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Demons of Metropolis

ChloboShoka

Writer
Well, where do I start, I guess my review is better late than never.

The plot idea is really good. It's like romeo and Juliet with a twist. Angels vs demons. It's looking pretty cool as well. The plot devices and the fact the baby won't be returning. The dragons were a great touch as well, I can imagine them representing Wrath.
May turned towards Drew. She then looked down as she murmured, “I can’t believe this is happening. I didn’t want Ash to die!”

She whimpered over the loss of a friend.
This was also quite tragic, but a good touch to this dark and thrilling fan fic. I will patiently wait for more.

This fic also reminds of the anime Vampire Princess Miyu, they way May and Drew's relationship is portrayed along with the plot reminds me of the relationship between Miyu and Chisato and Miyu and Larva.
 

Fofa

Thunder Trainer
Just like with the original source, just about everyone has to kick the bucket. Sorry I haven't responded til now, but the forums were being a pain. ><

And yeah, I guess the story's over soon. Sometimes, it feels like it goes on forever, doesn't it?
 

Encyclopika

The Queen
Fofa said:
And yeah, I guess the story's over soon. Sometimes, it feels like it goes on forever, doesn't it?
I wouldn't say that about this story. Now Contest Tie, yeah. That one is going on forever. D:
Well, where do I start, I guess my review is better late than never.
Thank you very much for reviewing! It's nice to hear different opinions. ^^

Thanks everyone for reviewing. I shall get the next chapter out asap!
 
I just started reading this a few days ago and I love it! I'm a bit sad that Ash died, though, even if he was my least favorite character.

Anyways, I enjoy your writing style, keep up the good work!
 

Encyclopika

The Queen
Hey, everyone. ;D I figured I should post SOMETHING, so here it is. The last chapter of Demon before the Epilogue. If people could review quickly, I'd be glad to just post the Epilogue asap without worrying about review count. ^_^ Thankies in advance!

Chapter 19

The library is a tall, stone building, much like the church and just as ominous. A large plateau of steps makes up its stoop and decorated glass fills its windows.
The area surrounding the edifice was barren of life. All fighting between white and black Demons had shifted elsewhere in the city. May and Drew landed in front and stepped inside as quickly as they could. The iron doors were heavy, and their scraping up against the marble floors inside echoed across the stone walls.
May and Drew took in the majesty of the library’s interior. It was almost like a palace filled with bookshelves upon cupboards of books and scrolls and documents. Everything was neat and orderly, though. Not a book was left on the dark, tiles; not one chair strayed too far from its desk. Dust was rampant, though, and colored the dark, cherry wood furniture and shelves with a thin coating of gray. There was also a second story that ringed around the sections and could be observed through elegant arches. Spiral staircases lead May and Drew to that floor. But where was one to begin looking for a dagger in such a place?

“I know there are Angels and Demons killing each other outside, but it’s really creepy in here,” Drew said as he and May explored the many aisles of books.

May giggled at his comment.
There were no clues among the books. They all featured wonderful topics, though.

“You know…I wish I would have come here sooner,” May said as she began to get distracted by the titles.

“Same,” Drew agreed. “But…we really need to be finding Sunilluma. Not that…I wanna die as quickly as possible or anything."

“Scared?” May teased. She stuck her tongue out at him, but he was not playful.

“Admittedly, yes. Aren’t you?”

“I haven’t thought about it. I just want to stop all this.”

“But are you?”

May paused at his persistence. The question was weighted, though. Death had never been so close to her life before. But now, with the deaths of her mother and good friend, it had crept up on her too fast for its meaning to really take effect. Death. What was it exactly? What was it like? To be born, only backwards? To have the world go on without you? May had always been one to believe in the joys of an afterlife. She had been forced and brainwashed into believing that after death, good Angels go to heaven, but alas, she was not an Angel. She was a Demon. Would she go to hell now for that fact alone? Lies had once been her truths, so it was difficult for her answer her own questions. Maybe heaven really does exist, but then, why feel fear thinking about one’s death? Why feel anguish thinking about another’s death?

“I am afraid,” May admitted.

She gave Drew a cute smile, a hopeful expression that made him automatically smile back her.

“But…you’re coming with me, so, it’s not all that scary anymore.”

Drew snickered, taking on her happy thought.
Coming to the end of the aisle, they found a pair of doors. Tall and gray, their elegant points reached to the second floor. Drew looked at May.

“A secret room? Could be promising.”

“There’s nothing to lose,” May said, and helped Drew push the doors open, which seemed stuck in place for a good five minutes.

Busting through the opening, May and Drew found a completely new room. It was circular and stone, like a grand dome. The walls were indented all around with cupboards, each containing a few scrolls. In the center was a pedestal that held up a small box, as well as a few documents itself.

“Secret rooms hold lots of secrets,” Drew said playfully. “Care to know Metropolis’ secrets before we, uh, pass on?”

May nodded. They approached the pedestal, and through the box’s glass they could see Sunilluma sparkling below. The dagger was almost identical to Sindarkka. It was a silver blade and its hilt was decorated with heavenly designs and pearl-like gems. Before opening the box, May and Drew picked up a scroll each from either side of Sunilluma and began to read their contents. The documents were records of the great battle two decades ago.

“So,” May began as she finished her literature. “This is the agreement between Demons. The black Demons were never banished – they agreed to leave. But why?”

“Underworld. The dragon feeds on our clans’ hatred for one another,” Drew enlightened her. “You know that. I suppose, like us, Robert just said screw it and agreed to go away to keep the city safe.”

“But…they planned all along to make a come back,” May said. “Wouldn’t that endanger the city?”

“I don’t have all the answers,” Drew answered and looked at his document. “My scroll says the city had been split equally by the Horizon Line. For a long time, the city was actually two cities, but the Angels got prideful and invaded the Darkie side. Everyone became Wrathful and Underworld showed up. This is like a giant deja vu.”


“True,” May agreed. “Then Underworld was sealed away by that spell…and we broke it.”

“You can’t say it’s entirely our fault.” Drew argued, but it was no use. Deep down, he knew that without them, Underworld would have never appeared. However, his statement was not completely false.

“Ya know, even if we would have never met, the Demons were coming back…and everyone would in Wrath, anyway. We don’t know. Maybe it’s better this way. At least we can stop it. If Underworld goes away, things will calm down.”

May nodded. There was no use changing the past. She put her scroll down where she found it, as did Drew, who also opened up Sunilluma’s box. The dagger seemed to glow, and it was uncomfortable for Drew to even handle. Unlike Sindarkka, this dagger seemed to drain his strength. Ignorant to its power, Drew fell to the ground dizzy. May knelt down in shock.

“Drew! Are you okay?”

Drew nodded. “Yeah…come here.”

Putting the dagger down, he gently grabbed May and sat her down between his legs. She leaned on him, her back against his chest and her head below his chin.
The room was dark save for the light that filtered in from the glass windows. Outside, a storm of hatred and agony snarled. May could not take it. There was no where else to go in this life. No other outlet.

In order to save everyone…

Drew leaned up against the pedestal and picked up Sunilluma, the dagger was almost excited that it would slay two Demons. He was not quite sure how to go about this, but a fast death was his aim. There was no need to struggle. He hoped, with every fiber of his being, that their deaths, unlike Ash’s, would not be in vain, and that this plan would work.

“Close yours eyes,” Drew told May.

There was also no reason to be afraid. May did as she was told and allowed her lids to close and her head to fall back onto his shoulder. She trusted him and snuggled her nose against his cheek.

In order to save the city…

With that to be his last memory of existence, he plunged the innocent dagger through his Angelic mate and into himself, piercing the skin as if it were air. May gasped, but was gone in an instant. Her wings drooped, limp, and her spirit faded, this time, permanently. Drew felt himself fading away as well. He too had been stabbed and the incredible amount of energy swept through his body like a hot tidal wave. He closed his eyes and joined May.

We have to die.

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It's not the end! Remember, Epilogue! I shall post it tomorrow - I too must follow my own rules. :p
*If you see any spelling errors, I'd like to know about them. Thankies. ^^
 

Ayra

~Master Coordinator~
Wow. Informative, but also short. One mistake I saw was:

everyone would // in Wrath, anyway

The word be should be where the slashes are. Hopefully, Underworld will be stopped and, maybe, a different seal spell will be used. I just hope May and Drew's sacrifices aren't in vain. Once again, a great chapter, but a little short.

~Ayra~;267;
 

Encyclopika

The Queen
^I know, but it was 2-3 pages, so it's legit. And this is the final chapter, the end - the Epilogue. It, too, is very short (1 page) but it closes everything up...just like the prologue opened everything up. XD

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Chapter 20 - Epilogue

The city of Metropolis. A desolate place torn by the hatred of two Demonic clans...

In time the city would repair itself, but in the minutes after May and Drew’s deaths, the spell became activated again. Bright, violet lights spewed from the center of the city once again and sucked Underworld back underground. The dragon tried to escape, and its roars could be heard across the city, echoing off of window panes. But that was all in vain. The lights seemed to grab it and pull it back from whence it came - back to Hell it seemed. Its reign over the city was over, for the time being. Amongst the city streets, Demons awakened from their terrible slumber of destruction and rage, only to become enraged again at the other clan’s existence. However, the tables were turned.

Robert observed the scene with an air of victory in his sigh. The white Demon legion had been completely emaciated from their prolonged rampage while the black Demons had strived to keep their composure. It was true some Demons had become Wrathful, but overall, they had learned from their mistakes two decades ago. The plan, Robert reviewed quietly to himself with a smile, was to come back to the city only to provoke the Wrath in the enemy. The effect was sprawled out in front of him as Angels knelt down in defeat of the Demons. Of course, he could not take all of the credit. Even though Drew had not fought for him in the way he had planned, he had still served by breaking Underworld’s spell long enough to kill off the Angelic force and so, Robert thanked him from the bottom of his heart.

Jim looked up at Robert, happy to see the Demon once again. The gremlin knew the city would finally be at peace once again and would stay like that. It had been a long time, but in the midst of destruction, the city was pulling itself back together. Jim was not worried anymore. The Demonic Council, which he remembered from many years ago, would govern the city the way they used to govern the Darkie side of town. The vampires’ numbers would probably decline now with their top predator back from their absence, and the wealth would reach his own hands. But those fantasies would take a long time. Surely the first thing on the agenda was to fix the areas of the city Underworld had destroyed.

The gremlin walked along the sidewalk. He looked up at the sky which was finally clearing. It was not wonderful spring time, but the dark, thundering clouds were taking their leave and the city became brighter almost.

Jim stopped and watched as a few Demons, from both clans, walked together without malice. Did they realize their mistakes? Or perhaps, their brotherhood could finally be realized after such a long time of brainwashing. Even though their plans for destruction was completed, black Demons took no prisoners. They helped their white bretheren to their feet. Jim was unsure of all of this, but it was good to see the fighting had stopped. Perhaps now, Angels and Demons would live as one.

Of course, not everything was happy and sunshine. Sure there was destruction and buildings had collapsed, but the loss of life was staggering. Dead bodies, blood, and pieces of bodies were strewn all over the roads. Wrath was a powerful thing, Jim observed. He also observed that Drew’s promise had been kept. Of course, that had been an empty exaggeration. Then again, Drew always kept his promises.
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*This story ends at 131 pages on Word. ^^*
:D So? How was it? I'd love to hear all you have to say now that the story is over. Were you fine with the twists? How about the ending? Did I surprise you? XD
Well, now that I have this out, everyone will be PM'd. :3
I want to thank everyone for reading and enjoying the story. You made all of this worthwhile. Now all that's left for me here is to finish Contest Tie and I'll be on my merry way out of fanfiction. :3
 
that was so good... and--and ...sad. ;_; if it were up to me, i'd wish for a little more length, but this was perfect as well... yes, great things come in small packages. [and that's why i'm five feet tall =P] and this was factastic.

in chapter 19, there was a little time-warping in the beginning when you were discribing the library, but it's hardly noticable.

as for the many twists:
they were practically heart-stopping [no pun intended]. i really wanted to read more and find out what else would be in store for them. finishing this is almost as bad as when i was done with the twilight series. T_T but you did do a great job on everything. give or take a few errors here and there, i doubt anything that small has a big impact on you. ;)

the ending of it was freaking fantastic and tied everything together very smoothly. i kind of liked the idea of them wanting to find out a little about the city/ies before they passed on. and you discribed that beautifully. ;_; chapter 20, like i said, tied everything off very smoothly and left no questions as far as i know. =] Jim's part made me smile in the mixed of the gloom. ^^

Then again, Drew always kept his promises

brilliant. :)

btw, after you finish CT, does that mean you're going to stop writing fanfics?
just wondering...
there's a great site called writingforums.com and it actually has people who give advice. might want to check it out. ^^

;216; Tff
 

lara lynx

Well-Known Member
Awww its over?
I liked how they died together. I'd thought it would be something like Drew killing her first, then himself, so this was probably more romantic XD

Great story overall, loved it ^_^ Also, have you ever heard of Twilight by Stephanie Meyer? There great and something about them reminded me of this story, the whole Romeo and Juliet/Vamipres thing.

How long has CT got left? It'll be kinda sad when you finish all your fics....
 

Ayra

~Master Coordinator~
Very nice. It's sad that it's over. But still, it was great. A great and well thought out fan fiction. Great job Ama!

~Ayra~;267;
 
Great story. But I'm sad it's over, though...
Drew and May died but at least they died together; better ending than I could come up with, great job!
 

csisps_26

Roark <3
;346; Wow... kinda sad... but at least they died together. I liked it a lot. Still sad though, that they died. BTW, Contest Tie's good, too. Can't wait for the next chapter. Really. :D ;346;
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Fofa

Thunder Trainer
Descriptive as always, I see. I also liked how the epilogue was short, to make a long story end with a bang. Can't believe I almost forgot who Jim was though. ._.;
 

ChloboShoka

Writer
I think the way it's all ended was perfect.

In some cases it was tragic, whilst on the other hand the fact that they died together was a perfect touch. This has been a very excellent story with great plot twists. I do think you are a very good writer, needless to say.

Now when I review fics, I sometimes quite my favorite parts so I will here.

Jim stopped and watched as a few Demons, from both clans, walked together without malice. Did they realize their mistakes? Or perhaps, their brotherhood could finally be realized after such a long time of brainwashing. Even though their plans for destruction was completed, black Demons took no prisoners. They helped their white bretheren to their feet. Jim was unsure of all of this, but it was good to see the fighting had stopped. Perhaps now, Angels and Demons would live as one.

Of course, not everything was happy and sunshine. Sure there was destruction and buildings had collapsed, but the loss of life was staggering. Dead bodies, blood, and pieces of bodies were strewn all over the roads. Wrath was a powerful thing, Jim observed. He also observed that Drew’s promise had been kept. Of course, that had been an empty exaggeration. Then again, Drew always kept his promises.

A great way to end the story, I was kinda expecting an ending like that so the ending didn't surprise me at all. But it was very realistic.
 

shadow_shipper

...indeed...
Ok, during my absence, I saw you got promoted to supermod ! Congratulations :)

Now, I got two chapters to review, but what the heck, I need to read this :p Beacue you're among the people here whose writing I exrtemely enjoy !

Ash began another conversation, this one unlike the others – it actually pertained to the situation at hand.

“So…what do we do now?”

Simple, just like Ash, and pleasantly punctual.

lol, so what if he can't help it ? Poor guy's not bright :rolleyes:

“And we love each other…” May finished.

She had accepted it. That was the only reason the Angelic-Demons were upset. May and Drew made the separation between Demonic races visible where the Angelic Demons had worked so hard to erase that fact.
Ash was quiet at May’s interjection, unable to process it but accepting it all the same. It was water under the bridge. But how does one stop love? It was that very feeling that kept the doors of Underworld’s spell open and let the dragon reign free and superior.

That's what I was thinking of as well ! How do you make a happy ending out of this one ? But apparently, I'll find out soon enough...even if, at first sight, you don't need a happy ending.

The warehouse was dark, but the light of the moon filtered in through the cracked ceiling and had placed a small spotlight on Misty’s face. The Angelic-Demon hung his feet over the pier’s edge.

“I will be,” she answered. “Please…please, Ash, be careful out there tomorrow."

“Of course, but, why are you so worried?”

Misty opened her mouth, but her voice was not behind her one hundred percent.

“Because…I”

She could not do it. She could not confess. What was there to say? As Ash reassured her of his safe return, the mermaid figured it was better not to say anything. Her love for the Angel was just as taboo as May and Drew’s relationship, and much more difficult. It could never be.
Misty embraced her Angelic friend, though, and though of him as a true Angel before letting him free.

Alas...it's not meant to be in this one...

Unable to escape the Wrathful’s clench, Ash felt the Wrathful Angel push its foot down onto his back, and tear his white, feathered wing from his body. Ash yelled in pain. He twisted violently in the air, and the Wrathful released him, content with its prize.
Drew fought off the other Wrathfuls, yet he was too late to help Ash. Flying toward the Angelic-Demon like a bullet, Drew fought off the Wrathful, stabbing it with his wing.
Ash, unable to fly with one wing, fell to the ground. Drew turned his attention toward him and dove down, catching him in mid air before he fatally hit the cement. Unfortunately for Ash, his wound was already fatal. They had been so close to the church, too. Drew landed with Ash in his arms. The Angel was bleeding profusely, but refused to show weakness. With Drew’s support, Ash stood on his feet, and insisted to go on inside the church. “Let’s go.”

Epic struggle. Yet, there are always casualties. Sadly, Ash will have to go...

Back behind the stage was the sound of snarling. Drew had almost forgotten he had locked Norman in the church, and now, it seemed, the High Priest had turned into the Devil. Long, curled horns, sharp teeth, and the demonic tail were all present as Norman made his entry. He hissed and his skin was colored an angry red hue. Drew could see the body was already deteriorating much more quickly than the Demons outside, as blood trickled from every orifice on his face.
Drew waited for Norman’s attack, which was not anticipated long. The white Demon lunged towards him, jumping up into the air preparing the strike from above. Having had enough, Drew crouched, arching his wings to make an artificial spike-pit. Norman fell right into it, giving Drew the upper-hand. With a fling of his wings, Drew threw Norman into the air, and the white Demon went flying in the other direction among the rows of pews. He landed on one, his neck hitting the back rest. A loud crack could be heard from the center aisle where Ash and Drew resided, and afterward, there were no more interruptions. Norman was finally dead, his neck broken from the fall and, as one might assume, his Pride.

That was kinda...disappointing.
It was so short, but it was the one battle I had been waiting for. At least, Norman, consumed by his Wrath and other emotions, had let everything out, and was going to try to fulfill his revenge, and it ends up being written in two paragraphs...
Man, I wanted more xD

Drew took that into consideration and nodded. It was their last chance to save the city and put honor into the deaths of those that were lost in their cause. With that silent agreement, they took flight once more into the gray sky toward the library.

Hype heading into the last chapter ^^

With that to be his last memory of existence, he plunged the innocent dagger through his Angelic mate and into himself, piercing the skin as if it were air. May gasped, but was gone in an instant. Her wings drooped, limp, and her spirit faded, this time, permanently. Drew felt himself fading away as well. He too had been stabbed and the incredible amount of energy swept through his body like a hot tidal wave. He closed his eyes and joined May.

We have to die.

:'(
You did it. You made this turn out in a way it made me cry. (well...just my eyes wet, but that's that...)

Jim stopped and watched as a few Demons, from both clans, walked together without malice. Did they realize their mistakes? Or perhaps, their brotherhood could finally be realized after such a long time of brainwashing. Even though their plans for destruction was completed, black Demons took no prisoners. They helped their white bretheren to their feet.

A message of hope ;)

Dead bodies, blood, and pieces of bodies were strewn all over the roads. Wrath was a powerful thing, Jim observed. He also observed that Drew’s promise had been kept. Of course, that had been an empty exaggeration. Then again, Drew always kept his promises.

Hehe ^^'

Now all that's left for me here is to finish Contest Tie and I'll be on my merry way out of fanfiction. :3

Seriously ?!? o_O
You're joking...right ?

Well, that's it ! You deserve your oscar for sure thanks to this baby ;)
The ending left me a bittersweet taste. Because the story itself is over. I'll miss it :/ Maybe some day, I'll start reading Contest Tie...I started reading FADOF after all ^^'
But anyway, they had to die, makes me think truly of Romeo & Juliet.
Really, whenever I expect something from you, you deliver. Without fail.
I believe this is the first completed fic I've read from you xD I'll have to catch up on Treehouse Saga as well :D

In any case, thank you ! Thank you for this great fic :)

And I hope that I'll review some more stuff from you, but that's all up to me ^^'

p.s. : you really threw me off with your announcement that you're leaving writing. I mean, I'd be really sad. Since I can remember you being an inspiration for me, and being here when I registered. You're kind of my landmark around these forums ^^
 

Torchic23

gee that's swell
Ooookay, finally, as promised, I am reviewing! AKA Shower of praise XD <3

Even if I did read this a few days cough2weeksagocough ago, I still remember a lot of how I felt reading this and how absolutely amazing this was. From start to finish, it was just brilliant. I noticed that people kept saying demons & angels stories were unoriginal, but your story isn't like that, it was creative and exciting. Definitely original, so I don't know what they were trying to tell you lol.

Okay... Next, as I somewhat mentioned in that last bit, the things you put in this story were genius! You must have really really thought things out because I mean, WOW, some of that stuff I was thinking 'How could anyone ever think of something that great?!'. And the way you describe things, I could clearly see the scenes in my head and geez, it was awesome. I keep saying that, but I mean it, everything about this story was so epicly great (Woo, makin' up words 8D )
What a sad ending too, it was written so well that it actually made me feel emotional! I almost don't want to use the exclamation points when discussing it because it was so dark and emotional that it should be reviewed with '. . .' XD But I loved it, amazing ending to an amazing story.

As I said last night on MSN, I really did feel inspired after reading that. It just completely blew me away. The way you can keep them in character even though it's like a whole different world, that's incredible. Every answer/problem/mystery of the story was solved by the end, which doesn't happen a lot in fanfiction, just proves you'd make one AMAzing author (Haha, 'scuse that horrible pun X3 )

And I don't know why people keep finding 'problems/mistakes', because there weren't any, this story was absolutely perfect! Even if I'm not into Contest Shipping anymore, this was absolutely lovable. You must have put so much work into this too... I'm not repeating myself am I? I could just go on and on forever about how great this was, I'm so glad I read it and I really wish I had gotten around to it sooner ^^;

<3
(This post was not nearly long enough to show all the praise I had to give your story D8; )
 

aSc1@3

Member
I just read this whole thing today(Missed the Bus, it can't come even within 10min. of the same time everyday), all I have to say is WOW to the 42nd power and that you like to kill the Toast at the end, don't you? First this, then Treehouse Saga... What's wrong with you!!! JK, but this story is amazing to say the least.

P.S. If you get a grade on this in your Writing Class, can you telly what the story got?
 

Encyclopika

The Queen
aSc1@3 - It's not that I like to kill Drew - I just enjoy bringing that sense of epic depression into my stories. Treehouse was...random with meaning and with an NC17 rating. It was a fantasy even though it was directly correlated with the anime. It's true Drew did not have to die in that one, but at that point in time, I had done something no one would have ever expected. I wanted to take people for a ride...make it worth reading my stuff. It's different here.
I killed Drew - and May - not because I wanted to surprise you or depress you. I did it because that, I believe, was the only ending this story could have had. Any other alternate ending would not have had such a great impact on you. The impact and meaning of this story explodes but also closes up with their deaths. At least that's how I feel, looking over it.

As far as my writing class, I did not get an individual grade for this story, but my overall portfolio got an A, and so I can only guess that this large chunk of it got an A as well. ^^
Thank you for your kind comments. ^^
 

mary maple

I Luh You♥
o...im crying its over now....sniff....
this is truly a great story u have made !it was sad wen may an drew died together to...
 

Drew'sBaby

Coordinator
After two years I finally got back into the story and...everything you wrote has shocked me to no end. I have an overwhelming sense of pride for you. The story was absolutely amazing and every writer ever to read this, no matter how amazing, has had doubts about their own writings because of this, I can assure you.

I noticed that you stayed true to almost every aspect of Greek Drama, though maybe not intentionally. It has the tragic hero(s) who think they are doing the right thing but notice their fatal flaw, it has the tragic but expected ending and it was just amazing.

Wonderful job and again, I feel very proud of you! *sobs quietly* :)


Amazing...
 
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