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Hoenn Adventures

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Eeveedude

Member
This is my first comic it's about a boy and his younger brother embarking a journey through Hoenn hope you like it.
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hydroswirl

Water Pokemon Master
WOW, I'VE NEVER SEEN ANYTHING LIKE THIS BEFORE!

>_>

Cliched plot, horrid sprites, horrible style, barely readable text. Sorry, but it's a disaster.
 
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nashie1

Well-Known Member
Congratulations you score 10/10 on the cliche scale.

The plot is horrible cliche, the hat is a rubbish recolour with paint default colours. Oh and quite honestly, I really hate those What happens next bits. If you do use those, at least don't use them on a cliched plot where we now what comes next.

Start again, construct a new story line. Have the character already have their pokemon or better yet, don't have a journey. Have some new plot device.
 
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Munchy.42

Well-Known Member
For a first attempt its alright but the plot is cliche and like Desperate Milotic said if it doesn't have a twist in the plot it will die! Dom Dom Domm!
 
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Eeveedude

Member
I've decided to stop so I can practice and mabey Start over before I continue I agree it is pretty bad so i will work on it
 
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