Arcanine Royale
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Okay, so ya' know, I'm going along and writing my journey fic, Now and Forever, Volume One: The Adventure. I'm done with part one of Chapter Six, and the last scene is below. Then, I start Part Two of Chapter Six and I get a page into it, and BAM! I hit this brick wall.
Last scene of Chapter 6: Part One (And don't ask what a Herbine is.)
The constant golden light of the Port Re Pokemon Center broke through Kody’s motionless train of though like a knife. He closed his eyes, wiped away the tears, and covered them wearily with his hands. He ignored the soft footsteps of those that passed back and forth past him.
His Herbine was dying.
“A fifty-fifty chance of survival,” the nurses at the center had told him.
And after that, Kody had just sat there, dimly feeling, dimly living. He hardly felt the casual stroll of energetic trainers skirting past him. He could hardly hear the buzz of the pokemon center computers.
He gazed solemnly on one thing. And he never took his eyes off of it. And that one thing was his pokemon.
He had watched tearfully as the nurse talked to him while they slowly rolled his pokemon into the operating room. He had watched tearfully as they slowly bandaged and wrapped up his many wounds.
And when, hours later, they would finish, his Herbine would be barely recognizable.
Connor and Heather we’re sitting next to him, each on one side, there arms slung over his back.
Heather leaned into Kody. Meanwhile, Connor reached across and caressed Heather’s ruby red hair. Heather looked at Herbine also, and as the hours passed, she lightly closed her amber eyes.
Likewise, Brock sat leaned against a nearby bench, staring glumly at the simply tiled floor.
“It’s all my fault,” Brock whispered. He quivered with pain - for Herbine, for Kody. “If only I hadn’t gone so hard on Kody, his Herbine would be all right. If only I hadn’t called off the attack!” ‘
“It’s all right, Brock,” May assured him.
“Yeah, you did what you could.” Ash added.
“Well, I guess so,” Brock whispered.
“Listen guys, go outside and battle or something. I’d hate to be the cause of a wasted day. But I’m gonna’ go see how Kody is going.”
“Okay, Brock, we’ll come with you.”
There was something in the air above the Bay of the Sun. A golden twinkling seemed to be hiding in the clouds, peeking out occasionally on the city below. A rainbow hung over the sky.
All was silent.
The bay was empty – no boat churned the blue-grey water. The bay was a sheet of blue, rippled glass.
The rainbow suddenly glowed in the sky, and sent rays of pink light in all directions. From this pink-rayed sky, from the rainbow, a creature immerged. This creature seemed to hover in the sky, as if hung down on a string from the clouds. The creature’s light pink-white body, for it was neither he nor she, was still.
The cat-like creature twitched its small, pink ears. It detected a long chant rising from the city beyond they bay.
“The giver is a gentle beast,
The giver’s gifts are good.
The giver brings much joy and peace,
The giver’s gifts make truth.”
The pink feline nodded in approval.
“Reverence,” it whispered to the wind.
“Peace,” it added.
“Prosperity,” it added.
A quiver of pain rose to it. And a wave of sorrow ran over it. He twitched his small, thin pink ears once more.
“Pain. Sorrow,” he whispered.
And slowly, the creature descended from the Rainbow Gate and hovered above the water, sending ripples across the bay, stirring fish below and bird above.
It levitated effortlessly to where a pink-roofed building stood at the water’s edge.
The black and green spotted dog heaved up and down. He painfully rolled from side to side, moaning in agony. Where was his handsome, loving, caring master?
His front paw unexpectedly shot out at one of the pink-clad nurses, who shrieked in surprise.
He looked around. Connor and Heather had left him.
“Of course they would,” he whispered, “they don’t want to hang around for hours, waiting for a pokemon that’ll most likely die.”
Kody Silvin awoke, a shriek penetrating his dreadfully thin sleep. He peered through the large window and saw the limp figure of his pokemon, heaving up and down.
He released a gasp. At least his Herbine was still alive. But it wasn’t good. All that could be recognized of the forsaken pooch were two sharp, silver fangs amongst a black and green mottled lump.
A faint, melodious hum echoed through the hall. As the seconds passed, it grew richer and louder. To Kody it felt like the ticking of a large clock – comforting, always there.
Herbine stirred. He could hear it too.
Here's what I'm thinking:
A) Kody is traveling with two other characters, Connor and Heather, and the three of them met up with Ash, Brock, and May just a while back. And they practiced battling and Kody's Herbine got hurt. So I'm thinking Connor, Heather, May, and Ash go back to battling. But this seems too unatural.
B) I have a scene or two written involving Drew and Sandra (Saori) as well as Harley.
C) I could introduce my main character's rival - David Williams.
D) I could add a random thing with one of my two evil teams.
Any answers, suggestions? Heck, just a random combination of letters might help.
[SPOIL]
If you haven't figured it out yet, the creature is Mew. It heals Herbine and then goes to some of my characters to give them "gifts" (psychic powers which will be slowly developed and will actually have a major effect on the plot.)
[/SPOIL]
Last scene of Chapter 6: Part One (And don't ask what a Herbine is.)
The constant golden light of the Port Re Pokemon Center broke through Kody’s motionless train of though like a knife. He closed his eyes, wiped away the tears, and covered them wearily with his hands. He ignored the soft footsteps of those that passed back and forth past him.
His Herbine was dying.
-Chapter Six: From Master to Beginner-
Part Two
“A fifty-fifty chance of survival,” the nurses at the center had told him.
And after that, Kody had just sat there, dimly feeling, dimly living. He hardly felt the casual stroll of energetic trainers skirting past him. He could hardly hear the buzz of the pokemon center computers.
He gazed solemnly on one thing. And he never took his eyes off of it. And that one thing was his pokemon.
He had watched tearfully as the nurse talked to him while they slowly rolled his pokemon into the operating room. He had watched tearfully as they slowly bandaged and wrapped up his many wounds.
And when, hours later, they would finish, his Herbine would be barely recognizable.
Connor and Heather we’re sitting next to him, each on one side, there arms slung over his back.
Heather leaned into Kody. Meanwhile, Connor reached across and caressed Heather’s ruby red hair. Heather looked at Herbine also, and as the hours passed, she lightly closed her amber eyes.
Likewise, Brock sat leaned against a nearby bench, staring glumly at the simply tiled floor.
“It’s all my fault,” Brock whispered. He quivered with pain - for Herbine, for Kody. “If only I hadn’t gone so hard on Kody, his Herbine would be all right. If only I hadn’t called off the attack!” ‘
“It’s all right, Brock,” May assured him.
“Yeah, you did what you could.” Ash added.
“Well, I guess so,” Brock whispered.
“Listen guys, go outside and battle or something. I’d hate to be the cause of a wasted day. But I’m gonna’ go see how Kody is going.”
“Okay, Brock, we’ll come with you.”
~ ~ ~
There was something in the air above the Bay of the Sun. A golden twinkling seemed to be hiding in the clouds, peeking out occasionally on the city below. A rainbow hung over the sky.
All was silent.
The bay was empty – no boat churned the blue-grey water. The bay was a sheet of blue, rippled glass.
The rainbow suddenly glowed in the sky, and sent rays of pink light in all directions. From this pink-rayed sky, from the rainbow, a creature immerged. This creature seemed to hover in the sky, as if hung down on a string from the clouds. The creature’s light pink-white body, for it was neither he nor she, was still.
The cat-like creature twitched its small, pink ears. It detected a long chant rising from the city beyond they bay.
“The giver is a gentle beast,
The giver’s gifts are good.
The giver brings much joy and peace,
The giver’s gifts make truth.”
The pink feline nodded in approval.
“Reverence,” it whispered to the wind.
“Peace,” it added.
“Prosperity,” it added.
A quiver of pain rose to it. And a wave of sorrow ran over it. He twitched his small, thin pink ears once more.
“Pain. Sorrow,” he whispered.
And slowly, the creature descended from the Rainbow Gate and hovered above the water, sending ripples across the bay, stirring fish below and bird above.
It levitated effortlessly to where a pink-roofed building stood at the water’s edge.
~ ~ ~
The black and green spotted dog heaved up and down. He painfully rolled from side to side, moaning in agony. Where was his handsome, loving, caring master?
His front paw unexpectedly shot out at one of the pink-clad nurses, who shrieked in surprise.
He looked around. Connor and Heather had left him.
“Of course they would,” he whispered, “they don’t want to hang around for hours, waiting for a pokemon that’ll most likely die.”
Kody Silvin awoke, a shriek penetrating his dreadfully thin sleep. He peered through the large window and saw the limp figure of his pokemon, heaving up and down.
He released a gasp. At least his Herbine was still alive. But it wasn’t good. All that could be recognized of the forsaken pooch were two sharp, silver fangs amongst a black and green mottled lump.
A faint, melodious hum echoed through the hall. As the seconds passed, it grew richer and louder. To Kody it felt like the ticking of a large clock – comforting, always there.
Herbine stirred. He could hear it too.
Here's what I'm thinking:
A) Kody is traveling with two other characters, Connor and Heather, and the three of them met up with Ash, Brock, and May just a while back. And they practiced battling and Kody's Herbine got hurt. So I'm thinking Connor, Heather, May, and Ash go back to battling. But this seems too unatural.
B) I have a scene or two written involving Drew and Sandra (Saori) as well as Harley.
C) I could introduce my main character's rival - David Williams.
D) I could add a random thing with one of my two evil teams.
Any answers, suggestions? Heck, just a random combination of letters might help.
[SPOIL]
If you haven't figured it out yet, the creature is Mew. It heals Herbine and then goes to some of my characters to give them "gifts" (psychic powers which will be slowly developed and will actually have a major effect on the plot.)
[/SPOIL]