Apathy (poem)

[Flaming Lip]

This poem is about bunnies who try to grow aposable thumbs by twitching thier noses...

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XD Good thing it isn't.

Apathy


Answer me, answer me true

Is there anything out there for me or you?

Answer me, answer me true

Is there any reason why we do what we do?


Is it some sort of imperfection,

To dream an improbable dream?

Is it some sort of tension,

That makes us hate and love?


Answer me, answer me true,

Is there a time and a place for me?

Answer me, answer me true,

Is the truth something we can really see?


Is it some sort of stupidity,

To think we can do anything?

Is it some sort of apathy,

That makes us do what we do?


Answer me, answer me true

What is it we’re destined to do?

Answer me, answer me true

Does anyone care for me as I you?​

 

[billy5772]

They were right in calling you an awesome poet. I feel like a fish out of water reviewing poems instead of stories, but yours just make me wanna say something!

The questioning of why we do what we do is definitely appropriate for someone apathetic. I know someone who's kinda apathetic and they recently commented that everything is a waste of time. This reminded me of them. Once again, you use parallelism extreeeeeeemely effectively. I actually read this poem out loud so that I could appreciate further the smooth flow and rythym [i think i just misspelled that] of the piece. Keep writin' 'em!

 

[Burnt Flower]

And yet another crappy poem review from me! xP

This poem is about bunnies who try to grow aposable thumbs by twitching thier noses...

You know...you should really write a poem about that. I loved the idea. XD

Answer me, answer me true

Is there anything out there for me or you?

Answer me, answer me true

Is there any reason why we do what we do?

The 'answer me, answer me true' made me chuckle for some reason. But yet another great opening - and a very true to life question most people ask themselves. ;3

Is it some sort of imperfection,

To dream an improbable dream?

Is it some sort of tension,

That makes us hate and love?

*claps* Awesome - probably my favorite bit.

Does anyone care for me as I you?

Shouldn't there be some kind of word between 'I' and 'you'? I have a feeling I'm wrong about this...

I liked it.....a lot. Definitely felt that spark that I enjoyed so much from your other poems. Especially on a topic I thought about more than once when I'm feeling a bit depressed or apathic. This is definitely a five-star worthy poem.

It's great you're back to writing poems, Ni- Byzantium.

 

[Flaming Lip]

I could have put 'do' between I and you, but I think it sounds better (an works better) without it. Heh its jusat a little poetic license on my part.

Nice to see I haven't lost it.

*gives flan*

*smites with Ringo Starr*