L0v3 is Evol
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Hello, I'm new to Serebii, and I've been reading so many fanfictions here, that I've been inspired to write my own. Constructive criticism would be greatly appreciated. And on with the story:
Crystal Rose [Contestshipping]
Story Rating: PG-13
Chapter One: Separated
Chapter Rating: G
“I don’t want to go to Pettleburg! I want to stay here! Drew, Misty and Ash aren’t coming with us. My best friend Drew, mom! Remember what I told you?! He’s always alone and… and... if I’m not there…”
May sobbed uncontrollably. She scanned her room, she saw pictures of her and her friends, and more importantly Drew. The emerald haired boy had been her best friend for as long as she could remember. Ever since she moved to La Rousee two years ago…
*Flashback*
A five year old May stood alone in the playground, she had just moved. Wearing her signature red bandana, May tried to approach the girls who were waiting for their turn in line. The others saw May and scoffed at her attire.
“Hey Amy, didn’t your mom hire a new maid?” said one of the girls.
“Yeah, that girl’s probably her daughter, just look at how she's dressed,” replied Amy.
Mays eyes started to water, as the girls jeered her about her family’s financial status. She couldn’t take it any more and broke down until she heard a voice...
“STOP!”
She saw that boy with green hair-and at the time, she thought he was a walking tree. But pushing that thought aside, she thought how quickly her tormentors’ attitude changed as soon as the strange boy came along.
“Oh Drew… Hi! Umm... How are you?” The demagogue of the group said nervously.
“I said stop didn’t I?” he countered.
“Er… um… stop what?” she said playing dumb, but Drew didn’t buy it.
Instead, he went over to May and helped her up.
“I’ll be sure to tell my father Amy. You’re through with messing with people. Your mom won’t be working in the company anymore. No one likes you, get that through your head.”
Then he turned to May, “C’mon, let’s go away from these weirdos.”
Once they were out of earshot Drew made some conversation with the distraught girl, “So, you’re new around here, right? Anyways, I’m Drew.”
May said nothing, but nodded. And then she started crying again. Drew didn’t know what to do, so he saw a park at the corner of the street and took May there. They both sat on the grass field and looked at the other children playing. After she stopped crying he said, “Don’t believe anything they say. None of it is true. You are not a maid and you do not look like one. Those girls don’t know anything about you. Anyway, I actually like the bandana, you look nice.”
May stared at him in shock as he stood up. No one ever said anything like that to her before. May’s heart started to beat a bit faster and she blushed. She suddenly jumped up and hugged him.
“Thanks Drew.”
They stayed like that for a couple of seconds until she realized what she had just done, and felt herself getting redder than before.
“I’m sorry,” May whispered.
“Anyway, I’m outta here before you do something dumber and I have to save you again,” he said as he flipped his hair.
May stared at him in shock. He had just been so nice and kind, but turned out to be a big jerk in a matter of seconds. “I never asked you to save me! You did it out of your own free will!”
“Whatever,” Drew said as he started to walk away. But he stopped and said, “Here have one.”
He threw a bright red rose which fell at her feet and she stared at it. She looked up and saw him walking farther away until he left the park. She picked it up and smelled it. It had such a beautiful scent, one in which she had never smelled.
*Back to the Present*
May came out of her reverie when she heard a voice, all the while noticing the absence of her mother.
"What I said yesterday was true. I really don't want you to go. I'll miss you."
May turned as she responded, "Huh? Oh...Drew, it's you...I'll miss you too...and I'm sorry about exploding and all. I don't want to leave...especially since... you know... your family... always alone... and I can't be there."
"Yeah, but we'll still keep in touch, right? Cause we're best friends."
Drew looked unsure for a moment, and continued. "And best friends care about each other..."
May looked at him and suddenly started crying. "I-I don’t know what I'll do without you Drew" she sobbed.
Drew hugged May and said "Don't worry you'll be fine." He then pulled away from May and took out a rose from the inside of his pocket and said "Here, I'm giving you this rose so you can remember me."
She took the rose and remembered the first time they had met. May hugged Drew for what she felt to be the last time, and said, "I have to go now, Mom is going to need my help doing some last minute packing. Goodbye Drew," as she wiped all traces of her tears from her face, "I'll miss you."
He stared at her retreating form and sighed, "I'm really gonna have to let you go... and I'll be stuck here without you." He left her home, but not before leaving a crystal rose on her bed.
"Don't forget me." And with that Drew left.
*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*
"Mom!" May cried as she searched her room. She couldn't find her picture of her and Drew. "Have you seen that picture of me and Drew? It was the only one we took together, and I can't find it!"
And as she passed her bed, something caught her eye. It was shiny, red, and beautiful.
She whispered a name, and a tear dropped down. She was so torn between happiness and sadness, that May fell to the floor in shock.
END OF CHAP #1! Thank you for your time and please review
Crystal Rose [Contestshipping]
Story Rating: PG-13
Chapter One: Separated
Chapter Rating: G
“I don’t want to go to Pettleburg! I want to stay here! Drew, Misty and Ash aren’t coming with us. My best friend Drew, mom! Remember what I told you?! He’s always alone and… and... if I’m not there…”
May sobbed uncontrollably. She scanned her room, she saw pictures of her and her friends, and more importantly Drew. The emerald haired boy had been her best friend for as long as she could remember. Ever since she moved to La Rousee two years ago…
*Flashback*
A five year old May stood alone in the playground, she had just moved. Wearing her signature red bandana, May tried to approach the girls who were waiting for their turn in line. The others saw May and scoffed at her attire.
“Hey Amy, didn’t your mom hire a new maid?” said one of the girls.
“Yeah, that girl’s probably her daughter, just look at how she's dressed,” replied Amy.
Mays eyes started to water, as the girls jeered her about her family’s financial status. She couldn’t take it any more and broke down until she heard a voice...
“STOP!”
She saw that boy with green hair-and at the time, she thought he was a walking tree. But pushing that thought aside, she thought how quickly her tormentors’ attitude changed as soon as the strange boy came along.
“Oh Drew… Hi! Umm... How are you?” The demagogue of the group said nervously.
“I said stop didn’t I?” he countered.
“Er… um… stop what?” she said playing dumb, but Drew didn’t buy it.
Instead, he went over to May and helped her up.
“I’ll be sure to tell my father Amy. You’re through with messing with people. Your mom won’t be working in the company anymore. No one likes you, get that through your head.”
Then he turned to May, “C’mon, let’s go away from these weirdos.”
Once they were out of earshot Drew made some conversation with the distraught girl, “So, you’re new around here, right? Anyways, I’m Drew.”
May said nothing, but nodded. And then she started crying again. Drew didn’t know what to do, so he saw a park at the corner of the street and took May there. They both sat on the grass field and looked at the other children playing. After she stopped crying he said, “Don’t believe anything they say. None of it is true. You are not a maid and you do not look like one. Those girls don’t know anything about you. Anyway, I actually like the bandana, you look nice.”
May stared at him in shock as he stood up. No one ever said anything like that to her before. May’s heart started to beat a bit faster and she blushed. She suddenly jumped up and hugged him.
“Thanks Drew.”
They stayed like that for a couple of seconds until she realized what she had just done, and felt herself getting redder than before.
“I’m sorry,” May whispered.
“Anyway, I’m outta here before you do something dumber and I have to save you again,” he said as he flipped his hair.
May stared at him in shock. He had just been so nice and kind, but turned out to be a big jerk in a matter of seconds. “I never asked you to save me! You did it out of your own free will!”
“Whatever,” Drew said as he started to walk away. But he stopped and said, “Here have one.”
He threw a bright red rose which fell at her feet and she stared at it. She looked up and saw him walking farther away until he left the park. She picked it up and smelled it. It had such a beautiful scent, one in which she had never smelled.
*Back to the Present*
May came out of her reverie when she heard a voice, all the while noticing the absence of her mother.
"What I said yesterday was true. I really don't want you to go. I'll miss you."
May turned as she responded, "Huh? Oh...Drew, it's you...I'll miss you too...and I'm sorry about exploding and all. I don't want to leave...especially since... you know... your family... always alone... and I can't be there."
"Yeah, but we'll still keep in touch, right? Cause we're best friends."
Drew looked unsure for a moment, and continued. "And best friends care about each other..."
May looked at him and suddenly started crying. "I-I don’t know what I'll do without you Drew" she sobbed.
Drew hugged May and said "Don't worry you'll be fine." He then pulled away from May and took out a rose from the inside of his pocket and said "Here, I'm giving you this rose so you can remember me."
She took the rose and remembered the first time they had met. May hugged Drew for what she felt to be the last time, and said, "I have to go now, Mom is going to need my help doing some last minute packing. Goodbye Drew," as she wiped all traces of her tears from her face, "I'll miss you."
He stared at her retreating form and sighed, "I'm really gonna have to let you go... and I'll be stuck here without you." He left her home, but not before leaving a crystal rose on her bed.
"Don't forget me." And with that Drew left.
*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*
"Mom!" May cried as she searched her room. She couldn't find her picture of her and Drew. "Have you seen that picture of me and Drew? It was the only one we took together, and I can't find it!"
And as she passed her bed, something caught her eye. It was shiny, red, and beautiful.
She whispered a name, and a tear dropped down. She was so torn between happiness and sadness, that May fell to the floor in shock.
END OF CHAP #1! Thank you for your time and please review
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