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|Larry & Luigi|

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Bagonclaw

Guest
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Looks like you stumbled across my comic. well, as long as you're here, grab a slim jim, sit down, and enjoy.
Oh yeah. Just so you know, L&L are roomates.
I decree this comic PG for the occasianal bloodshed.

If you read the comics, don't be afraid to post. Please!!!
Before you read I would like to post a notice. Don't spam up this thread. Tell what you liked and didn't like. Tell me how to improve. Also don't swear in this thread. We don't want to teach the young'uns new words, now do we?

Intro. Why not?

PART ONE: Beginning
#1: That's gotta hurt... the paycheck.

#2: KABLAM! The start of a plot.

#3: LUIGI YOU IDIOT!

PART TWO: Ollie and Dark Larry! (Out of the house!)
#4: I always wondered...

#5: Hey, look! A purple dude!

#6: Meet the second bad guy!

#7: Apocalypse!



Xtras:

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X-Mas Special


Newest:
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And I checked on Word too!

Credits: Bghq for game backgrounds
theshyguykingdom for game sprites

_BC_
 
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sandragon13

mystic
it's cool, i guess...simply because you used luigi instead of mario
like you said, not bad for a first comic
 
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blueguy

used Metronome!
Wow! Pretty well done, BC... I didn't really understand the joke, but your backgrounds, sprites, and speechbubbles are very nice. The only problems are the color of Luigi's textbox (which makes reading quite difficult) and in some panels the text has been squeezed quite tight into its bubble. Give the words room to breathe! ;) I like the concept of a koopa and Luigi living together. Weird. I expect good stuff, but try to make the jokes easier to... grasp, I guess.
 
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Bagonclaw

Guest
Cool.
Sandragon: Thanx
Blueguy: You'll understand in the next comic.
Okay, i'll stop torchering the words. It was fun while it lasted.
Tommorow, Luigi speechbubbledude, we will meet. And i will recolor you!!!!
 
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Bagonclaw

Guest
Please excuse the double post, but I have a new issue!!!
#1: That's gotta hurt... the paycheck.
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Ouch.

_BC_
 
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Davis the Gamer

Banned
The fact that Larry isn't dead = pure win

I rarely see a comic with the Koopa kids, so have this bronze cookie.

Now, the backround IMO, is poorly made. No shading. Shading is your friend. Or you could use a game backround from www.bghq.com

I love Larry's sprite. But Luigi just don't strike my fansy. He looks less like Luigi and more like that woodcutter from that fariy tale.

Grammar, there are some mistakes. Use MS Word. plz?
The comic itself, is pretty dull. "LOMG U B IN DIS COMIXZ PLZ?"
That's breakin the 4th wall, and unfunny. And pretty boring.

Well, you are trying. Which matters. I have nothin bad to say about the Text boxes, so keep this **** up!

4.5/10
 
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Bagonclaw

Guest
Thankx for the cookie.
How do you shade a background? Is there a tutorial of some sort I should read?
And how do I make a Luigi out of a woodsman?

#2: KABLAM! The start of a plot.
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Man, Larry is fun to torcher.

_BC_
 
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Eric

Guest
Pluses: Scratch sprites. Though they are square and proportioned bad, it's still scratch.
Minus:
The wall is broken and I don't mean the Berlin Wall. Breaking the fourth wall is dispeling the effect you may have had on the reader. And it's terriblely unoriginal, I would stray FAR away from that **** right there.
Let's go with the latest strip. Ehem, oversized head luigi comes in from christmas shopping to show Toaster shaped head Lenny christmas decorations. The decorations explode without leaving a trace of anything and miraculously form back together to make a badly sprited wire snake. The wire snake attacks as Lenny is leaving his couchlike blob.
What I am saying here is that
a) You need to fix up the sprites and furniture
b) Have things make sense, like where explosion marks
 
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Bagonclaw

Guest
Okay. I'll work on a new into.
So, I have a question. Do I make the head smaller or the body bigger?
Toaster head. I'll make Larry's head rounder, leave fragments of boxes lying around, and Re-sprite the couch. Larry will be walking away from the fresh, new couch.
a) I will fix up the sprites and couch blob
b) I will make sense. But what does " The explosion marks " mean?
Thanks for reding!

_BC_

Edit: Should I make Luigi as a megaman edit? Like in my sig.
 
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Eric

Guest
No, it's fine as a scratch, just make it more realistic tp human anatomy. For luigi, add more to the body to match the head. You body needs work.
 
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Bagonclaw

Guest
Oh.
I'll do that then.
And, to keep you guys satisfied, Here's a filler.
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Laugh out Loud.

_BC_

Edit: Oh, and Davis, may I ask what is spelled wrong so I can fix it?
 
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Eric

Guest
Two tone made baby jesus cry, and around his birthday for pete sake!
Never, EVER, use two tone backgrounds. Two tones are backgrounds are backgrounds with one color wall/sky and one color floor/ground. It's a lazy and makes your comic look like horse fecal matter.
There are a whole variety of games out there, I'm sure you could find a background that would fit your need and still look good.
 
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Bagonclaw

Guest
It's just a filler, so don't expect much.
Anyways, I will try to get all the comics revamped by tuesday. The sprites and stuff are ready.
And Davis, (second time I refered to that post) I will look into those backgrounds.

_BC_
 
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Bagonclaw

Guest
Please excuse the DP, but the comics are revamped!!
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It seems i'm running late on the third comic revamp, but there will be PSP effects.

_BC_
 
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Bagonclaw

Guest
Jynxo said:
Comic looks good. How long do you spend on it?
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Oh, I spent a very long time preparing for it, but comics usually take 10-20 mins.
New comic, peoples!
I remade #2, and made a new comic. Better get some jerky.
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New comic #3 LUIGI YOU IDIOT!
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Thanks fer reading!

_BC_

Edit: Oh, and Jynxo,
Tell what you liked and didn't like. Tell me how to improve.
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otherwise that is considered spam. Well, just do that and you're fine! ^_^
 
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Eric

Guest
Your sprites still need work and you didn't do nothing to improve them. You know what you have to do, do it.
 
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Bagonclaw

Guest
I did improve Luigi, as you can see, as for Larry, I rounded his face. If you still think I did nothing, tell me. If so, where can Larry's mouth be rounded better?

_BC_

Edit: If you want, I can post a thing on how Luigi was improved.
 
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■■Cavan♠2■■

Guest
Humor's pretty good, and same with the visuals. Not much I can say on improvement.
 
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Bagonclaw

Guest
Yay! New post! That means I don't have to DP!
Well, people, I come pre-packged with a new comic to spare.
#4: I always wondered...

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*Plays a funeral song*

_BC_
 
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