kingdom hearts fic

[Sono Nanatsu Heika]

im writing a kingdom hearts fic and ive never played the game for more than 10 minutes so itll be hard, but ill give u a preview and tell me if i should continue

Chapter 1

Keys are the foundation of life. Opening and closing mysteries and secrets. Closing doors of failure and opening windows of achievement. Keys can give someone an advantage or just weigh them down. Keys can be used to aid man-kind or shroud the world in darkness. A man named Amner Silverwing used keys to change the world. He enlarged them and made the ends sharper. He gave them magical properties and placed a different one in every realm. His Heartless, Mearth Fausten had done the opposite of what Amner did. He gave the enlarged keys dark powers and placed them in the different realms. Amner helped the world while Mearth tried to destroy it. Fifteen years ago, a young boy named Sora had collected over forty different keys called KeyBlades. Each one representing the realm it came from. He traveled through many places alongside his friends: Goofy, Donald, and King Mickey, the ruler of Disney Castle. His other friends, Kairi, Riku, and Roxas, his nobody, had stood beside him in thick or thin, always making sure he did the right thing.

basically soras keyblades shatter due to a mystrious force and the only way to reach the keymaster and get 15 new keyblades, he must use the heartless keys that were scattered all over the realms, sooooooo i want to know if i should continue, and i also want some ideas cause its hard writing this

 

[The Burnt Shadow]

Hmm sounds both confusing and interesting. So basically this is a story about Sora trying to get 15 keyblades and the keymaster by using heartless keyblades? Well that's something interesting. Okay I'm not sure about the Rikku part. I haven't played KH2 or any other of the games (except the first) but I recall Rikku getting trapped with the heartless for I don't how long in the end of the game. I'm also suggesting you put a few new worlds that weren't introduced like the city of the Incredibles, Hawai of Lilo and Stitch, Middleton of Kim Possible and etc. This sounds a bit interesting though...

 

[Yami Ryu]

Wait, let me get this straight. You only played the game for ten minutes in total? That's it? That's all? Ok, seriously, if you are going to make a fanstory out of something, it's usually wise to play the game, read the book, or watch the movie several times. And then some more, so you can safely be assured that you will keep the characters IC. You haven't left anything out, or etc.

And all your story sounds like, is a rip off of KH/KH2 with the [SPOIL]Ansem the Wise and Xenmas[/SPOIL] fiasco. Spoiled incase no one has beaten KH2.

And [SPOIL]In Kingdom Hearts 2, Roxas 'disappeares' and so doesn't the other nobody that was Kairi's.[/SPOIL] Your fanfic is going to suffer because you didn't even attempt to gain knowledge about events! And your character would be a nobody, if he has a Heartless, so why would he be helping people, when it's shown that Nobody's have no hearts? And I think Roxas, was one of only a handful of exceptions.

And why was he a nobody/had a heartless in the first place? How did the heartless keys come to be? Why would there be a need for Sora to do anything he did in the first place if these heartless keys, from the sounds of it, could undo what he's done, and well it just doesn't add up. You're plot sounds like it has too many plot holes and etc than you can shake a stick at.