lordzangoose
walk like anEgyptian
^that's what i was thinking
-
We are currently experiencing a flood of requests from bots scraping the forums. Unfortunately it has gotten to the point where it is negatively impacting the site. As a result the forums may be slow and you may periodically experiance an error message. We are aware of the problem and apologize for the inconvenience.
-
Be sure to join the discussion on our discord at: Discord.gg/serebii
Journey Across a New Land
- Thread starter Beast is Holy
- Start date
Beast is Holy
Well-Known Member
Managed to finish Chapter 5 tonight, here it is. Enjoy
Chapter Five:
“Pewter City Gym, hunh?” Danny said, looking on at the gym standing in front of him.
“Yea, it’s gym leader, Brock, is known for using rock type Pokemon.” Hiromi explained, looking at the gym as well, amazed at the magnificent building in front of them.
“Well, let’s go Aron. With you, and hopefully Exeggcute, we’ll win our first badge.” Danny said to his Aron, opening the large doors made of stone.
Danny, Hiromi, and Aron walked into the gym, seeing one single long, narrow hallway. The three made their way down the hallway, lit only by light bulbs scattered upon the roof. After a few minutes of walking in silence, they finally made their way into what seemed like a large stadium. There were two large podiums stationed at each end of the rectangular stadium, one maroon, and the other a midnight blue. There were seats were set around the stadium, layered in different levels so that anyone in any seat may view the battle. The field inside the stadium itself was covered in colorless gravel, with large boulders randomly scattered around.
“So this is the stadium.” Danny said to himself, staring at the vast stadium before him.
“Quite a sight, isn’t it?” a mysterious voice from behind the three said.
Danny quickly spun around, to see a tall man standing behind him. This man had spiked up coffee colored hair, and his squinted eyes. He wore an ginger and grey colored vest, with a black colored t-shirt underneath. He wore a pair of olive colored pants.
“Who are you?!” Danny said, jumping back, startled at the sight of the man who had snuck up without being heard.
“What, the Pewter City Gym Leader isn’t recognized by challengers?” he sarcastically answered. “Name’s Brock, the gym leader of Pewter City.”
“You’re Brock!?” Danny said, pointing at Brock. “Well my name’s Danny, and I came here to challenge you for your Boulder Badge.”
“Heh, alright,” said Brock, chuckling under his breath. “Give me a minute to get ready. Go stand on one of those podiums over there.” he said, pointing to the red and blue podiums at the stadium.
“Hiromi, what are you going to do while I’m battling?” Danny asked her, before making his way to one of the podiums.
“I’ll probably just watch,” she responded heading over towards the bleachers at the side. “It’s not like I can actually challenge him with just Butterfree anyway.”
“Alright, wish me luck.” Danny said, rushing over and jumping up on the blue colored podium.
A minute later Brock came back and jumped onto the opposing pedestal. With him came an older man, dressed in a black and white stripped judges uniform. He walked over to a smaller dais on the side of the stadium, and began to announce the battle.
“The battle between the Pewter City Gym Leader, Brock, versus challenger, Danny, will now begin.” he announced, waving two flags up into the air, the same colors as the two podiums Danny and Brock were standing on. “The match will be two-on-two. The first contestant to defeat the others two Pokemon is the victor. Begin!”
“Since I’m the Gym Leader I’ll make the first move.” Brock said, heaving a pokeball into the stadium. The pokeball bounced off the stadium floor, revealing the rock type Pokemon Geodude. The Geodude was a rock head with no nose. It had long arms, starting with bulging muscles and rock hands resembling that of a human's. It was hovering off the ground, and cracking its knuckles, ready for a fight.
“Ok, Geodude I see.” Danny said, contemplating what Pokemon to use. “Aron, you’re up first!”
“Aron!” it said, jumping down onto the rock covered arena, staring down the competing Geodude.
“Aron, Mud Slap!” Danny commanded, pointing at the Geodude as he yelled the command.
Aron ran over towards the Geodude, and flung a mixture of water and soil forward.
“Geodude, Defense Curl to weaken the damage from the attack.” Brock calmly ordered, his arms folded across his chest.
Geodude put its arms over top its head, curling up into a ball. The Mud Slap attack made contact with the arched Geodude, not moving it at all. When Geodude removed its arms from over its face, it flung off the mud clinging to its body.
“Aron, lets try Headbutt instead.” Danny commanded, thinking that if Aron hit Geodude enough it wouldn’t be able to defend anymore.
Aron rushed towards Geodude, and before Brock could even open his mouth for an attack, rammed into Geodude, causing him to be sent flying clear across the field. Geodude slammed straight into one of the enormous boulders laying on the field, causing it to shatter.
“Go Danny! Go Aron!” Hiromi cheered from the stands, jumping up and down.
“Aron, finish it off quickly! Metal Claw!” as Danny yelled out the command to attack, Aron’s right foot began to glow a metallic color. His foot continued to glow until his entire foot was consumed in a blaze of a metallic tint.
Aron rushed towards Geodude, who was still dazed from the previous Headbutt. Aron jumped up, gaining momentum for its attack, and declined down towards Geodude. Aron brought down its claw, smashing into Geodude, causing an explosion of dust particles to scatter around the arena. When the dust cleared enough to see what was left of the stadium, Aron was standing in front of a giant pile of rubble.
“Geo-dude..” the rock Pokemon mumbled from under the wreckage. Its arm emerged from the rubble, soon followed by Geodude itself. Geodude seemed severely injured, with an entire chunk of rock from atop its head knocked off.
“Geodude, Mega Punch.” Brock commanded, not phased at all by the momentous attack from the tiny Aron.
Geodude’s hand began to glow with raw white energy, and charged at Aron. As Geodude flew toward Aron, it left behind a trail of energy from the Mega Punch.
“Aron, Iron Defense!” Danny yelled, knowing that if Aron used Iron Defense, Geodude’s Mega Punch wouldn’t do any damage, giving him the chance to defeat it.
Aron’s body began to glow, resembling that of Metal Claw. Geodude’s Mega Punch collided with Aron, but to no avail. Geodude shuddered, as the impact from the Mega Punch caused vibrations all through its body.
“Aron, quickly, finish it off with one more Metal Claw!”
Aron’s claw began to once again metallically glow. Aron lunged forward towards the immobilized Geodude, ramming its foot straight into its body. Geodude was sent flying back clear across the stage, crashing into a granite wall covering the arena.
“Geodude is unable to battle, round one goes to Danny and Aron.” the judge declared, waving a flag in Danny’s direction.
“Hell ya Aron!” Danny cheered, jumping up and down.
“Way to go Aron!” cheered Hiromi, jumping up and down in a similar fashion as Danny.
“I‘ll admit Danny, I’m surprised you managed to defeat Geodude.” Brock said, congratulating Danny. “But you won’t be able to defeat this. Onix, let’s go!” Brock flew his second pokeball into the stadium, this time unleashing a giant, serpentine rock type Pokemon. This Pokemon was composed of nothing but large boulders, and atop its giant head grew a large, smooth horn.
“Th--that’s humongous…” Danny stuttered, staring at the serpent ahead of him. “Aron can’t defeat something that much bigger than him.”
“Aron!” the tiny Pokemon growled, staring into the Onix’s eyes.
Aron, it doesn’t matter how much determination you have, there’s such a huge difference in size between the two of you, not to mention we’ve already used up two of your three Metal Claws in the fight with Geodude. Danny thought to himself, clenching his fists.
“Match Two, Onix versus Aron, begin!” the judge declared, waving up once again his flags.
“Onix, Tackle.” ordered Brock the moment the battle started.
Onix lunged towards Aron’s tiny body, giving a loud roar as it connected with Aron. Aron was sent flying back in a similar fashion as Geodude had done just moments beforehand.
“Aron!” Danny yelled, grasping the bars in front of him on the podium, resisting the urge to jump into the field and rescue Aron.
Aron managed to recover from the attack, rising back onto its feet. When Aron rose back up to its feet, it cringed with pain in its hind legs, unable to stand properly.
Only one chance at beating Onix right now, Danny contemplated, sweat dripping down his brow. I have to finish this off with Metal Claw.
“Aron, Metal Claw!” Danny screamed, knowing that if this Metal Claw didn’t grab him the victory, he would have to rely on Exeggcute.
Aron’s arm quickly exploded in a burst of light again, and he charged for the large stone serpent Pokemon.
“Onix, deflect it away with Iron Tail.” Brock commanded, as Onix gave a subtle growl.
Onix’s tail began to glow, identical to that of Aron’s Metal Claw. Aron continued to dash towards Onix, yelling its name as it ran. Onix gave a single swipe of its massive metallic tail, sending Aron straight back from where it came. Aron crashed into the wall yet again, but this time remained down, unable to get back onto its feet.
“Aron is unable to battle, round two goes to Brock!” the judge stated, waving one of his flags at Brock.
“Danny, give up now.” Brock said, chuckling under his breath. “You can’t defeat Onix, your Aron was useless against it.”
“Aron may not have defeated Onix,” Danny retaliated, returning Aron into his pokeball, at the same time reaching for Exeggcute’s. “But this next Pokemon will win for sure!” Danny flung the ball into the field, unleashing his six newly captured Exeggcute.
“Danny, be careful!” Hiromi warned, standing in the bleachers still.
Danny waved up his arm, letting Hiromi he heard her and not to worry. Exeggcute looked around where it was, noticing the large boulders and gravel all over the rock floor. The egg Pokemon noticed the large Onix staring them down, and became furious.
“Exeggcute-egg!” they yelled, not showing any signs of fear of the towering Pokemon before them.
“Good, Exeggcute isn’t worried at all, I guess that means I can calm down as well.” Danny said to himself, wiping the sweat off his forehead.
“Round three, Onix versus Exeggcute, begin!”
“Egg-Exeggcute-cute!” the Exeggcute yelled among themselves, scattering across the field to surround Onix.
“Please, if you think such a trivial tactic will work against me, you’ve lost this fight already.” Brock yelled over to Danny.
“I don’t think it’ll work, but I’m sure this will!” Danny yelled back, smirking. “Exeggcute, I’m not sure if this will work, but use Sleep Powder!”
The Exeggcute began to inhale deeply, then exerting a lime green powder towards Onix. Onix was confused, not sure as to what to do with a Sleep Powder attack coming at it from six different directions, surrounding it.
“Onix, Dig.” Brock ordered in a relaxed tone.
Onix dug a hole into the ground below it, disappearing from sight before the Sleep Powder could put it to sleep.
“Exeggcute, separate into two groups of three,” Danny ordered, thinking out a strategy. “One group use Sleep Powder down the hole where Onix disappeared, and the other wait for Onix to reappear and hit him then with Leech Seed.”
The Exeggcute did as they were told, three of them rolling over towards the hole, exhaling the Sleep Powder into it, while the other group rolled onto a boulder, looking in three directions awaiting Onix to reappear. After a moment of silence, Onix was still underground, with no traces of reappearing anytime soon.
“Did we get it…?” Danny asked, a little skeptical at the thought of actually putting Onix to sleep while in the hole.”
“No,” Brock answered, folding his arms back over his chest. “Onix, attack now!”
Onix reappeared out from the ground, rotating rapidly. In no time at all, a giant sandstorm had engulfed Onix, and was spreading out to the Exeggcute.
“Exeggcute!” Danny howled, worried about his newly acquired Pokemon. “This is our last chance, Sleep Powder, all of you!”
The six scattered Exeggcute shot their Sleep Powder into the direction of the oncoming sandstorm, creating a giant mixture of sand and residue. The sandstorm engulfed the entire field, with Onix and the Exeggcute in the middle. As the sandstorm subsided, the outline of Onix could be seen laying on the ground, with five oval shaped objects scattered around. When the sand finally settled enough to clearly see what had happened, Onix was seen clearly covered in glowing red roots, all connected at one spot on the large beast.
“One…two…three…four….and five.” Danny counted, looking to see if all six Exeggcute were still in tact. “Where’s the sixth?”
“Onix….” Brock muttered to himself, seeing his Pokemon covered in the Exeggcute’s Leech Seed.
“Exeggcute, where are you!?” Danny yelled out into the field, concerned about the missing Pokemon.
A low garbling sound could be heard from somewhere on the field, as the lead Exeggcute managed to climb out of the hole Onix had just dug. Exeggcute had a huge grin across his face, staring at Danny.
“Onix is unable to battle, round three and the battle for the Boulder Badge, goes to Danny!” the judge stated, waving a flag in the direction of Danny.
Danny was trembling with excitement, thrilled he had won his very first badge. “I won!”
“Way to go Danny!” Hiromi congratulated form the sidelines, jumping up and down with joy.
“Congratulations Danny, you won.” Brock confirmed, returning Onix into its pokeball. He hopped off the podium he was standing on, and made his way over towards Danny. “Here, this Boulder Badge is confirmation of your victory here today, wear it proudly.” he said, handing Danny a small grey rock shaped badge.
“Thank you, that was a tough fight Brock.” he said, shaking hands with Brock. “I hope for a rematch some day.”
“Come by anytime you want, I won’t lose though.” Brock responded, laughing.
“Oh yea, Exeggcute, all of you get over here!” Danny called out to his Exeggcute, most of whom were still asleep. “Ok, I can see that’s not going to happen, return instead!” he held up the pokeball, recalling the Exeggcute back to rest inside.
“Hiromi, let’s get going, I want to hurry to the Pokemon Center!” Danny called, rushing out the door not waiting for Hiromi.
“Yea yea, I’m coming!” she answered, gathering up her things and chasing after Danny.
Chapter Five:
“Pewter City Gym, hunh?” Danny said, looking on at the gym standing in front of him.
“Yea, it’s gym leader, Brock, is known for using rock type Pokemon.” Hiromi explained, looking at the gym as well, amazed at the magnificent building in front of them.
“Well, let’s go Aron. With you, and hopefully Exeggcute, we’ll win our first badge.” Danny said to his Aron, opening the large doors made of stone.
Danny, Hiromi, and Aron walked into the gym, seeing one single long, narrow hallway. The three made their way down the hallway, lit only by light bulbs scattered upon the roof. After a few minutes of walking in silence, they finally made their way into what seemed like a large stadium. There were two large podiums stationed at each end of the rectangular stadium, one maroon, and the other a midnight blue. There were seats were set around the stadium, layered in different levels so that anyone in any seat may view the battle. The field inside the stadium itself was covered in colorless gravel, with large boulders randomly scattered around.
“So this is the stadium.” Danny said to himself, staring at the vast stadium before him.
“Quite a sight, isn’t it?” a mysterious voice from behind the three said.
Danny quickly spun around, to see a tall man standing behind him. This man had spiked up coffee colored hair, and his squinted eyes. He wore an ginger and grey colored vest, with a black colored t-shirt underneath. He wore a pair of olive colored pants.
“Who are you?!” Danny said, jumping back, startled at the sight of the man who had snuck up without being heard.
“What, the Pewter City Gym Leader isn’t recognized by challengers?” he sarcastically answered. “Name’s Brock, the gym leader of Pewter City.”
“You’re Brock!?” Danny said, pointing at Brock. “Well my name’s Danny, and I came here to challenge you for your Boulder Badge.”
“Heh, alright,” said Brock, chuckling under his breath. “Give me a minute to get ready. Go stand on one of those podiums over there.” he said, pointing to the red and blue podiums at the stadium.
“Hiromi, what are you going to do while I’m battling?” Danny asked her, before making his way to one of the podiums.
“I’ll probably just watch,” she responded heading over towards the bleachers at the side. “It’s not like I can actually challenge him with just Butterfree anyway.”
“Alright, wish me luck.” Danny said, rushing over and jumping up on the blue colored podium.
A minute later Brock came back and jumped onto the opposing pedestal. With him came an older man, dressed in a black and white stripped judges uniform. He walked over to a smaller dais on the side of the stadium, and began to announce the battle.
“The battle between the Pewter City Gym Leader, Brock, versus challenger, Danny, will now begin.” he announced, waving two flags up into the air, the same colors as the two podiums Danny and Brock were standing on. “The match will be two-on-two. The first contestant to defeat the others two Pokemon is the victor. Begin!”
“Since I’m the Gym Leader I’ll make the first move.” Brock said, heaving a pokeball into the stadium. The pokeball bounced off the stadium floor, revealing the rock type Pokemon Geodude. The Geodude was a rock head with no nose. It had long arms, starting with bulging muscles and rock hands resembling that of a human's. It was hovering off the ground, and cracking its knuckles, ready for a fight.
“Ok, Geodude I see.” Danny said, contemplating what Pokemon to use. “Aron, you’re up first!”
“Aron!” it said, jumping down onto the rock covered arena, staring down the competing Geodude.
“Aron, Mud Slap!” Danny commanded, pointing at the Geodude as he yelled the command.
Aron ran over towards the Geodude, and flung a mixture of water and soil forward.
“Geodude, Defense Curl to weaken the damage from the attack.” Brock calmly ordered, his arms folded across his chest.
Geodude put its arms over top its head, curling up into a ball. The Mud Slap attack made contact with the arched Geodude, not moving it at all. When Geodude removed its arms from over its face, it flung off the mud clinging to its body.
“Aron, lets try Headbutt instead.” Danny commanded, thinking that if Aron hit Geodude enough it wouldn’t be able to defend anymore.
Aron rushed towards Geodude, and before Brock could even open his mouth for an attack, rammed into Geodude, causing him to be sent flying clear across the field. Geodude slammed straight into one of the enormous boulders laying on the field, causing it to shatter.
“Go Danny! Go Aron!” Hiromi cheered from the stands, jumping up and down.
“Aron, finish it off quickly! Metal Claw!” as Danny yelled out the command to attack, Aron’s right foot began to glow a metallic color. His foot continued to glow until his entire foot was consumed in a blaze of a metallic tint.
Aron rushed towards Geodude, who was still dazed from the previous Headbutt. Aron jumped up, gaining momentum for its attack, and declined down towards Geodude. Aron brought down its claw, smashing into Geodude, causing an explosion of dust particles to scatter around the arena. When the dust cleared enough to see what was left of the stadium, Aron was standing in front of a giant pile of rubble.
“Geo-dude..” the rock Pokemon mumbled from under the wreckage. Its arm emerged from the rubble, soon followed by Geodude itself. Geodude seemed severely injured, with an entire chunk of rock from atop its head knocked off.
“Geodude, Mega Punch.” Brock commanded, not phased at all by the momentous attack from the tiny Aron.
Geodude’s hand began to glow with raw white energy, and charged at Aron. As Geodude flew toward Aron, it left behind a trail of energy from the Mega Punch.
“Aron, Iron Defense!” Danny yelled, knowing that if Aron used Iron Defense, Geodude’s Mega Punch wouldn’t do any damage, giving him the chance to defeat it.
Aron’s body began to glow, resembling that of Metal Claw. Geodude’s Mega Punch collided with Aron, but to no avail. Geodude shuddered, as the impact from the Mega Punch caused vibrations all through its body.
“Aron, quickly, finish it off with one more Metal Claw!”
Aron’s claw began to once again metallically glow. Aron lunged forward towards the immobilized Geodude, ramming its foot straight into its body. Geodude was sent flying back clear across the stage, crashing into a granite wall covering the arena.
“Geodude is unable to battle, round one goes to Danny and Aron.” the judge declared, waving a flag in Danny’s direction.
“Hell ya Aron!” Danny cheered, jumping up and down.
“Way to go Aron!” cheered Hiromi, jumping up and down in a similar fashion as Danny.
“I‘ll admit Danny, I’m surprised you managed to defeat Geodude.” Brock said, congratulating Danny. “But you won’t be able to defeat this. Onix, let’s go!” Brock flew his second pokeball into the stadium, this time unleashing a giant, serpentine rock type Pokemon. This Pokemon was composed of nothing but large boulders, and atop its giant head grew a large, smooth horn.
“Th--that’s humongous…” Danny stuttered, staring at the serpent ahead of him. “Aron can’t defeat something that much bigger than him.”
“Aron!” the tiny Pokemon growled, staring into the Onix’s eyes.
Aron, it doesn’t matter how much determination you have, there’s such a huge difference in size between the two of you, not to mention we’ve already used up two of your three Metal Claws in the fight with Geodude. Danny thought to himself, clenching his fists.
“Match Two, Onix versus Aron, begin!” the judge declared, waving up once again his flags.
“Onix, Tackle.” ordered Brock the moment the battle started.
Onix lunged towards Aron’s tiny body, giving a loud roar as it connected with Aron. Aron was sent flying back in a similar fashion as Geodude had done just moments beforehand.
“Aron!” Danny yelled, grasping the bars in front of him on the podium, resisting the urge to jump into the field and rescue Aron.
Aron managed to recover from the attack, rising back onto its feet. When Aron rose back up to its feet, it cringed with pain in its hind legs, unable to stand properly.
Only one chance at beating Onix right now, Danny contemplated, sweat dripping down his brow. I have to finish this off with Metal Claw.
“Aron, Metal Claw!” Danny screamed, knowing that if this Metal Claw didn’t grab him the victory, he would have to rely on Exeggcute.
Aron’s arm quickly exploded in a burst of light again, and he charged for the large stone serpent Pokemon.
“Onix, deflect it away with Iron Tail.” Brock commanded, as Onix gave a subtle growl.
Onix’s tail began to glow, identical to that of Aron’s Metal Claw. Aron continued to dash towards Onix, yelling its name as it ran. Onix gave a single swipe of its massive metallic tail, sending Aron straight back from where it came. Aron crashed into the wall yet again, but this time remained down, unable to get back onto its feet.
“Aron is unable to battle, round two goes to Brock!” the judge stated, waving one of his flags at Brock.
“Danny, give up now.” Brock said, chuckling under his breath. “You can’t defeat Onix, your Aron was useless against it.”
“Aron may not have defeated Onix,” Danny retaliated, returning Aron into his pokeball, at the same time reaching for Exeggcute’s. “But this next Pokemon will win for sure!” Danny flung the ball into the field, unleashing his six newly captured Exeggcute.
“Danny, be careful!” Hiromi warned, standing in the bleachers still.
Danny waved up his arm, letting Hiromi he heard her and not to worry. Exeggcute looked around where it was, noticing the large boulders and gravel all over the rock floor. The egg Pokemon noticed the large Onix staring them down, and became furious.
“Exeggcute-egg!” they yelled, not showing any signs of fear of the towering Pokemon before them.
“Good, Exeggcute isn’t worried at all, I guess that means I can calm down as well.” Danny said to himself, wiping the sweat off his forehead.
“Round three, Onix versus Exeggcute, begin!”
“Egg-Exeggcute-cute!” the Exeggcute yelled among themselves, scattering across the field to surround Onix.
“Please, if you think such a trivial tactic will work against me, you’ve lost this fight already.” Brock yelled over to Danny.
“I don’t think it’ll work, but I’m sure this will!” Danny yelled back, smirking. “Exeggcute, I’m not sure if this will work, but use Sleep Powder!”
The Exeggcute began to inhale deeply, then exerting a lime green powder towards Onix. Onix was confused, not sure as to what to do with a Sleep Powder attack coming at it from six different directions, surrounding it.
“Onix, Dig.” Brock ordered in a relaxed tone.
Onix dug a hole into the ground below it, disappearing from sight before the Sleep Powder could put it to sleep.
“Exeggcute, separate into two groups of three,” Danny ordered, thinking out a strategy. “One group use Sleep Powder down the hole where Onix disappeared, and the other wait for Onix to reappear and hit him then with Leech Seed.”
The Exeggcute did as they were told, three of them rolling over towards the hole, exhaling the Sleep Powder into it, while the other group rolled onto a boulder, looking in three directions awaiting Onix to reappear. After a moment of silence, Onix was still underground, with no traces of reappearing anytime soon.
“Did we get it…?” Danny asked, a little skeptical at the thought of actually putting Onix to sleep while in the hole.”
“No,” Brock answered, folding his arms back over his chest. “Onix, attack now!”
Onix reappeared out from the ground, rotating rapidly. In no time at all, a giant sandstorm had engulfed Onix, and was spreading out to the Exeggcute.
“Exeggcute!” Danny howled, worried about his newly acquired Pokemon. “This is our last chance, Sleep Powder, all of you!”
The six scattered Exeggcute shot their Sleep Powder into the direction of the oncoming sandstorm, creating a giant mixture of sand and residue. The sandstorm engulfed the entire field, with Onix and the Exeggcute in the middle. As the sandstorm subsided, the outline of Onix could be seen laying on the ground, with five oval shaped objects scattered around. When the sand finally settled enough to clearly see what had happened, Onix was seen clearly covered in glowing red roots, all connected at one spot on the large beast.
“One…two…three…four….and five.” Danny counted, looking to see if all six Exeggcute were still in tact. “Where’s the sixth?”
“Onix….” Brock muttered to himself, seeing his Pokemon covered in the Exeggcute’s Leech Seed.
“Exeggcute, where are you!?” Danny yelled out into the field, concerned about the missing Pokemon.
A low garbling sound could be heard from somewhere on the field, as the lead Exeggcute managed to climb out of the hole Onix had just dug. Exeggcute had a huge grin across his face, staring at Danny.
“Onix is unable to battle, round three and the battle for the Boulder Badge, goes to Danny!” the judge stated, waving a flag in the direction of Danny.
Danny was trembling with excitement, thrilled he had won his very first badge. “I won!”
“Way to go Danny!” Hiromi congratulated form the sidelines, jumping up and down with joy.
“Congratulations Danny, you won.” Brock confirmed, returning Onix into its pokeball. He hopped off the podium he was standing on, and made his way over towards Danny. “Here, this Boulder Badge is confirmation of your victory here today, wear it proudly.” he said, handing Danny a small grey rock shaped badge.
“Thank you, that was a tough fight Brock.” he said, shaking hands with Brock. “I hope for a rematch some day.”
“Come by anytime you want, I won’t lose though.” Brock responded, laughing.
“Oh yea, Exeggcute, all of you get over here!” Danny called out to his Exeggcute, most of whom were still asleep. “Ok, I can see that’s not going to happen, return instead!” he held up the pokeball, recalling the Exeggcute back to rest inside.
“Hiromi, let’s get going, I want to hurry to the Pokemon Center!” Danny called, rushing out the door not waiting for Hiromi.
“Yea yea, I’m coming!” she answered, gathering up her things and chasing after Danny.
Last edited:
lordzangoose
walk like anEgyptian
great battle scene. you showed that more than just fainting happens when a pokemon is beaten badly(in geodude's case) if that is a precursor to what's coming up, then i am psyched
Beast is Holy
Well-Known Member
Siriku - Exeggute is 6 different eggs, each with a different personality, so why treat them as 1 pokemon. Glad you liked the 6 seperate thing as well.
lordzangoose - Thanks, glad you liked the battle
Im working on the next chapter right now, Ill update when I finish it.
lordzangoose - Thanks, glad you liked the battle
Im working on the next chapter right now, Ill update when I finish it.
Beast is Holy
Well-Known Member
Siriku - As I said in my previous post, since Exeggcute are 6 Pokemon with different personalities, Im using that to my advantage. And I didnt really think about what would happen if something happens to one, so its possible Exeggutor would be deformed.
Let me know when your fic is up and Ill check it out.
Let me know when your fic is up and Ill check it out.
Hoenn Warrior
All Terrain Trainer
This is a pretty cool story that you got going on. I liked the first few chapters with Danny and the rest of the graduating trainers going out and capturing their starter Pokemon in a secret valley. Its no often you see a Trainer capture a Aron for his/her starter. You usually see it in the other fan fics on trainers teams, but not often as a starter, so that was one of the things I liked about the opening. On top of that, capturing an Exeggcute is also pretty rare and not common on many teams. I liked the way you used Exeggcute in the battle with Brock. But it seems Danny doesnt know some of the basic attacks of a few Pokemon, since he had trouble battling Exeggcute. If it wasnt for Hiromi he would of lost that battle. Seems to me she seems to be the smarter of the two for the time being, but all of that can change I suppose. I cant wait to see Hiromi's second Pokemon and her battle with Brock for her Boulder Badge. The battle with Chad was also pretty good and it seems he will be making a return sooner or later.
Im just wondering what is his home town? And if you are going to add any more characters to the stroy since I have one that you can use if you want.
I hope you will reveal this character soon. It seems he may play a role in this story aswell.
Im just wondering what is his home town? And if you are going to add any more characters to the stroy since I have one that you can use if you want.
I hope you will reveal this character soon. It seems he may play a role in this story aswell.
Beast is Holy
Well-Known Member
Glad you like it Hoenn Warrior. And to answer your question about Danny's hometown, its going to be revealed soon, so youre going to have to wait. And for the mystery missing person, yup, I have plans for him, but he wont be revealed for a little while as well, sorry.
I also am going to use more characters, so go ahead and PM me yours and Ill see if I can fit him/her in.
I also am going to use more characters, so go ahead and PM me yours and Ill see if I can fit him/her in.
lordzangoose
walk like anEgyptian
^gosh darn you
the malformed thing would be pretty cool.... just had a great idea.... if one of the eggs gets destroyed somehow then he would be lacking an emotion, which means that it could either hurt or harm him, or could give him a special power
the malformed thing would be pretty cool.... just had a great idea.... if one of the eggs gets destroyed somehow then he would be lacking an emotion, which means that it could either hurt or harm him, or could give him a special power
Hoenn Warrior
All Terrain Trainer
No need to apologize to me. I can wait patiently for his hometown to be revealed. I just wonder who is this mystery character? And his purpose. It seems Danny isnt that close to him s he could be like his main rival like Gary was to Ash, but that spot may have been taken by Chad? But like I said, Ill wait patiently for you to answer these questions. Somewhat surprised the others didnt pick up on that line though.
And I will PM you my ideas for the characters for your story. I just hope you can fit my character/s in if possible.
Beast is Holy
Well-Known Member
Well, got Chapter 6 done, its kind of short though. Enjoy:
Chapter Six:
“Here you go, your Pokemon are back up to fighting level.” the Pewter City Pokemon Center receptionist said, handing Danny back his two pokeballs.
“Thanks.” Danny answered, taking back his pokeballs and waking out of the Pokemon Center. When he got out of the Pokemon Center, he turned to Hiromi. “Where to next?”
Hiromi got out her map, and began to study it. “Well, the closest town from here is Cerulean.” she said, not looking up from the map. “But to get there we would have to make our way through Mt. Moon.”
“Mt. Moon, what direction is that?” asked Danny.
“East, on the other side of Route 3. But according to what someone in the Pokemon Center said, Route 3 is full of trainers going the same way as us.” she said, looked up from the map.
“Good, the more the merrier.” Danny confidently stated, making his way towards Route 3.
Hiromi rolled her eyes before following Danny, as they headed towards the city gates. When Danny and Hiromi made it to their destination, there was a mass of trainers gathered around in a ring, watching what sounded like a fight.
“Hey, what's going on over there?” Danny curiously asked, wandering over towards the gathering of people.
Danny and Hiromi pushed there way through the large crowd, to find a competition of two trainers battling with their Pokemon. On one side, there was a Pokemon resembling that of a rhinoceros. It was a lavender color, with needles and horns growing out of the back of its rough hide. It had dark purple spots scattered randomly around its body, with a razor sharp horn sticking up from out of its forehead.
On the other side of the gathering opposing this purple Pokemon was a Pokemon that slightly resembled a ferret, though it had flame shooting out of its head and lower back. It was coated in vanilla colored fur on its underbelly and paws, with a blue streak going down its back, starting at its eyes.
“Quilava, Flamethrower!” a boy from inside the ring of people ordered. The blue and white ferret Pokemon, Quilava, began to inhale deeply, then exerting a radiant stream of flame towards its adversary.
“Nidorino, use Water Pulse!” another boy from inside the ring commanded. The Nidorino large ears perked up, as it opened its mouth, absorbing water particles from the air. In no time at all, Nidorino had accumulated enough particles to be holding a compacted sphere of water in its mouth. The Nidorino shot the Water Pulse straight into the Flamethrower, cutting through it like a knife.
“Amazing, a Nidorino with Water Pulse.” Hiromi commented, watching the battle between the two Pokemon rage on.
The Water Pulse cut through the entire Flamethrower attack, and burst straight into Quilava. Quilava was sent flying back, taking a lot of damage from the water type attack. The flames on its back went out in an instant as Quilava lay limply on the ground beside its trainer.
“Looks like Quilava won’t be getting up anytime soon, I win.” Nidorino’s trainer remarked, combing his hand through his long red hair. He wore an olive green colored jacket, with a solid red line dashing through the middle. His jacket had red cuffs, matching the color of his hair. He wore blue jeans, tucked into his black boots.
“Quilava, return.” The other trainer called, recalling his Quilava back into its pokeball then quickly rushing off towards the direction of Pewter City.
“Is there no-one here who can challenge me and my Nidorino?” The trainer called out, looking around into the crowd.
“I can!” Danny shouted, pushing his way through the crowd until he was standing inside the ring of spectators.
“Hmph, fine. Nidorino, you’re up.” The trainer said, telling his Nidorino to step back into the field.
“Exeggcute lets go!” Danny called, throwing the pokeball into the field.
All six of the Exeggcute materialized onto the field, staring out at the Nidorino. The Exeggcute turned around to look at Danny, and yelled angrily out at him.
“What?” Danny asked, puzzled at Exeggcute’s sudden reaction to him. “It’s a battle, you guys are going to kick that Nidorino’s ***, like you did with Onix.”
“Egg-execute!” The Exeggcute snorted, turning back around to face the Nidorino.
“I’ll make the first move. Nidorino, Fury Attack and hit all six Exeggcute.” The opposing trainer said in an apathetic voice.
Nidorino charged forwards towards Exeggcute, his eyes full of hatred for Exeggcute.
“Exeggcute, separate!” Ordered Danny.
The six Exeggcute separated, just in time to dodge Nidorino’s Fury Attack. Nidorino violently turned around, charging for one of the Exeggcute without an order from its trainer. Nidorino rammed its horn straight into one of the eggs, sending it flying into one of the other Exeggcute.
“Crap, I need to concentrate.” Danny said to himself, thinking of a plan to use against Nidorino. “That’s it! Exeggcute, Hypnosis!”
The remaining Exeggcute’s eyes began to glow a bright yellow, attempting to put the opposing Nidorino to sleep.
“Nidorino, Poison Sting the closest Exeggcute, then move out to the rest.” Nidorino’s trainer called out.
Nidorino charged once again towards one of the Exeggcute, its razor sharp horn atop its head-pointing straight out. Nidorino smashed into one of the Exeggcute, immobilizing a total of three out of the six Pokemon. Nidorino then turned and faced another Exeggcute. Exeggcute’s made eye contact with the Nidorino, putting it to sleep due to the Hypnosis attack.
“Alright Exeggcute, good job!” Danny cheered, as the crowed roared with excitement at the battle.
“Nidorino, wake up!” The trainer yelled to his Pokemon, frustrated that his Pokemon fell for such a common attack.
Exeggcute can’t defeat that Nidorino before it gets up,Danny thought to himself. Since Nidorino’s a poison type, I’ll need something like a ground, or psychic attack. Wait, psychic attack, that’s it!
“Exeggcute, I have a plan,” Danny called out to his egg Pokemon. “You need to focus your Hypnosis into a Confusion attack, so that instead of just putting Pokemon to sleep, you can control their movements!”
Exeggcute concentrated hard on the sleeping rhino Pokemon, trying to use the Confusion attack. Exeggcute’s eyes began to change from the bright golden color into a bright aquamarine shade of blue. As the three Exeggcute’s eyes began to glow brighter, Nidorino’s body began to glow as well.
“Nidorino! Get up!” The trainer called, anger present in his voice.
When Nidorino’s body was entirely encased in the blue light, the Exeggcute sent it flying clear across the flied. Nidorino landed into the ground, skidding for another few feet, accumulating dirt and soil around its head.
“Alright Exeggcute, you learned Confusion!” Danny shouted, jumping up and down at Exeggcute’s victory. “Looks like I won. Great match.”
“Hmph, Nidorino return.” He said, recalling his Nidorino back into its pokeball, ignoring Danny. He turned and walked away in the direction of Mt. Moon.
“Alright! Good job Exeggcute!” Danny yelled, running towards his Exeggcute. He pulled out a spray bottle from inside his book bag, and sprayed the three injured Exeggcute. “Anyone else want to battle?”
“I will.” Came a voice from inside the crowd. The boy who stepped forward had long brown straight hair. He wore a black t-shirt underneath a lime green colored vest, along with a pair of dark blue jeans.
“Fine with me.” Danny said confidently. “I’ll be sticking with Exeggcute.”
“Ok, Vulpix lets go!” He said, tossing a red and white pokeball into the field. The Pokemon that appeared on the field was a beautiful crimson colored fox, with six pumpkin colored curly tails. It had a tuff of hair growing out of its small head, the same color as its tails. It had dull brown eyes, with pure white fur covering its stomach.
“Hmm, Vulpix huh? On second thought, Exeggcute return!” Danny called, recalling his six eggs back into their pokeball, and tossing his green shaded ball. “Aron lets go!”
Aron was released from ball, standing face to face with Vulpix. The two small Pokemon stood staring each other down for a minute or two before either made a move.
“Vulpix, Flamethrower!” Its trainer commanded, breaking the silence between the two Pokemon.
Vulpix inhaled air, and then exhaled a stream of bright red and orange flame; similar to that of Quilava’s in one of the previous battles.
“Dig!” Danny commanded, just seconds before the flame scorched Aron.
“Aroo!” The tiny steel Pokemon exclaimed, before diving into the ground beneath it with its claws. Right before the Flamethrower attack made contact with Aron, it disappeared, leaving nothing but a deep hole where it just stood.
“Not bad, but not good enough.” The other trainer said, smiling to himself. “Vulpix, Fire Spin into the hole.”
Vulpix quickly darted over towards the hole Aron had just made, and inhaled as if it were going to use Flamethrower. Instead of a single straight burst of flame shooting out of its mouth when it exhaled, a thin vortex of flame, similar to that of Flamethrower, shot out darting down the hole.
“Aron! Mud Slap!” Danny called out, in hopes Aron could hear him.
After a minute underground, Aron reappeared underneath Vulpix, ramming its ironclad head into the soft stomach of Vulpix.
Thank God, Danny thought to himself. Why is it that every time we use Dig, something happens that forces us to use Mud Slap?
“Vulpix!” The trainer yelled, fearing for his small Pokemon’s health.
“Aron,” Danny called out. “Show us Metal Claw!”
Aron’s fore claw began shining bright in the afternoon sun, as it readied its Metal Claw. When Vulpix finally reached its maximum height after being thrown up into the air and began to descend, Aron jumped up, colliding its claw down onto the jaw of the fox Pokemon. Vulpix was sent flying down toward the ground with greater velocity. When Vulpix finally met with the ground, it bounced up a little, before finally staying down.
“Dammit, Vulpix return.” Its trainer called, holding out its pokeball and facing it in the direction of Vulpix.
“Hey, nice battle.” Danny congratulated as he recalled Aron. He then began walking over towards the other trainer. “You took defeat a lot better than the guy with the Nidorino.”
“Thanks, those were some pretty nice moves you had back there too.” He responded, placing Vulpix’s pokeball into his book bag. “My name’s Anthony, what's yours?”
“Danny, nice to meet you.” Danny said, stretching out his hand.
Anthony grasped Danny’s hand in his, and the two trainers shook hands.
“So where you headed to?” Danny asked.
“Pewter City, I need to get my first gym badge.” Anthony responded.
“Oh really, I just came from there. Be careful against Brock, he’s good.” Warned Danny.
“Thanks, I’ll remember that.”
“Danny, we need to get going if we want to make it to Cerulean City by nightfall.” Hiromi interjected, walking over to the two boys.
“Oh yea, I guess you’re right.” Danny agreed, putting Aron’s pokeball back in its slot in his black belt. “Well hopefully we’ll see each other soon, Anthony, good luck.”
Danny and Hiromi then walked off, leaving the crowd of spectators behind them, heading towards Mt. Moon.
Chapter Six:
“Here you go, your Pokemon are back up to fighting level.” the Pewter City Pokemon Center receptionist said, handing Danny back his two pokeballs.
“Thanks.” Danny answered, taking back his pokeballs and waking out of the Pokemon Center. When he got out of the Pokemon Center, he turned to Hiromi. “Where to next?”
Hiromi got out her map, and began to study it. “Well, the closest town from here is Cerulean.” she said, not looking up from the map. “But to get there we would have to make our way through Mt. Moon.”
“Mt. Moon, what direction is that?” asked Danny.
“East, on the other side of Route 3. But according to what someone in the Pokemon Center said, Route 3 is full of trainers going the same way as us.” she said, looked up from the map.
“Good, the more the merrier.” Danny confidently stated, making his way towards Route 3.
Hiromi rolled her eyes before following Danny, as they headed towards the city gates. When Danny and Hiromi made it to their destination, there was a mass of trainers gathered around in a ring, watching what sounded like a fight.
“Hey, what's going on over there?” Danny curiously asked, wandering over towards the gathering of people.
Danny and Hiromi pushed there way through the large crowd, to find a competition of two trainers battling with their Pokemon. On one side, there was a Pokemon resembling that of a rhinoceros. It was a lavender color, with needles and horns growing out of the back of its rough hide. It had dark purple spots scattered randomly around its body, with a razor sharp horn sticking up from out of its forehead.
On the other side of the gathering opposing this purple Pokemon was a Pokemon that slightly resembled a ferret, though it had flame shooting out of its head and lower back. It was coated in vanilla colored fur on its underbelly and paws, with a blue streak going down its back, starting at its eyes.
“Quilava, Flamethrower!” a boy from inside the ring of people ordered. The blue and white ferret Pokemon, Quilava, began to inhale deeply, then exerting a radiant stream of flame towards its adversary.
“Nidorino, use Water Pulse!” another boy from inside the ring commanded. The Nidorino large ears perked up, as it opened its mouth, absorbing water particles from the air. In no time at all, Nidorino had accumulated enough particles to be holding a compacted sphere of water in its mouth. The Nidorino shot the Water Pulse straight into the Flamethrower, cutting through it like a knife.
“Amazing, a Nidorino with Water Pulse.” Hiromi commented, watching the battle between the two Pokemon rage on.
The Water Pulse cut through the entire Flamethrower attack, and burst straight into Quilava. Quilava was sent flying back, taking a lot of damage from the water type attack. The flames on its back went out in an instant as Quilava lay limply on the ground beside its trainer.
“Looks like Quilava won’t be getting up anytime soon, I win.” Nidorino’s trainer remarked, combing his hand through his long red hair. He wore an olive green colored jacket, with a solid red line dashing through the middle. His jacket had red cuffs, matching the color of his hair. He wore blue jeans, tucked into his black boots.
“Quilava, return.” The other trainer called, recalling his Quilava back into its pokeball then quickly rushing off towards the direction of Pewter City.
“Is there no-one here who can challenge me and my Nidorino?” The trainer called out, looking around into the crowd.
“I can!” Danny shouted, pushing his way through the crowd until he was standing inside the ring of spectators.
“Hmph, fine. Nidorino, you’re up.” The trainer said, telling his Nidorino to step back into the field.
“Exeggcute lets go!” Danny called, throwing the pokeball into the field.
All six of the Exeggcute materialized onto the field, staring out at the Nidorino. The Exeggcute turned around to look at Danny, and yelled angrily out at him.
“What?” Danny asked, puzzled at Exeggcute’s sudden reaction to him. “It’s a battle, you guys are going to kick that Nidorino’s ***, like you did with Onix.”
“Egg-execute!” The Exeggcute snorted, turning back around to face the Nidorino.
“I’ll make the first move. Nidorino, Fury Attack and hit all six Exeggcute.” The opposing trainer said in an apathetic voice.
Nidorino charged forwards towards Exeggcute, his eyes full of hatred for Exeggcute.
“Exeggcute, separate!” Ordered Danny.
The six Exeggcute separated, just in time to dodge Nidorino’s Fury Attack. Nidorino violently turned around, charging for one of the Exeggcute without an order from its trainer. Nidorino rammed its horn straight into one of the eggs, sending it flying into one of the other Exeggcute.
“Crap, I need to concentrate.” Danny said to himself, thinking of a plan to use against Nidorino. “That’s it! Exeggcute, Hypnosis!”
The remaining Exeggcute’s eyes began to glow a bright yellow, attempting to put the opposing Nidorino to sleep.
“Nidorino, Poison Sting the closest Exeggcute, then move out to the rest.” Nidorino’s trainer called out.
Nidorino charged once again towards one of the Exeggcute, its razor sharp horn atop its head-pointing straight out. Nidorino smashed into one of the Exeggcute, immobilizing a total of three out of the six Pokemon. Nidorino then turned and faced another Exeggcute. Exeggcute’s made eye contact with the Nidorino, putting it to sleep due to the Hypnosis attack.
“Alright Exeggcute, good job!” Danny cheered, as the crowed roared with excitement at the battle.
“Nidorino, wake up!” The trainer yelled to his Pokemon, frustrated that his Pokemon fell for such a common attack.
Exeggcute can’t defeat that Nidorino before it gets up,Danny thought to himself. Since Nidorino’s a poison type, I’ll need something like a ground, or psychic attack. Wait, psychic attack, that’s it!
“Exeggcute, I have a plan,” Danny called out to his egg Pokemon. “You need to focus your Hypnosis into a Confusion attack, so that instead of just putting Pokemon to sleep, you can control their movements!”
Exeggcute concentrated hard on the sleeping rhino Pokemon, trying to use the Confusion attack. Exeggcute’s eyes began to change from the bright golden color into a bright aquamarine shade of blue. As the three Exeggcute’s eyes began to glow brighter, Nidorino’s body began to glow as well.
“Nidorino! Get up!” The trainer called, anger present in his voice.
When Nidorino’s body was entirely encased in the blue light, the Exeggcute sent it flying clear across the flied. Nidorino landed into the ground, skidding for another few feet, accumulating dirt and soil around its head.
“Alright Exeggcute, you learned Confusion!” Danny shouted, jumping up and down at Exeggcute’s victory. “Looks like I won. Great match.”
“Hmph, Nidorino return.” He said, recalling his Nidorino back into its pokeball, ignoring Danny. He turned and walked away in the direction of Mt. Moon.
“Alright! Good job Exeggcute!” Danny yelled, running towards his Exeggcute. He pulled out a spray bottle from inside his book bag, and sprayed the three injured Exeggcute. “Anyone else want to battle?”
“I will.” Came a voice from inside the crowd. The boy who stepped forward had long brown straight hair. He wore a black t-shirt underneath a lime green colored vest, along with a pair of dark blue jeans.
“Fine with me.” Danny said confidently. “I’ll be sticking with Exeggcute.”
“Ok, Vulpix lets go!” He said, tossing a red and white pokeball into the field. The Pokemon that appeared on the field was a beautiful crimson colored fox, with six pumpkin colored curly tails. It had a tuff of hair growing out of its small head, the same color as its tails. It had dull brown eyes, with pure white fur covering its stomach.
“Hmm, Vulpix huh? On second thought, Exeggcute return!” Danny called, recalling his six eggs back into their pokeball, and tossing his green shaded ball. “Aron lets go!”
Aron was released from ball, standing face to face with Vulpix. The two small Pokemon stood staring each other down for a minute or two before either made a move.
“Vulpix, Flamethrower!” Its trainer commanded, breaking the silence between the two Pokemon.
Vulpix inhaled air, and then exhaled a stream of bright red and orange flame; similar to that of Quilava’s in one of the previous battles.
“Dig!” Danny commanded, just seconds before the flame scorched Aron.
“Aroo!” The tiny steel Pokemon exclaimed, before diving into the ground beneath it with its claws. Right before the Flamethrower attack made contact with Aron, it disappeared, leaving nothing but a deep hole where it just stood.
“Not bad, but not good enough.” The other trainer said, smiling to himself. “Vulpix, Fire Spin into the hole.”
Vulpix quickly darted over towards the hole Aron had just made, and inhaled as if it were going to use Flamethrower. Instead of a single straight burst of flame shooting out of its mouth when it exhaled, a thin vortex of flame, similar to that of Flamethrower, shot out darting down the hole.
“Aron! Mud Slap!” Danny called out, in hopes Aron could hear him.
After a minute underground, Aron reappeared underneath Vulpix, ramming its ironclad head into the soft stomach of Vulpix.
Thank God, Danny thought to himself. Why is it that every time we use Dig, something happens that forces us to use Mud Slap?
“Vulpix!” The trainer yelled, fearing for his small Pokemon’s health.
“Aron,” Danny called out. “Show us Metal Claw!”
Aron’s fore claw began shining bright in the afternoon sun, as it readied its Metal Claw. When Vulpix finally reached its maximum height after being thrown up into the air and began to descend, Aron jumped up, colliding its claw down onto the jaw of the fox Pokemon. Vulpix was sent flying down toward the ground with greater velocity. When Vulpix finally met with the ground, it bounced up a little, before finally staying down.
“Dammit, Vulpix return.” Its trainer called, holding out its pokeball and facing it in the direction of Vulpix.
“Hey, nice battle.” Danny congratulated as he recalled Aron. He then began walking over towards the other trainer. “You took defeat a lot better than the guy with the Nidorino.”
“Thanks, those were some pretty nice moves you had back there too.” He responded, placing Vulpix’s pokeball into his book bag. “My name’s Anthony, what's yours?”
“Danny, nice to meet you.” Danny said, stretching out his hand.
Anthony grasped Danny’s hand in his, and the two trainers shook hands.
“So where you headed to?” Danny asked.
“Pewter City, I need to get my first gym badge.” Anthony responded.
“Oh really, I just came from there. Be careful against Brock, he’s good.” Warned Danny.
“Thanks, I’ll remember that.”
“Danny, we need to get going if we want to make it to Cerulean City by nightfall.” Hiromi interjected, walking over to the two boys.
“Oh yea, I guess you’re right.” Danny agreed, putting Aron’s pokeball back in its slot in his black belt. “Well hopefully we’ll see each other soon, Anthony, good luck.”
Danny and Hiromi then walked off, leaving the crowd of spectators behind them, heading towards Mt. Moon.
Last edited:
The Terror of Death
Active Member
Looks pretty good Beast is Holy, i like the 6th chapter, that anthony character seems familiar lol. but i only saw one grammer mistake
its suppose to say something like Anthony said. after I'll remember that, and also the description of nidirinos trainer seemed kinda cramped together but other than that looks good, cant wait to see more chapters.
its suppose to say something like Anthony said. after I'll remember that, and also the description of nidirinos trainer seemed kinda cramped together but other than that looks good, cant wait to see more chapters.
Last edited:
MerlockVonBaron
Well-Known Member
The fic is really good. Nice characters and dialogue.
lordzangoose
walk like anEgyptian
No it doesn't, since danny just talked and hiromi wasn't introduced into the conversation, then it must be anthony talking.
the chapter was very good, length as you stated was slightly lacking, no grammar mistakes, as terror stated, the nidorino kid's description was a little bit hurried, I'm going to make a guess that he will make a vengeful return in the story
P.S: I noticed that you changed the avatar to fit a possible future of the story
Last edited:
Beast is Holy
Well-Known Member
Yea, as lordzangoose said, since its only me and anthony talking, i didnt need to put anthony replied/said/whatever. And Nidorinos trainer description wasnt cramped/hurried for no reason. Youll understand shortly
MerlockVonBaron - Glad you like it ^__^
lordzangoose - Yea, it was kind of hard just to write about Rt. 3, because I didnt want to start on Mt. Moon yet. Glad you like it
lordzangoose
walk like anEgyptian
I think i know why the description was cramped
Spoiler
It's Danny's rival
Spoiler
It's Danny's rival
Last edited:
Beast is Holy
Well-Known Member
Rival. No.
Character for not-so-distant future. Yup
Good guess though.
been revealed in an earlier chapter 
mrbrightside69
*The Water Warrior*
I just have to say I really enjoyed your fic, I read the first six chapters and I was really pulled into the story. I'm anxiously awaiting the next chapter. Oh and i love the way you portray your Exeggcute. You have a new fan
Divinity_123
shove 'er in! ;O
Beast is Holy
Well-Known Member
Because when I try to sleep at night but cant, I talk to myself........
Will fix
k
Nope, he wasnt late ^__^
My dads old, and most of the family is based on mine.
k
Cereal = g0dly!
Well, Poochyena is a doggy
But its a doggy ;261;
Yup ^__^
Hoenn Warrior
All Terrain Trainer
I liked the battles between Danny and the Anthony. It was pretty cool how Exeggcute learned Confusion in the middle of the battle to win it all. The description in the battles werent bad at all, but I notice that Hiromi didnt go for her Gym Badge at Pewter City. What do you have in mind for her though? All in all a good chapter. All I can say is try and make the chapters a bit longer. And Ill be PM my characters to you.