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An original Naruto fic? Yay or Nay?

Yay or Nay

  • Yay

    Votes: 9 81.8%
  • Nay

    Votes: 2 18.2%

  • Total voters
    11

GoGoTenda

I Eat Zapdos' Eggs
So, I've been thinking about this for awhile, but I'd like a few opinions from the general fic-going populace before I get too serious with it. First off, for those who don't know, Naruto is a wildly popular manga/anime series revovling around a 13 (later, 15) year old boy who had a demon sealed inside him near birth. It takes place in a world of ninja; trained warriors who act similarly to mercenaries by taking missions while at the same time like wizards by using internal energy (or chakra) to use techniques which are more or less spells. Various things happen during missions, there's a healthy amount of yaoi undertoning throughout the series, and the whole idea is just a really cool one. I suggest that you pick it up or start watching if you haven't already.

Now, to my fic. I want to place it many (75~100) years after where the actual series is now in order to distance myself from the canon and have more free reign with the subject matter. I plan to more or less do away with the 3 man cell plus one teacher structure, opting for several 3 man cells under 1 or 2 teachers. This will make sense due to the villages lack of qualified teachers after the last war. It also enables a lot more interaction between multiple cells instead of the way Naruto focuses entirely one one. I think it's a reasonable change, but feel free to tell me if it's too much. XD

I also plan to act as though the last two members of the Uchiha clan (Sasuke and Itachi) have both died and never reproduced, effectively ending their clan. This is mostly due out of spite towards both characters, but also out of spite towards Sasuke's hordes of fan girls. I don't want to deal with them going "Why there no Uchiha?!", so killing them off sound provide a suitable reason, no? [SPOIL]Sasuke wouldn't have reproduced anyway; he's too far in love with Naruto :p[/SPOIL]

As for the plot itself, it will revolve mostly around a 15 year old, newly made ninja and his cell as they learn the tricks of the trade. There's quite a colorful cast lined up, including another Nara clan member, a boy who fights via drum, and a girl who talks to trees. There is a larger arc to encompass many smaller ones (including a Chuunin Exam), so the plot will actually be going somewhere. Plus, since it's not based entirely off the show, it won't just be a typical Naruto fic sex-fest.

Comments, questions, and concerns are welcomed and encouraged, as are character ideas. Try to make the latter somewhat coherent and detailed if you'd like me to even consider listening, though. ^^
 

xXSaberXx

xxxXsightless
WOW.

Whoa.

Believe it or not, I was thinking of doing the exact same thing around...lets say...a year ago, before I got caught up in other projects. *glares at banner*

Much like you, I was going to have them ALL killed off. Most of Konoha's old clans died in a war called the War of the Snake, which was a battle between Konoha and the Sound that ended in heavy casualites for both sides, the death of Orochimaru and Naruto, who faced off agains the Sannin and won, but died shortly after.

Almost ALL of the orignial clans died, though few lived on to rebuild Konoha and turned it into a bustling village again. So some clans resemeble other past clans, because the techniquies were passed on to those not of the clan.

I had about....twelve clans down. :p I made a RP of it, some time back, but it died.

The main character was a boy named Fukanzu Ku'uki (Ku'uki as a first name.) He is an orphan, and had the Four Winged White Pheonix sealed inside him as a child. He has white hair as a consequence, and he has a single skill he's known for his whole ninja carrer. ((Called the Haster, it's a move that allows the user to flow chakra to parts of the body to streamline it better and go insanely fast. THe skill is mutated from a current clan's ability, called the Levitator.))

ANYHOW. I'd say YAY to you, for it would be grand. If you need help of thinking of clans, i have plenty! ^.^

The only problem would be the opposition. It's up to you to have a bad guy. :p

[SPOIL]I hate the Uchiha brothers too. D: Hallejuah and a cup o' tea.[/SPOIL]
 

GoGoTenda

I Eat Zapdos' Eggs
Oh Saber, you have saved me from the author's depression XD I was worried that no one was going to actually post and give feedback, so my full gratitude is your's.

Thank you for sharing all your wonderful ideas, though I'm hesitant to add any characters with actual demons, lest they appear too much like Naruto/Gaara. I was going to go look up the rest of the tailed beasts for future use, however *sneaky grin*

I have a handful of 'bad guys', but they'll remain secret until I care to leak anything. As far as clans go, help with that would be lovely. I'm finding naming to be a big issue as well as I, unfortunately, don't have a kanji dictionary handy. Any help would be appreciated (this applies to all readers, too, not just Saber).

I am curious as to why it recieved a nay, if the voter would care to speak up. ^^;
 

Sabaku_no_Gaara

Party Monster 8D
Nuu. You're going to take out Itachi. XD

Well, there's always the chance of that [SPOIL]Tobi-may-be-Obito[/SPOIL] thing. XD

Uh, suprisingly I sisn't vote. o_O the fic sounds interesting so far, though. XD
 
D

Da' dude

Guest
I don't like the idea...I LOVE IT!!!! *calms down to continue*, well, Naruto, my all time fav anime and manga! I was gonna do one like this as well, but you gotta beat others to the punch I suppose...;munchlax;
 

GoGoTenda

I Eat Zapdos' Eggs
Thank you all for the comments! Even if it's only three people, that's enough to shift me into Limitbreak mode when it comes to writing. I just hope I don't add in any vague FF references into the fic >>

[SPOIL]I know little to nothing about Tobi/Obito, but I choose to believe that they both die/d.[/SPOIL]

Anywho, when I can come to an aggreement with myself about chapter length, then maybe I can get a chap out some time in March. The problem is, I've got eleven pages and no real good place to put in an -End of Chapter 1- thing. Unless I break chapters into multiple posts, which would certainly be interesting, I think I might just argue with my various personalities until my circular logic forces them to submit. Wish us luck :p
 

GoGoTenda

I Eat Zapdos' Eggs
Good, good! I plan to make it easy for new fans (or those who don't even know the series) to get interested in the fic. Terms will be explained so no one goes 'What's a 'ninjutsu'?' and any references to the actual canon will be simple (and clean XD). If I don't make any more Utada Hikaru jokes, I might be able to attract a diverse crowd of readers.

I'm probably going to post a teaser/prologue sometime in the next few days. Hopefully, it'll be tomorrow, thought that's unlikely. Anyway, I'm off to bicker with Kawaii Kyuubi Kitsune on the nature and habits of various demons and spirits who may or may not make an appearance in my fic ; )
 

Lily

you were the one.
*sprays incoherence on post >>*

There is NOT yaoi undertoning! Absolutely not! ;o; And Sasuke with Naruto..is..just..no. ;o; That's Dact's job, not yours~ ;; [SPOIL]Sasuke x Me, or Sasuke x Sakura~ <3[/SPOIL]

I like the idea. I'd just advise you to keep the characters realistic, unique and refreshing. ^___^ A clone of the original Naruto would be too boring and .. unoriginal, as far as I can tell with the hordes of Naruto fics out there.

Lol. Girl that talks to trees. I like that. XD This should be interesting. Good luck, Gogo!


;172;



p.s. I still love your sig x3
 

Keleri

I pinch.
Sounds pretty cool. I like that you're giving the characters new abilities--too many 'fics just copy things they've already seen, which is sad considering how pretty much ANYTHING can be used as a weapon in Naruto-verse. I'm guessing it's going to be set in Konoha? I've always wanted to do a 'fic set in one of the lesser-known villages (rock or cloud, mainly, since we haven't heard anything about them). ^_^

The only thing that pings my radar is that the 'new' ninja is fifteen; most of them become genins at twelve, don't they? He could still be a genin at fifteen, but he'd have to be a colossally late starter or really bad at the ninja-ing to become a new genin at that age. [SPOIL]Not to mention that most of the kids in the manga are chuunins at fourteen/fifteen.[/SPOIL]

There is NOT yaoi undertoning! Absolutely not! ;o; And Sasuke with Naruto..is..just..no. ;o;

Poor Lily. *pats* It's okay, just keep telling yourself that... ^_~
 

GoGoTenda

I Eat Zapdos' Eggs
Woot! Lily tried to call me on the yaoi! XD

It's okay, dear Lil-leh. I'll keep the yaoi undertones the to minimum if it makes you feel all uncomfortable. And yes, everyone will love Misao, the one who talks to trees :p

New genin now typically start at 14/15 because, after the last war, villagers decided they didn't want to have they're twelve year olds come home with missing fingers/limbs/torsos. I'd say it's a perfectly reasonable safeguard, plus the longer ninja schooling would prevent 'hopeless cases' simply by giving students more information and time to mature. Of course, extremely gifted students (similar to Itachi) could still graduate early, but you'd have to prove a lot more than before. Anyway, it'll all be explained within the first few chapters.

It'll be set in Konoha since, though I'm making a LOT of things up, I don't want to have to do all the work that would go into setting the new story in an entirely new village. The only other village that's ever been shown even remotely would be the Sand Village, and a desert setting wouldn't mesh well with the plotline. Now, I can still move the location of certain events around....who wants a Chuunin Exam in the Rain Country? :3

New abilities? You bet. All of the main characters have entirely different styles of combat, and there are a handful of Kekkei Genkai (Advanced Bloodlines) running around. Even the Nara character fights differently from the one we all know, Shikamaru :p The fighting will be....unique, if nothing else.
 

GoGoTenda

I Eat Zapdos' Eggs
Sorry for the double post, but new information is being added.

The fic, now entitled To Die Tonight, has recently gone online on Fanfiction.net. It will be coming to Serebii in 2 days and a little site called Engi No Jutsu before the end of the week. Please support my baby in it's early stages and never be afraid to provide suggestions. Thank you. ^^
 
Two days? Why, to celebrate the 2050 years in which Julius Ceaser has been dead? ;-; I like Julius Ceaser! He's my homey! My two hundred and a half centaries dead homey! ;-;

Nevertheless, I, the most totally awsome Byzantium, shall wait.
 
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