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In Your Eyes -- Poem

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Flaming Lip

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Well... I'm honestly too tired for me to really say much. Its about different outlooks on life, and how that effects in the walk of life. Its parable to a Pokemon Trainer as it is to life itself (because it is a journey in the end)

In Your Eyes

Though it's one whole, we each have our perceptions

Layers and layers of memories and thoughts, and dreams

But when taken from a different perspective,

There’s still happiness in the warmth of the sunbeams


It’s from light that shadows are drawn,

And it’s from time that life begins and ends

There is so much in life that I just can’t understand

Like why there’s always something around the bend


How do we learn to love what we don’t understand?

Is there no answer to the echoing call?

Am I only just beginning to find,

That the world is so huge, and that I’m so small?


But when you get things under perspective

What is it you can see?

When you get things under perspective

Are you truly set free?


Something memorable in the things you say

Something frightening about the future

Something wonderful in the better days

Something forbidding in the path ahead


But when you get things under perspective

What is it you can see?

When you get things under perspective

Are you truly set free?​
 
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Saya

Member for 15 years
Wow. That was pretty good. For some reason the rhythm seemed a little wierd to me, but I'm not really a master poem critiquer so meh. It's just me. I liked the idea and what it was talking about. I'd never really thought about it before, but it is so true. Also, this should've probably been under the 'non-Pokemon fanfiction' section. As far as I could see it had nothing to do with Pokemon. Great rhyming in some parts. I don't know why, but something about it felt exotic and really amazing.

Oh yeah. On thing I noticed.
Though its one whole, we each have our perceptions
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'its' should be 'it's' with an apostrophe. It's a contraction for 'it is'.

Well, anyway, ganywax, whatever, very awesome poem and I really encourage you to keep on writing more and more!

Keep up the great writing!

~Saya~
 
Kutie Pie

Kutie Pie

"It is my destiny."
This reminded me of Brother Bear when I read it. *watches*

I love this one. Seriously, if we walked in each other's shoes and saw things through anothers eyes, then we could live in peace. Beautiful. I loved it.

Oh, and this reminded me of Look Through my Eyes by Phil Collins as well. Beautiful again. *hands brownie and hugs*

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♥Kutie Pie♥ Please be kind to midgets!
 
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Flaming Lip

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Yay! Reviews.

Saya: Well it really depends on your interpretation, I'm always a bit vauge in this respect. Well, I talk about how the Pokemon Trainer's Journey is parable to one's life. Some look at it negativly, what is the means to the ends (what is the reward of living life/What is the reward of being a trainer?) Others are more postitive, saying that the reward is the experience itself (life is its own reward, the journey is its own reward). Thanks~ *flan*

Kutie Pie: Thank ya. Its interesting how diffrent interpretations (and perceptions, so it also fits in with the poem) can be taken from it. I was meaning something more of understanding. When you look at it from someone else's eyes, maybe its something you can understand.

Thanks also! *fla-*

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I'm out of flan! Take this old pie someone one gave me a while back *pie*
 
Bay

Bay

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Good poem Byzantium! Yeah, in a way a Pokemon Journey is parable to life:the ups and downs, challenges, obstacles, friendships and enimies, etc.

But when you get things under perspective

What is it you can see?

When you get things under perspective

Are you truly set free?
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I believed when you are in someone else's shoes, then you might be surprised how much you and the other person are totally different. Like a person, each pokemon journey is unique. Also, I think you are free when looking at things to another person's perspective because it kind of makes you think about someone else then just yourself.

Sorry if what I say didn't make sense or if I interperted it wrong. Anyways, good poem and I can't wait to read more poems from you!
 
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Flaming Lip

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Its not possible to really interpret a poem incorrectly. Yes, in a sense thats what I meant. But not quite. When I say set yourself free, I don't mean to free yourself from selfishness, but to free yourself from a negative outlook.
 
Bay

Bay

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Byzantium said:
Its not possible to really interpret a poem incorrectly. Yes, in a sense thats what I meant. But not quite. When I say set yourself free, I don't mean to free yourself from selfishness, but to free yourself from a negative outlook.
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Oh, okay. I get it now. Thanks for clearing that up.
 
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billy5772

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Kewl poem, dewd. ^date sewn!
 
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