Animon, the begaining

JimmyKudo · Feb 11, 2006

OK, I'm not going to combine four different shows into one, yet. I'll just begin with pokemons first, then digimons, experiments and finally, battlebots.

Along the way, I'll explain each show when is necessary.

What do I mean? Well, all you have to worry about now are the pokemons, as there WILL NOT be any of the other characters from other shows appearing.

As the heroes travel to a new region later in the story, they will unravel the mystery of Animons, and so will you, but as I said, DON'T WORRY about that right now, at the right moment, I'll tell you the info in a simple way.

Here's the application form:
Character name:
Age:
Appearance:
Personality:
Pokemon/s: (Can give name if you want to)
Other things you want to add to your profile:
Just copy and paste the above application, is that easy!

And this time, don't tell me you don't know what pokemons are!

So, I'll start, and Razorleaf told me I could get help here, and I really need help, thanks!
Character name: Jimmy Kudo
Age: 10
Appearance: Jimmy is a young white-skinned boy who has Black hair with a peg leg shape sticking out of it. He wears a White T-Shirt, Black shorts, and wears Adidas shoes. He also wears a wristwatch on his left arm. His handsome and shiny eyes show determination.
Personality: Smart, nosey, will solve any riddle if he can.
Pokemon/s: Charmander
Other things: NA

Now, I'll start the story first, right after then, you can register and continue from where I stop. But first, I'll give a review of Jimmy first.

Jimmy Kudo, a kid wearing a white T-Shirt, blue shorts and sports shoes, is waking to the house of his neighbour, Pro. Agasa.

It all started when Jimmy was 4, his mum, Vivian Kudo, told him all about pokemons, what're they, what types of pokemons are there, all sorts of stuff. As Jimmy grow older, he began to do some research about pokemons, he then found out about pokemon masters, and how people use pokemons to fight with other pokemons to become one of them. He then earn some knowledge about pokemons from one of the top elite scientist, Proffesor Oak. And back to present day, our hero is reaching Pro. Agasa's lab.

Pro.Agasa, had been researching pokemons with Pro. Oak for quite a long time, and he had asked Jimmy, to receive his very first pokemon.

Jimmy, who was thinking about this, felt excited, he rush towards the lab with pace, and there it is, Pro. Agasa's lab.

As Jimmy entered through the shiny, silvery door, Pro. Agasa then notice him and greeted,

"Jimbo! Never seen you in weeks! Ready for your very first pokemon?" asked Agasa as he put his arms around Jimmy.

"Yeah yeah, let's cut the chit chat," said Jimmy in impatient as he removed Agasa's arm. "Where do I choose my pokemon?"

Agasa then points to three red pokeballs, which one will Jimmy choose?

"I choose...this one!" siad Jimmy as he points at one of the pokeballs. He picked it up with his hand and throw it, saying, "Pokemon! I choose you!"

A flash of light came out from the pokeall, what came out of the pokeball was a orange lizard with its tail lited with fire. It is a Charmander.

"Well well well, lucky you, a Charmander." smiled Agasa.

Jimmy holds the Charmander as they both give each other a smile.

"We'll be expecting more company, Jimmy. You might want to stick around and train your Charmander when the other trainers got their pokemons." said Agasa.

"More trainers!? Charmander, are you ready?" asked Jimmy as he look at Charmander.

"Char!" answered Charmander.

Jimmy & Charmander then waits for the other trainers.

So? Is there any flaws this time?

Jonouchi · Feb 11, 2006

Well you should be a bit more descriptive in your sign up, instead of....

Appearance: White colored-skin, peg-like shape sticking out of his black hair, handsome and shiny eyes (look at my profile picture).

and...

Clothes/Accessories: T-Shirt, shorts, Adidas shoes and a wristwatch

Let's combine the two together, and make this...

Appearance: Jimmy is a young white-skinned boy who has Black hair with a peg leg shape sticking out of it. He wears a White T-Shirt, Black shorts, and wears Adidas shoes. He also wears a wristwatch on his left arm. His handsome and shiny eyes show determination.

There you go! I'm not that great with description myself, but it should be something like that. Be descriptive, that's all I'm saying. And make your history as well. You want other's to know WHY they became what they are now. they need a background story.

Take my advice and use it well. Description is everything

JimmyKudo · Feb 11, 2006

Thanks! I really appreciate someone would waste their time for this kind of stupid RPG...

JimmyKudo · Feb 11, 2006

OK! I finished editing, what do you think?

^^Yoshinichi^^ · Feb 11, 2006

Well, give more description on the plot please, and I might join.
What are Battle Bots? What do you mean by experiments? Though Im guessing your refering to 626 Stitch and the like? Oh,and it's poke'mon for plural also as in"Look at all those poke'mon!".

JimmyKudo · Feb 11, 2006

I told you, don't need to worry about those stuff yet, or it might confuse you. All you need to know is:
Experiments: Alien genetic mutations, each with their own powers.
Battlebots: Artificial Intelligence, each with its own in built weapon (cannons, lighting blades) . They're like robots, except smarter.

So,
Experiment=Aliens with powers
Battlebots=Smart Robots

The rest, don't worry, I don't even know if this RPG will be a success or not in its first chapter (7 chapters in total) .

RaZoR LeAf · Feb 11, 2006

You've written a totally different pot to the RPG I closed. Make up your mind about what you want the RPG to be about.

JimmyKudo · Feb 11, 2006

Is about Jimmy traveling around the world trying to be the greatest master, but with other characters in it much later in the story, so no one have to worry about a thing.

RaZoR LeAf · Feb 11, 2006

If it's about 1 character, with others appearing later in the story, it's a FANFIC. RPGs, all the characters are at the start.

JimmyKudo · Feb 11, 2006

I'm editing right now.

Jonouchi · Feb 11, 2006

Put more description, don't just use the example I used. Put more thought into your bio. No one will join if the plot is bad or the description isn't good.

Put description into everything, Look at other RPG Sign-ups and see how they do it. Remember, I won't always be around to help

RaZoR LeAf · Feb 11, 2006

I would massively suggest NOT using colours in your RPG, especially that many, since you don't know what style people are using. The first half of your post was practically unreadable on the Dark Skin.

JimmyKudo said:
OK, I'm not going to combine four different shows into one, yet. I'll just begin with pokemons first, then digimons, experiments and finally, battlebots.

So you ARE going to combine four shows into one. Doesn't matter when it happens, you are intending to use four shows.

Along the way, I'll explain each show when is necessary.

Which is useless if you have zero knowledge of something and in the middle of the RPG you are expecting people to use things they have no experience of.

What do I mean? Well, all you have to worry about now are the pokemons, as there WILL NOT be any of the other characters from other shows appearing.

As the heroes travel to a new region later in the story, they will unravel the mystery of Animons, and so will you, but as I said, DON'T WORRY about that right now, at the right moment, I'll tell you the info in a simple way.

The Plural of pokemon is pokemon. There's no 's'.

Here's the application form:
Character name:
Age:
Appearance:
Personality:
Pokemon/s: (Can give name if you want to)
Other things you want to add to your profile:
Just copy and paste the above application, is that easy!

And this time, don't tell me you don't know what pokemons are!

So, I'll start, and Razorleaf told me I could get help here, and I really need help, thanks!
Character name: Jimmy Kudo
Age: 10
Appearance: Jimmy is a young white-skinned boy who has Black hair with a peg leg shape sticking out of it. He wears a White T-Shirt, Black shorts, and wears Adidas shoes. He also wears a wristwatch on his left arm. His handsome and shiny eyes show determination.
Personality: Smart, nosey, will solve any riddle if he can.
Pokemon/s: Charmander
Other things: NA

Please read this:
http://www.serebiiforums.com/showthread.php?t=99923

Now, I'll start the story first, right after then, you can register and continue from where I stop. But first, I'll give a review of Jimmy first.

This isn't a registration thread. This is for you to get help with your plot, not for people to sign up in.

Jimmy Kudo, a kid wearing a white T-Shirt, blue shorts and sports shoes, is waking to the house of his neighbour, Pro. Agasa.

It all started when Jimmy was 4, his mum, Vivian Kudo, told him all about pokemons, what're they, what types of pokemons are there, all sorts of stuff. As Jimmy grow older, he began to do some research about pokemons, he then found out about pokemon masters, and how people use pokemons to fight with other pokemons to become one of them. He then earn some knowledge about pokemons from one of the top elite scientist, Proffesor Oak. And back to present day, our hero is reaching Pro. Agasa's lab.

You mean Prof. surely? Pro. means nothing.

Pro.Agasa, had been researching pokemons with Pro. Oak for quite a long time, and he had asked Jimmy, to receive his very first pokemon.

Jimmy, who was thinking about this, felt excited, he rush towards the lab with pace, and there it is, Pro. Agasa's lab.

As Jimmy entered through the shiny, silvery door, Pro. Agasa then notice him and greeted,

"Jimbo! Never seen you in weeks! Ready for your very first pokemon?" asked Agasa as he put his arms around Jimmy.

"Yeah yeah, let's cut the chit chat," said Jimmy in impatient as he removed Agasa's arm. "Where do I choose my pokemon?"

Agasa then points to three red pokeballs, which one will Jimmy choose?

"I choose...this one!" siad Jimmy as he points at one of the pokeballs. He picked it up with his hand and throw it, saying, "Pokemon! I choose you!"

A flash of light came out from the pokeall, what came out of the pokeball was a orange lizard with its tail lited with fire. It is a Charmander.

"Well well well, lucky you, a Charmander." smiled Agasa.

Jimmy holds the Charmander as they both give each other a smile.

"We'll be expecting more company, Jimmy. You might want to stick around and train your Charmander when the other trainers got their pokemons." said Agasa.

"More trainers!? Charmander, are you ready?" asked Jimmy as he look at Charmander.

"Char!" answered Charmander.

Jimmy & Charmander then waits for the other trainers.

So? Is there any flaws this time?

That entire section is far too like a fanfic. It means nothing and has no effect on the plot. Which I might add, is 100% absent from this entire topic. You do you expect to get help with your RPG when you don't post the plot?

JimmyKudo said:
I told you, don't need to worry about those stuff yet, or it might confuse you.

If it's going to confuse people know, how do you think they'll do when it's suddenly introduced in the middle of the RPG, they have no idea what it is, and decide "I wasn't aware of this, screw it this RPG is stupid" and you're left with an empty void you've created yourself. When you are using more than one source for a plot you should post all the necessary information at the start.

All you need to know is:

Experiments: Alien genetic mutations, each with their own powers.
Battlebots: Artificial Intelligence, each with its own in built weapon (cannons, lighting blades) . They're like robots, except smarter.

So,
Experiment=Aliens with powers
Battlebots=Smart Robots

Still no idea where these fit into your non-plot.

The rest, don't worry, I don't even know if this RPG will be a success or not in its first chapter (7 chapters in total) .

What have chapters got to do with RPGs?

JimmyKudo · Feb 12, 2006

I have decided to go with the old story, since Razor Leaf said that all the characters will have to appear in the beginning of the story.

Thousands of years ago, a red-colored evil sorcerer, with claws instead of hands, named, Him, created a mystical portal to another world to escape his enemy, an AncientWisemon, an ancient digimon that had chased him for using dark magic to infiltrate the Digi-World years ago.

Him tried to outrun AncientWisemon, with no success, his warm sweat drip down his red skin down his chin, as he saw AncientWisemon just behind him.

Him tried to escape using the portal in his hideout, but before he got the chance, AncientWisemon found his hideout ...in a dark, shadowy cave.

"Give it up, you can never escape!" said AncientWisemon, entering the cave.

"Ha ha ha, but I will escape, my exit is just a few steps away!" said Him as he reaches he
begin to step into the portal.

Just when Him is about reach into the portal, AncientWisemon attacked him with his attack, the "Laplace's Demon" attack, which allowed him to use any god powers. AncientWisemon stop Him in place using the attack, obviously he is using the power of the God of Abraham.

Him was killed by AncientWisemon, who also destroyed the portal, never to seen it again. However, Him had cast a spell on himself way back, way back before Him decided to infiltrate the Digi-World. Him know someday, when he do evil, he will get killed. That is why, he cast a spell on himself, when he died, he will wait for the right moment to finally rise upon the world again.

Nevertheless, AncientWisemon knows there is a flaw to all this. When AncientWisemon destroyed Him, he had laid the curse upon the world, the world, will be corrupted the curse, the world will, as we know it, be destroyed.

Why AncientWisemon did destroyed the portal you ask? Because the portal, is like a gate between the spirit world and the real world, if the gate was left undestroyed, Him could come back as well.

What exactly does the curse do? Well, the curse is actually curses, it is actually the ten plagues of the bible, after thousands and thousands of years, if the curses isn't removed, all the first born, will die, which is the last plague of the ten plague.

Of cause, Him will also return, due to that spell he cast on himself, in a form that will make him invincible, well, almost.

AncientWisemon knows a way, maybe, he can get some help. He knows that after hundreds of years, digidestined are going to appear, while on another world, people are using powerful & amazing creatures to fight each other as a competition. He thinks these creatures, known as, 'pokemons', might be able to help. He needed all the help he can get, so he searched the different worlds for more help.

He found help, after hundreds and hundreds of years, in a form of a alien experiment, and another in a form of a artificial intelligence.

AncientWisemon knows that a mad scientist named, Dr. Jambar Jukibar, for world domination as ordered by Dr. Jambar’s ex-boss, HamsterVille, created the alien experiments. He ordered Dr. Jambar to create the experiments for evil, but a little girl, who is a experiment catcher now, turned the evil genetic experiments into good, nice, experiments. One example is her partner, Stitch, who is an alien genetic experiment, a good one, but a obnoxious one too. AncientWisemon believed that some of the alien genetic experiments might be able to use their powers to help him.

An elite professor named Professor Hajime Akebono, or professor Hajime, though, created the battlebots.
He had created robots that can not only talk, have feelings, they can even attack, which is useful for AncientWisemon to defeat the sorcerer.

Convincing the help he found, would be tough, though. He decided to make a difficult decision thousands of years later after Him's defeat; he decided to combine the worlds.

There'll be a catch though, the one world, will either be in a state of confusion, and start to destroy each other, or, they'll start to adapt to the new environment, and strive to success.

Now, I will do some re-caps for the sake of some people.

Alien Genetic Experiments can use pokemon attacks as long as is compatible.

Battlebots are always steel type that goes for Machine type digimons too.

Battlebots can merge with some battlebots and some digimons as long as is compatible.

In addition, remember the light types, only angelic digimons or any animons that you think is compatible.

Light types have no weaknesses, they can endurance Dark attacks.

Virus digimons are Dark types.

Experiments can breed with other experiments/pokemons.

Eggs of Digimons are called Digi Eggs, Digimons live in another world called the Digi-World, the way they evolve is called Digivolve, they digivolve through three ways:
a device called the Digivice,
egg-like armors called the digimentals,
digi spirits which are like digimentals but the trainer can become a digimon, so people who’re using the digi spirits cannot sent out any animons. Includes the human spirit and the Beast spirit.

Now, let me tell you about the RPG application through my character’s bio just for example what the application will look like,

Character Name: Jimmy Kudo

Age: 15

Gender of character: Male

Description: He has white color skin just like most Japanese, has a weird peg-like shape sticking out of his black hair. He wears a plain white T-shirt with a dark blue jacket worn over the shirt and a pair of blue shorts to go with it and an Adidas sport shoes.

Personality: Jimmy always stands up for justice, somewhat cold to anyone who commits crime whether by accident or purpose. He is also obnoxious when he is not poking his nose into every crime scene, which he tried to solve the case.

Other: When he was four, he got an egg through his computer, which a baby form of his digimon, Bitmon came out of. The Bitmon grew into another form called Fangmon, which finally grow into the form at the present, Beastmon.

His computer and any computer can let you go to the Digi-World as long as you're a digidestined.

The starting of the RPG will be,

Jimmy was walking home when he saw a Kadabra attacking a city, the Kadabra is actually following master Him's command to lure all digidestineds so that his minions can kill them, and there'll be no one to stop Him when he's resurrected.

Pretty good starting, huh?

RaZoR LeAf · Feb 12, 2006

Jesus Christ.. learn how to use Forum code. You put the open tags at the top of the page and the close tags at the bottom, not after every line, that's just moronic! And didn't I just say I couldn't read black text on a dark skin?

JimmyKudo · Feb 12, 2006

Moronic=flaming.

And what're 'tags'? You mean the paragraphs?

Nylf · Feb 12, 2006

Right constructive critiscm.

1st: Description. I know what AncientWisemon looks like, but not many other people do. Describe him. Mention the robes and the fact he's basically a mirror with a head.

2nd: Stick to one tense. If you're writing in the past tense, keep writing in the past tense, don't keep changing unless you change paragraph. Remember:

TiP ToP

Time, Person, Topic, Place

If any of those change start a new paragraph.

3rd: Paragraphing, just made the point to help.

4th: Try finding websites that explain your point, and give people options. Find a site with a full list of Battlebots, and then say something like:

"Use this to help you choose your Battlebot if you're unfamiliar: {insert link here}"

Then, find a Digidex, there's plenty out there, and do something similar to the above.

Finally, find some source that someone can find the Experiments on, and repeat prior process.

The only reason Pokemon isn't here is the the Serebii dex is easily accessible and I doubt anyone here doesn't have some knowledge of Pokemon.

5th: Give some background. Explain the Digital, Battlebot and Experiment's worlds a little better. I kow nothing about Battlebots, so how am i supposed to know how to use them without knowing the history of them?

6th: Make a better sign up. You set no limitations, and gave no assisstance for those who don't know what some of these things are. You didn't give any form to use, and the example you gave mentioned NOTHING of what Pokemon, Digimon, Battlebots and Experiments you have or will get, other than Beastmon. Make a form is all I'm saying, so people who read this know how the characters will work.

That should help fix the key problems.

RaZoR LeAf · Feb 12, 2006

JimmyKudo said:
Moronic=flaming.

And what're 'tags'? You mean the paragraphs?

[noparse][/noparse] around every line. is moronic. If I was flaming you, I would have said you were a moron. I only said what you did was moronic. There's a difference.

RaZoR LeAf · Feb 12, 2006

Did me telling you not to post in black fail to get through to you? And besides, that's far too much information. It's off putting for anyone who wants to join an rpg if they see that much stuff to read through.

JimmyKudo · Feb 12, 2006

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