up with horror and shock. Maybe she was overreacting. She had to collect herself…

Suddenly, feeling her inner child telling her to sit, the girl listened (for when she was young, she believed she used to give herself proper advice). Strutting over to the leaf pile of discolored and flaking plants, she felt her stomach do a few somersaults. The girl bent down over the pile, then fell back into it. She felt as though she were breathing in too much oxygen at once. She began counting to ten, but found herself too anxious and terrified to say anything. The rabbit-hole mesmerized her, and she tried not to look at it as she went light-headed. She was afraid of…the ticking…she never wanted the ticking to return; never. Instead, she focused on the path that lied ahead of the craggy grounds of which she was presently residing in.

“Now, Alice,” the teenage girl whispered to herself as she watched the torches in the tunnel flare. “You mustn’t get excited. You’ll get lines. Perhaps you’re just lost in this cave. Don’t wander too far, because you know that you’ll get even more lost.”

The girl clasped her arms around herself, and she trembled. Sighing with a horrible sob in between she gazed up at the shining rabbit-hole, defeated.

“You were just in Rutledge,” she said to herself, swallowing her fears slowly, reassuring herself. “And…Ms. Bogtrotter was there…and…something happened. Now you’re here…wherever here might be... It will be all right. Someone will come looking for you.”

At this, Alice’s jaw shivered as she took a glance to her dismal surroundings. She felt sick. Something churned in her insides like nothing else. She felt as though someone had plunged her into a darkened dream. Cruel were the feelings that tortured Alice, and the more pain she felt, the more the memories came flooding back. She remembered touching the rabbit doll…but…it had turned into something else…it became the White Rabbit. Yes. Now she realized that it was he who had summoned her here through the doll. He was calling to her…for help. But what sort of help was he talking about? After all these years, what had caused him to come back? She had been waiting nine years in Rutledge for someone to save her… Now she was being called upon to save someone else…but from what? Come to think of it, now that she was in this place, she could think to herself. She was not at all sure she could still communicate in any way up until this point.

Feeling a bit dazed and confused, she was still a bit satisfied with herself that she had not broken yet. Whatever she was going through right now was a complete mystery and she dared not take a step anywhere near that tunnel, but she tried to remain calm. The only thing she feared at the time was that something might be lurking behind that corner, waiting for her to come. Maybe it was the White Rabbit…? No, he would never do such a thing. She scolded herself for even thinking for one second that the White Rabbit would harm her in any way. But what she had seen of him was terribly depressing. He looked as though he had scarcely eaten, and had been maimed by time and macabre melancholy. Lessons had taught her that looks were often deceiving, and even after being separated for such a long time, Alice could not imagine the White Rabbit being any different than he had been the first time they had met.

The girl sighed again, this time in feigned resolve. Maybe she could pretend that everything was all right at the time. Sitting in a leaf pile among the innards of a cave was not at all unusual. Alice found herself rocking back and forth, clinging to her heavy boots, feeling dreadfully cold all over. A seeping fog of frightened guilt was beginning to overtake her. Reminiscences of her childhood came echoing from the hollow of her heart, bringing up burning images of her parents. She tried to blink them away. The heart is treacherous…the heart betrays…the heart will kill…the heart only takes…

It was then that her attention snapped directly at the mines a couple of yards away. A shadow came slinking around the corner of the tunnel, carrying a shape and figure with it. Alice’s blood ran cold. She kept glaring, wide-eyed and twitching at the hollow in the cavern. She watched in desperate apprehension to see what was coming. Perhaps it was someone or something coming to end her misery? Whether by death or guidance, she did not care. She felt as though she could stand this wretched place no longer. She did not have a single clue as to where she was, what she was doing here, and what she should do next.

The figure emerged from the tunnels, and when lit up by the torches, Alice could see that it was another creature. It appeared to be walking on four legs, but at that distance, the girl could only see its swinging tail, a pair of glowing eyes, and most prominently, a gleaming grin that could be spotted from a mile away. The grin startled her most certainly, but at the sight of it, she felt she had recognized it the same way she had when she saw Rabbit once more. The figure paused in the tunnel for a moment, grinning eerily at Alice a moment more, but after contemplating to itself, the creature came swinging its limbs forward, striding precociously with a riddled pride out of the halls of wood and nail.

The beast was a skeletal-looking feline, whose hair had fallen out long ago (or had extremely short follicles). Its structure was lean for its anorexic state, with muscles in the cat’s paws pressing against the ground with ease as its head was hoisted in front. Upon its head was a set of ears (punctured in some places), one of which having a gold hoop earring dangling from its cartilage. Its eyes had strong brows pressed against them, with slit pupils glowing a devilish gold. Its nose was pressed against its face, stroking downward into a grin that stretched across its wide face. Its teeth were sharp and a bit decayed with a few visible cavities present, and had a light yellow plaque look about them. Fitting around nearly every curve in its body (along with its face), the feline was engraved with ink tattoos that were tribal in genre, and gave it a fierce appearance.

As the cat lingered only a few feet away from Alice, it took a seat on its hind legs, placing its clawed paws on the floor of the cave while swinging its bony tail with a bottlebrush tip waving around. The girl had been a tad frightened at first at the sight of the cat, but as he revealed himself docile, her nerves loosened a bit. Its grin set her off right away; she had no doubt in her mind that this cat was a most familiar friend of hers, whom she had first met at the Duchess’ house. He had also appeared in the Wonderland Woods to offer her advice on how to get to the Queen’s Croquet Ground, and he had even caused some mischief with the Queen herself by appearing in her presence with only a head, causing a royal quarrel about whether it is civil to cut off the head of something that does not have a body.

She felt a bit at loss for words as she stared into his gleaming yellow eyes. The tattoos on his face enhanced the piercing of his gaze as black markings wrenched around his eyes. He continually grinned, and she could hear a faint purr emanating from his throat. His bony ribcage lifted and rose gradually as she resumed sizing him up. How very morbid the Cheshire-Cat had become, just as Rabbit had. But she felt confident in his presence as he offered only his quiet grin, feeling comfort and ease come back to her soul. Rabbit had not stayed long to chat, and she had so many questions. She was terribly afraid of talking to him after such a long time, but she wanted to speak to the Cheshire-Cat.

“You’ve gone quite…mangy, Cat,” she stammered, the cat’s eyes lighting up in response. “But…your grin’s a comfort.”

With this, the feline smiled slyly, his eyes squinting with pleasure. A sort of smile broke out onto Alice’s face, and she blinked several times as familiarity began to settle in. Her cheek muscles felt odd and strange; for she could not remember the last time she had smiled. Though gruesome was her poor friend’s appearance (and a bit mind-boggling), she could still feel his hearty lust for enigmatic kindness and powerful friendliness.

“And you’ve picked up a bit of an attitude,” replied the Cheshire-Cat in a deep, royal voice fit for a king, yet in a joking manner at the same time. “Still curious and willing to learn, I hope?”

At this, Alice nodded immediately, smiling from her leaf pile. Her eyes welled up with the feeling of slight bliss and happiness. Someone had come to find her among the shattered fragments of her painful memories. A tear or two trickled down her cold cheeks, but she continued to smile at the cat with her preening lips, slipping into a mood of joy. The Cheshire-Cat nodded in response, his grin undying as he closed his eyes in content, whispering, “good; good.”

For a moment, there was more silence between them, and Alice felt a bit awkward. She then realized how degrading it was to be sitting in front of a good friend on the ground, so with some battered strength, the girl lifted herself with her hands off of the floor, her knees buckling slightly from not having used her legs in so much time. From her calves down to her boots, she felt as though she were a little girl again, able and free to wander fields, plains, and marshes without any restriction of bars or beds. As she loomed a bit over the Cheshire-Cat, still prominently sitting on his hind legs as his hoop earring jangled, Alice began looking at her surroundings once more.

“Wonderland’s become quite strange,” said Alice with more confidence, peering at the violet mushrooms, the stony walls, and the wooden boards arched over the entrance to the mines. “How is one to find her way?”

The Cheshire-Cat lifted a paw, and grinned with a subtle understanding as Alice pulled her lovely black hair over her shoulders.

“As knowing where you’re going is preferable to being lost, ask,” the feline responded, delicately moving about his paw. “Rabbit knows a thing or two and I myself don’t need a weathervane to tell which way the wind blows.”

Alice was a bit stumped at this point, for she was not quite sure what to ask. The cat continued to stare at her as she took in more of her environment. She was indeed inquisitive, but was troubled as to where she could begin. No one denied her that this place Wonderland thus far, and so she had reason to believe this was the place of her childhood memories. It had just been altered so greatly from what she could see already. Perhaps this was just a cave…or perhaps not. She would never know unless she asked. The cat sighed, a bit impatient.

“Let your need guide your behavior,” he stated, putting emphasis on the word “need.” “Suppress your instinct to lead; pursue Rabbit.”

It was then that she was confronted with the memory of the first time she had fallen down the rabbit-hole, when she had first pursued the White Rabbit…

So Alice was considering, in her own mind (as well as she could, for the hot day made her feel very sleepy and stupid), whether the pleasure of making a daisy-chain would be worth the trouble of getting up and picking the daisies, when suddenly a White Rabbit with pink eyes ran close by her.

There was nothing so very remarkable in that; nor did Alice think it so very much out of the way to hear the Rabbit say to itself “Oh dear! Oh dear! I shall be too late!” (when she thought it over afterwards it occurred to her that she ought to have wondered at this, but at the time it all seemed quite natural); but, when the Rabbit actually took a watch out of its waistcoat-pocket, and looked at it, and then hurried on, Alice started to her feet, for it flashed across her mind that she had never before seen a rabbit with either a waistcoat-pocket, or a watch to take out of it, and burning with curiosity, she ran across the field after it, and was just in time to see it pop down a large rabbit-hole under the hedge.

In another moment down went Alice after it, never once considering how in the world she was to get out again.


The girl mused to herself at this distinct remembrance. The Cheshire-Cat seemed to be drifting off into his own world at the time as well, staring off into space as they both recalled the interesting times they had together in Wonderland. It was Alice who broke the ice at last and finally made a decision. She had not been afraid to follow Rabbit the first time. She certainly was not going to let her fears stop her in following him the second time.

“I say we start making our move, then,” said Alice, leaning back and forth on her heels, “if you would care to join me, kind sir.”

“Just exactly what I had in mind,” replied the cat in a cool, collected manner. “Come with me this way.”

Pivoting on dewclaws, the Cheshire-Cat then turned his rigid spine toward the girl and started off in the direction of the mines. Alice took a deep breath, put her right foot forward, and stamped after the feline as they wandered underneath the low entrance into the tunnel. Inside, frames of boards were pushing perilously against the pressure of rock while ingrown roots were hanging from above, popping out in different sections of the boulders. The Cheshire-Cat continued to grin creepily, but the girl had been preoccupied at admiring the markings on his back that were etched in his pale skin. Pressing around in the tunnel with more identical walkways of boards and dirt, Alice wished to use some of her time speaking to him.

“No one has quite explained to me why we are beneath the ground,” the girl piped up. “Why is everything so different?”

“Are you suggesting I should explain that to you?” the cat called back to her.

“Well, yes, in fact. Both you and I know that I am of a strong curiosity.”

“Indeed you are,” the feline concurred. “But perhaps pictures should better explain things than words.”

“Now, what do you mean by that?”

“I am quite certain you have read a book, have you not?” Cat ventured.

“Oh, I read many as a child.”

“Then perhaps you understand,” lectured the cat, sidestepping a clump of soil in the airy halls of the mine, “that there is no use of a book without pictures or conversations.”

“Well, it would be less fulfilling with no pictures, though books may not require any,” Alice answered, looking in disgust at the dirt underneath her fingernails.

“But you do agree that pictures help the mind to comprehend what is trying to be conveyed?”

“Very much, so.”

“Words can be obscure,” said the cat, as they turned ‘round another corner. “I’d rather you see why Wonderland has become the way it has, rather than telling you why…at least, for the time being.”

Alice felt her stomach become tense. Strutting down the tunnel toward what she could see was an entryway to another section underground, the girl had feared for what the Cheshire-Cat had just said. She knew that he would not bother to show her something that would explain Wonderland’s circumstances unless something was dreadfully wrong. The atmosphere, their appearances, and everything about this place made the girl tick. What had gone wrong here?

“Now,” Cat said, stopping at the entryway opening out to a boardwalk, “For the moment, I must tell you something you must abide by before walking through this door.”

“Anything,” the girl replied, stopping at the frame.

“Hold on to your sanity.”

With these words, the Cheshire-Cat whirled around and trudged out into the open along the boardwalk. Alice followed, and immediately after setting foot into the more open space, was horrified by what she saw. In this new area they had come to, there appeared to be an entire village trapped under the beastly cavern. Underneath huge domes of volcanic rock hardened by magma in the core of the earth, oddly-angled buildings were set among giant wooden platforms, teetering over a lake of green, toxic water. Smoke, moisture, and heat was present all around, and it wanted to make the girl gag. Presently they stood on a platform with a two-story building upon it. It was all dark, except for the lamps and torches driven into the walls to provide what little light they could produce.

The house had horridly decaying wood for structure, and lamps from the inside cast a ghastly lime color out onto a few towers connected to the shingled roof. Alice and the Cheshire-Cat stared, wide-eyed from their position on the wooden platform up at one of the towers, which had a pulley system wrenching a wheel back and forth in a pendulum to pull and shove mechanisms working deep within the layers of earth. Rocks grinding under steel gears could be heard, and another tower opposite of the house pumped steam, spraying the stuff through a stack at the top. A giant wooden sign painted with a messy hand was jutting out from a hole in the floor, reading “DROLE VEL’S GAS EXTRACTION.”

Alice gazed up at the foul scents and noises rupturing all around her, and she stared down at the cat. He merely grinned at her. She tossed her head to the side, catching something moving in the corner of her eye. She was quite revolted when she had, for her eyes fell upon a great crevice in the wall of the cave, and from out that crevice came a writhing tentacle that made nauseating squishing noises, wrapping its fleshy mass around the air it had been exposed to near the entrance from which they came. Alice felt ill, so she quickly turned her attention back to the Cheshire-Cat.

“Why, this is the most unsanitary sort of place I could ever imagine!” she exclaimed, covering her mouth for a moment.

“It gets worse,” the cat replied, not paying attention to her, but the door from the building they were standing outside. “Here comes Drole.”

Alice was a tad befuddled by this remark, but when she took a glance at the sign leaping out of the boards, then to the very small man coming out of the door of the house, she paid all attention to the man. He came out onto the creaky wooden steps that led up to his door, down a small board slope that came down the platform to meet Alice and her feline companion. He had greasy brown hair pulled back in a manner so that it should not get in his large, hazel eyes. Rather distastefully, he was wearing no shirt, but faded overalls woven from what appeared to be scraps of cloth. He was about two-thirds of Alice’s height, and came up to them, sweat dripping from all of the pores on his body, his skin beet red.

It was at this time that Alice noticed he had something saddled to his back. Upon further inspection, she saw that it was a sort of glass orb strapped around his chest and spine in leather bands, buckled tightly. Inside the glass orb, colors of every luminosity and hue swam and swirled about with an uncontrollable spin. Drole was bent over under weight of the object, and seemed to be in a severe amount of pain. His eyes flashed at Alice for a moment, but his attention turned right away to the Cheshire-Cat, his upper lip lying over his lower lip.

“And who is this stranger?” he whispered rather loudly to the cat.

“Did Rabbit not already tell you?” the cat said, surprised.

“No. He was in a bit of a hurry,” Drole replied, not bothering to be quiet, but let his deep, mournful voice come out.

“Where are we?” Alice could not help but interject, switching glances at the Cheshire-Cat and Drole Vel.

“We,” Drole said in a doleful and almost bored expression, “are in the Village of the Trolls, also known as the Village of the Doomed, a meta-essence mining town.”

“Meta-essence?” Alice inquired, now looking to the Cheshire-Cat. “What’s meta-essence? Are you quite sure we are in Wonderland?”

“You can be one hundred percent sure, ma’am,” Drole replied instead. “If you do not recognize this desolate place, you must not have seen the light of Wonderland for quite some time. Our land is destroyed; our spirit crushed.”

The girl scrunched her eyes in confusion. She stared at the Cheshire-Cat, who looked as though he were becoming agitated of her many questions. She then looked to Drole Vel. The poor man was nearly an inch away from breaking out in tears, and was grunting underneath the weight of the orb on his shoulders. He stared down the entire time, cursing mentally at the floor, feeling utterly miserable. Alice felt quite sympathetic for him, and although unaware of his situation, she attempted to reason with him as to why he was so glum.

“Reminds me of the asylum,” said Alice in a gentle, concerned tone. “Is there no joy here?”

Drole Vel sighed.

“Slavery and happiness do not dwell in the same house,” said he.

It was only a matter of seconds until the paltry man sagged his shoulders and swept around back toward the house on the gentle slope. He soon disappeared into the building, and left Alice and the Cheshire-Cat to stand outside on the platform alone. The girl pondered the thought for a moment, and though resisting the urge to annoy the feline, her inquiries were thought aloud.

“What did he mean by slavery?” questioned Alice. “They’re all slaves here?”

“Things have changed drastically since you were here last time, Alice,” the Cheshire-Cat responded, gazing up at her with his eerie grin. “Wonderland has become a tortured and stabbed land of pain and suffering. It’s her doing, you know.”

Alice did not need an explanation as to who “her” was.

“You see,” said the cat, leading Alice further along the platform, “when you left us, a lot of things changed; most for the worst, whether we had a choice or not.”

“But why did it all change when I left?”

“That’s where nightmare becomes reality,” said the cat. “When you left us, Alice, you left us in a moment of utter horror and dismay. You left us in rage, guilt, and darkness.”

Walking down the platform over to the other side led them to a great gap from this side of the village to the other. The beams that had once supported the small wooden bridge to the other quadrant of the town had collapsed into the murky depths of the sickly water below. On the other side, they could see more clusters of buildings, and several more slaves with orbs strapped to their backs.

“The Queen,” started the cat, “had found a great opportunity in your absence. You were significant to us, Alice, but when you were gone, she sought for more power. And she found it, in the form of a mineral called meta-essence.”

Here, the Cheshire-Cat simply stared at the great ravine falling down into the lake of acetic waste. Alice too watched it, taking in everything the cat told her. Heavy clouds of steam came pushing up from the bowel of the lake, making strands of the girl’s hair fly at its gaseous touch.

“So, being the vain and lethargic ruler as she was,” Alice deduced, “she went out of her way to find a town and enslave it to mine meta-essence for her.”

“Most precisely,” said the cat. “You’re catching on quickly. However, there is a vast amount of grief greater than this.”

Alice was still staring at the cliff, then at the cat, then at the other side of the platform.

“Are we supposed to get over there?” she finally asked.

“Most certainly.”

“Well, I don’t suppose we’ll be able hop over there as Rabbit might have.”

At the end of this quirk, the girl crossed her arms at the splintered edges of where the bridge had fallen, then to the pit of the water where planks floated about lazily. Alice turned to her left, expecting to see the Cheshire-Cat at her side. Instead, she merely found the flat surface of the dinged up wood that she was currently standing upon. Confused and basked in the pale light of the ailing lanterns scattered around the village underground, she peered around, searching for her feline cohort.

Suddenly, there came a slight, clumsy chuckle from the other side of the broken gap. Alice flew her view across from the gas extraction facility behind her, and saw over the ravine, the Cheshire-Cat, grinning and sitting upon the wood.

“When the path is problematical, consider a leap of faith,” said the cat, moving his paw about. “Ride the wind.”

The girl took a quick glance at the steam rising from the fissure, and then stared at the cat with a bewildered look, straightening her apron in an as-a-matter-of-fact tone.

“I should say that is the most illogical method to crossing the hole!” she retorted, swinging back her black hair to reveal a golden necklace with an omega trinket clipped to it. “I daresay I’ll fall if I take a step!”

“Are you afraid?” the cat ventured, raising a brow.

For a moment, Alice considered this. She loomed down at the long drop to the green sewage below, then to the steam, then to the cat. She hesitated for a moment.

“I fear nothing,” she declared in a solemn manner.

The girl jumped over the crevice with a split second’s reluctance, and she closed her eyes in hope. She was not met by gravity’s pull, but by the steam shooting up her dress as she fell. It was almost ticklish, and Alice laughed as the wind inflated her bonnie blue dress much like a parachute. She opened her green eyes, and found the Cheshire-Cat smiling up at her in assertiveness. She was a couple of feet above the ground as she floated slowly across toward the other platform. Before she knew it, it was all over, and she touched back down onto the wood next to the Cheshire-Cat, wobbling slightly.

“Oh, how delightful!” she exclaimed. “I should love to do that again.”

“We haven’t the time,” said the Cheshire-Cat. “And unfortunately, time around here is realistically fast. Let us go further along the village, and perhaps I can explain a few more things.”

So they turned from their little feat at the fissure and trailed off further into the yawning bellow of the cave village, passing several more houses, people with orbs strapped to their backs, and the pale radiance illuminating from fungi bursting from the ground, as well as those repulsive, slimy tentacles that veined their way into gaps in the walls.

“So the containers buckled to their backs,” Alice fingered out in the air, “is meta-essence?”

“Or more precisely, the contents within,” said the cat, passing a worker who looked similar to Drole, coming out from a hole in the cave. “It is an energy harvested in pockets from the insides of this mountain.”

“What does it do?” Alice remarked. “Why does the Queen want it so badly?”

“Meta-essence is the life-force of Wonderland,” the Cheshire-Cat explained. “It is much like…shall we say…much like ‘sanity?’”

“I’m not sure I understand where you’re going with this.”

“Well,” said the cat, taking a breath as they passed a group of workers huddling up to one of the gushing tentacles, “everyone in Wonderland, including you, has a form of meta-essence running through their blood. The mineral was thought only to have existed within the body, but was discovered in the heart of Mount Doomed, where we are currently residing in.”

“But…why is it like sanity?” Alice interrogated.

“Everyone needs sanity to live in Wonderland,” said the cat, “believe it or not. Though our worlds may be full of madness, we could not survive without meta-essence. If all meta-essence leaves our bodies, then we lose our sanity completely. It’s the only thing that keeps us from killing each other mindlessly.”

“That’s quite disturbing,” Alice pointed out.

“Indeed,” said the cat. “But that’s what the Queen wants. You see, there is only so much of the ‘sanity’ we can have. There is only a fractional value of meta-essence pumping through our veins, for if we had too much or too little, we would be transformed in a most drastic way.”

“Wait…something’s sparking,” replied Alice, furrowing her brow as they continued to walk. “This is a most peculiar trick…”

“This is no trick,” the cat responded. “You were our meta-essence; our sanity, Alice. You were the only thing keeping us alive. When you left us, you lost all of your sanity. Wonderland, though impossible as it seems, lies within the depths of your mind. When you lost your sanity, so did Wonderland. We were transformed, Alice. It was all because of you.”

“STOP! Stop!” Alice cried out rather loudly, barking at the cat, stopping in her tracks. “You’re making it seem like it was my entire fault! My parents DIED, Cat!”

“No one is blaming you!” hissed the cat, a few people stopping and taking stares at them. “It is the truth, Alice, and you cannot let the truth hurt you. It may not have been your fault you lost everything you had, but it was the result of which that gutted us and smashed us into the dreary land we are today.”

“I…I can’t tell you how horrible I feel,” Alice blubbered, choking. “I feel awful. This place…was once happy…”

“But things got worse,” the Cheshire-Cat grinned, picking up the pace again and walking with the girl. “Because of all this meta-essence the Queen’s been gathering, she’s being transformed and wrought into something we fear.”

“Has…anyone seen her?”

“Not since you left. She locked herself away in Queensland, though she still orders the card guards to fulfill her dealings.”

“She still has those oafish hoodlums running around?”

“Yes, and though oafish they are, they’ve changed with Wonderland as well, to the Queen’s desire. The guards have become stronger, more powerful, and are full of rage. You shall find no pity from them.”

“Well…all we’ve been talking about is meta-essence, but how is the Queen to receive the energy?” Alice inquired, stopping again in her tracks near another tunnel coming up.

The Cheshire-Cat grinned at her and twitched his ear, staring at her from behind his tattooed eyes. He then motioned over his bony shoulder blade to the view behind him with a flick of his head, and Alice turned her eyes upon the sight. The crowd they had passed before that was gathered around one of the tentacles seemed to be unbuckling the containers from their backs. Alice tilted her head in a curious manner when they then took the orbs, fearlessly walked up to the tentacle, and watched as the meaty feeler wrapped itself around the glass balls, attaching them to the slimy suction cups on its underside. The tentacle then twirled about, and pushed itself into the hole from which it came, disappearing from view. Alice turned to the gray-looking cat.

“Again, most disturbing,” the girl remarked.

“It shouldn’t surprise you for long,” said the cat, taking her along to the next tunnel. “There are many aspects of Wonderland that have become…disturbing.”

“But…why am I here?”

“Well, there is so—”

“Stir up no trouble, stranger!” a voice interrupted from behind them. “The Red Queen’s agents are ruthless.”

Alice and the cat wheeled around in their spot, and turned to see one of the troll men staring back at them, wearing a ragged shirt and torn shorts. Alice walked up to him rather nastily, and spat in his face.

“I’m not afraid of her or her creatures…never was, really. You should stand up to them,” she snapped, glaring at him.

“Defiance is useless,” said he, who did not appear to be fazed by her brutal manner, and rather sleepy. “While the Queen reigns, only death can release us from this misery—”

“—or her death, I suppose?” Alice interjected.

Alice then turned her back sharply to him, her apron tied in a knot with a skull clip. She then returned to the cat, rolling her eyes and walking again.

“Everyone here seems completely dejected,” she commented. “No one is trying anything to help each other. Where is the rebellion? Where is the revolt?”

You are our rebellion, Alice,” said the cat, turning to look at her.

They did not stop walking into the tunnel, but the girl gazed down at the Cheshire-Cat with a look of alarm and discomfort. The cat merely grinned as they passed under a roof of bordered rocks and wood and torchlight. Alice almost felt sick. She loomed away from the cat, and felt as though she were about to faint.

“That’s why we have called you here, Alice,” said the cat. “No one in Wonderland has the courage and strength to bite the hand of the Queen of Hearts.”

The rabbit doll bent its head over, shoving its stitched face into hers, the painfully plain weave work of its head melting into her mind as a demented voice of a demon rang out.

“SAVE US, ALICE!”


The girl shivered.

“But…how can I be your savior?” Alice stuttered. “I…I’m j-just a girl!”

“Just a girl,” the Cheshire-Cat repeated. “Alice, before you left us, the Queen feared you. Do you know why? Because though she ruled the land in your mind, you were the most powerful person there. Because you came from a different world of sanity, your meta-essence was greater than any other’s. The Queen was twisted by greed to become better than you and to harvest the sanity that made you great.”

These thoughts mulled about in her head, but she could not answer to anything the Cheshire-Cat had said. They came out of the tunnel and out onto a sloped walk that led down onto a smaller platform. The lake of green was much closer below, and the cave walls were shimmering with the reflection of the vomit water. A tentacle was sprung out from a wall nearby, and the two came to the platform, stopping. The Cheshire-Cat looked solemnly up to the girl with his eyes, though eternally grinning.

“We’ve all paid a price, Alice,” said the cat, his yellow eyes full of serious significance. “You were brought here not only to save us, but to save yourself. You lost your parents, your sanity, and your life in a horrific fire. You’re receiving a second chance to reclaim your judgment and life, the only things you can ever obtain after what’s happened. You are Wonderland. Wonderland is you. Save us, Alice, and you will redeem yourself.”

“But this will not be easy!” Alice complained, her eyes filling with tears. “I could die! All could be lost!”

“Who said this undertaking would be easy?” the Cheshire-Cat grinned. “If there’s nothing else that can be done, you should risk everything you don’t have to reclaim what you once had! Is it not worth fighting for? These people’s freedom? Your freedom? I am sure you don’t want to wake up to another cold, clammy day in your cell at Rutledge Asylum, Alice.”

The feline’s cold and harsh words sliced into her heart like a steel knife. It was the truth, and she was letting it get to her. She was letting it get to her heart…her traitorous, murderous heart… Her eyes were glazed with uncertainty and peril. She was being asked to do something she never imagined she would have to do. But she did not know the road that came with this life-altering adventure of woe and darkness. Certainly, it would not be easy, but after finding Rabbit, what would they do? Everything had changed into macabre versions of themselves, and the once childish place she knew had morphed into this sickening nightmare of undeniable fear and guilt. She did not recognize it…but…was that what she was here to do?

“Alice,” started the cat with a sympathetic tone, “you may have lost your parents. Nothing can replace them or bring them back, but think of them. They would not have their little girl give up on people who depend on her. They would not want you to grieve for them your entire life. They would want you to come back to life. If you destroy the Queen of Hearts, Wonderland and you will be restored. All the pain, anger, and remorse will be shaved away. Your parents would rest peacefully knowing you went on with your life, remembering the good and the bad memories with no shame.”

The girl bit her lip. The Cheshire-Cat grinned.

“Save us, Alice,” said the cat. “Save yourself.”

The Cheshire-Cat watched the girl as she crossed her arms against her chest. She took in her surroundings; at the green lake, the tentacle, and the other houses in the distance. She breathed in the rotting chaos of the village, and all of the sorrows that followed and stalked the inhabitants. She could taste the anger and dread of and against the ways that had curdled their world into a decomposing carcass of mass sadness. She could hear the cries of all who had perished at the hands of the decapitating Queen. She saw the misery and gloom that fell over all, and in herself. Alice felt her vengeance thicken in the walls of her arteries, pumping boiled blood throughout her skin. She uncrossed her arms, and lowered her eyebrows. She then released a small, bitter smile out of the corner of her mouth, proud and true.

“I cannot fight the Red Queen,” said she.

The cat frowned, but before he could say a word, Alice’s smile broadened.

“…without a weapon.”
 

Literate

black cat, black cat
Wow. @_@ *eyes blinded once again by an absolutely wonderful chapter*

Though you could've cut it into sections. It took who knows how long for me to read this, and I'm considered a fast reader.

Well, onto my comments... I have no comments. I'm just absolutely stunned at this chapter. It might've been long but it was still good. Very. ^_^

I liked the ending part. It was just... well it was very, very good.

“I cannot fight the Red Queen,” said she.

The cat frowned, but before he could say a word, Alice’s smile broadened.

“…without a weapon.”
Like one of those people who has a plan, only to tell others that it won't work without something.... Yeah, this was very good. Very.

~PEACE~

P.S. I'm trying to reduce the time I spend on the computer and failed. I saw this this morning, but I didn't read it. Sorry! *bows in shame*
 

CHeSHiRe-CaT

A Curious Breed
litestars: Expect many pages of reading from me. I'm professional when it comes to my chapter length, so I won't go short on you unless I think it's absolutely necessary :p And yis, it will be very difficult for Alice to go about this newly deranged Wonderland without her "toys."

Glad you liked it, DriveshafT XD The prologue and first chapter are my favorites, mostly because they're pretty dismal o_O lol, emo Cat.

EDIT: My bad XD I just realized what you were talking about; another bad habit of mine is making huge paragraphs. Fix-able, of course ^^
 
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Literate

black cat, black cat
Expect many pages of reading from me.
*sneaky*Or is it because if you don't make it long.... :p you can't find a title? You took almost half the chapter in describing Alice's life before she disappeared into the rabbit hole. And took a fourth of the second chapter in describing her reactions, another fourth in telling about the Cheshire Cat and White Rabbit, another fourth in telling about the town, and the last fourth in telling about removing the Queen from Wonderland. *shifty eyes* >.>
I'm professional when it comes to my chapter length, so I won't go short on you unless I think it's absolutely necessary :p
I could tell easily. *nod* I'm very observant. :p
And yis, it will be very difficult for Alice to go about this newly deranged Wonderland without her "toys."
Her attitude, is it? I don't know I just like people who act like they don't know but do and tells it in a sneaky way. Although, I couldn't tell because it portrayed her differently in the chapters. :p I don't know but it was just me. :p

~PEACE~
 

CHeSHiRe-CaT

A Curious Breed
And took a fourth of the second chapter in describing her reactions, another fourth in telling about the Cheshire Cat and White Rabbit, another fourth in telling about the town, and the last fourth in telling about removing the Queen from Wonderland. *shifty eyes* >.>
That's the essence of it XD My writing is human. I always ask myself "what if," and put myself in the character's shoes. What if you were Alice, and saw these darkly deformed memories from childhood that had once been pleasant, but are now shattered and ugly from the events of reality? What if reality shattered your Wonderland? What happened if you came across an old friend or two that had been so pleasant before, but after years of being separated, and then being reunited, you find them morphed drastically into something gruesome and fierce? How would you observe the rising troubles of a world that was once your own, where no troubles had existed?

Those are some of the many questions I ask myself, and though I'm writing third-person, it's almost as though I'm first-person in the aspect of my thinking. I try to think and feel as Alice would, and how Alice would react to this and that. It's the natural human reaction: develop an attachment to a place/person/thing, and if it is altered in a way that is not a nice experience for you, depending on the virtues you had when growing up, then you may get upset.

When most children are born, they live the beginnings of their lives looking up to and attaching themselves to their parent figures. When you care about someone that much, you want to be just like them, and in Alice's case, she became a delicate young lady as her parents would have her. She loved them, but when the fire destroyed the family that had brought her up, feeding her memories of happiness and a life without strife, the reality of death and horrible, but inevitable, circumstances came plummeting into her Wonderland of taking tea and making jokes, singing and dancing about gaily.

When Alice first went to Wonderland, it was strange and foreign to her, but she kept returning, because the oddities and craziness attracted her. It's almost like watching something so strange, but being so intrigued by it that you can't stop staring at it. Alice became accustomed to all the traditions in this whacky world of whimsy, and she adopted them to her own lady-like disposition. She loved Wonderland, and learning a new style of living in her imagination, she loved all the friends she had made. But when reality meets imaginary, the more matter that exists in one cancels or destroys the other world. When Alice's reality was pummeled, it slammed into Wonderland full-force, and everything horrific bled into its soil.

With both of her worlds gone, there was nothing left for Alice. She was left to wander the empty wastes of her mind, losing what they call "sanity" (which I define as "fulfillment of mind and soul; acceptance). There was nothing left for her. But when a symbol of her childhood happiness taken from both worlds (the rabbit doll) was placed into her arms, the doll gave her a second chance to pick up the pieces that were Wonderland and her sanity. She'd have to overcome her fears and obstacles that prevented her from reaching that goal: to reclaim her sanity. Though she was truly unhappy, she would never rest until she got a bit of delight and warmth back into the cold winter that had taken refuge in her life at the asylum.
 

Literate

black cat, black cat
You know I was just joking. ^_^' I didn't expect for you to write a three paragraph summary of the first two chapters. ^_^'

I was just saying that you made it long because you couldn't find a title. ^_^'' Sorry if it came the wrong way, but I sure got a in-depth explaination. I didn't know she was lady-like i just thought she was um... childish since she was only six. ^_^' But I get it now. I wasn't ever lady-like so I would have no idea. ^_^'

But when reality meets imaginary, the more matter that exists in one cancels or destroys the other world. When Alice's reality was pummeled, it slammed into Wonderland full-force, and everything horrific bled into its soil.

With both of her worlds gone, there was nothing left for Alice.
I get it. It's like Alice had two lives to live, one fantasy and one reality. When her life in reality was shattered, she had no hope of living out Wonderland. She just broke. Is that what you're trying to say?

~PEACE~
 

Bay

YEAHHHHHHH
Another great chapter Chess! This is getting better and better! Anyways, here are some of the highlights:


But before she could utter a word to the five-foot tall rabbit, the creature bounded off in the direction of the mine shaft, disappearing from her view. Alice gasped, for she was not at all sure what she would do. She was in a bit of shock. She hurriedly glanced at the swinging and twisting whirlwind above her, then to the tunnel. She then gazed about at the fungi around the piles of leaves. She knew who that character was. It was the White Rabbit. One of her dearest friends…but…what had happened to him? His voice was quite the same, but dear oh dear, what horrible massacre had caused him to become so thin and frail? He looked as though he were a corpse that had rotted halfway.

I feel the same way as Alice of how the rabbit is now all mutated and such.

At this, Alice’s jaw shivered as she took a glance to her dismal surroundings. She felt sick. Something churned in her insides like nothing else. She felt as though someone had plunged her into a darkened dream. Cruel were the feelings that tortured Alice, and the more pain she felt, the more the memories came flooding back. She remembered touching the rabbit doll…but…it had turned into something else…it became the White Rabbit. Yes. Now she realized that it was he who had summoned her here through the doll. He was calling to her…for help. But what sort of help was he talking about? After all these years, what had caused him to come back? She had been waiting nine years in Rutledge for someone to save her… Now she was being called upon to save someone else…but from what? Come to think of it, now that she was in this place, she could think to herself. She was not at all sure she could still communicate in any way up until this point.

This part I like because now the rabbit doll comes into play. (At least it explains a little more about why the rabbit doll is important in the first part of the story).



“Now, what do you mean by that?”

“I am quite certain you have read a book, have you not?” Cat ventured.

“Oh, I read many as a child.”

“Then perhaps you understand,” lectured the cat, sidestepping a clump of soil in the airy halls of the mine, “that there is no use of a book without pictures or conversations.”

“Well, it would be less fulfilling with no pictures, though books may not require any,” Alice answered, looking in disgust at the dirt underneath her fingernails.

“But you do agree that pictures help the mind to comprehend what is trying to be conveyed?”

“Very much, so.”

Liked that part also. Reminds me how when I was young I would always want to read picture books then books without pictures.

“This is no trick,” the cat responded. “You were our meta-essence; our sanity, Alice. You were the only thing keeping us alive. When you left us, you lost all of your sanity. Wonderland, though impossible as it seems, lies within the depths of your mind. When you lost your sanity, so did Wonderland. We were transformed, Alice. It was all because of you.”

Liked how this paragraph ties together as to why Wonderland was so…unhappy.

“I cannot fight the Red Queen,” said she.

The cat frowned, but before he could say a word, Alice’s smile broadened.

“…without a weapon.”

And let the fighting began!

Anyways, good chapter and can’t wait for the next one!

;134; ~Good night, and good luck~
 

Sike Saner

Peace to the Mountain
THE CAT PWNS.

Everything about him is just boss as all hell. The way he looks, the way he talks...wow. I just love the guy. So yeah, his presence in this chapter made me smile. ^^

Highlights of Ch. 2:

neon swirl of blazing, electric blue luminescence

Pretteh.

The sound of crunching gears and ticking clocks flew by on strings of horrid music.

More Deadsy-ness! =D You ought to be writing lyrics, seriously. ^^

However, Alice did not pay attention to the mushrooms, but to the surrounding walls of dehydrated magma that shot up around her to the surface of the sky…or rather, to the rabbit-hole. At the tips of the walls, it seemed they had broken and smashed to pieces the moment they touched the dimensional gateway that coiled up to the darkness above, jagged like teeth, ready to swallow any intruder that tumbled from the ghastly heavens.

Very cool.

This place seemed as though it had a diseased ambience.

*hugs you for the use of the phrase “diseased ambience”* ^^

He looked as though he had scarcely eaten, and had been maimed by time and macabre melancholy.

Bossness… *_*

A seeping fog of frightened guilt was beginning to overtake her.

^^ Nice.

The heart is treacherous…the heart betrays…the heart will kill…the heart only takes…

OMFG COOOOOOOOL… *_*

“Slavery and happiness do not dwell in the same house,” said he.

Wow…That’s powerful. o_o

She could taste the anger and dread of and against the ways that had curdled their world into a decomposing carcass of mass sadness.

Mmm. ^^
 

CHeSHiRe-CaT

A Curious Breed
Thanks, Sike and Bay ^^ I have a lovely time writing these. And I post now to say that A L I C E is still alive XDDDD I'm still working on Chapter III, but I need to get some schoolwork done as well @_@
 
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