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Blackjack what is this???? I was sort of like "wtf" when I read it at first but I was cool with Cyrus being all up in his universe rockin it with his commanders he kept remaking cause he ain't gettin it right no suh but then..
THEN you go all whack on me and say he's in a psycho ward with the robo commanders and whatevs. Now that just ain't right :\
PS To the retard who went on about human anatomy and how 'creating something with your hands' should imply they weren't real people.. have you lived in a paper bag for years and never heard anyone talk about the 'Hand of God' or various other deities and hand-based things? Creating something with your hands is how most deities are portrayed as doing such.
PPS Just because someone writes many fics, most of which I like, doesn't mean all of their work is astounding and deserves you wanking it to. I normally don't have too much crit on Blackjack's fics but this one, man, I just don't even know where to start >8\
Blackjack girl, I know I been a trucking jelk in the past, but str8 up to you here, I got some words.
I think you were writing with a very fine line for a subject. There are too many words you could've/did use that are too ambiguous or too specific to pull off the sort of hidden-meaning effect you were going for. It was a very hard fic idea to write imo and I feel you did well broaching it.
I had no clue what you were actually intending, though, and I'm still sort of mystified by it. It doesn't make a lot of sense to me and the fic really just seems like Cyrus is remaking his universe over and over because he can never get it right since he himself isn't perfect. But of course he'd never admit that.
I think it'd have played out a lot better if you'd gone with that as your plot, or if you'd decided to be more concrete that he's in the loony bin. The way it is, some readers got it and others had no clue.
Could've been a lot better imo. I'm still confused here. Keep writing homie!