Digimon Pokemon: Worlds Collide

[Crystamon]

Okay, after my last crappy attempt at a comic, i'm going to try again. comments welcome.


Prologue: http://img104.imageshack.us/my.php?image=mynewcomicprologue8oz.png


Beginnings:

Ren's Beginning
Episode One: http://img487.imageshack.us/img487/3624/roughdraft6ij.png

Well, It took me forever, but I'm starting to get my custom overworlds in, and so can begin to improve my comic!

 

[ForeverFlame]

Sorry, can't read it.
Try not to resize it.

 

[zuloon]

Yeah, nothing can be seen.
Try imageshack; it doesn't resize pictures.

 

[Crystamon]

Well, imagshack wouldn't load it beacuase it was to many hertz, or something.

 

[Mega]

Too small aaannddd its a jpg.

 

[Crystamon]

I re-did it into two seperate comics.

 

[zuloon]

I see it now. You really need to work on your speech bubbles.
And why is 1/2 of your comic talking about what will happen next?
Overall, it's so-so.

 

[ForeverFlame]

The speechbubbles are alright, but you didn't put make effort on them.
Your Comic Strips are everywhere. You should just have them squared out, then put the 'Tune in Next Time' at the end.

The sprites are... the same as everybody elses. Recolored Heroes. It also has Hoenn Sprites in Kanto. :O A Digimon pops up, and Gary, May and Brendan 'summon' their Digimon. You should of made an episode of them teaming-up with those Digimon.

My Overall is 6/10. I felt like being nice, so I added on a few points for you making a Digimon Comic (My Favorite Anime).

 

[Crystamon]

Update!!!! I've redid some of it, and have got some custom overworlds I will be implementing.

 

[Jetx]

The second is much better than first. But why did the guy's hair go brown in the last box?

 

[Crystamon]

Oops! thought I changed that. I was pretty sure I changed that.... Igonore the brown hair in the last panel! That is a mistake! Ren's hair will be silver in future comics!

 

[Uber]

1.) Intro Comic has too much text.
2.) Speech bubbles look a bit sloppy with some of the text running in on the outline.
3.) Character sprites are too small. Try to enlarge them a bit to amke them more of a center of focus, or moake the panels smaller.

 

[Megahorn Heracross]

Well I can see everything,

 

[Divine_Light]

Why does when the character with grey hair turns his hair is brown?

 

[Crystamon]

Well, that was just a slip up. And this is a dead comic of mine that I haven't posted in for a while, so if a mod would lock/delte this please.

 

[Megahorn Heracross]

More comics!

 

[Divine_Light]

Look at the post above you he said he's quiting so if you'll respect Crystamon's request to lock/quit