Jack Birch and His Journey

[Patchiiru]

Ok, my last died out, and I had only putt he intro. Here's the intro AND the first part. Birch sprites from The Spriter's Resource. Ripped by Rocket Seviper Shadow. Azurill and Geodude courtesy of Pokemon Elite 2000. Attacks made by yours truly. Yes, the story is based on Prof. Birch. It's based by Prof. Birch when he was a kid. His first Pokemon is Azurill, which is what he shows you on Pokemon Sapphire.

Chapter 1:
The Battle of Jack

 

[Mawile XD]

It's fine, only, why does the "kid"Birch have a beard?

 

[Mastercougar]

It's an interesting enough thought, but I would suggest making the kid Birch look a lot younger. Also, it's rather irritating to have all the action just typed in a box on the side. Yes, you can have narrations, but the purpose of a comic is to show action, not describe it.

 

[-Yoshi-]

Looks very good, but it is a bit blurry. Try adding speech bubbles for the characters, that would improve it a lot.

 

[Patchiiru]

There will be, this is just a prolouge... And I can't make the battle screens or a better Birch sprite. Can anyone make one?

 

[Modem X]

I could try give me a day or two to make the younger birch overworld and sprite. I'll post it on here

 

[Blueray]

Well... you can't just ask people to make stuff for you if you plan to ever get better at making comics. IMO you should stick to the sprites sub forum for a month or two to get better at spriting and making backgrounds. Then work on your grammar and spelling. Then go on into making comics. If you do that, then by the time you've learned a wide variety of aspects that are needed to make a good comic you will do much much better.

 

[Grandmaster Chao]

It's alright. The sprites are all blury but good story choice.