Classic Battles:Peter Moran vs. Alex Hackney (PG-13, very vulgar and a humor)

[Pete the Unstoppable]

This was very offensive to someone and I never want to make fun of anyone ever again.

Deleted:This was wrong, I thought it was funny, but I realize I was just a jerk and this was wrong.

 

[Dilasc]

You write this crap up in the reply box and I'd swear to the monkley god that you isn't trying. ANOTHER EPIC! ZOMG YOU ARE TEH PWN!!!!1111

Are you tired of my belittling sarcasm? It'll stop if you take my advice and go read a few good stories like I've suggested time and time again. You don't seem to listen though, and just waste your time dabbling within the review box writng about bland characters and their Mary Sue adventures.

 

[Yami Ryu]

So how funny was this ****?

As funny as an elephant landing on my head and leaving me a 'surprise'

And you know, as a technical now redneck, as I live in a 'redneck' state now... I could take insult at that bad joke you tried to crack in that teacher line. As it's not really a joke meant for a bit of slight humor, or a poke at something sterotypes seem to do. It was used as an insult >.>

But anyways, all this shows is your main character is a vile little bully, a cheating vile little bully at that. And I feel sorry for the 'Alex' character as it seems he was raising his pokemon legally, even if he supposedly hated them.

Go back to the drawing board and READ the Advice for Aspiring Authors sticky, and try to learn when to use swearing, and when it just makes your fic look even dumber than it already is.

 

[Pete the Unstoppable]

Well, Renegade, the main character is me and having a level 255 mewtwo does not mean you cheated, it just means that I used a glitch on my red version and also I live in a redneck state but that don't make me a redneck.

 

[Yami Ryu]

Well, Renegade, the main character is me and having a level 255 mewtwo does not mean you cheated, it just means that I used a glitch on my red version and also I live in a redneck state but that don't make me a redneck.

That means you did cheat, using the glitch is cheating. Using a lv 255 Mewtwo against someone is cheating. As it's low down and dirty and cheap battling. And no wonder you're not a redneck. You're a bully and mean. You don't deserve to be called a redneck. And if the main character is based off how you act in real life, maybe you deserve more detention for bullying other people and beating them with a lv 255 Mewtwo because it seems you're too pathetic to train up a regular lv 100 pkmn --;

 

[DigitalKaede]

Is that ALL you can write?!? -_-;. No details of anything. Short battle. You could've used more improvement.

 

[lisalover]

hey man funny fic(not)

first of all the characters are flat
second of all what is the story about
third way too much cussin

my advice read advice for aspiring authors. it's helping me learn whats i godda do to make my writing better

 

[Pete the Unstoppable]

Deleted....

 

[Dilasc]

I give up! You just ignore the advice given to you and take a dump in our faces by ignoring every word! I am sick and tired of it, so I'm not even going to bother with you any more.

 

[lisalover]

this fic is still not funny
it seems that you a crossing pokemon with michael jackson and southpark

your chapters are too short and i still can't see a story line for this fic(if thats what you call it)

i still recomend reading advice for aspiring authors and read the fanfic rules

 

[Pete the Unstoppable]

It is called um, scene not bigass chapter...alright. And wtf south park wtf?

 

[lisalover]

the cursing dude the cursing

its not always funny

anyway scene/chapter same difference read the rules

 

[Yami Ryu]

So all you're showing is how you're a cheap *** bully that likes making fun of, being mean to and doing spitefull things about people irl. If you've resorted to using bad 'script' to mock someone irl. You have sunk to a new low. And give bad names to new authors.

How dare you spam the fanfic forum with this trite and drivel. I wouldn't even shame my bird with having to use it as something to cover the bottom of it's cage to catch its droppings.

You attempt to get out of rule breaking by chapters that are WAY too short by calling them 'scene's', which are barely TWO paragraphs long at that. Then to top it off they are poorly written out, and the only excuse they have to even be alive and running amuck here, is because you like to make fun of and bully this Alex. And I'm starting to bet he doesn't deserve it -_-

 

[Pete the Unstoppable]

Everyone at school(nearly) hate Alex Hackney, why can't I?

 

[Dilasc]

Being the one person to be a man and give a person a chance will make you seem like less of a douchebag! Anyway, why don't you take my advice and go read a few good fics here and learn a thing or two about how to write a REAL story. You may learn to enjoy it if you do. You know that? Fic writing is supposed to be fun, not hateful propaganda! If you don't want to take this seriously, then don't write.

 

[Saffire Persian]

Yanno, if a paragraph counted as a story, and consisted of stuff like you're writing, I don't think books or novels would ever exist upon the earth, they'd be burned in a flaming fire - and I'd dance around it quite happily.

In any case, you have a few problems - many, insurmountable, uncountable.

1. Personally, characters should have personality... not be flat like a dot of paper.

2. Plot? Oh plot, where art thou? I miss thee.

3. Funny does not include the jokes above. Funny is where people laugh, not gawk at the amount of stupidity one possesses.

4. You don't seem to be taking any of the previous reviewers advice.

5. Your tone you put in this fic is about as immature and degrading as I have read... Sure, I've read newbie fics before, and sure, they may not be the best thing that crawled up on dry land, but they were actually trying to write a fic, and have shown at least some aspect of coherancy.

6. I know I may sound harsh, and believe me, I'm usually not this way.. however, your fic rather annoyed me and upset me.. it was just down right degrading..

7. I despise excessive, needless cussing that has no point whatsoever. It's vulgar, and to my observations, totally unneeded.

8. You are the first author in my entire experience who's tried to use a lv. 255 Mewtwo. 0_o.. which is just.. odd, weird.. and everything else, not to mention, as Renegade so kindly put out, downright low. The only time I'd ever accept such a thing is a parody.. and this ain't no parody, my dears.. it's a dang tragedy that everyone laughs at.

Excuse me while I leave. Granted, if you ever wish to try to attempt writing a story that actually has plot, characters, etc, I'll be glad to critique it, and critique it nicely. Right now, it seems your using this board as an excuse to swear and be vulgar to your heart's content.

^^ -- Have a nice day.

 

[Yami Ryu]

Everyone at school(nearly) hate Alex Hackney, why can't I?

If everyone but Alex Hackney jumped off a cliff, would you jump too? Being a little baa-ing sheep and hating a person just cause other people hate him only makes you look like an inane little blight on life. Or like the morons that outcasted me in school once one year because I was a foot taller than all the guys -_- so you really want to be a flocking moron? Then go summon your fellow lemmings and find a cliff >.> because if you can't actually think for yourself.

Then please, don't muck up the fanfic forums here with your mindless, Alex hating drivel.

How would you like it if everyone in the world hated you and the one person that could give you a chance, went along with them. Think about it. Unless you lost your mind to your lemming friends.

Edit:

Right now, it seems your using this board as an excuse to swear and be vulgar to your heart's content.

Aaaaannnnd Saffire Persian ftw o.o

 

[Dilasc]

It's just not fair. We work our anuses off for maybe all of one or two replies to our stories, and this butt-mankey slaps a piece of dog doo together and get a ton of attention. Sure it's all negative, but it's still attention. People, please! Ignore this crapheap and lets go ENJOY ourselves, rather than find a reason to want to end our life by getting extremely early brain tumors.

 

[Pete the Unstoppable]

Alright, you all this this sux don't you. So lets delete this and my other fanfic that people hate and I'll try something new.

 

[Joe Vega #4]

Don't try. Your fanfics suck and have pointless crap clogging up the forums. I'll have you know that the Head Honcho, Serebii pays a good amount of money to keep SPPf up, and this ain't helping. 'Kay?