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As the title suggests, I have tweaked and picked at my old fic, Afresh. It was Animé-based, but obviously now, there are new captures with the Battle Frontier, and they are captures that I would want to happen. Now, the Prologue is pretty much the same, with a few little changes here anf there. I need help though, which will be greatly appreciated. You see, I'm not sure where to start the story off. I'd like a good point in the Battle Frontier to start, that incorporates everything including and before the egg hatching. No matter where it is, I will put the rest of the main Animé events into the story, but not fillers, so it will go along until the end of the battle frontier. However, I really wanted it to be my own story, so as you can see, I'm at a halt. Can anyone help me? For now, here is the Prologue.
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Prologue: Things Where We Left Them
When Ash left her once more, Misty had travelled back home on a blimp, reminiscing the times she remembered with him and Brock. There she was, a young red-haired girl sitting in a stuffy blimp with no-one to talk to, especially since Togepi was gone.
“No,” she reminded herself, “Togetic.” This sudden correction threw Misty, knocking her completely out of her usual state. She didn’t talk the whole journey home. Even after she got there she was quiet for a while, always cleaning the pool, or feeding the Pokémon. Either way, she had not been herself. It had been weeks since that time, and a lot had happened. She was now the joint owner of the Cerulean Gym with her sister Daisy. The reason for this was because her other sisters, Violet and Lily, were always off doing their own thing. Daisy had gotten stronger too, training with her much more competent sister Misty. Her Dewgong could now take on a lot of challengers, as could the Luvdisc she owned, Kasurin. Especially since the time of the Luvdisc captures, everything had gotten back to normal. Misty and Daisy would be training by the pool everyday, leaving Daisy’s Luvdisc and Misty’s own Luvdisc, Luvurin, to their own devices. Daisy had enjoyed training. It left her with fewer losses than she liked. Misty sometimes changed from her beige jacket and shorts, into a much smaller swimsuit, ideal for swimming down to see her Pokémon. On some days, Daisy would come down too, helping with the feeding and cleaning. Where our story really starts, is down there. On a lightly snowed morning, Misty and Daisy both swam down into the pool, saying hello to the Pokémon who liked to swim higher up. Today, they were going to see the biggest Pokémon there.
“I still don’t see why I have to, like, come with you today Misty,” said Daisy, looking worried. Misty gave her a stern look.
“We are both going down;” began Misty, “because I need to see Gyarados and it takes two people to care of him. Daisy groaned. She never liked going to see Gyarados. He was only ever nice to Misty, always fussing to make sure she was happy. Never was he happy with Daisy. He seemed to hate her. This was why Daisy always had her little contingency plan. She grabbed a small red and white ball from her waist, pressing the button at the front. With a click, it enlarged itself. Then Daisy threw it.
“Come on out, Dewgong,” she said, smiling. The ball opened, white light bursting out of it. When the light cleared, the creature left behind was a large white mystical type thing. It had a long white tail with a frilly fin at the end, and a similarly coloured horn on its head. It had completely black eyes, all apart from the whitish glint from the lights above.
“Gong?” it said, slightly raising its voice at the end to form a questioning tone. Daisy looked happy at least.
“Hey Dewgong,” she said smiling, “We have to go and see Gyarados today, so you know what to do, don’t you?”
“Gong, Dewgong,” said the water Pokémon, nodding its perfectly formed head. It began to swim right next to Daisy, seemingly protecting her. Misty looked at her sister and sighed. She always did this when they went to see him. She couldn’t see why, but Misty was sure that Daisy was scared of him.
As they descended, they met the pair of Pokémon. Small pink heart-shaped creatures with what seemed like a beak. The one had a small crown on her head. That was Kasurin. The other was Misty’s Luvdisc, Raburin.
“Hey Raburin,” said Misty, keeping the same happy tone as she always used with her water Pokémon, “How’s the water?”
“Luv, Luvdisc, Luv,” he said with a smile on his face. Daisy greeted her Luvdisc in a similar way, getting a similar reply. The two “Rendezvous Pokémon” as they were known, swam off together, staying close. Further and further down came a loud bellow of a noise. It was obvious they were getting close.
As the two siblings continued on, with Dewgong swimming around Daisy, they finally came to the sandy bottom of the pool their Pokémon lived in. In the distance, they could see Violet’s Seaking and Lily’s Goldeen playing together. However, Daisy was not looking that way. She was looking in front of her, shivering with fear. When Misty followed her line of sight, she was greeted by a huge pair of red eyes. With moving back, Misty could see that they belonged to a large head with fins, fur, and a huge three-way horn in the middle of its head. Its whole face was blue, matching the massively long body that was attached. Along the body were little wing-like fins, each of them waving with the motion in the water. It all ended at a huge fin at the end, wafting like a fan on a warm day. Misty smiled as she was smiled at from the ever open mouth of one of her favourite Pokémon, Gyarados…
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How did you like that? Hope it's good for all those veteran reviewers out there. So if you can help me with my question, I'd be extremely greatful.
Hunter
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Prologue: Things Where We Left Them
When Ash left her once more, Misty had travelled back home on a blimp, reminiscing the times she remembered with him and Brock. There she was, a young red-haired girl sitting in a stuffy blimp with no-one to talk to, especially since Togepi was gone.
“No,” she reminded herself, “Togetic.” This sudden correction threw Misty, knocking her completely out of her usual state. She didn’t talk the whole journey home. Even after she got there she was quiet for a while, always cleaning the pool, or feeding the Pokémon. Either way, she had not been herself. It had been weeks since that time, and a lot had happened. She was now the joint owner of the Cerulean Gym with her sister Daisy. The reason for this was because her other sisters, Violet and Lily, were always off doing their own thing. Daisy had gotten stronger too, training with her much more competent sister Misty. Her Dewgong could now take on a lot of challengers, as could the Luvdisc she owned, Kasurin. Especially since the time of the Luvdisc captures, everything had gotten back to normal. Misty and Daisy would be training by the pool everyday, leaving Daisy’s Luvdisc and Misty’s own Luvdisc, Luvurin, to their own devices. Daisy had enjoyed training. It left her with fewer losses than she liked. Misty sometimes changed from her beige jacket and shorts, into a much smaller swimsuit, ideal for swimming down to see her Pokémon. On some days, Daisy would come down too, helping with the feeding and cleaning. Where our story really starts, is down there. On a lightly snowed morning, Misty and Daisy both swam down into the pool, saying hello to the Pokémon who liked to swim higher up. Today, they were going to see the biggest Pokémon there.
“I still don’t see why I have to, like, come with you today Misty,” said Daisy, looking worried. Misty gave her a stern look.
“We are both going down;” began Misty, “because I need to see Gyarados and it takes two people to care of him. Daisy groaned. She never liked going to see Gyarados. He was only ever nice to Misty, always fussing to make sure she was happy. Never was he happy with Daisy. He seemed to hate her. This was why Daisy always had her little contingency plan. She grabbed a small red and white ball from her waist, pressing the button at the front. With a click, it enlarged itself. Then Daisy threw it.
“Come on out, Dewgong,” she said, smiling. The ball opened, white light bursting out of it. When the light cleared, the creature left behind was a large white mystical type thing. It had a long white tail with a frilly fin at the end, and a similarly coloured horn on its head. It had completely black eyes, all apart from the whitish glint from the lights above.
“Gong?” it said, slightly raising its voice at the end to form a questioning tone. Daisy looked happy at least.
“Hey Dewgong,” she said smiling, “We have to go and see Gyarados today, so you know what to do, don’t you?”
“Gong, Dewgong,” said the water Pokémon, nodding its perfectly formed head. It began to swim right next to Daisy, seemingly protecting her. Misty looked at her sister and sighed. She always did this when they went to see him. She couldn’t see why, but Misty was sure that Daisy was scared of him.
As they descended, they met the pair of Pokémon. Small pink heart-shaped creatures with what seemed like a beak. The one had a small crown on her head. That was Kasurin. The other was Misty’s Luvdisc, Raburin.
“Hey Raburin,” said Misty, keeping the same happy tone as she always used with her water Pokémon, “How’s the water?”
“Luv, Luvdisc, Luv,” he said with a smile on his face. Daisy greeted her Luvdisc in a similar way, getting a similar reply. The two “Rendezvous Pokémon” as they were known, swam off together, staying close. Further and further down came a loud bellow of a noise. It was obvious they were getting close.
As the two siblings continued on, with Dewgong swimming around Daisy, they finally came to the sandy bottom of the pool their Pokémon lived in. In the distance, they could see Violet’s Seaking and Lily’s Goldeen playing together. However, Daisy was not looking that way. She was looking in front of her, shivering with fear. When Misty followed her line of sight, she was greeted by a huge pair of red eyes. With moving back, Misty could see that they belonged to a large head with fins, fur, and a huge three-way horn in the middle of its head. Its whole face was blue, matching the massively long body that was attached. Along the body were little wing-like fins, each of them waving with the motion in the water. It all ended at a huge fin at the end, wafting like a fan on a warm day. Misty smiled as she was smiled at from the ever open mouth of one of her favourite Pokémon, Gyarados…
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How did you like that? Hope it's good for all those veteran reviewers out there. So if you can help me with my question, I'd be extremely greatful.
Hunter