Hey I finally got to review! Well I think this is turning out to be a great story, I'm gonna follow this one,
Things I like: A JOURNEY FIC!! I dont know why but I just love these. Well, it looks like a journey fic so far at least, forget i said this if it isnt
I love it when the starter pokemon arent the traditionals (charmander, Totodile etc.) it makes it so much more interesting and original.
Characters, I'm loving how Edan is turning out right now, it looks like he is going to be a great character to read about.
Plot, it has a lot of mystery, such as the dream at the beginning, its good to see when someone adds a little mystery into a fic that is solved throughout the story.
Things I dont like: Names mainly, not the names of the characters but the names of the towns. What I mean is Grim Village isnt such a well thought about name, if you think about it, the founders of the land and builders of the village wouldn't really want to name it "Grim" village would they? I appreciate that it reflects the actual atmosphere of the village as being grim and it reflects the "grimness" in the rainy weather (which also turned sunny, another mysterious thing that I liked) but still. However, if you did think about it deeply and named it grim village for a reason (such as a haunting in the village when it was named or some such event or occurence) then forget what I said.
Well actually theres not much else I dont like about it, it has the perfect writing style for a journey fic (fogive me if it isnt a journey fic) and its got a good plot so far!
I've rated it four stars, which seems to have boosted the total rating, I'll rate higher once I see more good work!