Ironic happenings

[Unknown Shadower]

Well, I made a comic, pokemon groudon who is my friend inspired me to make one because I started making him a tutorial and I found it fun to make things like that, and heres the comics. Critisism,comments,questions?


Comic one
Comic 2

 

[Unknown Shadower]

Made another one

Comic 2

 

[Gaadi]

Ehm Let's see

The first thing i see is that blue fat guy in comic 1. Never but never resize a sprite. It goes to be ugly and blocky. Same thing as the map of littleroot.

In comic 2 page 3 and 4, The May and brendan sprites looks like they shrunk.

You must work on that. Now i give it a 2/10

 

[Unknown Shadower]

I'm not so good with computer arts. I'll accept that.

 

[JoshYEAH]

I'm not so good with computer arts. I'll accept that.

You'll need to accept what I'm going to say to you now too.

Comic One

1. -Text isn't directly inside the text bubbles.
2. -Sprites are resized when there is no need/they shouldn't be
3. -Use of colour that isn't nessecary.

1. Move the text so it isn't against the edge of the text bubble. Enlarge the bubbles if you have to, just make sure that the text doesn't interact with the edges. It makes the comic look a bit naff and generally detracts from the flow of reading.

2. Don't resize sprites unless you a) have good reason to b) can do it properly. There isn't any point to the fat guy being enlarged, and generally speaking, it look a bit ugly.

3. Blue effects would be much better for the heatwave imo. Either that or apply a 10-25% alpha on the red so that it is faint.

comic 2

Lets battle!
Okay!
I don't have a pokemon!
You do now!
-Scene Missing-
I'm May!
Let's battle!

See what happened? there was supposed to be a battle between the professor and the trainer, but there wasn't. If you try and say "It's supposed to be ironic that he battles outside" then I'm afraid that that is not ironic. The only irony is that it's attemtping to be funny, but isn't. Which to me is cliche irony, as a lot of people try to be funyn and aren't. get the point?

Basically, work on the following

-Everything

That's not really great crit, but accompany it witht he rest of the review, and it is actually decent. Good luck.

-Josh

 

[Unknown Shadower]

I have to redo them -.-. I wanted to only use one layer of red, but I made 5 for the first one, i'll redo.

Btw, I don't know of any name, I can't come up with a good name,

close please.

 

[shinz]

Nice comic I can't wait to see some more

 

[Leon]

its alright but in comic 2 you jumped between the emerald and R/S male sprite