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After Hoenn: The Journey of Faith (AdvanceShipping)

Power Shot

Reignited with Ego!
After Hoenn: The Journey of Faith​

This fic is rated PG-13, for alcoholic references and some sexual diolague.

Note that this shipping fic is something for me to do. Meaning, I’m really bored right now and I want reviews on my stories. No one seems to like reviewing my Zelda Fics, so I’m trying my hand at shipping.

This story will take place ten years after Hoenn, or Pokemon Advanced Battle. It will be the story of May and Ash, as they attempt to find each other.

It will dabble a tad in Contest Shipping, but it will be important to the story.

Now for a speech: I try to venture outside the standards when I think of an idea. I think outside the box, what haven't I seen in an Advance fic. Bear that in mind.

Ages:
Ash- Twenty-five
May- Twenty-four
Max- Nineteen
Brock: Thirty
Drew: Twenty-five


Those are all the ages I feel like writing now. It will update if I need to.

Chapter One- Reunion of Lost Friends

It was raining.

May peddled home, anxious not to be late. Her husband Drew never did like her going out on the foolish vehicle, as he called it. He just wants to control me, May thought sadly, a tear falling on her cheek. It had been three years since that fateful day, her wedding to the coordinator, and she wished she could just take it back.

Back then, Drew loved her, cherished her, and worshiped the ground she walked on. Now he was controlling, always demanding things of her, never satisfied. Ever since that day, when she had last seen her friends.

Brock was in Kanto, a rough gym leader of Pewter City. Max still came, though it was never long enough. He had his own journey to complete, for he was a skilled Pokemon trainer by now. They had drifted away from her, leaving her with Drew.

And what of Ash? No one knew where he was, not even his own mother. He had left on one final journey, but never came back. The rumors were he had given up his dream of being a Pokemon master, that he had died, far away from civilization, without Pikachu at his side. Ash had given his Pokemon to Oak, the professor in Pallet Town, except for Pikachu, who had been given to Max.

He had left everyone heartbroken with grief, still bring May to tears when she remembered that it was her fault he had gone. “I’m sorry Ash,” she whispered to herself for the millionth time, as she came up to her home. Drew provided for her, he was still in the coordinator’s stage, but something in May shut down after her wedding, and she stopped going to competitions, fading away entirely from the face of the world. Now she was known as Drew’s wife, she hadn’t a friend in the world.

Her house was cozy, it wasn’t all that big, but May didn’t care. She and Drew lived on the outskirts of Petalburg, close enough to bike to her mother and father on good days. It had two floors, was built of wood, and was a happy place for Drew.

May, on the other hand, sighed when she reached the house, and went through her door as she had millions of times before. She walked into the kitchen with her shopping, drenched and soaked in its bags.

“I’m home Drew,” she muttered to the house, before setting her shopping down on the chairs in the dining room. She was wearing a coat, a soft blue one, but it did little to stop the cold in her heart.

“Where’d you go?” came back the voice of her husband, who followed the voice towards her. “Did you get the stuff?” He was taller now, and muscular than in the days past. Behind him, the TV was turned on to the Coordinator’s Channel, playing footage from an earlier battle about himself.

“To the store, and yes,” May answered, sinking down into a chair in front of the TV. “What’s this?” she asked, looking at what was on the TV. There was a picture of her husband and his prized Pokemon.

“Oh, they asked me if they could do a special about me,” Drew replied, digging through the sacks to get to his things. “All right! Pokeblocks! Thanks May.” He walked over, and kissed her forehead.

“It’s nothing,” May answered wearily, as her husband walked away.

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Far away, in the desert of Orre, a man walked through the streets.

He had a mane of black hair, grown long from years of neglect, coming up to being compared to a lion‘s mane. His eyes were fierce, intense from the years of training, the color of night. His face was built along the lines of a trainer, for that was what he was.

Ash had long since discarded the ridiculous hat he had worn for many years. His attire was more in tune with a rouge. He now wore a red vest, jackets in Orre were considered useless. His muscles had long before grown in bulk, giving him the physique of a movie star. He wore a v-neck white shirt under the vest, with a little necklace tied around his neck.

His pants had not changed, he still wore the same brand he had always donned, but now they were colored black. Steeled-toed boots were worn in place of sneakers, and he now had on different gloves, black and reaching to halfway up his forearm.

He was very intimidating, and everyone treated him with the utmost respect, he had a team that could kill.

He may have given up Pikachu to Max, but his fighters and he had done nothing but train for three years. He was mocked only once for having a team of not fully evolved Pokemon, and no one dare to insult them again.

His Pokemon had not evolved much, but they had grown in strength. Grovyle, his grass Pokemon was first, followed by Quilava, which had evolved from his little fire type Pokemon. Third was Swellow, a flying type with such speed it flew like a blur. His fourth Pokemon was Muk, a poison type with stench to match. His fifth team member was Donphan, a ground type that had evolved from Phanny. And last, his water type was Kingler, a crab Pokemon. He had only taken those six from Oak, but they were enough.

He had given up on being a Pokemon Master, though it was his dream. He now lived in the desert region of Oore, earning his money from waged battles, illegal everywhere except the desert country. His faith had been shattered, as his ability to love.

May, he thought miserably, she did not haunt his dreams as she once did, but Ash had long since lost his emotions. He had died inside and out, spreading the rumor of his death, for he wished to be left alone.

His love had been great for her, he missed everyone dreadfully. Brock and Max no longer knew where he was, Pikachu had probably forgotten about him. He had left Pikachu with Max, for he did not wish to condemn Pikachu to his life.

He walked into his favorite bar, The Flopping Magicarp, and ordered their strongest drink, shoving the coins into the waiter’s hand.

“Get me the usual,” he muttered, his voice had matured to, becoming gruff through years of exposure to desert sand. The waiter was still standing near him, as if he remembered something.

“NOW,” Ash ordered, causing the waiter to jump.

“Y-yes s-sir, mister Keean,” the waiter stammered, running off to the kitchens.

Keean, the assumed name Ash had adapted since coming to Orre. Ever since he had decided to leave his former life, he fashioned himself a new name, as everyone believed him to be dead. Just as he liked it, here he could forget about May.

May…

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May woke up with a start in front of the fireplace in her home. She had felt cold and put in a few logs, Drew was far too busy training to notice her. On her chest was a copy of her favorite book, Pirates of the Hoenn Seas. Ash’s last gift to her before he disappeared.

The front cover was dedicated to the portrait of two lover’s sharing a kiss upon the pirate ship, excitement she longed for. She looked at the ring on her finger, and sighed in resignation.

She used to have such an exciting life, traveling everywhere with Ash, Max, and Brock. She saw such amazing things, and found true love.

But not with Ash, who was so absorbed in his Pokemon he never paid attention to what was right under his nose. Drew joined them, and he and May came together, though May often wondered if it was all just to get Ash to notice her.

Regardless, he left her right after her wedding. Drew had been so nice and caring, but marriage had revealed a side of him that caused May to stop loving him. Ash destroyed all his contacts, and died far away.

May began to cry again, she was a prisoner of her own confused feelings. Tears dripping down her cheeks, she heard a knock on the door.

Who could that be? May wondered, brushing away her tears and walking towards the door. Drew is the one with the key, not me.

“Who is it?” she asked the door tentatively, worried of the thought of burglars.

“It’s me sis,” came back a muffled voice, but May knew who it was.

She opened the door to find Max standing out in the rain, along with a tall, tanned gym leader May knew only too well.

“MAX! BROCK!” she shouted in joy, wrapping her arms around both. It had been a year since she’d seen them. Brock looked the same as ever, but Max was now a tall teenager. He still wore his geeky glasses, but had exchanged the clothes he used to wear with a blue sweater and dark blue pants. He also had a fang earring through his left ear. On his shoulder was Pikachu, Ash’s old Pokemon. “It’s been so long.”

“Pika!” it shouted excitedly, leaping off its trainer’s shoulders to the woman.

“It’s nice to see you too May,” Brock replied, releasing her from his massive arms. “I know how it is out here for you.”

“Oh no, everything’s fine,” May answered them, scratching Pikachu‘s ears. “I love it out here.”

Max looked comical. “’I love it out here,’” he imitated in a shrill voice. “Who are you kidding sis?”

“Yeah, you look worse than when we saw you last,” Brock commented, sitting down in the kitchen. “Has life with Drew really got you that down?”

“Pi?” Pikachu asked, concerned.

“No, of course not,” May laughed, playing on the silly and sad act she donned whenever she had guests. “What about you? What brings you all the way here from Kanto Brock?” she inquired, taking their coats away, before sitting down. “Can I get you anything to drink?”

“Yeah, could I have a brew?” Brock asked, reclining in his seat, he’d been journeying for a long time. “I ran into Max while he was battling in Kanto, and he said that you were lonely, so here we are.”

“You traveled all the way to Hoenn to say hi?” May asked incredulously, she didn’t believe it for a minute. She handed Brock the drink, “What are you really here for Brock?” she inquired, sitting back into her favorite chair.

“Is your husband here May?” Brock asked seriously, looking around while sipping the cool beer.

“Yeah, he’s out back. Why?”

“It’s Ash May. We think he’s still alive.”

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Ash wandered out of the bar, it was almost night time. “I really need to stop wasting my days in that place,” he muttered, heading home.

Home for him was deep in the desert, a good two miles out of town. Ash didn’t mind though, he wasn’t a bodybuilder, but he’d managed to live with how far away his home was. It was a simple one floor house, probably abandoned from Wes’s times, when the Shadow Pokemon began. It had a shanty roof, with two rooms, a living room and a bedroom, along with a single bathroom.

Ash needed little, so it suited him nicely. He pushed through his small door to the squander that surrounded his home. The walls were drably colored a grey-yellow color, with much of the wallpaper deteriorating. In his rooms, his furniture consisted of a single couch, a refrigerator, and a bed. On the walls were hung pictures of the Pokemon Ash had traveled with, as well as the many trophies he had won.

Above his bed, there was a picture he had been meaning to remove from his home, but never got around to. It hung in a silver frame, bordered by flowers. In it was a picture of a young woman, with her Pokemon. She had brown hair, eyes that shined like stars, and was the only thing that gave his life happiness.

May’s picture.

“I‘m sorry May,” Ash muttered for the millionth time, before collapsing into his bed and falling asleep. He had his yearly pilgrimage, to wish his mother a happy birthday.

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I know, it sucks for a first chapter, but I would like reviews, it's my first time trying Shipping so I'd like input. It may not seem like much now, but it will get better if I get reviews.

I am not kidding, I desprately need reviews, as I tend to think that all my writing sucks unless told otherwise.
 
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dragonmaster5000

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This story has a pretty good beginning. It could definetely become an excellent story. But there's one thing I don't get. Why did you label the story AAML? Nowadays, that stands for Pokeshipping, and by the looks of your story, it's going to be Advanceshipping. Could you please clear that up for me? Thank you!
 

Power Shot

Reignited with Ego!
Dang it, I knew I'd do something wrong with that. The reason for that is that I don't really follow the shipping community, I just read some of the stories.

I will fix that.
 

Devilrose

Super Coordinator
Looks pretty good, although I'm not an overly big fan of the "far future" type fics. Like dragonmaster5000 said, though, AAML stands for pokeshipping. Grammar and everything looks fine, though.

And...ironically enough...you kinda captured my personal perception of what Drew might turn out like >.> Thats just my opinion of him, though, and characters like him.
 
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dragonmaster5000

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devilrose said:
Looks pretty good, although I'm not an overly big fan of the "far future" type fics. Like dragonmaster5000 said, though, AAML stands for pokeshipping. Grammar and everything looks fine, though.

And...ironically enough...you kinda captured my personal perception of what Drew might turn out like >.> Thats just my opinion of him, though, and characters like him.

Yeah, I just noticed! Nice job Power Shot! You captured Drew's personality perfectly (the adult Drew). Just like in the series currently.
 

Sushi

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Staff member
Super Mod
I thought that was a very nice chapter, and made me quite anxious to read the next one. =D

It's a nice piece of change to see a fic where the cast has grown up already, as it offers an opportunity to portray the characters slightly different than they are right now, and I must say, you've done a great job with that.
The only one's personality I have a problem with is Drew; I have a hard time imagining him being that careless. Hm...but on the other hand, I know many people that changed severely after getting married. I shouldn't complain about that.

May was nicely portrayed, but I hope the 'strong' side of hers will show up in later chapters and that she won't look so gutless for the rest of the story.

Yay....Ash as a tough man, me likey XD I prefer imagining him with short hair, but this is just a stupid fangirl speaking, so don't worry x.X

I've noticed two typos (or things from what I think that they're typos XD)
“Oh, they asked me if the could do a special about me,” Drew replied
I think you forgot a y here.
Ash didn’t mind tough
Hm...I think you meant 'though'.

And I'm totally clueless about XD or wherever this region is mentioned, but I've seen much more people saying Orre, not Oore. Correct me if I'm wrong^^
 

Power Shot

Reignited with Ego!
I honestly have no idea. I saw it spelt Oore in some fics, so that was what I went with.

Drew's personality was unintentional, I had no idea I nailed it, but he will change as the story goes. May is like that right now from emotional drain, she will also change.

I tried to work outside the box, and I hadn't seen a fic where May had already married Drew, so I pieced this together in two days. I felt it would be an interesting approach.

I plan to do the next chapter this weekend, to be honest I don't have too much of an idea on what, because I didn't expect people to review so fast.

I'll get on it when I have time, I still need to do my Zelda fics too, I have no idea why they get so little attention.

Peace out.
 
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Ember

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Awww, the was really sweet. It made me feel a little sad to, but I loved it all the same. I really like how you portrayed their characters, and that you made it different than most of the storys I've read. Overall, keep up the great work!
 

Power Shot

Reignited with Ego!
Yes, I don't do generic fics that everyone has read before. I do my own thing, I always look to see if an idea hasn't been used. Then I make the fic.

A spoiler for the next chapter, which will be out by the end of the weekend.

The chapter's name will be entitled The Birthday Ritual

Enjoy pondering who's birthday it is.
 
Power Shot said:
Yes, I don't do generic fics that everyone has read before. I do my own thing, I always look to see if an idea hasn't been used. Then I make the fic.

A spoiler for the next chapter, which will be out by the end of the weekend.

The chapter's name will be entitled The Birthday Ritual

Enjoy pondering who's birthday it is.
This fic was very good, but also very sad. And the birthday is for Delia. You said it here:
He had his yearly pilgrimage, to wish his mother a happy birthday.
Anyways, it's good. Keep it up!
 

Power Shot

Reignited with Ego!
He he, *knocks self in head for being retarded*

Meganium is quite right, it is Delia's birthday. I almost have it done, but here's a spoil to satisfy you until tomorrow, Monday at latest.

[SPOIL]“You’re one to talk, asking random girls to marry you,” Max interjected. “Do you have any idea what today is?”

“No,” Brock replied, he was confused. “Why is Drew leaving today so bad?”

Hot tears were falling down May’s eyes, wetting her face in downward trails. “It-it was our anniversary today,” she mumbled. “He didn’t even say a word about it, I mentioned it constantly.” Her face fell to her hands in sadness.[/SPOIL]

This will be an important part. But no more 'till tomorrow.
 
Power Shot said:
He he, *knocks self in head for being retarded*

Meganium is quite right, it is Delia's birthday. I almost have it done, but here's a spoil to satisfy you until tomorrow, Monday at latest.

[SPOIL]“You’re one to talk, asking random girls to marry you,” Max interjected. “Do you have any idea what today is?”

“No,” Brock replied, he was confused. “Why is Drew leaving today so bad?”

Hot tears were falling down May’s eyes, wetting her face in downward trails. “It-it was our anniversary today,” she mumbled. “He didn’t even say a word about it, I mentioned it constantly.” Her face fell to her hands in sadness.[/SPOIL]

This will be an important part. But no more 'till tomorrow.
You just made a mistake, thats all. And I can wait!...I hope. And I see you've also been taking your time, and I can see a briliant future for this fic! Like I said before, good luck!
 
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dragonmaster5000

Guest
*bangs head on desk*

The spoilers just make me want to read the next chapter even more! Anyway, I can't wait for the next chapter. Good luck Power Shot!
 

CyberCubed

Yeah, ok!
As others have said above, it's nice reading a fic that is set in the future of the current anime's timeline. Gives you more freedom with the characters personalities, as they all should have changed a lot since they went from kids to adults.

Poor May, I don't like to see her so miserable. :(

I liked the way you handled Ash and Drew. Lots of people think Drew may eventually become more cold hearted and cruel as he gets older. Ash ditching the hat finally was also a nice touch.

Ash giving Pikachu to Max seems a bit odd though. I know this Ash is grown up, but if you ever watch the show consistently you know how dang attached Ash is to Pikachu. To see him hand it over to Max really raises a few questions. That's about the only problem I have, but I guess you did it since you didn't want to bother writing Pikachu in this story.
 

Power Shot

Reignited with Ego!
Oh yes, about Pikachu. I truely wanted him in the fic, but I also wanted Ash not to have him. It will make more sense in upcoming chapters, as you learn more about Max's Pokemon. It has in part to do with Ash leaving.

Expect the next chapter later today. I have the third chapter's name picked out, but this is going to get sadder before you understand everything. There will be an appearance of Team Rocket in later chapters.

Just wait a little longer.
 
I also agree it was weird, and really, I wish they were younger though. Wait! An idea for the last chapter came into my mind!

Ash returns to Kanto alive and wishes he never made the mistake he did. Celibe appears and asks Ash if he would want to go back 10 years back in time to prevent his and May's mistakes, and to remember everything that happened so he won't make the same mistake again. He understands celibe and agrees.
*10 years before*
May DOSEN'T merry Drew.
Ash DOSEN'T go to Orre.
Ash DOSEN'T give Pikachu to Max, but Max STILL becomes a powerfull trainer.
*10 years later*
Ash and May raise thier 5-year old daughter Ashly!

No...Stupid idea.
 

Power Shot

Reignited with Ego!
Thanks for the ideas, but I think I've got everything planned out.

I'M DONE WITH THE CHAPTER! *bows at the head of thunderous applause* I finished it in three days! W00T!

Man, I hate my writing, this is definatly not my best work. It is a filler to get to the good part. Enjoy.

Chapter Two- The Birthday Ritual

“ALIVE?”

May’s voice practically shot through the kitchen, so unbelievable the news.

“Keep it down!” barked Drew’s voice from the training center. “You know that I don’t like distractions when we’re training!”

“Sorry dear,” May called back, the guilty feeling welling in her mind. She turned to her friends, asking, “What do you mean, alive?”

“As in living, breathing, eating, sleeping, drinking-” Max answered, counting off with his fingers.

“Yes, thank you Max,” Brock interrupted, raising a hand. Pikachu hopped from May’s lap back to Brock’s, who began to speak. “We think he’s hidden in Orre, the desert lands in the far west.”

May couldn’t speak, it was too sudden for her. Ash alive? It can’t be true, no matter how much I want it to be. Aloud, she asked, “How do you know this?”

Brock put down the beer, whispering, “Rumor has it he still keeps in touch with his mom in Pallet.”

“What, I can’t hear you,” Max muttered, putting his hand next to his ear. “Say it louder.”

“I SAID, RUMOR HAS IT HE STILL-”

“I SAID, KEEP IT DOWN!” The voice coming from the training room ceased all conversation, and Drew came bounding up the stairs. “Do you have any idea how busy I am?! Go an- oh,” he finished suddenly, spotting Brock and Max at the table. “Brock, Max,” he regarded stiffly, lowering his head in welcome.

“Drew,” the two acknowledged in unison, bowing their heads in response.

“Don’t disturb me,” Drew muttered, his eyes flashing.

“Wouldn’t dream of it,” Brock muttered under his breath. “How much concentration do you need to do the same thing over and over?”

Drew opened his mouth to protest his outrage, but just before he went off, the phone rang. “Lucky,” he muttered, reaching for the phone. “Hello? Drew speaking,” he answered into the phone, ignoring the others.

“…Yeah…Okay,” Drew mumbled into the phone. “Oh my God! Are you kidding me?!” His voice was growing higher in excitement, his face was trembling. “I’ll be right there!” Slamming the phone down, he turned to the others he had previously ignored.

“I’ve been selected for a world champ contest in Pallet!” he practically shouted at them, jumping up and down like a small child, or as Brock might when facing a good-looking woman.

“Hooray,” the others muttered together, but Drew took no notice of their lack of enthusiasm.

“I leave tonight,” he announced. “I have to get there as fast as possible.” He turned to May, saying, “Pack my bags, my wife, I’m heading out on the soonest train.”

“Tonight?” May asked, there was no way he could have forgotten what today was.

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Ash awoke on the sofa, his TV was still on, blaring something about Pallet. He groaned, he felt a pounding in his forehead. Nothing that he couldn’t handle, though, he’d had a hangover many a time before.

It was still dark, the sun had barely risen above the dunes of sand, but it was Ash’s favorite time of day. It was still cool, yet not too cold. Ash yawned, then scratched himself before leaving the house, he had fallen asleep in his clothes.

It was the middle of October, the time of year where Ash made his pilgrimage to the one person that knew he lived. He had not had the heart to let his mother believe he had died, she was his only confidant. On the days nearing her birthday, Ash undertook a journey to Pallet to wish her a happy birthday. Once a year for news, then he returned to his solitude.

He traveled by means of a run-down bus system that circulated Orre, going from one gas pit to another heading for Johto. From there it would be just a day’s travel on the trains to reach Saffron City, a mere one day away from his mother.

The bus was as run down as ever, driven by a man named Jacob, a trucker with greasy red hair and an accent to rival a redneck. “Git in,” the geezer coughed, a cigarette butt in between his lips.

“That stuff’s going to kill you one day old man,” Ash muttered, climbing in at the bus stop.

“Do I preach to you when you lying stoned in the gutter?” sneered the old coot. “No, so don’t be judging my habits Keean.”

“I don’t lie stoned in any gutters, so just drive,” replied the giant, taking his seat near the front. He never did trust the geezer after he’d fallen asleep at the wheel two years ago.

“Money,” answered Jacob, extending a smelly hand that reeked of engine oil. “Ten bucks to the trains.”

Ash didn’t reply, but crammed his hand into his vest pocket to locate his paper money. With a sigh of resignation he handed it over, annoyed yet thankful of the money he’d gotten the week before to pay for the trip.

“Next stop, Johto Train Center!” the geezer hollered, closing the bus doors and stepping on the gas.

Ash sighed as the bus pulled away from his life. Now it’s time to see how everyone else’s is.

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“I’m going to find Ash,” May muttered, stuffing food into a small backpack similar to the one she used to carry. “I can’t live like this anymore.”

“Whoa,” Brock answered, grabbing her shoulder. “Isn’t that just a tiny bit impulsive?”

“You’re one to talk, asking random girls to marry you,” Max interjected. “Do you have any idea what today is?”

“No,” Brock replied, he was confused. “Why is Drew leaving today so bad?”

Hot tears were falling down May’s eyes, wetting her face in downward trails. “It-it was our anniversary today,” she mumbled. “He didn’t even say a word about it, I mentioned it constantly.” Her face fell to her hands in sadness.

Max knew, but had kept quiet, though he knew his sister remember, even if her husband didn’t. He held up a hand. May looked up at her annoying little brother.

“Need a hand packing?” Max asked, taking a piece of her spare clothing and placing it in her bag.

May didn’t speak for a moment, all his life Max had been set on breaking her, yet now he wished to help.

“Thank you,” May answered softly, and did not regret it.

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“Is it me, or does this stupid trip keep getting longer every year?”

Ash sighed deeply as the train made fall in Saffron City, Sabrina’s hometown. It brought back plenty of memories, how he traveled to get Haunter, and defeated Sabrina with laughter, winning his badge. That was such a long time ago, Ash thought sadly, shouldering the old backpack he had on. He still had a day to go before he was in Pallet, and he didn’t want to waste time.

It was still raining through the roads as he traversed the land of Kanto. Ash barely noticed the weather, owing to the extreme terrain of Orre, cold at night and scorching by day, so he made it with nary a sniffle. It took all day of hiking through backwoods, but soon the town of Pallet loomed in on him.

The roads seemed a bustle of activity, despite the rain. Tons of people seemed to be getting ready for something, the big event Ash hadn’t paid attention to on the news. Unknown to him, the people were preparing for a Pokemon contest, the star of course being Drew, May’s husband.

The house was as it always had been, ever since the days of Ash’s childhood. It was a simple two-story design, like many of the houses out in those parts. Its paint was getting worn, Mr. Mime was clearly neglecting that part of the cleanup.

Ash walked up the small path that led up to the house, he could tell she was in there. Her favorite soap, Pokemon of our Lives, was playing loud and clear to Ash’s ears. He knocked once on the door, making the door sway from its bolting. Note, I need to control my strength, he filed away to the deep corners of his mind, as a voice came from inside the home.

“Who is it?” asked Delia’s muffled voice from behind the wood.

“I’m here Mom,” answered her son. “I made it safely.”

“Ash, thank goodness!” Delia exclaimed in relief, it was very late for him, he usually arrived earlier on this day. “I’m so glad to see you safe.” She didn’t give him time to dodge, and wrapped him in an enormous bear hug. Some things never change.

Yes…Mom…need air,” Ash gasped from his mother’s back-breaking hug. Despite his impressive muscles, his mother would always be stronger.

“Oh, sorry honey,” Delia answered, releasing her son to gulp down air. “Guess I don’t know my own strength.”

“Man, and I thought I was strong,” Ash muttered. “How do you always keep doing that to me, even after these years?”

“Diet and exercise are the best ways to stay in shape,” Delia answered, wagging her finger. “not the strain you put on yourself Ashy.”

“I happen to enjoy Orre,” replied the son, who sat down in his favorite chair.

MIIIIIIIIMMMMMMMMEEEEEEEE!!!!” shouted Delia’s Pokemon, Mr. Mime, a mime Pokemon Delia had befriended while on the run from the circus. It blazed through the living room, knocking Ash from the chair, and began to scrub furiously at the floor and chair.

“What the-” Ash exclaimed, land flat on his butt on the floor. “What’s wrong with Mr. Mime?”

“Oh my Ash, I’m sorry, but you should have cleaned up a bit before sitting on the furniture,” Delia explained smiling. “You know how much Mimey hates dirt.”

“Yeah, forgot,” Ash mumbled, going to the door to wipe his shoes, which had soaked up quite a large amount of dirt and mud from his travels. “I keep forgetting it’s the raining season.”

“It‘s all right Ash,” Delia answered sympathetically. “Take off your shoes.”

Some things do never change, Ash thought, removing the heavy boots and drying off.

“Can I get you some hot cocoa?” asked Delia, heading for the kitchen.

“Uh, no thanks Mom,” Ash replied, for all the good it would do him. “But if you insist,” he added, seeing the ingredients all ready laid out.

“Sure thing,” Delia answered happily, it was so nice to see her son. “How’ve you been?” she asked absent-mindedly, measuring the chocolate.

“Not bad, I’m starting to like Orre,” Ash said. “It has good training for both me and my Pokemon.”

“Are you sure?” Delia asked, handing her son the cocoa. “We’ve missed you.”

“Yeah, I know,” Ash answered. “I miss Pikachu a lot, but I know I did the right thing. It’s hard not seeing Brock and Max, though I hear about Max every once in a while in news.”

He sipped the hot chocolate, preparing for the news he was really here for. “How’s May?” he asked, not looking at Delia.

“Ash,” Delia began softly, “she’s miserable. I can see it in Max’s eyes when he comes here to visit. Drew doesn’t treat her well.”

“I didn’t want to do it Mom,” Ash muttered, sinking into his now-spotless chair. “I thought she would be happy this way.”

“I know you did what you thought was best, but Ash,” Delia replied, taking a seat next to him. “Everyone can be wrong. After they married, Drew changed, I’ve told you about it every year, it keeps getting worse.”

Ash felt this guilt every year, he had left May with Drew and he lived with his choice, as terrible as it was. “H-how could I have done that do her Mom?”

“Because you wanted to make her happy,” Delia answered, patting his head gently. “It was hard, you told me so, to entrust her to Drew. Marriage changes people, some good and some bad.”

“But did I do the right thing Mom?” Ash asked, feeling the surge of unshed tears welling up inside him.

“You did what you thought was right, and that’s all that matters.” Ash wasn’t crying, but Delia knew he wanted to. “I’ll tell you what Ash. Stay here for tonight, and ask Drew himself.”

“What do you mean?” Ash asked, raising his head up.

“There’s a contest going on here in Pallet,” Delia explained. “Drew was invited to be a guest of honor, I saw it on the news. Go and ask him yourself if it’s so hard to believe.”

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Definatly not my best, but the next chapter will be better.
 
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Devilrose

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That chapter was pretty good if you ask me...of course there's one little typo I need to nitpick...

Max knew, but had kept quite, though he knew his sister remember, even if her husband didn’t. He held up a hand. May looked up at her annoying little brother.

Its quiet. Q-u-i-e-t. Do people spell it quite like that on purpose? >.>
Yes, I get quite annoyed by this one >.>
 

Sushi

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*gasps* Yay! Very good chapter.

I think Ash was better portrayed this time, he seemed more...familiar? Of course, the way he behaved still seemed more mature than he is in the anime right now, and this youthful enthusiasm is not present, but there was still something that reminded me of the young Ash in the series, whereas in the first chapter, he had acted more like a totally different person. Good job changing that.

Drew seriously scares me now, but I've gotten used to it :D I can understand that May has a hard time living with him, yet she kept trying to do the best of it.

The grammar and spelling is very good, as well as your phrasing. I wish I could write like that x.X

“Whoa,” Brock answered, grabbing her shoulder. “Isn’t that just a tiny bit impulsive?”

“You’re one to talk, asking random girls to marry you,” Max interjected.
Loved that part XD

I definitely enjoyed reading this chapter. Keep it up, it's really great so far^^
 
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