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Kitsune

This Place is Death.
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Avegaille

Avegaille

ジャッジメントですの!
Hmm, well, let's see... seems like a good comic for a start, though I think this is some thing which concerns me and some other comic spriters out there... Never use FR/LG Sprites on a Ruby/Sapphire area... ._.

Hope to see more episodes after this...
 
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Kitsune

This Place is Death.
uHH...he, he. I couldn't find the right Overworld Sprites so I disregarded that...Sorry ^_^; Ep. 2 about to go up, with the same sprite mistake, of course.
 
Avegaille

Avegaille

ジャッジメントですの!
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Chloemew4ever

Eh.
Seems fairly OK so far, but the thing that bugs me is the positioning of the speech bubbles. You should try to make the bubble that you want people to read first above the one that you want them to read second, and so forth. I hope that made sense. x3
 
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Kitsune

This Place is Death.
Yeah, it made sense, and thanks. ^_^ I'll be sure to integrate that in. I'm not all too experienced with Sprite Comics, so all critisisim will probably be used.
 
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Sahaqiel

Angel of the Skies
Hmm, it is an excellent comic for a beginner, but you need to have a set frame size. Also, the dark blue background has been done before, go to A Town called Littleroot: the comic. Sure the plot is ok, but you need to time your text bubbles. The person who is talking first's speech bubble should be at the top, makes it easier to read and understand it. Also hyperlink your comics. (Highlight the title of the comic and click hyperlink, then insert the URL of the comic into the box.) Overall this comic is slightly above average in professional terms, good sprites, backgrounds, plot, but bad frames, and bubble order. It's good but needs improvement.
4-7-1-7-19, (Check your sig, and figure it out)
Sahaqiel
 
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Kitsune

This Place is Death.
Sahaqiel said:
Hmm, it is an excellent comic for a beginner, but you need to have a set frame size. Also, the dark blue background has been done before, go to A Town called Littleroot: the comic. Sure the plot is ok, but you need to time your text bubbles. The person who is talking first's speech bubble should be at the top, makes it easier to read and understand it. Also hyperlink your comics. (Highlight the title of the comic and click hyperlink, then insert the URL of the comic into the box.) Overall this comic is slightly above average in professional terms, good sprites, backgrounds, plot, but bad frames, and bubble order. It's good but needs improvement.
4-7-1-7-19, (Check your sig, and figure it out)
Sahaqiel
Click to expand...

OT: The first word in my head when I saw the numbers was Fibonacci, but that's not it...The numbers I have are from the TV show Lost...Do you know something about them?! Also, Issue 3 should be up tomorrow.
 
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Kitsune

This Place is Death.
I'm gonna start a new comic based on the critisism you gave me, and I'd like to say that A Town Called Littleroot ROCKS! It actually made me laugh, which I don't do too much. Thanks for your advice. ^.^
 
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