League of Masters-Edited Version

[BrawlMaster]

League of Masters
Orre
Caleb Hamilton

Part 1; chapter 1 a little piece of darkness

Its one year after Miror B. and the rest of the Cipher gangsters

were incarcerated by Chief Sherles of the Pyrite Town Police Dept.Inside the

Snagem hideout, memories of the Shadow Pokemon still loom as our hero and

heroine, Wes Quitaro and Yuki Kinturi, fight to purify the closed hearts of so

many trainer’s beloved partners and friends. “We have to find Celebi

Wes.”Yuki said. “I know Yuki but, your Grandpa and Grandma can’t find the

Relic Tablet to call him.” Wes said with a tinge of worry in his voice. All of a

sudden, Wes’s Umbreon and Espeon broke out of there Pokeballs in flash of

brilliant light. “Umbreon, Espeon, what’s wrong?” Yuki asked. “Umbre”

Umbreon said as if a Shadow Pokemon was nearby. “Espeon, do you sense it

too?” Wes asked. Then, Yuki started to get the “look” on her face. “Wes?”

she asked. “I know Yuki.” Wes said solemnly. A Pokemon came around a

corner from Celebi’s Relic memorial. “Espeon.Umbreon.You know what

to do.”Wes commanded to his Pokemon. The Pokemon came up the hillside

and charged at the Pokemon and trainers. “RHYHORRRRRNNNNN!”It

roared. “Espeon, Confusion! Umbreon, Secret Power!” Wes

commanded. “Espeon!” A sparkle lit Espeon’s eyes as it used its signature

move “Confusion”. “Umbre.”Umbreon’s “Secret Power turned into “Strength”

because of their location(The Agate Village) The Rhyhorn became confused

and turned around down the hill. “Wes can you throw the damn ball and

catch that thing!”Yuki sweared. “Just wait Umbreon and Espeon haven’t

served their purpose yet. That shadow Pokemon is merely confused I want to

knock it out.” Wes said as if his strategy would work. “All right Espeon,

Umbreon, finish it off with Helping Hand and Swift!” Wes shouted to his

Pokemon. A brilliant light surrounded the two Pokemon as they helped each

other battle a Shadow Rhyhorn. “Swift, now!” Wes

commanded. “ESPEEEOOON! UMBREEEOON!” the two cried as stars circled

around them then attacked the confused Rhyhorn. “Rhy-horn.”It moaned as

it fainted. “All right lets go, Snagball!”Wes said as he threw a snag-ultra ball

to catch the fainted Rhyhorn. The ball opened with glittery light and a red

energy poured from it with a hint of green. It closed, dropped to the ground


engulfed in a Purple and violet aura. It rocked from side to side for a couple

of seconds the red light blinked and the ball stopped rocking to signal that

the Shadow Pokemon had been caught. “Yes! We got it! Great job Espeon

and Umbreon!”Wes said joyfully. When they returned to Yuki’s grandparent’s

house, her grandmother gave them a cloth wrapped around a small object. A

string held it tied tight. “This is the Relic Tablet. With it you can use the Relic

Stone in the Forest to purify Shadow Pokemon wish I had that flute you can

use to call Celebi, but I don’t.”Yuki’s grandmother said. “That’s okay Grammy;

this is just fine, thanks.”Yuki said and kissed her grandmother

goodbye. “Wes, before you go,”Yuki’s grandfather, Eagun, said, “I want to

give you the MasterBall I’ve had for many years. I haven’t had a use for it

since I don’t battle anymore. It’s just me and Pikachu.So takes it.” “Wow.

Thanks a lot, Eagun.”Wes said. “We will be back in a couple of days just call

me on my P*DA.”(Pokemon Digital Assistant) “Oh, and Wes,”Yuki’s

Grandmother called, “Take this too.” She handed him a gold and white

Pokeball. “It came in the mail to Eagun, from the Kanto Region. The note said

that it was the GSBall.It came from a man named Oak.” Belauh said. “I’ve

heard of him from some kid named Ash Ketchum while I was in the Hoen

League last year.” Wes said. “Ash said that he was the professor of Pokemon

for the Kanto Region.” “Well, Professor Oak said that this ball can’t be open

but he has reason to believe that Eagun knows how. The strangest thing is

that the note was dated May 4, 1939.”Belauh said. “How the hell did that

happen?” Wes asked. “We have no idea. Back then Eagun and I were children

and Celebi were very active traveling through time. lot of kids went missing

from days to years on end.”Belauh explained. “I have reason to believe that

the Celebi had befriended a lot of the kids that went missing, therefore

resulting in the ‘Kidnapping’.” “In the years to come, many trainers tried to rid

the Agate Village of the Celebi great many of them failed to even catch them

more or less engage in a battle.”Eagun explained. “Eagun is right,”Belauh

said. “Although some of the trainers and collectors succeeded to capture

their prizes, the ones that did get away opened time portals and escaped to

different time periods.” “Grandma, if the Celebi left then why is there one in

the forest?”Yuki asked. “Well, one day a warp opened up right in the middle

of town. Those who were there witnessed a Celebi re-enter the world. Later

that month the town’s people built a memorial to commemorate that glorious

day and to provide a safe haven for the one Celebi who returned.”Eagun

said. “So, why does Professor Oak think that Eagun knows how to open this

GSBall?” Wes asked. “I used to be the Guardian of the Relic Forest and all of

its contents. People used to come and try to steal Celebi would have to

chase them off with Pikachu.”Eagun said. “Pika, pikachu!”Pikachu squealed

leaping into its trainer’s arms. “A Shadow Pokemon was down in the forest

today, Gramppy.”Yuki said. “Oh dear. I hope it didn’t hurt anyone.”Belauh

said. “Wes caught it!”Yuki said. “Wes, I want to thank you for taking care of

our little Yuki.”Eagun said. “That Master Ball is like a token of being

courageous and being well on your way to being a master of Pokemon.”

Eagun explained. “Don’t worry Eagun and Belauh, Yuki is in good hands. I’ve

already become the master of the Hoen region and I’m well on the way to the

next region.” Wes said. “Wes don’t get big headed.”Yuki said. “Yeah, I guess

your right. Let’s go.” Wes said sulkily. Wes and Yuki then traveled to their

next destination which was the Relic Stone in the forest. “Yuki, when we get

here I want you to put the Ryhorn in place to be purified.” Wes said. “Wes,

before I can do anything I think you should look and see who’s decided to

join us.”Yuki said with a frightened voice. “Oh, great some scum from the

Hoen region. I’ll take care of them.” Wes said dauntlessly. What he didn’t

know was that these people weren’t Team Magma or Team Aqua. They were

a group of people wearing all black jumpsuits and on the front of them were a

red letter that stood alone, an “R”.It was Giovanni and some of his Team

Rocket goons. “Well, well, well, look at what the Persian dragged in.” Wes

said heroically. “Damn kids always meddling were they have no business one

of the Rockets said. Yuki looked at all of them, and walked over to two of

them; a male with blue hair and green eyes and a female with long, red hair

and green eyes as well. Their jumpsuits were different. Their boots and belts

were black but, their jumpsuits were white except for that red “R”on the

front. “All right you twos, listen up.” One of them said but, why would one

person out of the two refer to the other as “you twos”? There was obviously

someone else there. “Listen, Meowth,”the male said, “The boss wants us to

stay out of the way and I don’t want him to fire us!” “James is right you

oversized hairball!” the female said. “Well you twos are a couple of idiots

anyway.” The meowth said. How can a meowth be talking? Yuki thought to

herself. “Yuki! Get over here!” Wes called. “Sounds like we have company.”

James said. “Hey do you think it’s the twerp?” the female asked. “No, Jesse, I

don’t think so,” James responded. “Let’s find out who it is, den!”The Meowth

shouted. Over at the Relic Stone, things were heating up between Giovanni

and Wes. “You just can’t sneak in here and try to take over this village!” Wes

shouted. “Well, I’ve heard you had a knack for sticking your nose into things

it has no business.” Giovanni said. “Oh yeah!?From who?” Wes asked. “Oh, a

little black Pidgey who’s name happens to be Gonzap.”Giovanni

explained. “That wouldn’t be the leader of Team Snagem Gonzap, would

it?”Yuki asked. “Yes. It is.Gonzap and I are really close friends, almost like

family. When I heard that he had been arrested for helping Evice of Cipher

genetically modify pokemon’s hearts, I got a brilliant idea. I got on the next

plane to the Orre region and now I’m here. Why don’t you and your little

girlfriend go home now so that we can capture Celebi and be on our way?”

Giovanni said menacingly. “This kids got guts.” James said. “Well, Giovanni

ain’t leaving here wit out the Celebi.” Meowth said. “I’ve had it with having to

surrender to a couple of twerps all the time! And at least this one doesn’t

have a damn Pickachu!”Jesse said.” Now Jesse, we don’t know what this kid

has. This region contains Shadow Pokemon and he could have a Shadow

Pikachu or a Shadow Moltres!” James said caitiff. “We’re not going anywhere!

You and your punk goons can get the hell out of dodge or we can chase you

out!” Wes threatened. “Well if it’s a fight you want, then a fight you shall

get.” Giovanni said. “Let’s go! Ryhorn!”Wes said. The ball opened up releasing

a green and red energy forming into the Shadow Ryhorn he caught. As the

Pokemon materialized, it took on a dark aura to show that it was a Shadow

Pokemon. “RRRRRYYYYYYYYHHHHHOOOOOORRRRRRNNNNN!!!!!!”It roared and

scraped the ground to get ready to charge. Many of the team Rocket

members turned and ran from the forest. There were about five of them still

standing but, Giovanni wasn’t letting some punk kid defeat him…again. “So,

you have one of those monsters yourself.Hehehe,”He chuckled. Giovanni took

out a single Pokeball and threw it. “Go, Aggron! Dragon Breath!” Giovanni

said. “Ryhorn, Shadow Rush!” Wes said. The Ryhorn took in energy from the

aura around it and charged the Aggron. “RRRRYYYYHHHHOOORRRRNNNN!!”It

roared. “AGGRON!” the Aggron roared as it drew in breath and blew out

flames. The Ryhorn charged and struck the Aggron in the chest. The Aggron

went down but, got up. It looked winded. “Aggron! Hyper Beam!” Giovanni

commanded. “Wow dat Shadow Ryhorn is really strong!”Meowth said to Jesse

and James. “Yeah.I’ve just got an idea. When the battle is over we get the

Ryhorn in a net and use a Dark Ball on it.” Jesse said with an evil look in her

eyes. “Ryhorn.Dogde the attack.” Just as Wes commanded the next move,

something strange happened to the Ryhorn. “Ryhorn, did you hear me?” Wes

asked. “Wes, I think that Ryhorn has entered hyper mode.” Yuki said. “I think

you’re right.” Wes responded. “You are a stubborn child.” Giovanni

said. “Ryhorn!”Wes called to the Shadow Pokemon. “RYHORN!”It roared. The

aura around it returned to the normal color but, it wasn’t as dark. “I think

every time I use Ryhorn, the door to its heart opens up a little bit.” Wes

said. “AGGRON!” the Aggron roared as it released the powerful beam of

energy. “Ryhorn, dodge!”Wes said. The Hyper Beam missed and the Ryhorn

flared up again into Hyper Mode.Then, it selfishly used Rollout! “AGGRON!” the

Aggron bellowed as it was struck in the legs by the Shadow

Ryhorn. “Ryhorn!”Wes called. “RRRRRR”the Ryhorn mumbled, ignoring the

trainer’s call. This time it Rolled out and rammed into a couple of Team

Rocket members. “AAAAHHHHHH!” they screamed in agony. “Ryhorn,

Return!”Wes called and drew back the Shadow Ryhorn. “So much power child

but, you can’t control it. “I remember I tried to control Mewtwo.” “We’ll get

this on DVD!” Wes said. “Go! Espeon!” Wes said. “Espe, Espeon.”It said. “Use

Confusion and then, finish it off with Return!” Wes commanded. A glitter lit

Espeon’s eyes. “Espeon!”It said putting the Aggron into a daze. “Return,

now!”Wes shouted. “ESSSPPPPEEEEOOOOONNNNN!”It said and rammed into

the Aggron. “AAAAAGGGGGRRRRROOOOONNNNNN!!!!!”Giovanni’s Aggron roared

and fainted. “Well, child you have battled me and I have lost. I have no

choice but to surrender. Team Rocket, move out!” Giovanni said. “You

haven’t seen the last of Team Rocket.” one of the five members who

remained with their leader said. “Great job Wes.”Yuki complimented. ”Thanks.

You’ve really got to hand it to Ryhorn.He scared off most of those thugs.”

Wes said. “Do you think that Cipher and Team Snagem might come

back?”Yuki asked. “I don’t know. This team Rocket seems so powerful but,

yet I don’t sense any danger. That battle was just too easy; do you think

that it was a diversion for something else much bigger than a mission to

capture Celebi?”Wes asked. Just then, his P*DA started to ring. “I’m getting

mail.” Wes said. “It’s from Duking in Pyrite Town. It says ‘Come quick

emergency!’.” We’d better get going!” Wes said. Wes and Yuki jumped on to

Wes and Yuki jumped on to his speed bike and headed Pyrite Town.

“Wes! There has been a security breech at the police department.”

Duking said. “Who broke in and who broke out?” Wes asked.

“Well, about five minutes ago, a group of people

wearing black jumpsuits stormed into Pyrite. They had a bazooka and blew up

the out side wall to the jail. I was right hearing in my office when it all

happened.”Duking explained.” We just ran them out of the Agate Village,”

Wes said, “They told us we hadn’t seen the last of them.” “What were they

doing in the Agate Village?”Duking asked. “They’re boss, Giovanni, said that

they were trying to capture the Celebi that resides there in the Forest but, I

have no idea what they would want with Celebi.”Yuki said. “He also said that

he and Gonzap were close friends and when he heard that Gonzap was

thrown in jail for helping Cipher with their Shadow Pokemon project, he got a

brilliant idea.” Wes added. “I’m sure that Chief Sherles will get everything

under control especially since every police department in Orre is here to

help.”Duking said. “Hey, that’s a strange looking Poke ball you’ve got there,

Wes.”Duking inquired. “Yeah.It’s called the ‘GSBall’.It was sent to Eagun from

Professor Oak of Kanto.The weird part about it is that the note that came

with it was from the year 1939!”Wes explained. “The GSBall, huh?”Duking

thought aloud. “Let me do some research on…”He couldn’t finish because

there was a deafening explosion outside. The air became dark and smoggy. “I

think that a Weezing just used ‘Explosion’ and ‘Smokescreen’”Yuki said. “Plus,

plusle!”Duking’s little Plusle squealed and leaped into Duking’s lap. “Oh, its

okay, Plusle.Uncle Wes is going to find out what happened. Right?”Duking

said. “That’s right.”Yuki said with a girly giggle. “All right.” Wes aid with a

sigh. Wes left Duking’s office and headed over to the police

station. “MIGHTYENA!”A Pokemon growled as it attacked Wes. “Child, you

should learn to listen.” a dark, sinister and quite familiar voice said. “We tried

to stop in the Agate Village,” another voice said, “But, he beat me in a

battle.” “Well, this time, matters are going to be much worse, Giovanni. You

see, Cipher needs to be reborn but, I can’t do that alone. I’m going to need

money, a lot of it.” The other voice said. “Don’t worry, Gonzap, I’m here to

help. This could be the start of a very evil

alliance.HaaaaaaaHaaaHaaa!!!!”Giovanni and Gonzap laughed. This was the

start of a very evil alliance in deed.

Disclaimer: I do not own Pokemon or any of its characters and stuff like that

 

[Dilasc]

This, my friend, is a block of text. Lo and behold fellow compatriots, we have found THE definition of a Block of Text! Dear author, pat thyself on thine back for thou hath truly defined this term well.

So... do you immortalize this as a wall of text with closure? Do you delete it? Or do you fix it with enter key? Your choice. You also posted it twice, so Ill copy and paste this in both!

 

[BrawlMaster]

That was very rude and I fixed! And it's not an epic adventure of a guy who scratches his balls!

 

[Sybot]

Do you have any idea how to paragraph? This is not paragraphing. Read Advice for Aspiring Authors. You only need to add in a new line when someone different speaks or the idea changes. Understand?

 

[Yami Ryu]

.... Sy, you know what I'm more worried about atm, is how Darthdork got a guy scratching his balls, from Dilasc's post >.>'

Anyways I didn't even bother to read this eye sore of bad formatted text. You want rude? I'll give you rude. This is one of the WORST THINGS PUT UP. Why? It's not properly paragraphed, from what I could read the characters are poor and boring, there's little description or originality to it.

Plus it's formatted badly.

THE BASICS

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As I have read the various works posted on this board, I have noticed many of the same problems over and over. Here are some general guidelines to follow when writing your fics:

1) Proper Use of the Keyboard.
There are several useful keys on the keyboard:

Enter/Return: This is one of the most useful keys. Use it whenever you have finished with one idea and are ready to move on to the next paragraph. Use it when one person has finished speaking, and another is about to start. When doing so, hit it twice, to produce a blank line between paragraphs. This makes it a lot easier for your readers to tell where your paragraphs start and end. Large blocks of uninterrupted text are hard to read.

Shift: Another important key. Hold it down when typing the first letter of a sentence, the first letter of a name, or the letter 'I' when using it as the first person singular subject pronoun.

Caps Lock: Often used as a substitute for the 'Shift' key. Don't do it. Text should not be in all capital letters unless someone is SHOUTING!

The Spacebar: Hit it once after every word or comma, twice after a period.

Tab: Unfortunately, this does not work to indent paragraphs on these boards. This is why a blank line between paragraphs is essential.

Other Keys: Your keyboard, unless it is defective, comes with a full complement of letters. Don't be afraid to use them. There is no reason to type 'u' instead of 'you', or indeed to use any abbreviation you learned in a chat room. There is no penalty for taking a few seconds longer to type complete words.

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2) Tips on Composition.

Paragraphs: Use these as your basic unit of composition. Each paragraph should be used to set forth a single idea. If a paragraph seems to long, it probably contains multiple ideas, and should be split up for clarity. If it seems too short, expand on the idea.

Sentences: A sentence should contain exactly one action or statement of existence. If it contains more than one, split it into two or more. If it contains less than one, finish the sentence. Run-on sentences are often confusing, while fragments make the reader feel that something is missing.

Description: Make sure that your reader can visualize what is happening. Don't just say something like "Joe walked along enjoying the scenery". This gives no indication of whether the scenery he is enjoying is a redwood forest, a beach at sunset, or the Grand Canyon.

A description is not just a list of attributes. When describing a character, don't just list their name, age, height, weight, hair colour, and current pokemon team. Bring this information out gradually when the person appears in a story.

Don't have Joe meet a trainer named Fred who is 12 years old, has green eyes and red hair, is three and a half feet tall, and whose pokemon are squirtle, pikachu, butterfree, grimer, tauros, and krabby. Have Joe see a short, red-haired kid with startlingly green eyes, and talk to him. Have names mentioned early in the conversation. The pokemon may be either revealed in a battle, or introduced individually during the conversation.

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3) Other General Advice

Plot: Try to be original. "Joe is 10 (or 11 or 12) years old and about to start his pokemon journey. He goes to Professor (insert tree here) and gets a (insert pokemon here)" has been done too many times already. "Joe is a 10-year-old from Pallet Town and about to start his pokemon journey. He accidentally sleeps in, and by the time he gets to Professor Oak's lab, all the starters have been taken, so he gets a Pikachu" is so old everyone is sick of it.

Try to be reasonable. A new trainer is not going to start with a legendary, or even rare, pokemon. The standard starter pokemon were selected for a reason: They are easy for professors to obtain whenever new trainers are about to start, they can be controlled by beginners, and with proper training, they can become quite powerful.

Likewise, it is extremely difficult, if not impossible, to catch any of the legendary pokemon. They are simply too powerful. If you have seen either of the movies, think about it. Mew or Mewtwo can deflect any attack you try with minimal effort.

Consider the scene in The Power of One where Ash's Pikachu (which has been known to defeat rock and ground types) meets Zapdos. Compare their relative power levels. Now think about how hard it would be to defeat Zapdos. This can be applied to any of the legendary pokemon. No trainer will have one unless it has a good reason to want to accompany that trainer.

Characters: Make your characters real. Give them strengths and weaknesses. Inherently superior trainers who win each battle effortlessly are boring. So are incompetent members of Team Rocket. So is the gym-leader-who-can't-stand-being-defeated. The stock "Rival" character is also getting old.

Whatever you do, don't just refer to people by labels from the GameBoy games (Rocket, Cooltrainer, Lass, Bug Catcher, etc). Remember that these are real people you are working with.

Spelling/Grammar: Write your story in a word-processing program. Use the spellchecker, but don't depend on it completely. It can tell whether your word matches the spelling of a real word, but it cannot tell whether it is the word you wanted to use.

Use grammar checkers with extreme care. They cannot actually understand what you are saying, and often make mistakes.

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4) My Personal Advice:

Note that the contents of this section reflect my personal preferences. Other good writers may disagree with me.

Battles: I generally dislike sentences of the form "(pokemon species) used (name of attack)". You are describing what the pokemon does. In a real-world battle, the pokemon would not "use Bite on" its opponent; it would "bite" its opponent. There are, however, exceptions to this. If there is no verb for the action, go ahead and say "Bulbasaur used Leech Seed". Still, try to avoid "used (name of attack)". Better options would be "fired a hyperbeam at (enemy)", "hit (enemy) with (attack)", etc.

Additionally; the GameBoy battle format makes no sense in the context of a real battle. A pokemon in a real battle would not just attack, then stand there waiting for its opponent to attack. In a real battle, you would have no time to go in and administer a potion or antidote to your pokemon. Watch the TV show for a reasonable depiction of what battles would be like.

GameBoy Terminology in general: Try to avoid it. In the real world, referring to something as "Level 17" is meaningless. Pokemon have varying levels of power and experience, but don't just summarize all of this with a single number. In the world of your fanfic, pokemon are real, living creatures. They are individuals. They have their own strengths, weaknesses, and skills.

The only thing worse than referring to "levels" is referring to "hit points", "power points", or any of the "statistics" (attack, defence, "special defence", etc). Avoid use of these terms at all costs.

-Original text by Murgatroyd

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