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Rider

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Contestshipping, Pokeshipping, ect. (depends on how you look at it)

Hey ya'lls, I changed my mind about whether or not to put this story up, so here it is! My first well done Contestshipping fic. There may be a slight (big) problem of OOCness, and if you catch that, and I know theres no reason for it, then I'll try to change it. But here's the first chapter, and I hope you like it! I probably will not be doing a PM List, because it's too much hassle for me, but if I feel you probably won't check back, I'll send you a PM. hope you like it, cause I sure do! By the way, there are a ridiculous amount of made-ups in this story, and the way I view Drew's family. Very good for a Drew fan that doesn't mind millions of made-ups.
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“Oh wow!” I cried as I spun around, holding a brand new, baby eevee in my hands, my arms stretched out so I could see the baby pokemon more easily.

“Do you like it?” Brock asked.

“I love it more than anything!” I said pulling the equally excited eevee up close in a tight hug.

“I’ll call you,” I thought for a moment “Mimi!”

The Adorable Eevee squealed, and jumped onto the table, covered in birthday presents.

I was finally turning twelve, and Ash had said it would be okay for us to come back to the petalburg gym, to celebrate with mom and dad.

Max was sure excited to see them again, as was I, along with all the pokemon I had left at home.

“Open mine next May!” Misty said gleefully holding up a freshly wrapped gift, which wasn’t very big at all.

I didn’t mind though, so I carefully peeled off the wrapping, fighting the urge to rip off the colorful paper sealing away my gift.

“Wow!” I said, lifting the lid of the little box.

“They’re earrings! In the shape of balance badges!” I cried, showing dad.

“Only vertical.” He said smiling.

One tip of the balance badge was connected with the steel ball at the top, and the other pointed toward the ground, therefore making it not very balanced looking, but beautiful just the same.

I picked up the very last gift, after I had opened ash’s, which was a complete set of pokeballs, except for the master ball of course, that he had ordered from Kurt, from Brock, Mimi, the balance earrings from Misty, a blue flute from Max, which I knew he got from the strange man up in Lavaridge, who made things out of ashes, and a book on famous coordinators, from my parents.

“We’re not sure who this came from.” Norman said nodding toward the long box encased in gold wrapping paper, in my hands.

I looked around for a card, or a note or anything similar, but found none, and decided to just open it.

When I peeled the gold paper off, I found a silver box, and as I lifted the lid, I instantly knew whom it came from.

I could tell, when I saw the long-stemmed rose, that was lined with gold, that would preserve it a while longer than most roses.

I immediately recognized roselia’s rose, as I’d gotten at least 6 already.

“Secret admirer?” My mom joked.

“I don’t think so.” I replied slyly.

“That reminds me, didn’t that Drew boy give you a rose at the Grand Festival? Maybe it’s from him!” She said knowingly.

“Maybe.” I said, already knowing that the truthful answer would’ve been, ‘Of course, who else would send me a rose?’

“Well let’s get it in a vase.” My mother said, plucking the rose out of my hands, and carefully putting it into a thin glass vase, intricately blown out at the bottom with a thin neck.

“Looks great!” I said happily.

“So you think it really was Drew who sent you that rose?” Max asked next to me, smirking at me in his brotherly way.

“I’m not sure.” I answered truthfully “I don’t think he knows when my birthday is…”

“Maybe Beautifly told Masquerain, it was spending a lot of it’s free time with Masquerain at the last Contest remember?” max said.

“Maybe…” I honestly didn’t know.

Half of me wanted it to be from Drew, and the other half from my old friend Brendan, who knew I liked roses.

“Anyway,” I said shaking my head “what counts is that it’s beautiful.”

“I would kill to get one of those!” Misty cried, stars in her eyes “How romantic!”

“Well we know what to get you for your birthday.” Ash joked.

“Ash Ketchum is you even try being that unimaginativ-“

“He was kidding Misty.” Brock intervened.

“Whoop.” Norman said glancing at the door that jingled as someone opened the door “Maybe a challenger.”

I glanced over my dad’s shoulder and caught a glimpse of green hair.

Drew?

Maybe. But I knew it was him the instant I heard him talk to my father.

“Just thought I’d wish May a happy birthday before I leave.” He said

I got up from my seat, Mimi following me obediently, already attached to me like glue.

“Drew?” I said as I stuck my head around the door leading to the gym arena.

“Hello there May.” He said coolly.

“Hi!” I said happily “Thanks for the present!”

“Your welcome. I was wondering whether you’d figure out who it was from or not, but apparently you did.” He smirked.

“It’s my birthday. Don’t ruin it.” I said, a smile plastered on my face, but my tone getting irritated.

I noticed that he was carefully hiding his right arm.

“Right.” He said shoving it off “Well happy birthday. I doubt I’ll ever be seeing you again, so good-bye.”

He saluted in a mock fashion, and was about to leave, when I said, “Why won’t I see you again?”

He turned his head slightly and said “I’m going home, and well,” He flicked his hair and continued “I don’t think I’ll leave anytime soon.”

I was surprised in every possible way.

I never thought of Drew as a person with a home.

Oh that’s smart. Everyone’s got a home. No matter where, or what it’s made of.

Why was he hiding his arm?

I sighed, and returned to the kitchen.


I leaned out my window as I felt my spirits drop.

With no more partying I finally realized what I missed.

No more Drew. No more rivalry.

Less motivation for contests. Less chances to use all these comebacks.

I was already beginning to miss him.

I groaned and pulled myself off the windowsill.

Pulling the open window down, to keep the now chilly wind from sneaking inside, I looked around my room.

Not much to it. I could see Beautifly sleeping in the corner with Skitty and Combusken.

Then there was Squirtle and Mimi, who were both still full of energy, playing tag around the rug.

Beautifly had been down for awhile, because I got her back for the very last contest in Cinnibar, and she enjoyed flying around with Masquerain, but for a long time now she hadn’t been able to see him.

I hadn’t seen very much of Drew either.

I felt someone nudge my shoulder, I turned around and saw a vine waving in front of me.

Looking down, I saw Bulbasaur looking at me confused at why I was so quiet.

I laughed softly and bent down.

“Would you by any chance know where Drew lives?” I joked.

Bulbasaur looked at me, utterly confused.

“I didn’t think so.” I said smiling sympathetically.

“Maybe Beautifly does.” I said before stifling a yawn.

“I’ll ask her tomorrow.” I said getting up and turning of the lights “Night Bulbasaur.”

“Bulba.....Saur…”
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Kay, well there may be a fair few mistakes there, so if you'd kindly point out any you see, and I'll fix them. I may have to make it longer in an edit, but oh well...Also, I'll be making sprites of almost all the made-ups, because I suck at description, so you'll want to check my freewebs site, which I'll put up once I have the page up and running. As for the pokemon, keep dreaming that I'll make the ones I make up. Pokemon are ridiculously difficult.
 
ooooooooo awesome Aquarius....... i love where its going....... add me to the PM lis if theres one...... *suscribes*
 

Xiang

Well-Known Member
Yes, it's awesome, I'd love to find out more! ^^

Ash Ketchum is you even try being

Ash Ketchum, are you trying to be

I'm too lazy to look for more or quote. =p Either way,

*subscribes*
 

Rider

. . S K Y L I G H T
Oh, that was supposed to be 'Ash Ketchum iF you even try to be that unimaginative!' sorry bout that, I'll fix it.
 

Jo-Jo

blows stuff uhup
Aw, I love it! <3 Too cute. I didn't see any problems with OOCness; the group dynamic sounded natural, and Ash and Misty's two lines of bickering stuck out to me in particular as being very much like them. My favourite part was at the end, when May was missing Drew. It was nicely understated, not mushy at all. And I'm looking forward to your take on Drew's family. So overall, big thumbs up! ;)
 
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Shadowcat

Guest
I love it! *Squeals*

Is Misty rich or what? She has the money to make badges into earrings?

Anyways:
The Drew thing was cool. Drew's family and home: Yeah!

Could you add me to the PM List?
 

Rider

. . S K Y L I G H T
I...guess I am doing a PM list! _ _; anyway, yeah, you'll find it gets WAAAAAY more OOC in later chapter's for Drew, but you must remember, that this happens AFTER Kanto. so....yeah. lol. It may take awhile for the next chappie to come out, because since I suck at describing things, (especially those dumb badges) I'll have to make sprites of everything. But not pokemon. Pokemon are ridicoulusly hard, especially for a perfectionist. So, the new chapter should be out soon, since I've already got...MOST of the sprites....

~Aquarius
 
M

MayXDrew

Guest
when are you going to continue Aquarius? i want to read more... of your fic i mean. well great job on it!! ^_^
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Rider

. . S K Y L I G H T
Hmm...I'll continue...right now! lol
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Whoops, not yet, I still have to put the rest of the authors note. This is a soooooooper long chapter *IMO* because I couldn't find a good stopping place until like, pages later, sooo don't expect a fast update after this. *_* *is going insane switching between the guilt of not typing GL:Chronicles for ages, yet posting a chapter on thine new fic* lol.
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“Nyaaaah!” Skitty cried as it pounced on me.

“E-we!” Eevee cried also, as it brushed it’s tail across my face.

“I’m up already!” I mumbled as I groggily opened my eyes to the blazing sun.

“Bulba, Bulbasaur!” Bulbasaur hopped on my lap next to Skitty and Mimi, and smiled after it’s cheerful good morning.

“Morning.” I said as cheerfully as I could.

“Beaauteefly.” Beautifly landed next to me.

“Yes, I wanted to know whether you told Masquerain when my birthday was.” I asked.

Beautifly nodded once.

“Do you by any chance know where Drew lives?”

Beautifly nodded once again.

“You’re sure?” I wanted to make sure I didn’t get the wrong address.

Beautifly nodded twice this time, letting me know it was more than sure.

“Can you show me where?” I asked pulling out my atlas.

Beautifly turned the huge pages with its long mouth, and stopped at a region called Pailika.

“Do you know which city?” I asked, scanning the map, which was very similar to Kanto’s.

There were a lot of awfully complicated names, and apparently, the only way to get there from Hoenn was from Larousse…south of Hoenn…

Beautifly placed it’s long mouth at a big city called Aranea.

“That’s at the far end of the region though!” I cried.

“Beautifly” Beautifly pointed at a website at the corner of the map, which was on that specific region, talking about what it had to offer and the sights and food, and cities.

“Let’s check it out shall we?” I asked Beautifly, who nodded happily in response.


“Pailika…” I murmured scanning the pages “Aranea. Here we go!”

Clicking on the link, Mimi hopped onto my lap and stared at the monitor with great fascination.

“Aranea, is known for it’s love of eevee’s and they’re evolutions…” I said glancing at Mimi who put her forepaws on the monitor, watching the little animation of an eevee walking along a road in Aranea.

“E-we!” She cried happily.

I lowered Mimi from the screen and read on.

“The gym consists of 6 consecutive battles, each member having a different type of the foreign eevee evolutions.” I read “That means Espeon, Umbreon, Vaporeon, Flareon, and Jolteon…”

“Aranea is also known for its abundance of evolution stones, and eevee’s, causing many wild eevee’s and evolutions to run wild in the flower pastures and lake.” I smiled at Mimi, who was listening intently and said “Looks like if we ever go there, you’ll have your pick!”

Mimi gleefully hopped off and went to find Squirtle.

I later learned that there were other evolutions also.

Oliveon, and Metameon. (Oliv-eon, and Metah-me-on)

Oliveon’s picture, was an tan skinned vulpix-like pokemon, with one large brown leaf as a tail, instead of six tails like a vulpix, and two beige leaf’s for ears, which folded back, and curled like a raichu’s ear. It had Olives circling it’s fore and hind paws, and the pokedex definition was just as I imagined.

As I clicked on the voicebox icon, a computerized voice, which sounded awfully similar to Professor Birch’s, said

“Oliveon, the evolved form of eevee. Oliveon can cleverly hide in fallen leaves in autumn, becoming nearly impossible to trace. The olive’s around it’s paws can be eaten, and will regrow within the hour.”

I read on about Oliveon.

‘Oliveon is the evolved form of eevee. When an eevee is exposed to the rare brown stone, rarely, but found in Orre, and found in Pailika, it becomes this Olive pokemon. Oliveon was used to make oil for lanterns when the streams ran dry, and the olive trees were dying. As a pokemon with the characteristics of a Vulpix, it is very useful in beauty contests, although most Oliveon’s are known to be disobedient, and very independent.’

“So in summary, very hard to train.” I said sarcastically.

I clicked on the voice box underneath ‘Metameon’

“Metamon, the evolved form of eevee. Metemon can easily be found in high mountains, or industrial cities and factories. The metal spikes on it’s back are sharper than your average sword, or knife, therefore is often not used in battles, due to the precaution of critically injuring the opponent.”

I looked at the picture of the steel pokemon, and saw the scariest looking pokemon ever.

With blood red eyes, and a tail that was just a foot long spike, ending in a point sharper than a needle. There were three spikes on it’s back, like arrows, poking out at you. It’s paws looked just as deadly, due to the pointy fur, and inch long claws. It had a grayish sliver sheen to it’s spiky fur, it’s ears, two spikes, that were slipt down the middle, but sharp at the tips nonetheless. It had the build of an Umbreon, very similar to say the least.

I shuddered “I hope I never see one of those.”

“May!” I heard Max call from downstairs.

“Yeah?!” I asked, shutting down my computer, though still eager to learn more.

“Come on down!” He called.

Probably about his new pokemon. Max’s birthday was a month before mine, so he was now of age to have trainer’s license, and a pokemon.

When I reached the last step on the oak staircase, I saw Brock, Misty, Ash, and Max, all packed up.

Ash and Brock in their Hoenn outfits, while Misty, was back in the shorts and overalls.

“Going somewhere?” I asked.

“Yeah, we’re going on another journey, you coming too?” Max asked.

“Where?” I asked, hoping the answer was Pailika.

“We’ve yet to decide.” Brock said sweatdropping.

“Misty says she wants to go to Alcione (Al-see-own), and Max says he wants to go to Eperia (E-pear-e-ah)” Ash said dropping his backpack down, thinking that this would take a lot of time.

“I want to go to Pailika.” I chirped.

“Pailika…” Brock consulted his trusty pokeguide.

“Are you sure May?” Brock asked “Pailika is a very advanced region, and it’s quite difficult to navigate.”

“Are there gym battles?” Ash asked slowly.

“Gym in every city except the starter city, Purpea (Purr-pay-ah)” Brock said.

“Then what are we waiting for?!” Ash asked standing up, fist in the air.

“Buuut…” Brock started “All the gyms have a challenge of 2-6 different gym leaders.”

“Six?!” Misty asked intrigued.

“two to six.” Brock corrected. “there’s a two gym leader challenge in the first few cities, then it gradually becomes larger, until it hit’s six, in Aranea, and Geopella.”

“Wow…” Ash sat back down thinking how he’d get through so many gym leaders.

“Of course, you have the choice to let your friends help you battle.” Brock said “So, like you could let Max help you in the first few, then Me and Misty, or May, it all depends on the person who’s actually winning the badge.”

“That’s a complicated system.” Ash grumbled, apparently getting a headache.

“So, even though we helped him, we wouldn’t get a badge?” Max asked.

“No, because the real gym leader appoints people to help them, and you have to defeat at least more than half of them in order to win.” Brock was still reading, his nose stuck in the book.

“Why would you want to go there May?” Max asked.

“Oh,” I thought up a reason “I want to see an Oliveon!”

“Oliveon?” Ash asked.

“Uh-huh, it’s one of the eevee evolution’s that can be found most abundantly in Aranea.” I said.

“sounds like you’ve been doing your homework.” Misty teased.

“More than just that, but Drew lives in Aranea!” I said matter-of-factly.

“Drew?!” Ash and Max said together.

“Who’s Drew?” Misty asked

“He told you that?” Brock asked.

I took a deep breath, and said “Yes, Drew, and Drew is my contest rival, who said that he’d be leaving soon, and no, he didn’t tell me, Masquerain told Beautifly who told me.”

“That was a mouthful.” Max said.

“Well, why not?” Ash asked “The gym challenges should be really challenging, and I’ll be able to work harder!”

“Harder huh?” Misty asked skeptically.

“Nobody asked you!” Ash yelled

“So, what kind of starters are there?” Max asked

“Well, it says that there aren’t a huge amount of new pokemon, and all the new pokemon aren’t fit to be starters due to the fact that they’re extremely disobedient, and some are really dangerous.” Brock said reading still.

“Like Metameon.” I said.

“Oookay…” Max said, obviously having no clue to what I what I was saying.

“So,” Brock continued “it seems they’ve combined the starters from hoenn, johto, and Kanto. A charmander, a treeko, and a totodile.”

“Great!” Max said “I’ve always wanted a treecko! Let’s get going!”

“Alright, it sounds good enough.” Misty said standing up also.

“Pailika, here we come!” Ash said pushing the door open.

“Wait!” I said.

“Huh?” Ash turned around, letting the door slam closed.

“We have to go to Larousse in order to get to Pailika. It’s the only way to get there from Hoenn.” I said.

“Okay, we can visit Rafe, Sam, and Rebecca while we’re at it!” Ash said cheerfully.

“Then what are we waiting for let’s go!” Brock said rushing out the door.

I knew Ash had him the instant he said ‘Rebecca’.
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Happy day! w00t. Review. Reviews are good. Reviews keep me going. So do flames. Trust me. lol. *evilness of sentence fragments!!* anyway, as I ORIGIANALLY said, I'm not doing a PM list, because that slows down my willingness to update, so do what you will, and do it while you can!
~Aquarius
 
omg awesome chappie once again Aquarius ^^
the chappie is long but also good
can't wait for the next =D
 

Rider

. . S K Y L I G H T
We sat on the free ferry ride from LittleRoot, to Larousse, and when we stopped by at LittleRoot, Professor Birch said to say hello to Professor Willow for him.

We promised we would, and the next instant, we were on the ferry.

“It’s so…” Misty started dreamily

“Boring.” I finished bluntly.

“No!” Misty said furious “It’s peaceful! Next to the ocean, nobody bothering us-“

“Nothing to do.” I interrupted.

Misty huffed and stalked to the otherside of the boat.

I hung over the side of the railing, looking more bored, than seasick.

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“We’re finally here!” I cried out happily, upon stepping on the moving platform.

“maaaay” I heard from a distance.

“Maaaayyyy!” I heard again, as I turned around to see Sid running toward me

“MAAAAAYYYY!”

I dodged his bear hug, as he fell face first on the pavement.

“Hello Ash, I didn’t expect to see you again so soon.” Rafe said, walking up, Catherine and Audrey trailing behind him, but running forward catching glimpse of Max.

“I can’t say it’s very recently that we’ve seen you though.” Rebecca said, her laptop in her hands again, her hand typing rapidly.

“It’s nice to see you too. This is Misty.” Ash said, introducing her “Misty, this is Rafe, Sid,” He pointed toward the lump on the ground, “Rebecca, Catherine and Audrey.”

“Wow, you’ve met a lot of people huh?” She said sweatdropping as she recounted how many people she newly met.

“We’re just going to get on the ferry to Pailika.” Brock said.

“Pailika?” Rafe asked.

“Yeah, south of Hoenn.” I said.

“Yeah, I know where it is, I’m just wondering why you’d want to go there.” He said.

“What do you mean?” I asked.

“Pailika’s been in a crazed situation lately. Metameon’s are showing up all around the factories, and overrunning them. So, there’s not much electricity in certain towns, or any mechanical thing’s anymore. Technology there has come to a complete standstill. All of the electricity comes from Barong and Geopella.” He said.

“Does anyone know why?” I asked.

“No,” Sid said, prying his face off of the cement “They wouldn’t have the problem if they knew would they?”

“All the gym leader’s have been called back to control them.” Rafe said “But, you know, Metameon’s are dangerous to handle.”

“I really hoped I would be able to travel through Pailika without seeing one.” I moaned.

“Creepy looking pokemon aren’t they?” Catherine asked

“I couldn’t sleep for three days after seeing a picture of one!” Audrey shuddered.

“What can the gym leader’s do?” Ash asked.

“Nothing really. They try to capture them without injuring they’re pokemon, or themselves.” Rebecca said “But it’s not going too well from what I hear.”

“Injuring?” Misty asked.

“Metameon are known for being highly dangerous for use in battle, because just touching one will get yourself a cut big enough for a vampire.” Catherine said.

“Every bit of Metameon’s are dangerously sharp. They’re fur is sharper than a jolteons!” Audrey said.

I thought of Drew, and his arm.

But he couldn’t be a gym leader, because he was traveling in Hoenn for so long, and he was a coordinator…

I shook my head.

“This is all so confusing.” I murmured.

“Well, I think we should help them!” Ash said.

Max sweatdropped “Somehow this sounds very familiar.”

“We should!” He mumbled.

“Well, the ferry’s over there.” Rafe said pointing over to a boat, which seemed much more outdated than all the shiny ships next to it.

But, this was Larousse, what could you expect?

“But, it doesn’t leave until tomorrow.”

“Why not?” Misty asked

“They’re still securing Purpea.” He said.

“Purpea? But that’s the-“ I started

“Starting city, yeah, but the lab is also a sort of factory. Pailika is known for it’s factories, and only Aranea is known for it’s fields.” Rebecca said, typing rapidly on her laptop.

“So, why don’t you guys stay with us, and you can leave tomorrow?” Rafe offered.

“Yeah!” Catherine piped

“Please?” Audrey pleaded, giving Max’s arm a little shake.

“Uh…” Max sweatdropped.

“Sure, why not?” Brock said.

“By the way Rebecca, can I borrow your laptop?” I asked.

Rebecca looked at me like I was crazy.

“As long as you don’t drop it…” She said.

“Okay, then, when there’s a flat surface, I’ll use it.”

“Heey!”

I turned around to the western side of the port.

“Hey Tory!” Ash yelled.

“MI MI!” Minun cried hopping off of Tory’s shoulder.

“Plu Plu!” Plusle cheerfully yelled at the top of it’s lungs, doing the same.

“*huff* What are you guys doing here? *huff*” Tory asked, catching his breath, from running down the port.

“They’re going to Pailika.” Sid said.

“Pailika?” Tory asked “You don’t want to go there. It’s a mess.”

“We heard.” I said.

“Misty, this is Tory, Tory, this is Misty.” Ash said.

“Hello, it’s nice to meet you!” Tory said cheerfully.

“You too!” Misty replied.

“Anyway, I bet you haven’t heard this though.” Tory said “My dad’s helping with the investigation, for why the Metameon’s keep showing up, and he’s heard, from the gym leader in Coeurl, that he called one of the gym leader’s helpers in Aranea to help out with his Metameon problem, because in Coeurl, there are only two, including the gymleader himself, and the helper,” Tory took a deep breath, and continued “from Aranea, got himself and his pokemon badly injured!”

That proved it! It had to be Drew!

“You guys…” I said thinking if this was going to be completely rash.

“Yeah?” Sid asked obviously going to bite anyone who didn’t listens head off.

“I think Drew was the helper that got injured.”

“What?!” Max asked.

“May, I don’t think Drew’s a gym leader.” Ash laughed.

“No, I mean a helper, he’s from Aranea, he was hiding his right arm from me when he came to say happy birthday too me, and he didn’t even let out roselia or masquerain to say goodbye!” I said, not knowing the last phrase until I said it.

Hey! He didn’t do that either!

“Could be possible.” Tory said.

“No.” Rafe said shaking his head “Sorry to burst your bubble, but the gym leader of Aranea is a girl. Her helpers are her family. Her twin brother has an espeon, her older brother has an umbreon, her little sister has an eevee, her mom has a flareon, and her dad has a jolteon. She herself, has a Vaporeon.”

“How do you know that?” I asked.

“I know her.” Rafe said folding his arms.

“I didn’t know that.” Sid said stupidly.

“Ooof course you didn’t.” Rafe said “But, how old is this Drew, and what color is his hair?”

“His hair?” I asked confused.

“Yes, her whole family has green hair.” Rafe said.

“That proves it even more!” I said.

“How old is he?”

“Um…” I thought for a moment. He never told me that… “I think he’s like…14 by now…since I’m twelve…” I counted on my fingers.

“Well, then it’s very possible Rafe.” Rebbaca said typing still “The gym leader is 14, he could be her twin.”

Twin. Drew? No.

“I don’t think so.” Max said “Drew never gave any hint that he had a family, let alone 3 siblings.”

“But, it would also explain why nobody in his family came to watch the grand festival, they were too busy with the gym!” I said stubbornly.

“And yet there’s another reason, why most of them wouldn’t go see.” Rebecca said, now reading off her laptop instead of typing. “The gym leader’s won the Hoenn Grandfestival twice already, I don’t think getting second place would really be all that impressive.”

“How did you know he got-“

“We watched you battle him on TV.” Tory said.

“Oh thanks guys!” I said happily.

“Welcome!” Catherine said

“It was fun, Drew had a really pretty combonation!” Audrey piped.

“Why don’t we head back, we can talk more at my house.” Rafe said, as bigger ships pulled in, and the crowd became larger.

“Good idea.” Ash said, being smoshed between two people.

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“Listen, I’m going to go out for a walk.” I said as the sky got darker and darker.

Nobody said anything, because that was the first time I had said anything when we got to Rafe’s house.

I shut the door softly and sighed.

Why wouldn’t he tell me something like that?

He told me that I was his rival, and friend at the last contest in Kanto.

There were so many questions.

But there weren’t any answers.

None that were for sure anyway.

I walked onto the moving platform, people scurrying by walking on the platforms to make it go faster, eager to get home, or get to the nightshift on time.

I didn’t know exactly where I was going. I just knew that my feet were taking me somewhere.

“What?” I was back at the port.

Might as well check out the ferry.

I gasped “Drew?”

He froze, then spun around.

“M-May!” He sub-consiously put his arm behind his back.

He certainly didn’t look all that different, but his shirt had changed. He now wore only a button up T-shirt, and one sleeve on his right arm, and it looked like the other had been cut, or torn off.

“You okay?” I asked suspiciously.

“I’m fine, just, going home!” He said forcing a laugh.

“Really? We’re going on another journey too.” I said, pretending I had no suspicions at all.

“Where?” He asked, becoming less nervous.

“Pailika.” I answered coolly.

He froze again, then sighed.

“Well, you found out when my birthday was from Masquerain, I found out where you lived from Beautifly.” I said “We’re even.”

“Listen, it’s not safe in Pailika.” He said, trying to steer me away.

“Your awfully nice right now you know that?” I said.

He sighed and said “Bet you’ve heard about the Metameon problem.”

“Yes.” I said coldly. I wanted to know right here and now.

“And I also heard that a gym leader from Aranea got hurt in Coeurl, along with his pokemon, and I also heard that the gym leader’s in Aranea have green hair, and that also points to the fact that you’ve been hiding your arm from me, are you a gym leader or not?” I asked, pouring out all my suspicions.

He sighed and turned away from me again.

“I thought you’d be pretty dense if you didn’t figure it out.” He said chuckling.

“But if you’re a gym leader how could you leave for two years?” I asked.

“Apart from my sister, who only just turned of age, I’ve always been the easiest to beat out of my family. Besides, I'm not the official gym leader, I'm just a sub-leader.” He said quietly.

“Is that why nobody came to see you? At the Grand Festival?”

“No. My little sister dragged my brother to go watch. But, they had to leave right afterwards.” He said “Besides, after my sister’s won once, along with my brother, already, it’s not a great feat getting second place.”

“So…that means you have another pokemon you’ve yet to show me.” I said.

“Yes.” He said simply.

“Is the pokemon the one that’s injured?” I asked

“All of my pokemon are injured right now.” He said.

“All of them?” I asked completely taken by surprise.

---Drew POV—
Why I was telling her this I didn’t know

Why I was even talking to her, I didn’t know.

This was so out of character for me. I couldn’t imagine the face my sisters would have if they saw me like this.

I tried to shake the memory of a huge crowd of Metameon’s at the Coeurl gym. All those pokemon, just multiplying so rapidly.

Then one brushed against my arm, giving myself a nice deep gash.

“All of them.” I said replying to May.

“Why are you going back then?” She asked “You’re not going to try and stop them again are you? You’re just going to hurt them again!”

“I’m just going to go oversee.” I said “Nothing drastic.”

There was a silence that screamed at me, tell her and then she’ll leave.

I sighed and said “I can’t just leave Pailika like that.”

I could feel her staring at me.

“One of Kile’s pokemon died.” I said.

“It wasn’t very big, and when the metameon swarmed out of the gym, they all trampled it. Claws and all.” I said.

“Kile…is the Coeurl gym leader?” She asked.

“Yeah.” I said.

“Right…I’m sorry, but I’m going whether you want me to or not.” She said.

“Fine.” I said “But if you hurt yourself it’s not my problem.”

I continued to walk toward the ferry, where I was staying for the night.

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WOAH this was incredibly long! *_*; anyway, I think I'd better get started on another chapter...uh oh...well, congratz to you readers! *runs off*

AHHH! you'll get a brand new character appearance in the next chappie, so look forward to it! It'll be greater than the number of 'blast offs' team rockets had....IMO....lol

NEXT CHAPPIE PREVIEW
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[SPOIL]Drew’s caring and less snobbish attitude yesterday really unnerved me.
Maybe Pailika really was that dangerous.
“Bye!” I called to Sid, Rafe, Rebbeca, Catherine, Audrey, and Tory.
“Farewell May!” Sid said running along the port.
“Come back soon!” He said still yelling.
“I’ll mis-“ Just that moment, he ran into a pole.
I sweatdropped as Drew observed the scene “Not the brightest is he?” He said, more as a comment than a question.
“Bye!” Everyone behind me called to they’re friends and family. Although…not many people were on except me, my friends, including Drew, and-
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*Gasp* Who is it? Find out next time! on Difficulty:100!!!
 
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omg this chappie was awesome......... Rafe is there......... oh man this was the best chappie Aquarius........ can't wait for the next ^__________^
 

Rider

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You might want to check out this post again, because I'll be collecting my sprites, and putting them here.
 

Encyclopika

The Queen
Cool story so far. Awsome to see someone besides me is taking the extra step and making up Pokemon for new regions. Good for you! ^^ I like the twists you added in, but I advise not to go overboard. Just a thought. Overall, an awsome story and continue, please. ^^
 
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MayXDrew

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yes do continue please! awsome story! you made a few mistakes but i can't remember what they are.

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Rider

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........twists........hmmm...........*ponders on whether or not to figure them out thine self after reading an excruciatingly complicated chapter by xXSaberXx, or to wait for encyclopika to tell thine self what they are...* Drew's arm? Hmm...naaah, Metameon? grrr...*BRAIN EXPLODES FROM THINKING OF TWO VERY COMPLICATED THINGS WHILST AQUARIUS'S BRAIN IS NOT FUNCTIONING!!!*

BY the way. Tell me if you want to see a sprite of any trainers I make-up. That are in the previous chapters. Not the one's I mention, but haven't made an appearance. There'll be a few new sprites in the next chapter, depending on how far I decide the chapter should go.

OH YEAH. Here's my website. Anything that says 'Difficulty:100' in the Navigation bar has to do with this totally awesome Fanfic. Am I not totally right in saying this fic rox?! lolz. Difficulty:100 Info, is where I'll put all the sprites and the map. Difficulty:100 story is where the actual story is, where it's all one thing, instead of like this, where it has reviews in between. Have fun!---TechiKyotee's 00ber cool website!!
 
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Encyclopika

The Queen
Aquarius said:
*ponders on whether or not to figure them out thine self after reading an excruciatingly complicated chapter by xXSaberXx, or to wait for encyclopika to tell thine self what they are...*
I'm talking about the things you make up about a character already known...in this story, Drew. You gave him multiple siblings (good)...had him come from a new region (good)...made him a sub gym leader (ok...OOC and overboard a little)...all I'm saying is that you don't want to over whelm the reader. Twists like these are great and surprising...but readers are picky and they loose interest easily for all kinds of things. Have questions come up and leave them unanswered for a while.
Also, in your writing, you give every sentence its own line. ?:/ It's not necessarily the best thing to do. If you're going to do that, it's best to only do it with dialogue.
Also...PLEASE don't have an OOC Drew...there are some characters you can get away with it...but Drew isn't one of them. ^^;;; I learned from experience with that.
Overall, you have a very promising fic. Your description is great and your story is well thought out. Just fix it with those things I mentioned and you should do well. I can't wait to see the next chapter. This fic is awesome. ^^

Offtopic - I was wondering if you would like to affilaite with my site - Ama's Stuff It would be really cool. XP
 

Rider

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Sure, if you'd like, you can affliate, but I don't know how, soo...have fun! LOL anyway, yeah, all of this is coming from when I really bored, and on the car listening to music. So, with OOCness...you must remember that they passed all of Kanto before going here. _ _; but that's a bad excuse, so you'll hafta grin and bear it until the end of the second chapter, but you will find, sadly, all you Drew fans, that...you do not see much of Drew in the gym battle chapters. sadly. ;_; don't cry though! there will be plenty later on, but the biggest thing that stuck out in your post Ama, is the sentence line thing. Yesh, I know. I have that problem, and I just can't fix it. It's like my bad habit of saying 'tastetes' instead of 'taste's' or something like that. It comes when I haven't done something in awhile. *such as re-learning a language* but I'll work on it...It's a habit that I pulled out of Roleplaying. I'll fix it....in the new chapters....sorry, I'm just not the editing type, I'd rather put the new chapter instead of editing it. I'm lazy like that. These are just for fun, so they don't really concern me very much.
 

TrueBlue_Swablu

<-- Kawaiiness
OMG! Aquarius I loved it! I have to agree with Sweet_May......Rafe was there....*squeal* You reviewed my fic so I reviewed yours and now I'm hooked. Keep it up! ^^
~TBS
 
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