Battle Chalenge

[chiper12]

This is a new improved kind of comic i made the story sets out in hoenn where hikari travels to chalenge the battle tower with here penpal crystal so what will happen? Will they win? Will they lose? What is going to happen? well listen and watch the story unfold.id love deedback

Episode 1:the story starts to open

 

[Reign G]

It's alright, I just don't like the backgrounds. And, how was a wild Charizard taking Hikari? Is she a Ranger? With a Capture Styler? And how does she know Gold? For that matter, why's he called Crystal? . Oh well, at least it's PNG. The text bubbles could also use some fixing up.

 

[Wesheg]

So Random.
How Did She meet the Charizard? There wasn't Even A story Telling About It!
You Should Work on your Text Boxes and The Comic Would be better.
Also you should make more panels intead of just three.

 

[chiper12]

That charizard is from charizard valley (ie.ash's charizard)
crystal is here penpal they just met and please dont be meen to the background i worked hard on them.it has only three pannels cuz its the first episode

 

[Reign G]

I never said the BG was bad, chiper, I just stated in didn't match the Sprites. it is very good.

 

[chiper12]

i know i just want it to be unique

 

[Wesheg]

Sure, You Can be Unique.
I Don't like comics that start in Pallet Town or Somethin'
Still nice that it isn't a journey comic.
Just Work on the TextBoxes, K?

 

[chiper12]

....it doesnt start like that it stares out about two trainers who are going t battle tower after they got her badges...