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In the Wind: Poem

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Flaming Lip

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In the Wind

Such is the last breath of a beautiful life,

And the memories good and bad mingle in the air

So time was cut under the cold silver knife

And looking again, I saw nothing there,

Nothing but a dead, helpless dream


Is it a curse that brings us together?

Is it a dream that binds us forever?

Is it a cause that must be fulfilled?

Is it a folly that we pursue still?


The world is a dark and frightening place

I know I’m surrounded yet I feel so alone

And yet we feel bound to stare at life in the face

Still, our thoughts wander to home.


Is it a mistake in our creation?

Is it a lie in our own dedication?

Is it a greed that leads to this hate?

Is it the winds that decide our fate?


And shall I search for something to seek?

And shall I waste my life on this dream?

And will the world be seized by the meek?

And will time heal the broken seams?

Is it this world that hates us so?

Is it the pain that begs us to know?

Is it life that teaches us to care?

Is it love that pushes us to dare?​
 
Kutie Pie

Kutie Pie

"It is my destiny."
Aw...I loved this. *hugs*

Yeah... The world can be so cruel. Especially since we're in a war that'll lead to the bloodiest yet. You know, I bet this is on two people, you know? Pretty cute. Loved this. Fate brought them together...Aww...I love love stories. (Happened all of a sudden this year. Don't know how that happened. Guess shipping fics did this to me. Or is it my stories...)

Can't wait for more, Byzantium! I'm SSOOO totally a fan of yours! WHOOP! *big hugs*

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♥Kutie Pie♥ Please be kind to midgets!
 
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Flaming Lip

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Thanks! *flan* No I didn't mean the poem to appear as a love poem. Mostly more like a kinda clash of ambitions...

But, the beauty of poetry is that it can have multiple interpetations

Thanks again!
 
Lily

Lily

you were the one.
I want pay. I really do.

~

It was lovely. I felt it trying to convey multiple themes, whilst questioning at the same time. One thing you could've worked on is some awkward rhythm, as a word or two was misplaced...can be fixed easily with rereading. The world may be cruel, young ones, but not until we realize this first and foremost.

But now, as this poem states, we question unfairness all things universal..so much that all these imperfections can simply be called beauty. [/some random stuff] Try polishing this up a bit, because as its meaning, it too is also imperfect. ;p

Nice job. o.o; [SPOIL]I WANT PAY. I REALLY DO.[/SPOIL]


;172;
 
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Flaming Lip

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Bah, I never really worry to much about changing ryhme schemes. But if you could some examples of some of the ackward parts, I'd be very happy.

Anyway Cutie Pie, would you like some Champane? If I remeber correctly you were always stealing some from writers.

Thanks

*flan AND champane ;)*
 
Kutie Pie

Kutie Pie

"It is my destiny."
Byzantium said:
Bah, I never really worry to much about changing ryhme schemes. But if you could some examples of some of the ackward parts, I'd be very happy.

Anyway Cutie Pie, would you like some Champane? If I remeber correctly you were always stealing some from writers.

Thanks

*flan AND champane ;)*
Click to expand...

My name's spelt with a 'k'.

;025; - She was being dumb and creative at the same time doing so.

*whacks* Shut UP Cheeky! And thanks, but no thanks. I don't drink champane.

;025; - MORMON GIRL!

-_- Yes. FLAN! *eats* And I was stealing some?! Nuh-uh!

;025; - *whispering* Expression.

><; Look who's smart... Anyway, can't wait for more poems!

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♥Kutie Pie♥ Please be kind to midgets! (Remember: 'K', not 'C'.)
 
Kutie Pie

Kutie Pie

"It is my destiny."
Byzantium said:
Actually I was refering to Lily Pichu... Inside Joke. XDD
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Whoops. Sorry about that... Thought you was referring to me...

;025; - That's what you get for naming yourself after a certain nickname thing.

*whacks* Well, sorry about that. Heh... Here's some cake as an apology.

;025; - NNOOO! NOT THE CHOCOLATE ICE CREAM CAKE!

CATCH! *throws* There Cheeky. Happy?

;025; - *sniffles*

Well see you later!
 
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SpaceFlare

insert custom title
Nice work. I love it. You know what, I was thinking about stuff like this before coming here and reading it. Just timely posting. Heh...
 
K

Kiyohime

Well-Known Member
I want flan too. ;_;

God god god...you're too good. Tis' amazing. You always manage to crank out these amazing poems that seem to speak out loud exactly what lurks in the dark, dusty corners of people's minds...their worries, dreams, fears, and sorrows...our fear of the world, our fear of being alone, and so on...your poems always struck me as being a mixture of optismistic and melchanoly. (sorry about the horrible spelling, I'm tired)

And by the way...I want you to google "Judas gospel document." There's been amazing world-shattering news recently that has to do with changing people's perceptions of ancient history, and I know you love that sort of stuff. <<
 
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Flaming Lip

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Er... Sure...

Have some flan, and Champane! *digs stuff up from bag of magical mysteries*

Thank you for the review... Interestingly enough I am trying to take a more optamistic approach.

Unfortuantly, Google always makes my computor implode ;0;
 
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