Jack's Great Battle's (G)

[Pete the Unstoppable]

Before you ask any questions here are some answers to some of the questions you might ask.

Q:How many reigons has Jack been to?
A:He came from Kanto and he is now in Hoenn.

Q:Why hasn't Jack's Squirtle evolved yet?
A:It got an everstone stuck in its shell.

Q:Why does Ashley hate Jack so much.
A:Jack defeated all her parents Pokemon with just his Espeon.

Q:Why does Ashley's eyes glow red when she is angry.
A:She has special contact lenses.

Q:Who was Jack battling on the boat and who won?
A:I can't say who it was...yet, but Jack lost.

Now if you have questions other than those feel free to ask.

Now lets get started.

Chapter 1:The Beginning of the Hoenn League

Part 1:

 

[Avegaille]

Okay, one advice... put your comic frames in a single page... for example 8 comic frames in one page... ._.

Um, yeah, and otherwise, your comic needs either an intro or make it al ittle more humorous, okay?

 

[Pete the Unstoppable]

Yeah...the thing is, I do not know how to put them all in one frame, please pm me to tell me how.

 

[Saorio]

Put them together in paint?

 

[Stanley]

Copy and paste. I think you are still primary but this is still okay.
The spelling, grammer, quality and nearly everything needs to be improved. Keep trying!

 

[Sahaqiel]

Ok ,time for one of my LDOP (Long drawn out posts)
In paint, just put the panels next to each other, host it on Imageshack, then put it on here. Then you need to make speech bubbles somwhat like this
[___________] Not exactly like this, but its a basic and effective one
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Next, get some better sprites, and think out your plot. Now, keep one color for text, it could be black, or whatever as long as we can read it, put your text in the text bubbles, and don't use the same words over and over, such as easy.
Example of repeated word use:
So what's up, what have you been doing? What is that?
What? Oh! First tell me what that is! What? I didn't hear you!
Get annoying?
Also, the F/R girl is always walking, might want to fix that. Try not to make people larger than buildings, or PCs. Everything that could possibly be called out of order is in this comic. Can't tell what's happening. For now, I don't think this comic will survive here, use our advice,
Sahaqiel