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Dreams Never Die (PG)

Yoshi-kun

Wandering the Forums
Dreams Never Die

“So why did you become a Pokémon trainer?”

It was such a simple question.

“Uh…”

Unfortunately it didn’t have a simple answer.

“Why do you want to know?”

“Because I…” and it was her companion’s turn to falter. “I just want to know, I guess.” He shrugged his shoulders in an attempt not to look interested in her answer.

She sighed. Today was not her day. “Well, why do you want to be a trainer?”

He gawked at her. Wasn’t it obvious? “I’m gonna be a Pokémon Master, that’s why!”

Whatever response he was expecting, it certainly wasn’t the bittersweet smile she gave him. Before he could question her… was it doubt?... her expression changed to that of arrogance. “So that’s what you think, huh?”

Now he was indignant. “Of course it is!”

“Do you even realize how many trainers start out believing the exact same thing?”

“So?” he spat.

She shrugged. “I’m just saying that you’re just one in the thousands of new trainers that get their license every year. Most of them are like you, they start their journey thinking they can become a Master, until the reality sets in.” After pausing to snort she continued, “A decent chunk of them won’t even last the first year. Once they challenge for a few badges, they realize just how hard it is and quit-”

“I won’t quit!”

“However the more stubborn ones,” a humorless chuckle escaped her lips, “do tend to last longer. But at the end of the day at least half of them will give up before five years.”

If looks could kill… well she might be in trouble right now.

A wry smile appeared on her face. “So tell me Mark, do wanna be a Master of Pokémon? Do you have the skills to be number one?” The old jingle that she had heard on TV as a child was still so easy to recall.

“WHAT!?” he bellowed. “You think this is funny!? Well you know what? I’ll show you! I’ll show everyone! I won’t ever give up!” His brown eyes were glaring viciously into her own. “I’ll keep going and going no matter what. I’ll never quit, and then one day I'll be the Master, and you and everyone else will know you never should have doubted me.”

Her cerulean eyes hardened. “Do you really mean that?”

“Of course I do,” he growled.

“Because the day will come when training is not as fun as it was. It’ll be hard, it will hurt, you’ll make friends and enemies, and may end up not knowing which is which anymore. You’ll think you’re making progress, but then you’ll get annihilated in your next battle. You’ll see or hear about someone beating a Gym Leader with ease only to be destroyed yourself. You might make it to the league, just so you can get humiliated in front of thousands of people,” she trailed off, her eyes glazed over. Suddenly he got the feeling she wasn’t talking to him anymore.

“You’ll be insulted and want to fight back, but that may or may not blow up in your face. Before you know it, you'll find yourself in situations you never could have imagined and won’t know how to deal with it. Then you'll see things that no one should ever see, and find out just how insane the world is. You’ll tell yourself you don’t care, but then you’ll go and find him and he won’t wake up…” she started to choke on her words.

“And then you’ll realize... that you did care, but now... it might be too late... and even if it wasn’t... years down the road... it will be… so what was the point? And… after that… you’ll lose… the only ones… left… that cared… all because… they trusted you…” she whispered. Finally the emotion she had been fighting forced her to let out a sob she clinched her eyes shut.

Mark was speechless. Whatever fiery retort he had been holding in since the start of her speech was long gone. Just who was this girl anyway?

Once she regained some of her composure, she noticed what had happened and looked away in embarrassment. The awkward silence continued for several minutes as she berated herself and he simply didn’t know what to say.

“I ran away from home.”

“Huh?” Mark blinked at the statement.

“You wanted to know why I became a Pokemon trainer, didn’t you?” Her voice sounded casual, yet her eyes looked dead. “Well that’s the answer. It wasn’t the first time actually, but it was the first time I took any Pokémon with me. I told my si- them that I wasn’t going to come back until I was a… a Master. I did pretty well until…” she paused to scoff, “ Let’s just say everything went to hell. Anyway I ended up breaking my promise, got completely distracted, and before everything was said and done I found myself right back where I started.”

Though he didn’t want to admit it, Mark was incredibly interested at this point. “So what did you do?”

“Well nothing at first,” she sighed. “Then everything just went downhill from there. I just… I messed up. I messed up really bad… It’s not something I can fix either. I didn’t know what to do, and somehow I ended up out here.”

He raised an eyebrow. “You decided to come here… to a village that most people couldn't even find with a map?”

She gave him a wan smile. “Pretty much.”

“Wendy, you’re the weirdest person I ever met.”

“Trust me,” she laughed, “that just means you haven’t met very many people.”

A comfortable silence settled over them after that. The younger boy found himself half paying attention to the random Pidgey that feeding in the field in front of them, and half glancing at the teenaged blonde who was now sitting beside him. He knew now that perhaps his dreams weren’t going to be as easy to achieve as he thought, but still…

“I’m not going to give up.”

“I know.”

“Oh, you do, do you?” he mocked.

She nodded. “I don't want you to.”

He gave her a curious look. “Then why…?”

“Because this world needs dreamers," she said softly. "So that no matter how bleak it gets, when everything goes wrong, and there’s no reason to hope anymore... Someone out there has to show the world that there is light in the darkness... hope that never fades… dreams that never die…”

She found herself looking at him, a sandy haired, ten year old boy that was full of childhood innocence, and still had the passion that was needed to achieve his goal. It was bittersweet… part of her found it heartwarming to remind herself that the world wasn’t as jaded she thought… yet it was painful… so painfully familiar…

“Never give up your dreams...”
 

Psychic

Really and truly
Interesting story. I like fics that explore the more difficult aspects of training, especially being a trainer long-term, and also not becoming a trainer for the simplest of reasons.

I definitely dug this idea of a more experienced trainer talking about the difficulties and hardships that trainers have to face, and I really like that you still ended on an upbeat note despite that. Showing that someone jaded and someone inexperienced can still talk without the other one being too negatively influenced was really nice to see. Wendy's backstory is also an interesting one, which you really don't see much, so it was pretty refreshing.

My only feeling was that for the most part, despite their difference in ages, the two characters seemed to speak and act quite similarly for the most part. It took me some time to realize that Mark was quite a bit younger. Try giving him some more youthful actions, like energetically kicking his legs or punching the air with excitement, and try to get across that feeling of youthful curiosity and naiveté if you can.

Other than that I really couldn't find much to improve upon. You do tend to be rather liberal with ellipses, which is generally fine, but in the paragraph where Wendy breaks down it got to be a little much. I wondered if each one indicated a sob, since they were so frequent. I would go over that and some of the other paragraphs more heavy in ellipses and try to remove a few. There were also some minor errors I'll point out below.

After pausing to snort she continued,
I would just say “She snorted.” It’s implied that in order to snort, you would need to stop speaking, and the full sentence slows the monologue down a little too much, especially since it makes the pause seem longer, which could give Mark more time to respond. What I mean to say is “She snorted” or something in that vain would just be simpler and wouldn’t interrupt the flow as much, if that makes any sense.

“However the more stubborn ones,” a humorless chuckle escaped her lips, “do tend to last longer.
Capitalize “do.”

“So tell me Mark, do wanna be a Master of Pokémon? Do you have the skills to be number one?”
Need a comma before “Mark” since it’s a direct address. Also you’re missing a “you” in “do wanna.”

Once she regained some of her composure, she noticed what had happened and looked away in embarrassment.
I would take out “she noticed what had happened,” or at least rephrase it. Her looking away implies that she realized what she had done, so it doesn’t really need to be said. Or you can rephrase it to something like “she realized what she had just said to the boy.”

“ Let’s just say everything went to hell. Anyway I ended up breaking my promise, got completely distracted, and before everything was said and done I found myself right back where I started.”
Take away the space before "Let's."

Though he didn’t want to admit it, Mark was incredibly interested at this point. “So what did you do?”
Can you say “intrigued” instead of “incredibly interested”? It sounds more like wide-eyed fascination at this point, and “interest” isn’t a very strong word.

The younger boy found himself half paying attention to the random Pidgey that feeding in the field in front of them,
Need a "were" between "that feeding."


Anyhow, aside from that I did like it. I'm still not one hundred percent sure exactly what happened - I like that Wendy didn't say everything, and that Mark doesn't fully understand what happened, but still wants to do his best, which warms her. It's a really interesting take on what happens to some trainers, especially when they fail. Wendy's story doesn't have the happiest of endings, and whether or not Mark will learn from it it left nicely open-ended.

Good job,
~Psychic
 
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