Brenden and May: The True Story

[~DaSilentMage~]

Some of you may remember my very first, terrible comic, New Hoenn. This is one is different. I hope I can update this atleast once every week. There is a custom island thrown in ^^;;

This comic is mainly about the real adventures of Brenden and May. How it really happened. However, Brenden and May are not the main charecters. If any of you want to join the comic, then keep looking at the 'Wanted' paragraph.

Sorry if you can't read some of it, the max is 1024 KB, so I'm not sure how to make it smaller, I may have to just put the 9 comics into 3 seperate links....

PG-13? or R?

COMICS
Memories
Comic 1 Comic 1 2/3
Co mic 2

Sprites

Custom Island{My first custom island!}

Wanted
None at the time....

Credit
Image Shack
The Spriters Resource{Even though it was close to useless...}

 

[Magical Trevor]

We i lie it but you need to work on the Speech bubbles. A. Some if the text is out of the speech bubbles and it'stoo hard to read maybe a different font

 

[Neopolis]

Okay, this needs some work. Nice job on making semi-transparent speech bubbles, but they are often too small (as mutten pointed out) or hard to read. If you take a good look at the "Custom Island" you'll see the grass is not tiled, and it's easy to see where you pasted a new tile.
Your custom trainer sprites look a bit... strange, and the first comic was just rushed: May came out of nowhere, walked in the lab, asked for a Pokemon, Birch gave them both one, and tossed it at them. All in one panel.

 

[Joe Vega #4]

Oh my gosh. This is terrible. There's an eye-straining blurry panel, I absolutely HATE the trasparent speech bubbles you fit large text into. That sex joke wasn't funny a bit.

 

[~DaSilentMage~]

Well, I have to say what I thought...From your critisim{Of however you spell it} The blurry panel was on purpose, you don't read that, that's just so you know it's going into another scene.... I'm well aware of the rushing and text overflow. But I did it all in a night, so yeah...Way better then my last comic....

Second, the rushing, I know it wasn't the best choice of first comic, but like I said, Brenden and May aren't the main chareters. So why bother on them? xD lol jk

Third, I know the font was hard to read, I had to minize it =P I wasn't sure how, so I think from now I'll put it in three seperate links.

Last, I'm well aware of the messed up Island. But, it's still my first island I made, that took FUC'IN FOREVER!!! Had to add so much grass, so much trees, so much water....okay lol

Well, I'll keep in mind all of the things you guys said, except the idiot above me...

 

[Neopolis]

Just so you know, calling someone an "idiot" because he/she didn't understand something is flaming, which is a reportable offense. -_-

 

[Dafearo(svensk)]

And that, my friend, is SPAM....

This comic is pretty bad. It looks really bad with the text hanging out of the bubbles and that blurry panel was not needed.
It's not hard to make towns. I've made tons of them. And I'm just telling u, many beginner comic-makers have been banned because of flaming others....

 

[~DaSilentMage~]

Well, like said, I'll keep that in mind, I guess I coulda used the blurred panel for introducing May...Well I just hope I don't get banned then ^^

 

[Silon]

Don't double post, please. --;

And your comic, it's interesting. But put a warning for age level, you mentioned "sex" and quite a few users might not want to read comics with that in them. And I like the semi-transparent speach bubbles, and the plot looks cool. Your character's hair is really bright. And try to make the map more organized.

EDIT
This one is MUCH better. >>

 

[Socrates With A Lobotomy]

Like many have said, speech bubbles could use a good bit of work. I'd critque more, but I couldn't read it due to near illegibility.

 

[~DaSilentMage~]

Dude, seriously, can you guys do anything else but say something about the typing. I KNOW IT'S MESSED UP!! Caps was not needed...I just had to shrink it enough, so it'd fit..

 

[Silon]

Feel free to use this.. >>

 

[~DaSilentMage~]

Sry bout double posting

New comic, the words aren't falling out as much...

Co mic 2

 

[hikari_blaze]

At least delete the double post you made. --;;

BTW, don't put sex in there. There's underage kids here on this forum!

You seriously need to work on your speech bubbles. The text just fly out of there instead of staying in the bubble like it's suppose it be.

Even the title is bad. If it's not about Brendan and May, why put the title as Brendan and May: The True Story? >.>

I hope to see a lot of improvement from this.

 

[~DaSilentMage~]

You don't get it do you? FA FRIKEN SAKE!! I KNOW THE TEXT IS MESSED UP!!! THAT'S WHY I TRIED TO MAKE THE SECOND COMIC BETTER! DAMMIT!

I put Brenden and May: True Story, because even though they are not the main charecters, this comic still involves them quite alot...

EDIT: HOW IN 7 HELLS DO YOU DELETE A POST?

EDIT AGAIN: Sorry for the caps and minor cussing...

 

[hikari_blaze]

Click the EDIT on your post, and choose delete. >.>

 

[Clockworkz]

lol
It's called a text box, and a rectangular outline. Both of which can be done in paint. You're trying to hard, and it's winding up sucking like all holy hells. Not to mention resizing using a bounding box. Good job there, ace.
Also, try to learn how to be funny. Random spots of sex talk does not make a good comic; it actually makes you look like you're starved for attention, and/or an idiot.