I think (regardless of the plot plan) that when you're writing any piece from the point of view as a Pokemon, or indeed any creature that isn't human, that you need to pay attention to how it would see the world around it.
Taking Electrike as the example... it's a small dog-like creature, so it's likely to have a better sense of smell than us. (Odor Sleuth being part of its movepool reflects that.) It's also smaller so how it sees/regards things is going to be different to how we see it. (A quick check says they get to be 0.6m tall). Look into any mentions of how it behaves in pokedex entries or the like as well and see if you can incorporate that into your writing, and also look into how dogs act, particularly if mistreated. Try to get the reader to feel like they are an Electrike, and it'll have more impact on the reader that way.
This also means that you'd likely want to be sure to show rather than tell facts, and take note on how you describe things.
Pokémon being mistreated plots are certainly not uncommon, and there are a number out there that exist from the POV of the Pokemon as well, so I can't say that doing that alone would be novel enough (at least without a good delivery to back it up as well; if you have the latter that'd go a long way). One aspect I think that would help is incorporating how the Electrike feels into the story along with what it does about it/why. If it doesn't try to leave the trainer - why? Maybe loyalty, or clinging onto the memory when things were better? If she did try to escape what then? What happened when she was reclaimed? How did the trainer react? And so forth. In other words, try to have more happening in the story than just the Electrike telling us she is sad because ___.
Ramble ramble that's as much as I'll say now while doing study I should be doing without distractions. If something didn't make sense then ask about it!
Thanks, I'll keep that in mind. And yes, she's loyal and young.
Ok, even if I could post this in Fic Ideas, this is the same topic concerning this:
So, Electrike wakes up with her family and sees the sky and Wingull flying. The wind blows, and she smiles along with her siblings. They run around and chew on berries that were dropped. Then the Electrike brothers glance at the egg and they secured it by keeping it between them. The main Electrike shifts to her mother and father Manectric and sleeps with them.
The next morning, the brothers woke up their sister and told her that their parents are captured by trainers with their strange red and white ball. The sister cringed and told them that they have to get them back. But bullets of fire hits her and she fell down. The brothers glanced at her, but the sister smells a crispy and fresh smell coming.
Then an eleven year old trainer with a red bandanna, a red coat with a yellow zipper, black pants and red sneakers with Combusken, Aron, Lombre, Mightyena and a Masquerain appears. The sister tells her brothers to get the egg and run away. The brother asks what she would do. She then says that she will be all right since she's the older sibling.
The other brother cries but a Mud Slap from Aron hits the Egg and the brothers quickly jumped and got it, and they ran away. The trainer commands Combusken to use Double Kick. And the Combusken dashes with Quick Attack and kicks Electrike. She gets up on her legs and prepares to use Thunder Wave. But Combusken dodges and uses Ember and it sends Electrike to the ground.
Then the trainer throws the Poke Ball and she's caught. The trainer congratulates Aron and Combusken and he jumps on Mightyena to dash to Mauville.
That's a prelude. The real one shot is when it starts at the beach near Mauville where they get to practice cutting trees and rocks. The trainer observes Combusken breaking a boulder with Double Kick, Aron using Metal Claw that slashes the rocks, Masquerain almost tearing a tree with Gust, Mightyena gnawing a tree with Ice Fang, and Lombre cutting a boulder with Razor Leaf.
Then the trainer nods his head with a smile and tells Electrike to break the boulder. Electrike shakes and barks worryingly at the trainer since she can't break it with an non effective move. Then the trainer tells her to use Quick Attack to cut the tree. She does and the tree falls on her. He tells her to get out now, but Masquerain blows the tree away.
Electrike glances at her trainer walking to her, having a grin on his face. She crouches down and shakes. Then he walks away and all the Pokemon follows him. One day at Verdanturf, Electrike says hi to Mightyena, but Mightyena turns her head away, which makes her sad. But Combusken goes to Electrike and sits with her. He smiles at Electrike and says that he won't hurt her. Electrike says that she's glad and she wonders what's that trainer's problem. Combusken says that he wants all of us to be strong, and he says that you shouldn't subject to his attitude. Electrike smiles and thanks