FANFIC: Baby palooza Part 1

[Jirachi-Celebi-Latias-boy]

Episode one: Baby Palooza: Ash and co. arrive at infant town. This town loves babies and are willing to go as far as using everstones to keep them babies. They especially like pre-evolved babies such as pichu. Ash and co. discover that there is a baby gym here. It doesnt offer badges but is rumored to have incredibly powerful baby pokemon. But the gym leader is off when ash challenges the gym because he is overseeing the baby cup. The baby cup is a semi-annual tornament of babies. May and Brock enter but ash is bummed out cause he doesnt have a baby to enter. James also gets wind of the tornament and enters with Manaene. The first round gets off as May and Munchlax take on a very mighty elekid. But they preail. Than Brock and Bonsley crush a clefa and James and manane defeat an igglybuff. They all fight through rounds of fighting until the final 4 are chosen and they are May and Munchlax vs. James and Manaene and Brock and Bonsley vs. a kid names Evan and his Magby. They rest for the night and the next day at 10:00 AM, the semi-finals begin. TO BE CONTINUED...

 

[Dragonfree]

This is like a summary of a chapter, not a chapter. You're just telling us what happened in the 'episode', not actually writing it. Ash is bummed out because he doesn't have a baby to enter? Then write when he tries to enter but is told that he can't enter without having a baby, and how Ash probably sulks about it. Write the battle where May and Munchlax take on a very mighty Elekid. Right now, as I said, it looks like an episode summary. Admittedly it DOES sound like you captured the spirit of the animé pretty well with the storyline, but please write it out properly and paragraph it.