Aaron's Pokemon Adventure!

[~Water Lucario~]

Okay so this is my first comic and it has probably been done by heaps of other people but since it is my first I want to show it.

Note: Dont make posts about how the font is not right. I know this already and chose to make the font different but if you know a font that looks better then post it.

Ep.1 The First Pokemon
Ep.2 The battle!

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Credit: The Spiriters Resource-Super Cool Site!

 

[Saorio]

It's not "Pretty good" It's S**T.

Sprites - Crap. The recolour of Prof. Birch as Aaron's dad is the worst I've ever seen.

Storyline - It's crappy, cliched plot with absolutely no thought put into it.

Spelling & grammer - Dude, I assume your over 9-years-old, right? Because if you are you need some serious help. And this is coming from a 12-year-old.

This comic honestly has no hope. I give it a 3/10. Poor.

 

[~Water Lucario~]

So sorry Saorio that my first ever comic was not as good as yours *sarcasm*. Secondly I bet the Pokemon Odyssey comic is not your first and it is not that good, The speech bubles are out of place and you have to much adult content for a 12 year old. Finally your banner really needs work cos it is LAME.

*To The Next People Only Post Constructive Advice*

 

[Avegaille]

Okay, let's see on how we can help out improve your comic... *just as soon as it loads... ;;;*

First off, it seems that the setting seems a bit small, don't you think? Try zooming in or something. If you don't know how to do that, this is one of the most slowest way (but at least efficient) way to zoom into the setting. If you use Paint, Zoom in by 2x, Print Screen it, paste it in a new Paint Window, and there you go. Which also goes the same for the sprites.

Second, your frames doesn't seem so neat to look at. Try having only one size and arrange them accordingly. Makes it look decent and neat.

And third, Pokemon Journey Comics are getting too common nowadays. ._. It's not a joke. As much as possible, if you're going to make a comic, make it look like that it isn't an ordinary Pokemon Journey.

Hopefully you can improve better on your next comic... ~_^

 

[~Water Lucario~]

Avegaille, Your advice really helps! thanks for the zooming in tip. Advice like that actually will help me make better comics so thanks.

 

[Saorio]

It IS my first, budyboy. And you obviously don't take criticism very well. I'm not saying my comic was particularly good, but it sure as hell was better than yours. Now go back to school, and learn some spelling and grammer, will ya? Too much adult content for a 12-year-old? It's called maturity, look it up.

Look mate, I'm not as sad as you. I have a life, a girlfriend and not only that, I sure as HELL am smarter than you, and generally BETTER than you. It's the truth, deal with it.

Pokemon Odyssey:
Good sprites
Ok plot. (Used a brain to think it up.)
Good characters
And not as stupid as YOUR comic.

Aaro's Pokemon adventure:
S**t sprites. *shudders.*
Generic, boring and dumb plot.
Crappy characters. Aaron and his dad just don't seem f**king human, at all.
...Just...dumb...

Look, the odyssey is better than this CRAP.

 

[Konosuke]

^I like how you DONT do S**T to help him and just basically insulting him...Great help you are.

Anyway, i gotta agree with Ave. Pokemon Journey comic's are so common, that it aint funny anymore. Otherwise, i have no other problems with the comic.

 

[Totoro]

...I sure as HELL am smarter than you, and generally BETTER than you. It's the truth, deal with it...

And Saorio, I say to you.

...I sure as HELL am smarter than you, and generally BETTER than you. It's the truth, deal with it...

No need to be completely and utterly rude!

Anyways, RWR, I think you could develop the storyline a tad more. Give it a plot, it's a bit repetative at the moment. Also, make each comic longer, so that he readers don't finish it within' the minute.

And, to Saorio, you need A LOT of work on your comic to. How about you keep speech/text in each cell? Works a lot better. Lets just say RWR first comic is beter than yours altogether. K?

 

[Stanley]

Stop insulting him. You're not doing anything you help him. Don't think you're just so good soon he will beat you know.
All right. This is O.K comic. Just a few grammer/spelling mistakes. I suppose you should add a border to the speech bubble or too stingy.
These kind of journey comics are realy common. Think about a good plot. Use A Main Custom Character. Brendan is "Overused".

Let's see. You should check out the Comic Tutorial Thread.

- Rating: 7.6/10

 

[Sahaqiel]

Guys!Guys! I've been in a flame war, not that pretty. First thing Saorio needs to do is stop being immature. (That's right, you're trying to act grown by using adult content, wishing you were grown? Well you're not, get over it.) Using curse words won't stop a person from having flaws, and saying you're better than someone is way conceited. Second thing, Rukario-wave rider. Ok, now, if you don't sink to his level, he won't bother you. However, the spriting, and the grammar do need tremendous help. You should probably look for sprites right here on Serebii. (Like the smileys) And, seriously, Pokemon Journey comics sprouted in the like, hundreds when I joined. When making a comic you should have a set frame size, make a sprite sheet, then try your hand at it. Also, if you want to recolor, then go to a tutorial on the fan sprite section of these forums. Try and run things through Microsoft Word, and if you don't have it, then say the sentence out loud a few times, maybe ask a friend. (I could teach you in unnoficial lessons if you'd like) Keep trying, but I don't think this comic will survive here. (Make another one with improvements)
Keep Level-headedness!,
Sahaqiel
P.S-(To Saorio, you apparently have not grasped the concept of constructive critisism. You really want to be flamed? Here)

 

[Saorio]

Look, I never said my comic was good; it sucks. My comic truly does seriously suck balls. I admit that. But it's better than this comic in so many different ways, ok?

 

[Stanley]

Allright. But pay a little more respect.

 

[Sapphire Skitty]

Good God Saorio!It's his first comic give the guy a break!No one was saying your comic sucked before you started being rude!What Sahaquil said is great advice.

 

[Sahaqiel]

Why thank you above person, who bears a striking resemblence in name to an old, beloved member who recently was deleted for not visiting the site in months. (Rock Skitty) (But you spelled my name wrong, people do that a lot)
Maybe you should use actual reviews on Saorio's comic, instead of flames. (Don't go too far down, my post is as long as a fly's life) People do not grasp the concept of real, how shall I say it?... friendliness. I rejected humanity, and it's flaws, and gained a large sense of friendliness. (I hug my friends randomely now) So don't try what I did, now I am considered stranger in the eyes of people I don't even know.RWR should also have an apology, (an official one, PMed and such) Experience gives you things you want, and regret. (Like the awareness you didn't do anything for the first two years of your life, and great emotional pain) So all try and be friends, and move forward in life, however much you want to move backwards. RWR, I will gladly teach you unofficial lessons, if you wish.
Be happy,
Sahaqiel

 

[extremegunner]

First thing first, how bout you try and make an overworld sprites of your own? It's not hard, anybody above the age of 5 should be able to do it. That recolour birch have just crossed the line of crappiness. Do not use the default paint colours or anything close to it. And the journey thing... well your gonna have more critics screaming 'Cliche! Cliche!'. Try to border up your panels as well and try to keep the panels of the same size so that it would look alot neater.

As for the thicked-skinned Saorio, i don't think your comic is any better than this one and thus, you have no right to use harsh words such as s**t or stupid on this comic, not that anyone should anyways. You should have the decency to expect people to be upset with your choice of rude word usage, thus this comic maker have every right to be angry. You're not critisizing, you're on the edge of being a flamebait, and finally insulted the comic maker's intellect. Your comparison of your comic to this comic phail'D/Infinity x Infinity, made me laugh even, but of course it was another form of insult yet again! If anybody were to apologise, i think it's you to the comic maker. Next time, try to critic like an intelligent person like you claim yourself to be.

 

[~Water Lucario~]

Well thanks for the adivice and support everyone, I think I will stop this comic and maybe create one that does not include Pokemon Trainers.
Thanks!

 

[Saorio]

Rukario-wave rider, I'm really sorry. Don't stop making this comic. If you like it then go ahead and do it, ok?

 

[~Water Lucario~]

Don't worry Saorio, I can't be bothered with it anymore anyway. I enjoy reading your comic though.

 

[Sahaqiel]

Good to see you're on level ground, here. You, see, when making a comic, you are basically owing it to yourself and others to try to improve. These things are pixeled arguments. Go to the rule section and read them through, then go to comic tutorials. (Seriously though, I don't really think you should continue this comic unless you delete the flawed ones and use better ones in place of them, request a name change for the thread, spell "destiny" right, and then start anew) lol. Anywayz, you should probably study on this strange skill called comic making,
Sahaqiel

 

[Divine_Light]

Hey Rukario-Wave Rider,
Just ignore all the bad comments its alright for your first attempt, (and i think Saorio should get a warning for that), To get better at spriting your should watch an episode of pokemon and try making a scene from that episode maybe a battle scene, an overworld scene anything, And one last thing to say don't give up you have fans waiting for more edisodes