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Bonds- poems

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Flaming Lip

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I'll post my poems here, consirding that this is getting a bit annoying.

Edit: Here is a table of contents.
Why?

Because.


TABLE O' CONTENTS:​
1. Bonds
2. A Slip
3. Goodbye (parts I, II, and III)
4. Innocence
5. Better
6. Well of Dreams
7. One in the Many
8. The Perfect Dream
9. Once in a While
10. The Dawning (parts I and II)
11. Awaken
12. Second Thought
13. A Thosand Tears
14. Crossroads
15. Nothing Left
16. Ashes to Ashes- Dust to Dusk
17. The Rights of A Living Thing (Part 1)
18. The Rights of A Living Thing (part 2)
19. The Rights of A Living Thing (part 3)

EXTRAS: Haven


I'll admit that I got the idea for this poem from a one-shot by lilypichu, but I switched the idea around and made it more genarlized, so I'll thank Lilypichu for the inspiration:

Bonds​


You’re inseparable nothing can tear apart​


You seem to care with all your heart​


But where were you,​


When the battle was too tough?​


Where were you,​


When you saw he had enough?​


The blood spreads mixed with denial​


The ingredients for a faked smile​


Only to be swept away in a while​



When you see it was your fault​


What to be, the second wind​


But life is life. C’est la vie…​


You’ll regret your ignorance​


When you see…​


And you look back at me​


You want him back​


But it is a matter of tact​


A matter of fact,​


That bonds will break​


When life is at stake…​




Where were you,​


When you saw the blood?​


What did you do,​


When that flood of pain came?​


Who are you?​


Who do you want to be?​


Do you want to break free,​


From the bond that drives you insane?​




When you see it was your fault​


What to be, the second wind​


But life is life. C’est la vie…​


You’ll regret your ignorance​


When you see…​


And you look back at me​


You want him back​


But it is a matter of tact​


A matter of fact,​


That bonds will break​


When life is at stake…​


And your sanity slips away​


When the pulse begins to fade...​
____

Its dark... How unlike me -_-
 
K

Kawaii Kyuubi Kitsune

Kawai Nogitsune
It's different, that's for sure and I can see it was inspired by Lily.
Dark just isn't your style, your much better at doing other sorts of poems, but don't let that stop you practising this style as it is required if you want to do a well rounded fic.

(PS: My fic was influenced by Lily as well, but less so thn this poem)
 
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Flaming Lip

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I WAS BEING SARCASTIC!!! All my poems are very dark or at least meloncholy!!

None of my poems are happy go-go Putt-Putt!!! Look at my poem Innocnce, that was in many ways dark, Kitsune. So dark happens to be my style...

:p A FLAMING RANT OW!!!
 
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Twilight Absol

Guest
Another nice poem...btw, which fic is this? I want to read it...>.>
 
lilbluecorsola

lilbluecorsola

Binky-boo! <3
It was nice. I actually didn't like it as much as 'Crossroads', but it was interesting.

Some rhymes didn't flow too well though...

Meh. It was okay. *has nothing productive to say*
 
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Flaming Lip

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New Poem

This one is sucky... Its about a pokemon that kills its trainer...

Yeah it is really unlike me -_- (SARCASEM)

A SLIP

A scream pierces the night air, like a bolt of lighting

Revenge is now a fair of happiness, the last of the fighting

And soon they’ll be here,

Those in blue

The scream was easy hear

They’ll come to find what I did to you


What have I done?


I am tired of fighting, tired of your command

You think you’re God, a tool in your hands

And will the sands of time pass to fast for me?

When will the fool that is man let me see?

O my God

O my God

What I have I done?

O my God

Where has my sanity gone?


And will I run forever, shall I tire these wings? Shall we be together shall you cling to life?

O my God

What will they think, when they see what I’ve done? Am I on the brink? Is my sanity really gone?

O my God

What have I done?

Was I a fool to be your tool, to listen to what you say?

Was I right to have enough of your rule,

Will I regret anything at the end of the day?

You are so cruel when you’re alive…

You’re so cruel when you’re dead…


Don’t be afraid, it’s only a slip

I could not accept that my world was a fight

I lost my wits, I took to many hits, and I had to have a fit

I can’t take the truth that there is no light


What have I done?

Why are you gone?

What have I done?

O God, O God

What is wrong?

What slipped away?

Why has my sanity gone?

O God?

Where are all the days where smiles stayed in my head,

Now I can only remember what you have said,

And all this time I thought there were other ways,

But now I know there is no escaping,

I have no friends, and my life never ends…


Don’t be afraid, it’s only a slip

I could not accept that my world was a fight

I lost my wits, I took to many hits, and I had to have a fit

I can’t take the truth that there is no light

Was I a fool to be your tool, to listen to what you say?

Was I right to have enough of your rule,

Will I be alive at the end of the day?

You are so cruel when you’re alive…

You’re so cruel when you’re dead…

I can’t you out of my head…

What have I done to my friend?​
____

Sorry for the suckiness, I am happy so it turned out bad...
 
lilbluecorsola

lilbluecorsola

Binky-boo! <3
Hm... It's debatable. Some parts were better than others. I really liked the part that goes:

What have I done?

Why are you gone?

What have I done?

O God, O God

What is wrong?

What slipped away?

Why has my sanity gone?

O God?

I wasn't too fond of the repetition of the phrase "O my God" though. Dunno why.

There were iffy parts, but good parts too.

Overall, it wasn't too bad.
 
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Breezy

Well-Known Member
The first poem, "Bonds" was much better than "The Slip" in my opinion since the pattern was much better (though on Bonds, you did change the rhyme scheme for one stanza, but meh) and there was as much repetition. Dunno, it felt like The Slip would of done better as a song. XP

I'm not exactly sure what "the slip" was. =/ *feels stupid again* Hidden meanings are always good though since it lets everyone think what they want to think which is really much better than to have just a poem based on something.

Of course, there wasn't a easy flow to it, but that's always fine since you can do that with poems. Just rather wordy for me since I just read "Bonds" before it.

Speaking of Bonds, the mood was very nice. Dark, mysterious, somewhat revengeful sounding, regretting . . . Yeah. ^_^

So good job on both.

On a random note, you're sarcastic. :D Fun stuff.

LaTeR dAyZ!
 
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Flaming Lip

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New Poem

My next two poems along with this will tell a story.

Good-bye, Part 1

Seeing her walk out of the town

Brings tears to your eyes

The road leads to glory for her

But you can’t help but cry

You want them to come home


Good-bye… I’ll see you again

Don’t cry… it’ll be sooner than then


You sigh in envy

You sign in fatigue

You look for a hope, any at all.

And there they are

As posters propped on the wall

So you look at the future star

And the frown becomes a smile

She’ll be home in a while

And with pride and riches

They already reside in your heart

Your scars are stitches now

Healing again


Good-bye… I’ll see you again

Don’t cry… it’ll be sooner than then​
 
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Breezy

Well-Known Member
Sounds good so far Flaming Lip. ^_^ It's selfish when someone leaves to accomplish their dreams when we want them to stay huh?

The posters propped on the wall felt out of place though for some reasons. That's just me though.

LaTeR dAyZ!

Edit: In case it's hard to understand since I obviously suck at wording, I meant that us wanting the person wanting to accomplish their dreams is selfish for US, not them lol.
 
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Twilight Absol

Guest
Is it not selfish of ourselves to want them to stay when they are set on leaving, Breezy?
There's always more than one side to the story..
ANother good poem, I feel the mother's sadness yet I also sense pride in the tone...
 
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Flaming Lip

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Good-bye, part two

This is from the girls POV

Good-bye, Part 2

I wish she’d stop breathing down my neck

When she was a kid she left her town

In total disregard for her parents

And now… it’s my turn


Good-bye… I’ll see you again

Don’t cry… it’ll be sooner than then

And you know I’ll be back someday

I’m sorry to leave you but I have to turn away


She doesn’t care at all

She wants me to stay

She thinks I’ll fall

She thinks I’ll lose my way


Good-bye… I’ll see you again

Don’t cry… it’ll be sooner than then

And you know I’ll be back someday

I’m sorry to leave you but I have to turn away


And so it finally begins

A journey that never ends

Look at all her future friends

And remember…

Its just a waste of time.​
 
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