Fear seeping away (poem/song)

[Hyper Chibi Absol]

Fear seeping away

Girl : Fear has made think of him
In painful thoughts
Knowing he maybe in harms way
I do not know what to say
I know I must save him
Some how....
Some way....

Man : Fear has brought me twords her
Unable to go to another
She dried my tears
That formed over the years
Pain had plagued me
But then she saved me
I need to be with her

Girl : What would I do if I had never met him
He may have been lost by now
Just the thought of that....
The thought of losing him
It forms pain that I must go through
No one, nor I or he should go through such pain
If we do there is no gain

Man : She is just like an angel
She guided and guarded me
She saved me from the flames of Hell
This is easy to see
My fear has turned to joy
Bravery has entered this boy
I must see her

Together : When I am with you
My pain seeps away
We will go through together
The dangers that lurk on our way
With you at my side
I am safe from harm
Here in your arms​

 

[Bu†cH]

Lack of emotion, short of length, and to me, boring.

Sorry, HCA.

 

[Darato]

Awful!!!! Yuck!!11!1! 1/5

 

[katiekitten]

It's ok, although it does have some spelling mistakes.

Knowing he maybe in harms way

Could use a space between may and be.

Fear has made me think of him

I inserted a me, it makes the song flow better.

Fear has brought me towords her

Just a typo.

Read it through before posting, next time. Other than that, its fine.