Life of a loner.

[Lizard-kun]

Spoiler: plot

Jess, a teen who lives in a suburb near deserts, and mountain finds himself stuck in the middle of nowhere and says, "hey, wtf did i do last night.
followed by friends, pokemon and weird moments, jess go's with the flow with his new poke and "girl" to start roaming the islands.

1st issue coming soon.​

 

[Nixx]

Fill in the background of text bubbles.
Connect them to speaking characters.
Capitalize and punctuate correctly.
Use proper grammar.
Spell correctly.
Never say "wtf", "lol", or any derivative thereof in a comic.

 

[Blues]

All of the above, and how is it the life of a loner if he's with friends and Pokemon?

 

[.Bright Side.]

There are many things wrong:

1)Capatalazation is important
2) Fill in the tex bubles
3)No eps, theres no comic to critique so this will be locked soon.
4) Overworld sprite looks horrible
5) HELL NO! THey are not doing a Journey are they! Thats so effing cliche it burns!
6) Don't abbreviate
7)Plot is unappealing

Read the rules and post when you do.

 

[Charizard Champion#06]

Yeah, don't start a comic without a comic. And his partner better not be May.

 

[Typhlosion Dude]

Or the female trainer from FR/LG.

 

[Lizard-kun]

All of the above, and how is it the life of a loner if he's with friends and Pokemon?

because at first, jess wasn't in to pokemon, but then he found a very, special poke.

and no, the girl isn't a RSE/FRLG hero.

 

[.Bright Side.]

I reported your post because there is no comic, therefore making it spam.

 

[Lizard-kun]

there is a comic.
i'm making it now.
also, it's not spam.
it's disscussion.

 

[Zephyr Flare]

Please, post the comic in your first post or don't make the thread. Previews are not enough.

Sandra