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Journey Across a New Land

The Terror of Death

Active Member
looks pretty good, saw one grammer error

“Two-on-two, no time limits. You may substitute at any moment, I can’t.”

limits just supposed to be limit, nothing big. I liked this chapter a lot, cool how execute learned hidden power(fire) in the battle against chad. Tho how come magnamite and aron didnt have a rematch? anyways kinda a plot twister that Hiromi got the cascade badge and danny didnt. anyways good luck with your other chapters
 

Divinity_123

shove 'er in! ;O
Gawd, that was not your best chapter at all. IMHO, you and TToD have sort of the same plots. Are you two best friends or something. It's good that Danny lost so he won't have an egotistical personality. I agree with LZ, Hiromi owned Misty.

ZOMG, TToD and BiH both your fics include the main characters loosing to Misty. . . Kinda Oddish Odd if you ask me?

Anyways, good luck.
 

Beast is Holy

Well-Known Member
lordzangoose - Glad you liked it

The Terror of Death - Will fix that mistake, and I dont know why Aron and Magnemite didnt fight, just felt like a 1-on-1 battle again

Divinity_123 - Yea, TToD and me have same Plot for now, but dont worry, it doesnt stay the same for much longer.
 

Boo

PMD 2 FTW
I liked when he beat Nuzleaf with fire. Danny and Hiromi will probably take turns getting badges. Danny needs a water or flying pokemon. I thought Exegucute was evolving when it glowed red. I think Aron should still evolve.
 

lordzangoose

walk like anEgyptian
Gawd, that was not your best chapter at all. IMHO, you and TToD have sort of the same plots. Are you two best friends or something. It's good that Danny lost so he won't have an egotistical personality. I agree with LZ, Hiromi owned Misty.

ZOMG, TToD and BiH both your fics include the main characters loosing to Misty. . . Kinda Oddish Odd if you ask me?

Anyways, good luck.


But, Beast's fic came first, remember that. Not trying to insult you tToD
 

The Terror of Death

Active Member
lol its ok lordzangoose, beast is the one who convinced to me to start writing a fan fic and gave me some ideas. and i had to lose to misty when i did b/c i cant lose to surge if i have a ground type and losing to erika and all that is too far into the fic, i dont want anthony to seem invincible so thats why i chose to lose to misty. its just a coincidence that both in beasts and mine the main character loses to misty.
 

Beast is Holy

Well-Known Member
Danny needs a water or flying pokemon.

You'll see, youll just have to wait ^__^

I thought Exegucute was evolving when it glowed red. I think Aron should still evolve.

Exeggute wont evolve until i get a Leaf Stone, and Aron might evolve later, again, you have to wait.

Yeah, will Danny go back for his second badge?

Yea, he'll go back eventually. He needs all 8 badges for the Indigo Plateau
 

Divinity_123

shove 'er in! ;O
Meh, I completely disagree with danny moving on without his second badge because well. . .there is no explanation! It's just me! ^___^. Anyways, so I guess Danny has a new travelling partner. . .
 

Beast is Holy

Well-Known Member
Meh, I completely disagree with danny moving on without his second badge because well. . .there is no explanation! It's just me! ^___^.

Well if I just lost to Misty, and have no new Pokemon, shell own me with ease once again.
 

Hoenn Warrior

All Terrain Trainer
Meh, I completely disagree with danny moving on without his second badge because well. . .there is no explanation! It's just me! ^___^. Anyways, so I guess Danny has a new travelling partner. . .

Unlike Divinty_123, I have a reason why I dont like Danny moving on to the next Gym without first getting his Cascade Badge. First of all, Danny could of gotten a load of practice battling on Nugget Bridge and going down the route to Bill's house. To me it doesnt make sense to get to the gym and leave just because you lost a battle. Since you are in the area it would make much more sense to stay and train and go back and battle for the badge, just like Ash did in all of those episodes like when he battled Brawly for the Knuckle Badge. But, this is your story, and im going to asume you are trying to mix things up a bit. I just hope he battles her again after he gets the Thunder Badge in Vermillion City.

Just like i stated in a post a while back, Hiromi seems to be the smarter of the two as of know, and seems to have the stronger team of Pokemon. You have "suped-up" her Lunatone with powerful attacks such as Psychic and Shadow Ball and Ice Beam. And there are no questions that need to be asked, she definitley took Misty down quite quickly with a Rock Type. I wonder how Danny would handle her with his Aron and Exeggcute, both Steel and Grass types respectively. Also, Misty's Pokemon such as Corsola and Seadra seemed to have a huge array of power attacks. I dont really mind seeing Seadra on her team since Misty back in the games and show had a Staryu and Starmie.

Lastly, the battle Danny had with Chad seemed to raise some questions that Danny may have about his skill. It was lucky of him to get Leech Seed to hit Onix, and that Mud Slap deflected Thunder Wave when he battled Chad for the first time. I wouldnt go as far to say that Danny is talentless, but he needs to practice more and brush up on some of his studies in my opinion, OR, get some help from Hiromi.

To wrap this up, Danny seems to have come face to face with an obstacle which is him questioning his own skill. This is still a great story, and I cant wait for the next chapter.
 

Beast is Holy

Well-Known Member
Hoenn Warrior - I can train along Nugget Bridge and on te way to Bill's house, but I would still be left with only Exeggute to fight Misty. Glad you like it

Golizard - Im working on it right now, so it will hopefully be up today or tomorrow
 

Boo

PMD 2 FTW
Why is it called Journey Across a New Land, if Kanto isnt new? Will there be a new region after Kanto?
 
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Beast is Holy

Well-Known Member
Golizard - No reason, I just needed a title when I posted, and that was the first thing that popped into my mind.
 

Beast is Holy

Well-Known Member
Finished the next chapter, enjoy

Chapter Nine:

Danny and Hiromi walked back up towards the bridge where the fight with Chad occurred, heading to Vermillion City.

“Nugget Bridge.” Danny thought aloud, read a wooden sign sitting a few feet away from the beginning of the bridge. “Why call it Nugget Bridge?”

“I think it’s because there’s a handful of trainers on the bridge, and if you beat them all you get a golden nugget. It’s some kind of challenge.” Hiromi said, recalling something she had heard back in Cerulean.

“A golden nugget!?” Danny exclaimed, dumfounded that people actually gave those out for free. “Damn, whoever’s in charge of that must be pretty rich.”

“Yea, wish I had that kind of money.”

Danny and Hiromi continue towards Nugget Bridge, stepping over cross wooden planks connected by rusted nails.

“You there, boy!” a young boy, no taller than the wooden sign, yelled. “If you wish to pass Nugget Bridge, you must defeat me in combat.”

Combat, what the hell does he think this is, war? Danny thought to himself, looking at the stupid little kid in front of him. “Sure kid, don’t cry to hard when I defeat you.”

“Hah, I won’t lose to a guy like you. Weedle, I choose you!” the boy flung his pokeball out in front of him, releasing a tiny worm-like Pokemon. It had fourteen petite red circular feet, with a large circular nose taking up half of its face. On the tip of its tail sat a white stinger, and a horn sitting on its head.

“Weedle, I’m insulted kid. Exeggcute, Hidden Power!” Danny tossed Exeggcute’s pokeball out, releasing the six egg Pokemon. The moment the Pokemon landed, they shot off the Hidden Power, the crimson fiery beam shot straight into Weedle, fainting it in no time at all.

“No, my super Weedle!” the kid cried, running over to his Pokemon. “You’re mean mister, I hope you scrape your knee!”

“Exeggcute, do me a favor. Sleep Powder that little brat so he shuts up.” Danny said, irritated at the kids nasally voice.

“Exeggcute-egg.” Exeggcute responded, shooting the attack in the kids face, putting him to sleep in no time at all.

“Danny, did you have to attack the kid, he can’t be any older than seven.” sighed Hiromi.

“I didn’t have to, but it was fun, gave me a sense of accomplishment.” Danny sarcastically said, continuing across the large bridge.

Hiromi sighed under her breath at Danny’s immaturity, and followed him. After a few minutes of walking, they came across another person. This time though, it was an older woman, standing in the middle of the bridge.

“Are you a challenger for the Nugget Bridge Challenge?” she curiously asked the two travelers.

“Yea, I am.” Danny answered, stepping forward.

“Ok, one-on-one, lets go.” she yelled, tossing her pokeball in front of her.

Emerging from the pokeball was a Pokemon that appeared to be a bending, bipedal creature vaguely in the shape of a tree trunk. It had a hook-shaped protuberance on its head, tiny feet, and a very simple face. It had a pair of three-fingered hands, with green spheres resembling leaves on a tree for fingers.

“Sudowoodo?” Danny asked aloud, looking at the tree Pokemon. “Let’s see, its rock typing makes it weak to Exeggcute.” Danny threw Exeggcute’s pokeball onto the bridge, releasing Exeggcute to fight. “Exeggcute, Leech Seed right away!”

Exeggcute shot out a tiny seed, attaching itself to Sudowoodo, draining its energy at a rapid pace.

“Sudowoodo, Mimic.” the lady commanded in response to Leech Seed.

Sudowoodo thrust its arm out, facing Exeggcute. Sudowoodo then shot out a seed of its own, attaching to Exeggcute.

“Mimic, Leech Seed, damn I’m so confused!” Danny yelled, not knowing what just happened.

“Mimic allows Sudowoodo to, well, mimic the attack you just used, in this case Leech Seed.” Hiromi explained while watching the battle.

“Hahaha, now that both Exeggcute and Sudowoodo are seeded, they’re both going to continue losing and regaining energy. Looks like this battle will go on forever.” the lady laughed with enthusiasm.

“Umm, no.” Danny contradicted, staring blankly at the lady. “Sudowoodo is still a rock type, and Exeggcute is still a grass type. Leech Seed will do much more damage to Sudowoodo than it will to Exeggcute.”

“Really?” the lady yelled, pulling her hair. “Sudowoodo no!”

“Idiot…” Danny garbled under his breath. “Exeggcute Barrage.”

Exeggcute began glowing, as it charged up its Barrage attack. After a brief moment, Exeggcute began to pelt Sudowoodo by shooting off fairly small spherical projectiles. Sudowoodo was overcome by mass of orbs pelting it, forcing it to be recalled by the lady.

“I am only number two out of five, you still have three more of us to defeat.” the lady said, running off in the opposite direction.

“What the hell kind of challenge is this?” Danny questioned, annoyed at the people he had battled. “First some little brat who had no idea how to battle, and then that lady.”

“Yea, it doesn’t really make much sense to me either.” Hiromi said, just as puzzled as Danny.

“Oh well, all we can do is hope that the next person actually has an idea of how to fight.” Danny said, walking back across the bridge.

“You there,” a young man from further up the bridge yelled.

“Are you a challenger for the Nugget Bridge Challenge?” a woman around the same age asked.

“Yea, who are you guys?” Danny asked, looking at the two.

“I’m Zander!” the boy yelled, reaching for a pokeball in his pocket.

“And I’m Sakura!” the girl yelled, pulling out a pokeball as well. “We are trainers number three and four for the Nugget Bridge Challenge.”

“We battle using a double battle, so choose two Pokemon!” Zander yelled, enlarging his pokeball.

“Hiromi, want to help out in this battle?” Danny asked, turning to her.

“Sure, I think Butterfree could use some practice battling.” she said, releasing Butterfree for battle.

“Aron, you’re up.” Danny yelled, throwing Aron’s green pokeball in front of him.

“Mareep, let’s go!” Sakura yelled, releasing a sheep like Pokemon, with a bright yellow fleece and dark blue skin. It had two cones for ears, both blue and gold, and an elongated tail, similar to its ears, with a yellow ball at the tip.

“Geodude!” Zander yelled, releasing his Geodude out.

“Aron, Mud Slap Mareep.” Danny commanded, launching his fist forward in front of him.

“Butterfree, follow Aron and use Psybeam on Geodude.” Hiromi ordered.

Aron charged towards Mareep, with Butterfree following above his head.

“Geodude, Rollout on Aron to stop him.” yelled Zander with ebullience.

“Mareep, Thundershock on Butterfree.”

Geodude tightened itself into a compact ball, and began rolling in place, while Mareep jumped over it and ran towards Butterfree. When Mareep was far enough away, Geodude began to spin towards Aron, while Mareep’s fleece began to spark.

“Not to impressive, right Hiromi?” Danny scoffed. “Aron, when Geodude gets close enough, use Metal Claw.”

“Butterfree, Whirlwind!”

Aron stopped where he stood, while its claw began to shine. Butterfree in turn violently flapped its wings, sending a fierce gust of wind in the direction of the other three Pokemon. Geodude and Aron remained unmoved by the Whirlwind, due to their heavy compositions unlike Mareep, who was sent flying back, hitting its head against the planks on the bridge, rendering it unconscious.

“Mareep, no!” Sakura yelled, unable to help her tiny sheep Pokemon.

Geodude continued streaming towards Aron, who began to charge Geodude as well. Aron propelled its metallic claw into the rotating Geodude, sending it flying back just like Mareep.

“Eh, Geodude.” Zander spat, recalling his Geodude. “Well, you two won, continue onwards to obstacle number five.”

“Nice battle,” Hiromi said as she passed the two trainers, continuing up the bridge.

“I’m getting sick of these battles.” Danny said with detestation in his voice. “How am I supposed to get helpful training fighting people like those?”

“Well, maybe you’ll think our battle will be more of a challenge then!” shouted a voice from up the bridge again.

“You the final person for the challenge?” Danny asked, walking up to the person.

“Yea, and unlike the other four, I actually think I might challenge you.” he said pulling out a pokeball from his pocket.

“I hope so. One-on-one?” Danny dryly asked, pulling out Exeggcute’s pokeball.

“Yea. Pidgeotto, come out.” he said, throwing his pokeball into the air. The large pigeon flew up to the sky, spreading its large wings.

“Pidgeotto, I remember seeing a handful of those back in the valley.” Danny said, throwing Exeggcute’s ball in front of him. “I’ll make the first move, Barrage!”

“Gust, send the Barrage flying away.” the boy dictated.

Pidgeotto frenziedly flapped its large beige wings, sending a zephyr in the direction of the incoming projectiles, deflecting them in various directions. The berserk gale headed toward Exeggcute, sucking him into the vortex of wind.

“Exeggcute!” Danny yelled, knowing there was nothing he could do until the destructive gust settled.

“Pidgeotto, go straight from Gust to Quick Attack!”

Pidgeotto stormed towards Exeggcute, who was still trapped in the Gust attack. Pidgeotto collided into the spinning Exeggcute’s, sending them flying straight onto the wooden planks of the sturdy bridge.

“Exeggcute, Confusion on the planks to form a shield!” Danny fervently yelled.

Exeggcute’s eyes began to glow, as shards of wood and rope surrounded Exeggcute, forming a dome-like shield.

“Hmm, not bad. Pidgeotto Steel Wing to break through the wood.” the boy articulated in a calm tone.

Pidgeotto’s wings began to shimmer rusted color, as Pidgeotto charged in the direction of the wooden shield guarding Exeggcute.

“Exeggcute, attack with anything you have left!” Danny screamed to his Pokemon, not knowing what to do.

Pidgeotto destroyed the wooden shield, revealing Exeggcute spraying a Stun Spore attack in the direction Pidgeotto came from. Pidgeotto’s wings returned back to its tan coloring, as it attempted to sustain airborne.

“Nice move Exeggcute, now finish it off with Barrage.”

Exeggcute shot off the glimmering projectiles at the staggering Pidgeotto, making it unable to battle.

“Pidgeotto, return.” the boy said, recalling Pidgeotto in a blaze of light back into its pokeball. “You win, proceed a little further up the bridge, and you’ll come across the man who will give you your prize.”

“Wow, what a waste of time.” Danny said, walking past the fifth trainer. “After I get my nugget I’m going straight to Vermillion.”

“I have to admit, for a challenge where they give out an expensive nugget, that didn’t seem very challenging.” Hiromi said, befuddled.

“Oh well, free gold for me.” Danny said, a huge smile across his face.

“So, you beat the Nugget Bridge Challenge, eh?” a man at the end of the bridge said, walking up to Danny and Hiromi.

“Yea, but you might want to get stronger people for that, they were a little weak.” Danny dryly said.

“Hahaha, I like your attitude kid, here.” he said, tossing a rather large chunk of gold at Danny.

“Golden Nugget…” Danny said, staring at the bar of gold in his hands.

“Now, there is one special gift for people of your caliber.” the man said, resting his hand on Danny’s shoulder. “You are hereby invited to join Team Rocket.”

Danny stared at the man, not knowing what to say. “Team Rocket!” he spat in disgust, jerking his shoulder away.

“Why would he join Team Rocket?” Hiromi interjected.

“So I can unfortunately take that as a no?” he asked, disappointed.

“Of course!” Danny yelled, reaching for Aron’s pokeball.

“He said no, get the girl.” the Team Rocket member said into a microphone attached to his shirt.

“What!?” Danny said, running in front of Hiromi, releasing Aron. “Headbutt that Team Rocket guy with everything you have Aron!”

“To slow, Arbok Glare.” he yelled out, as a giant purple king cobra emerged from underneath the bridge.

The sinister snake looked straight into Aron’s eyes, its forked tongue slithering outside its mouth. Aron fell to the ground in a spasm, paralyzed.

“****, this isn’t good.” Danny said, looking up at a massive black helicopter above head.

“Lunatone, Butterfree, Psychic!” Hiromi yelled, releasing her two Pokemon.

“Substitute.” The rocket ordered insensibly.

Hiromi’s Pokemon flew towards Arbok, their eyes shimmering brightly. The two Pokemon shot off the psychic beam at Arbok, causing it to be sent flying off the side of the bridge.

“Haze,”

Arbok flew out from behind a tree off the bridge, spewing a cloud of toxins into the eyes of Butterfree and Lunatone.

“What, that’s impossible, I sent it flying off the bridge!” Hiromi yelled, covering her eyes and mouth.

“Substitute, what you sent flying off the bridge was the shed skin of Arbok.” He explained, walking off the bridge.

“Hiromi, where are you!?” Danny yelled, reaching blindly out in front of him.

“Got the girl, lets go.” a voice yelled from inside the haze, grabbing Hiromi.

“Arbok,” the rocket yelled from across the bridge. “Bite to cut the ropes.”

Arbok lunged for the ropes holding the bridge up, cutting deeply into them with its razor sharp fangs. The ropes broke, causing the bridge fall into the abyss below.

*******************

Danny groggily opened his eyes, looking around where he was.

“Aro-Aron.”

“Aron, what's up?” Danny said, sitting up, rubbing his head. “Ouch.”

Danny got up, looking around to see where he was. All he saw was a leather-coated chair in the corner of a small room, and a small bed underneath him.

“Where am I?” he asked himself aloud, confused. Of course! How could I forget!? I beat the Nugget Bridge Challenge, and Team Rocket kidnapped Hiromi.

Danny sat back onto the bed, thinking about how useless he was in protecting Hiromi. “I-I couldn’t save her. And now because of me, she’s being held captive by Team Rocket.” He said, violently shaking with rage.

“Awake I see. That’s good.” A voice from outside the tiny room said. A hidden door opened, and revealed a tall man, a police officer.

“Who are you?” Danny asked, staring at the man in the blue uniform in front of him.

“Officer Dick, we had reports of explosions on Nugget Bridge, and I went to investigate. When I got there, I found you unconscious on the ground, with this Aron here nuzzling against you.” He explained, sitting in the chair opposite Danny. “Care to explain what happened?”

“Even if I did, what good will it do? If I couldn’t stop Team Rocket, what makes you think you can?” Danny coldly asked, laying down on the bed.

“The fact that I’m a trained officer, and you’re just a kid.”

“I was traveling along Nugget Bridge, taking that challenge, with my friend Hiromi. Made it to the end, the guy at the end offered me a position at Team Rocket, I refused, he kidnapped Hiromi and tried to kill me.” Danny explained, staring blankly at the smooth white ceiling.

“I see.” The officer said, clearly not understanding how Danny felt. “Leave it to us, we’ll find your friend.”

My *** you’ll find her, Team Rocket isn’t an organization that you’ll find so easily. Danny thought to himself, staring at the officer next to him.

“Silent huh, that’s fine with me. You’re free to go.” Officer Dick said, opening the door. “But kid, whatever you do, don’t chase after Team Rocket yourself. You’ll be hurt, or worse, if you do.”

“Yea, yea. Whatever you say Dick.” Danny said, walking past him through the door. When Danny got out of the door, he faced an average sized police station, with a lot of people just sitting there doing paper work.

“There’s nothing left to do here Aron. We’re going to Vermillion.” Danny said, upset, walking out of the station and heading south.
 

Boo

PMD 2 FTW
I thought it was very good. Funny when you put the kid to sleep. Sad when Hiromi was taken away. I cant wait for the next one! I think I might of said this before, but I like how different region pokemon are in Kanto. Again, very good.
 

lordzangoose

walk like anEgyptian
thumbs up, great chapter.
Hiromi getting taken away by Team Rocket was an unexpected plot twist. Although if he was to track down Team rocket, lie to them by saying that he wants to join, infiltrate their organization, and save Hiromi, that would just own.

P.S: you used "to" instead of "too" a few times.
 
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